Loved it! Bit more romance/fluff than previous chapters, but still nice. I was so happy to see that you updated. MORE! PLEASE!
But yeah, I'm anxious to see the boys' reactions to her little situation. Can't wait!Author's Response: thanks so much for the lovely review! i can't wait to write about it!
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I love this! I am so excited to keep reading :)
Well written and a captivating concept... I am truly hooked. Report Review
I like Lily's strong character. I'm interested to see where this goes! Report Review
I really liked this! There were a few minor details that were not canon, but overall this was a great concept and was well written.
Good job! Report Review
Thank you for this chapter. I really love that you included alcohol in it, but was adamant about Ella not drinking. Personally I think too many HPFF stories include party scenes where characters get way drunk, and I just don't think that stuff would go on at Hogwarts to that degree...
I think you did a good job setting up drama for the next chapter. It's pretty obvious that Chase is a player and makes Ella doubt her feelings for him, but I still feel like the whole thing is going to end up with her brokenhearted. Maybe Finn will be there to comfort her ;)
All in all, good job. Your chapters are so easy and fun to read, so I'm sad that you won't be updating soon, but I completely understand all the stress that goes with year-end finals and sports events!
P.S. Have you considered going to The Dark Arts to request a banner? I keep wanting to have a visual for Ella!!Author's Response: thank you thank you thank you!
i've been thinking of getting a banner, but i'm not too technologically skilled... also i don't really want anyone else to be depicting my characters except for me/or without my input/ constant commenting...
thanks again for reading!
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I really enjoyed this, and my heart honestly dropped a little at the end, but there is one thing I want to mention: I feel like that Ashley girl's last name has changed like three times over the course of this story. It's not a big deal, but it was temporarily confusing.
Otherwise, great job! Can't wait to keep reading!Author's Response: Thanks for the review, to be honest, I'm terrible at names, even if I make them! I'll be sure to go back and fix that when I get time! So happy you like it! Report Review
You never tell a girl you like her, it makes you look like an idiot... hehehe AVPM
Anyways, I am totally hooked! I really like this story, and I want to keep reading but it's really late and I should go to bed. Or I could ignore the voice of reason and hit the "submit review and continue reading next chapter" button.
Yeah, I think I'll do that :)Author's Response: Makes me so excited that you like it so much! Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
But... she broke it off with him, how is he the one that got away? Wouldn't she be the one that got away from him?
Good story, cool concept, well written. Keep up the good work! Report Review
He stole her pancakes! I don't know why that upset me so much, but I was really excited about the idea of chocolate chip pancakes, and to just have them stolen from you like that... nooo!
Anyways, great chapter. I want more! I want to find out if anything happens between them! I suspect it will, and Finn will get all jealous or something. But Chase sounds cool (for now).
Update soon please :)Author's Response: ahh the traumatic loss of breakfast pastries...(are pancakes considered breakfast pastries!?!)
anyway the next chapter is in the queue already (look at me, Miss Efficiency) and there will be some Chase/Ella/Team drama!!! get excited!
thanks for the review!
(feeling embarrassed for being up this late... curse you, insomnia and honors bio lab report!) Report Review
Aaaah! Don't leave us with just that! Do they live? Who is the boy?Author's Response: Hehe, well who doesn't love a good cliff-hanger? I guess you'll find out soon! :) Thank you for reading and reviewing!!! :) Report Review
LOVE IT. This got me so excited about finding out what happens in TGFS, so update soon :)
I love your writing because you always give such interesting perspectives. I am definitely putting you on my list of favorite authors!Author's Response: Ahh, so glad that you enjoyed this!! I've had all these ideas about the future of TGFS bouncing around in my head, so I just had to write some of them down! Thank you so much for the review, and for reading, and for the favourite author-ing *blushes with excitement* :) Report Review
This reminded me of the Notebook. It was very well done, and perfect for a one-shot. Love it!Author's Response: Thank you, I'm so happy to hear that you enjoyed it! And yes, I guess it does resemble the Notebook a little, haha. Thanks for reviewing!!! :) Report Review
I enjoyed it. Like you said, it was a bit of a filler chapter, but still fun to read!
Still loving the whole "one of the boys" relationship she has with the team... sticking true to the title!Author's Response: thanks for the awesome feedback! Report Review
I liked it. I am a little confused about why the Muggle Studies class went from learning about tricycles to WW2, but I got over it once you actually started discussing the War from a wizard's perspective.
I especially liked Tor's line about what the Germans learned in their own classrooms at the time... I think this is an important part of history that people often overlook. People always ask about how an entire nation of people could let Hitler come to power, but when everyone in your life is telling you that what he says is right, I can imagine it would be hard to think otherwise.
Comparing that situation to Tor's is a great idea... it's different to think about what it was like for those who grew up in Death Eater homes. I suppose it would be something like growing up in a Nazi home.
Great chapter, can't wait for more! And I'm really intrigued as to why Yaxley's there...Author's Response: Yay, I'm so glad you liked this chapter!! I was worried readers might find it a little boring but I really enjoyed writing it as I find both how much wizards know about Muggle issues and how Tor would react to learning about the Holocaust very interesting.
I'm glad that you liked Tor's line about what German children would have been taught-I had wondered about it myself so Tor, who has been brought up in a prejudiced household, is a great mouthpiece for these issues. I've enjoyed playing around with the definitions of good and evil for this entire story, so it's good to hear that it's coming across alright!! :)
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!!! Your reviews make me very happy, haha :) Report Review
I really like the idea of Victoire needing to get on her feet before her family knows she's back in town, and with the characters and situations you've already set up this is sure to be interesting...
This has promise! Keep writing, and I will keep reading :)Author's Response: Thanks you for this lovely review. I will try to update soon :) Report Review
The Narcissist stuff was interesting... not sure I fully understand, but I think it's just Pyxis being really weird. I'm confused as to why they're fighting so intensely over it, too.
I really like the whole Terry/Tor concept, and there's a huge part of me that wants you to leave canon behind and make them be together in the end rather than Tor ending up with Malfoy... guess I'll have to keep reading though!Author's Response: Haha I'm glad you thought it was interesting. The reason they're fighting about it really is just that they're both stubborn and like proving the other wrong: I think sometimes when writing this I forget that Tor is still pretty young, and needs to act a little immature sometimes :). But who knows, Pyxis could be onto something...
So happy you like Terry and Tor together!! I like them too!!! And as for what happens, well, we'll see, I'm not even sure if I know yet but I have a couple ideas!! :) Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
I really liked Dumbledore and Amelia Bones' perspectives. It's really cool that you're shaking things up a bit :)Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the alternative perspectives, there will be much more of that as well in upcoming chapters! I like switching in and out of Tor's voice for some reason. Thank you very much for reviewing!!! :) Report Review
Let's go kick some Huffle-butt!
I love these characters, and your dialogue is fantastic! This is SO going on my favorites list. Please update soon!! :)Author's Response: ahh i'll try! i've been on vacation and i go back to school tomorrow so i'll write when i can! thanks for the reads/reviews/favoriting/general awesomeness! you rock!
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I got the AVPM reference! I always love stumbling upon those while reading fanfic... :) Report Review
This is so much fun to read! It's really interesting because there isn't any romantic tension (yet), it's just a girl trying to prove herself among boys. Well written!Author's Response: haha. haha. yet...
(goes back to totally not writing any romantic tension)
thanks for reading and for all of your reviews!!! Report Review
This seems like fun! Can't wait to keep reading :)Author's Response: it IS fun!!! thanks for reading Report Review
I thought she already knew... my bad. But I'm sad! I really like this whole internal struggle thing, it's very interesting.
Also, introducing "Hyperion" was really cool, cause that's Scorpius' middle name and now it has more meaning.
You're doing such a good job! Keep it up!!Author's Response: Haha I think she kind of suspected, but didn't want to know the truth, if that makes sense? Good to hear the internal conflict is working, there's a lot more of that coming :P Happy you spotted the Hyperion reference, thank you so much for this review!!! :) Report Review
Oooh... really like this new character!
Fun stuff! Can't wait to keep reading :)Author's Response: I'm glad you like him :D Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
I really like the tie-ins to the books. It's nice to have a different story that is in conjunction with the original books rather than completely going off the rails.Author's Response: Glad you like the parallels with the HP books! I'm trying to complement the books as possible: if I get an idea that wasn't in the books, I ask myself if its plausible that it could have happened and just wasn't mentioned. :) Thank you for reading and reviewing! Report Review
Okay, two things:
1) Platform 13 and 1/4? Confused...
2) So she's Yaxley's daughter, but she goes by Greengrass... I'm guessing that Tor is for Astoria? Is Greengrass from her mother?
Great chapter, can't wait to keep reading :)Author's Response: Haha I think my idea was that they were talking a few platforms down from the Hogwarts Express to avoid being overheard, and that perhaps there is a Platform 13 1/4 which wizards use to get to Wales or something. Who knows! :P
And yes, I decided to complicate her family situation, and later chapters elaborate why a bit better. I gave her the nickname Tor first because "Astoria" is a bit of a mouthful, and also I want her to have a persona beyond being Astoria Malfoy's wife, because she's a lot more than that. :)
Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
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