Ooh cool! New story! ^_^ Anyway, I liked it. :) Ron seems veeery enamoured with Lindsay, more so than anyone else. Time for theories: has she used a love potion? Love at first sight? Veela?! Christmas angel/spirit? I feel sorry for Hermione, anyway...
You're spelling's the snazz, but there are a few tiny grammatical problems and typos. Nothing bad at all. :P In the summary, the last comma isn't needed and technically the first two sentences are fragments: mush them together and you're good.
Meh, cliffhanger! *totally going to bug you for spoilers* Mucho intriguing, as is the idea of ADVENTuring. Will Lindsay's turn be on Christmas Eve? Anyway, a ten!
- KittyAuthor's Response: Aww, thank you for your lovely review! OK, so your theories are all very good, but my lips are sealed :) Sooorry, but it's a good way of keeping you hooked xD
Grammar isn't my strong point, so mucho grazie for your pointers, which I'll correct really soon. Maybe I'll get someone to beta it (hint hint, you? :P)
I got a ten! Yayayayayayayayayay! Whoop! Aww, you flatter me
*blushes*. I'm so pleased. I know I always end with cliffhangers, and you can bug me for spoilers, but by ending on a cliffhanger I'll get you hooked. I have so many methods XD
Anyway thanks again, I'm so happy! Love Jelly xxx Report Review
Thank goodness for this! I was missing PW. I know, it's not long, but... Anyway. :)
I love the story, how neatly everything's introduced. It's easy to see how much Blake loves Rory, very sweet. The last sentence is a bit ominous, since she spends most of the year away from them... At least Mr Callahan can get over his prejudice. Is it really gone? For spelling and grammar, the only thing I noticed was Manner > Manor.
So, I liked it. A lot. Pretty please update sometime?
- Kitty. :)Author's Response: Thank you. I miss PW too. I wanted Blake and Serena to actually like Rory in this instead of the storyline I have going for her in PW (Poor Rory). I changed the spelling. Stupid Word autochanger. (3/4 days left! Woop.) Report Review
I love the way this was written: the short paragraphs and beautiful description made it very poetic. Ginny's characterisation's great too: she seems her age, but still the same person who married Harry. So, perfect. ^_^ The only thing that I wasn't in love with was the flashback, which I'd have prefered worked into the main story, instead of italics. Then again, it might just be me - I don't like flashbacks. But anyway, it's beautiful!Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked it! Report Review
Great chapter! Love the dialogue - it's very natural, realistic. The Marauders made me laugh. :) Sirius and Roxy's relationship is fab! Just like old friends, but with little hints... Peter going off a little on his own's a nice touch.
Emma! Nasty, nasty... [i]witch[/i]. I'm sure you get my meaning.
Remus is nicer again! Yay! But that last sentence is ominous, nicely done! So basically, great chapter!Author's Response: Aww, thank you! Ha, I think the Marauders were made to make people laugh. xD Ooh, I like that description of Roxy and Sirius' relationship.. Nice one! I'm glad you liked the Peter thing. :D
Hehe, I do get your meaning and I agree. :p REMUS IS LOVELY NOW! *dances* Yay, glad you liked that last sentence. :)
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How is another story terrible? When the writing is as elegant as in this story, it's wonderful! Daphne sounds nasty, from this chapter. Typical book-style Slytherin, because real-life ones tend to be nicer. :P Meh silly Draco.
A tiny thing: crevice doesn't fit as well as another word might. It reminds me, at least, of something small. Crevasse? Never mind, that's just me in tick-nit-picky mode.
The cliffhanger is a good one, is it Draco? I think so, at least, could have sworn it said so last time I read it... Anyway, well done! I have such talented friends... XD a 10!Author's Response: Because, dearie, it means I won't update as often. xD AWW! *grins goofily* Thank you! Haha, I completely agree! I have rather strong feelings of dislike towards Daphne Greengrass. *stares at screen* No silly Draco. x)
Crevasse! That was the word I was looking for! I remember trying to think of a word that sounded like crevice, but I couldn't find it so I used that one... Damn. Ah, thank you for pointing it out, anyway. =)
Yey, thanks! Aha, my lips are sealed with a Hogwarts stamp. :D Lalala, I'm not saying anything. Thank you! Ha, I think Hann and I would both agree with that. Lol, joking. Thank you for your lovely review! *falls off chair* 10?! Whe!! That's better than a 5.9 in my maths tests!!! *laughs*
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Re-re-reviewing, since the computer jammed half-way through the last.Anyway, it's great! Luvverly, extra-pleasant-to-read writing! More description than you used to include, which is a good thing. ^_^ Ellen's a bit sourly-over-protective of James, but I can't hate her for it. She's too human, too real. That's one of most fantastic things about your writing: the characters are always realistic, people you wouldn't be surprised to walk past in the street.
The Sorting Song's perfect, I love the very start in particular: 'much obliged, I'm sure,' as if it was holding a conversation. The whole thing fits and rhymes and has the right rhythm and all!
You managed to fit the names of lots of their year in v. skillfully, yay for you! The length's wonderful, longer is always better. So far (and undoubtedly for the rest) this story's brilliant. 10+! There, that feels long, even if it's not your version of long. ;)Author's Response: I looked at your review and literally started grinning there and then! Never, ever have I had such a long review from you, so thank you thank you thank you!
I know Ellen is a little (ahem) defendant of James, but you have to have some sympathy over her; a gorgeous new girl turns up and your best friend and the guy you fancy starts drooling... Like you said, she's only human :) I can't belive you think she's that good though, thanks for that!
You like my description? *dances* YAY! I don't know whta it is about this story, but the description comes a little more naturally :) The Sorting Hat Song was the other extreme; as you may remember, I took bloomin' ages on that, so WOWZA I am glad it's okay!
10+??? Now you're just being too nice :D AWWW Kits, you rock xxx
That was beautiful. The writing! It's amazing in every way: Lily and James are very realistic. Their love's so touching...
You're a wonderful writer. Report Review
Brilliant. The piano theme is good, your writing perfect. What's wrong with Catherine? All right, I don't think you'll answer that but it's bugging me. 10/10 and wishing for more.Author's Response: Thanks soo much! I don't think people have called my writing "perfect" before, though. That's really a compliment!
The reason Catherine's being so hmm... what's the word? Umm.... Idiotic doesn't quite cover it... Oh, well. You know what I mean. The reason she's being why the way she is will be explained in later chapters, though this chaper alludes to it somewhat.
Thanks so much! I appreciate your taking the time to read and review my story. It makes this author feel loved. ^_^ Report Review
Now that was amazing. It's a great idea, Lily saving James from a werewolf. Your writing's sensational as well. Really, really good. There were a few small mistakes but someone else will have pointed them out by now. 9/10 because you can always improve. lune catAuthor's Response: Oh thank you! Yea me and mistakes seem to go hand in hand. See why I need a beta now :P. But I am so glad you liked it! And thanks so much for the review! :D Report Review
Hilarious. If you read this, then you'll know that I think you're doing a great job. 10/10 Report Review
Amazing, as your writing always is. I'm so glad Merope gets her happiness. My favourite part is when they kiss in front of the minister.Author's Response: Hee hee I like that part too :) And Merope does get to be happy for a little while. Thanks so much for your review and I hope you'll continue to enjoy the story :) Report Review
Oh dear, poor Oliver. I hope he doesn't like Kate Wellington! And Anais sounds v. different to Katie. I can really understand Katie, you write her so well. 10/10Author's Response: thanks for the compliment and the review! as for kate wellington ... it's more a question of katie's denial that'll be the problem, haha. :) Report Review
Haha, Sirius got his nose broken! Sad apart from that, though. So James and Sirius thing that she's Snapes girlfriend... that should be interesting! The writings as brilliant as ever, great chapter! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks Kitti :) So happy that you liked and reviewed again! Report Review
Great end, liked the idea of the chocolate frog cards.Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
As perfect as ever. 10/10. Report Review
So sad, I have tears in my eyes. Very touching and unexpected. A question: what colour is Josefine's hair? I was under the impression that it was red, but Sirius calls her a brunette. Update please?Author's Response: *hands over tissue* Thank you for your compliments. Jo's hair is brown. :p
Thank you again for your review, it made my day. :D
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Sad, yet brilliant. Beautifully written. If you read this, then you'll know I'm desperate for an update. Report Review
Amazing, love the idea of the Malfoys being vampires, and you've made it believable. Wonderful writing, a spooky tale.Author's Response: Oh, thanks! I really appreciate that you took the time to read and review! Report Review
Brilliant! I'm so glad Tura's back, and the end was funny. And Reverend Vernon. Poor Crookshanks, though.Author's Response: Yeah, he kinda got the short end of the stick--but at least he got to live a lot longer than normal... Report Review
That healer Kirke is nasty! A fantastic end to a fabulous story. Also, in the last chapter, Grindelwald impersonating her grandad was a good plot twist, well worked in to the whole story. Amazing, really!Author's Response: Thanks, Kit. Next book, coming right up! Report Review
Such a sad, shocking end, but it fits. Amazing writing, and the flashbacks fitted in well with the rest of the story. Beautiful. One thing that I'd just like to mention is that the 'I's in your summaries don't tend to be capitalized, but that's a tiny, inconsequential thing.Author's Response: thanks! the i's? i havent noticed that! i better go back and change that, thank you :) thanks for reviewing Report Review
Katie's character is really well written, as is the whole story. Brilliant, and full of mysteries. The penpal idea is good as well, the cheese without borders made me laugh.Author's Response: thanks for reviewing :) i'm glad i made you laugh! Report Review
It was good, Rita was very in character. Very, very funny, especially the essay about great-auntie Millie! The writing is great as well. But really, it was extremely enjoyable.Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm glad you found it amusing. :) Report Review
Amazing - you wrote this before DH and guessed about Lily and Snape. I like the idea of Snape teaching her the not-so-dark arts. I wish Tura hadn't died, she was so good with Harry :( Ah well... Brilliant story the whole way through, and the long chapters are great, they ALMOST satisfy me.Author's Response: Well, there's still a surprise or two left... Report Review
Hahaha had me laughing so the computer nearly fell off my lap! Gorgeous banner, hilarious story, funny April Fools - good all round! Brilliant end - if I hadn't already read the next bit I'd be begging for it!Author's Response: Lol. Be careful with your computer, dearie. These things are sacred. xD
Banner is gorgeous, I agree. :P Thanks
for the compliments!
Thanks for your great review! It made me grin like mad!
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