So, this is interesting. My only complaint would be... well, these characters would have been at Hogwarts in the 70s. I'm not sure there even was hip-hop yet then, and even if there was I really don't believe that "pop lock and drop it" had been invented yet. So, I mean... you've got them in the wrong time period and it's a bit jarring. Otherwise it's alright, though.Author's Response: yeahhh... i was wondering when someone was going to say something about that. I know. I've been extraordinarily lazy and decided to pretend that they're living in the now-ish. I'm sorry if it bothers you, but I kind of sacrificed the accuracy of details just to better fit in with what I wanted to do.
But thank you very, very much for your opinion!! I really appreciate it... I'll go add a notice at the beginning of the story.
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I really enjoyed this chapter. Mostly because Kaelyn didn't go on about Nathan constantly. I get that you need to show her moving on and mourning and all that, but seriously... every chapter? It gets a bit much. (Might be because I'm reading these straight through, rather than over a period of weeks, though.)
Anywho, I'm loving Sam! He's pretty much hilarious. I really hope him and Kae don't get together--at least not anytime soon. And thank you so much for not writing Sirius as some ridiculous caricature who shags everything in sight and then suddenly falls passionately in love with the main girl. And for making the James and Lily thing fairly believable as well. I applaud you!Author's Response: I've deliberately written a lot about Nathan, just because it's something that Kaelyn constantly thinks about but I didn't want it to be too much. I think you'll see that there will be a turning point from chapter 14 (or 15, I'm not sure). But I'll think about it in the future, and perhaps edit some chapters!
Yay! That's exactly how I wanted Sam to be, so I'm glad that I've succeeded. I also hate it when Sirius is a man-whore. It's something I see too often. And thanks, the Lily/James relationship is hard to write, because it's something that everyone already know about but something that you can't ignore. It often gets tiresome, because you read the same thing about them in every story. So I'm very glad that you like my Lily/James thing :)
Anyway, thanks for reviewing, and don't hesitate to critize me! I'm just happy for it, haha Report Review
I'm glad you're updating quicker lately. I'm enjoying this story. Report Review
I'm just assuming this is based on Hannah Montana. But as it's well-written and fairly interesting, I'm going to ignore that detail for the time being. :-)Author's Response: it's like Hannah Montana, but i don't actually know much about HM, I've never watched it before.. But the general gist of it I think is similar Report Review
Nice chapter. I was sort of expecting a ring, but I suppose nobody would propose via a letter. Lol. Keep writing please! Report Review
I'm liking this story. I hope you'll keep updating frequently like it seems you have been. :-DAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm doing my best to give you lovely readers new material to read!
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Alright, update more! Pleasie!Author's Response: Dear sillyjobug,
Your Obedient Servant,
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