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Review #1, by jwillamsHarry Potter and the Weapon Mages: Lost

29th July 2004:
great job! once again I suggest giving Harry some knowledge of wands because I was a bit thrown off about the whole wand thing. If you just elaborated on these points, you would have a wonderful story that ran smoothly and a wonderful plot.

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Review #2, by jwillamsHarry Potter and the Weapon Mages: dreams

29th July 2004:
WONDERFUL! A bit choppy on your writing. Don't be afraid to elaborate! Elaborating makes a story run much smoother. Wonderful Ideas! I would really rather you had Harry read a book or something about Merlin's Tapestry before he macically knew it, but hey, it's your story. Just thought you should know those points, but other than that, SUPERB Ideas and plot insofar.

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