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Review #1, by rachm34Stage Five Cling: Stage Five Cling

10th July 2012:
You're my favorite. Literally. Everything you write is brilliant. I just wanted to let you know that I am rolling in laughter as I read this. I have no idea how you can write with such good humor. It's so funny, literally. James' and Albus' characters are the best. I wish I knew people like them in real life. Pip sounds interesting. Anyway, this is great. I love everything you write, and literally read everything you put on here. Sorry, for my lack of reviews. I've kind of got out of reviewing on here and just read a few people's stories. I'm glad you have a twitter, so I can know when you update. This was wonderful!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I wish there was a secret to it, but I think I just sort of write what I think and thats about it. I mean... I took extensive humor-training classes with various stand-up comedians and yeah I can't even lie about it.

Thank you so much! I really appreciate all of your reviews :) They make my day!


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Review #2, by rachm34Hide and Seek: Epilogue

11th June 2012:
...Oh my god. I can't believe this is finally over. I got shivers as I opened up this story to read the final chapter and epilogue. Seriously had to hold it together on this one to stop myself from crying.

I remember when I started reading this story, and how stuck on it I got in Keep Away. From day one of reading this, I couldn't be kept away :). I was thinking this morning, after reading your author's note how much has happened to me since I started reading this story. It's incredible what has happened in my life.

Anyway, I'm so sad in a way that you finished this story, your stories on this website are the few I check back for regularly to see if they got updated, and Ramita's story as well. I love reading your guys' stories and that's basically the only reason I am still on HPFF a lot. If it weren't for you, I feel as if I wouldn't be on it much. I'm so happy that I am checking back though. I feel as if Harry Potter was so much of my childhood, and as I grow up more and more, it sort of reminds me that I am no longer a child. This let's me have a bit more of my past and my childhood happiness back and reminds me who I was then and still am now.

I loved this story, words can't even describe it enough. I cannot even begin to describe to you how much I love your writing. The second you get famous one day and publish a novel, I'm buying it. Your writing is so amazing and flawless. I'm sad this story is over so I can't get more shirtless Oliver.

Shirtless Oliver is so dishy, I wish he was my real life boyfriend.

I feel so rusty leaving reviews, I haven't left a review in months. Haha, so this is sort of weird for me. But, I loved this story so much and hope you know that! It's literally so amazing and one of the best stories on this entire website.

Thank you for writing. Thank you for this story. I loved it.

Author's Response: It really is incredible, isn't it? It really didn't feel like years had passed. It felt like one fluid movement, but I became an adult while writing this story and that's something that means a lot to me.

I'm so honored that my stories have you coming back to the site. Sometimes it's hard for me knowing a lot of people don't check the site like they used to since the movies and books are over, but it's something I don't see myself giving up for a long time. As long as people still want to read my stories about these characters, I'll keep writing htem. Maybe less frequently, but I probably will haha.

I really hope I can take the next step and get a novel published. I have gotten several short stories, but there's another step to take. I am just attempting to take it. It's so nice having a support system.

Thank you so much for your review. It really means a lot to me that you stuck around to read my stories. I do this for fun and for everyone on here. Thank you!


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Review #3, by rachm34Hide and Seek: The Bucket List

2nd April 2012:
So, I haven't left a review in probably months, no it's probably been more like a year. I never really come on here to write reviews anymore, I mostly just read the stories and check for updates for when my favorite stories get updated. I literally don't write fan fiction anymore which is so sad. I've just grown up a lot, gotten wrapped up in life at college, and have been writing non fan fiction. That feels nice though at the same time.

I just wanted to drop you a review, to tell you how much I have loved all your stories. Every single story you have written, I'm pretty sure I have read. I always check for updates and read your twitter and formspring! It makes me so happy that you are still writing fan fiction. Because, even if I'm not doing it or reading a lot these days, I still need to read it sometimes.

This story is fantastic, I'm so sad to see it finally coming to an end. I feel as if I have been reading Keep Away and Hide An Seek for years. I feel so sad that it's finally ending, but I know you will be always writing. Bigger and better things. You've improved so much since the first time I read a chapter of yours. I love your characterizations, I get so wrapped up in the chapters because of how flawless they are. Shirtless Oliver will never go out of style, he'll always be sexy.

Anyway, I just wanted to let you know how much I appreciate your stories, and how I will probably always keep reading them! Get published a non fan fiction story so I can read that!! :) Congratulations for another successful story! Keep them coming!

Author's Response: It really has been a while since I've seen one of your fantastic reviews! They always brightened my day, and this is no different. It's crazy, growing up, isn't it? I went through the four years of college, graduated with a Bachelors, got a full time, big-kid job with benefits. This is sort of like my release. My community I can come to just to know I'm still writing even when my novel throws a curveball my way or when my flash fiction is fighting back and I cannot possibly write another word. Then I'll pick up Jane or James or Fred and just go. It's nice and keeps me writing.

I'm so glad you have been reading. When people vanish, I'm never quite sure if they're really gone or if they're still reading. So it makes me overjoyed to know you've been following. I'll be here for a while, haha. I have so many ideas and it's a lot of plain-ol' fun.

It really is sad it's coming to an end. It's going to be VERY surreal for me. Especially when I go to reread it. That it's done. That there won't be any Oliver and Jane anymore. Its so strange. I'm so glad you've enjoyed this story. Keep Away was my first go at a novel on this site and I couldn't be happier with the amount of support I got because of it.

You're right about shirtless Oliver :) Goshh he's the best.

I really hope you keep reading. I appreciate it! Currently, I have 5 short stories published. Working on that novel though :) My main character is based off of James from Breaking the Quidditch Code. We'll see how that goes over.

Thank you again for the amazing review. It means so much to me.


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Review #4, by rachm34Here's to the Night: Here's to the Night

31st January 2012:
OH MY GOSH, these are literally amazing. I loved reading them. You're once again one of the best authors clearly on this site. I can't help but love everything you write. I think that you have such a great level of writing skill, and you can write in so many unique dynamics. I never leave reviews anymore, so I hardly know what to say other than I loved these. I can't wait for your next updates, because I know they will be just even more brilliant. Everything you write always gets better and better.

Author's Response: AH, thank you so much! You are the sweetest person IN THE WORLD. The whole world.

I really appreciate every review you leave, seriously. You're absolutely amazing and I always love seeing what you think.

Thank you SO much for making my day!


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Review #5, by rachm34Still Delicate: Yet Another Emotional Breakdown

25th January 2012:
oh my gosh. Enough said. This chapter was amazing. I cried.

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Review #6, by rachm34How To Stop An Exploding Man: How To Stop An Exploding Man

2nd January 2012:
Literally, I'm shaking. This is so haunting. From the first sentence to the last sentence this is so amazing. I loved the last sentence, it just put everything into perspective. Voldemort is so evil, and this really was so good. Laura, I LOVE THIS. You're such an amazing, inspiring writer. You've improved so much since we've started to talk. I think that you definitely got inside of Voldy's head. The characterization is perfect. It's like everyone can understand what he is thinking now. Your word choice is beautiful, I could picture everything that was happening. I love this so much. This is definitely one of my new favorites of yours. You keep on improving and improving. Your writing is becoming flawless. It's so poised, and it's really, really good. I love this. The descriptions, the word choice, the characterization, the little dialogue, Tom's memories. It's so well written. LOVE THIS, and you.

Author's Response: thank you my darling! i love you too!

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Review #7, by rachm34Hide and Seek: Pride, Prejudice, and Pleasantries

5th December 2010:
I hate you. I really, really, really, really, really hate and utterly loathe you right now. LIKE. HONESTLY. WHY DO YOU HAVE TO END IT LIKE THAT? I'm crying, not even joking. I am sobbing. Maybe, it has to do with how wonderful Oliver is and how sick he is. And how much of a horrible night/ weekend this has been. And this has just made me SOB. I HATE YOU.

Just kidding. I really don't hate you. But, why Oliver? Can't you kill off Bridget instead? WHAT IS HAPPENING TO OLIVER?! SERIOUSLY. IF YOU DO NOT POST ANOTHER CHAPTER SOON, I MAY DIE. I MAY VERY WELL DIE.

Why don't you have your trusted authors status anymore? Didn't you have it?

But, anyway. This is the best story ever. Like, I want a boyfriend like Oliver. He's so sweet. The "I'm going to marry you one day" was like such an aw moment. Can we just aw about it for several moments right now?
REady?
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AW MOMENT! AWSIES. AWROMANTIC. AWRRRIEEE.

I love this story, I really do. I am so glad that you updated it. Because, it makes me very happy when you update your stories. I really love them a lot.

Bridget is so evil. She's so stupid. She's never going to get Oliver. I bet she poisoned the chocolate, knowing that Jane would go for them. I wonder what Olivers' mom and dad think about Jane now? What if they think she poisoned Oliver? I think that George and Katie are bound to end up together after this.

I love how you had Jane and George dance together. It really was so cute. This whole chapter was basically adorable, save Oliver nearly dying.

Will he be able to play Quidditch after this? I really hope so. Because, he'll be in a downright awful mood if he can't play Quidditch.

You know what, I really want a boyfriend like Oliver. I really want a friend like George, or Fred. I want to be Jane. I want to be a witch, not even joking. Her life is so good. I love her character, I feel like I can relate to her a lot sometimes. I really love your characterizations. They are honestly some of the best characterizations I think that I have ever read!

I can't really keep my head straight right now. I think part of it has to do with the fact that I am sobbing over a fan fiction, because of you. It's okay though. I really like it when stories make me feel. I'm wicked glad that you are able to do that. Because, I hate when stories don't make me feel. It makes the stories so flat, and boring and I can't really find myself enjoying them that much. But, this story is such the opposite. All of the stories, of yours that I have read are so opposite. WHY CAN'T YOU UPDATE THESE FASTER?! By the way, I promise that I will go and review Breaking The Quidditch Code soon, you have no idea how insane my life is at the moment.

Everything sort of majorly blows at my life in the moment. I'm just beyond the point of being stressed out, and having one of those awful weekends/weeks. I'm not really used to having them. But, I just hate having to not like people. And I feel as if I am so beyond the drama and stupidities of high school. I want to get out into the world, and go to college right now so badly. I wish I was in Illinois, going to college. NOW. I want to go to a place where I don't know anyone who knows me, and just start off new. I want to make friends without having any prerequisites (I can't spell that word. Let's hope I got it right).

ANYWHOOO! I just emailed you to say I reviewed, when I haven't even submitted this bad boy. And i'm rambling on about my life. SORRY.

BUT, I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH. I LOVE YOUR WRITING STYLE, AND YOUR CHARACTERIZATIONS. And I hope you don't get sick of me saying the things over and over again. But, they are so true. Everything in this story is flawless. I love your dialogue, you never fail to amuse me or make me laugh. OR CRY, for that matter. I'm sobbing and typing up a review.
This doesn't happen everyday folks! Rachel isn't like this usually.

I love how you developed Jane. I really like how we can see how she interacts with her good friends such as George or Liam. I like how Oliver, is glad for her. And I really hate Bridget, and Mrs. Wood. I don't like her personality. But, I'm glad that she thinks the Jane is finally good enough for Oliver.

It's so cute how dishy Oliver Wood is. And he is so romantic, and has the best lines ever.

ALL IN ALL- WONDERFUL, STUPENDOUS, AMAZING, THRILLING, SAD.

PLEASE LET OLIVER BE OKAY
AND UPDATE LIKE ASAP.
KAY
BYEEE!
PEACE OUT AMIGO!

Author's Response: Author's Response: Well, I really don't want you to die. See, that would make me seem like quite a cruel author, wouldn't it? That wouldn't be nice of me. So I will definitely update soon. Promise. Well, when the queue reopens in January.

I did have Trusted Author status, but I don't anymore.

I actually said that line to my then-boyfriend a long time ago and decided to put it in here because it was so sweet. But I made Oliver say it because he's a peach. Don't tell my fiance I mentioned that I said it. It would make him feel too feminine haha.

Haha, could you imagine if Oliver's parents thought Jane poisoned Oliver? talk about a set back!

I'm glad you love my characterizations. It's my favorite part aobut my stories so it makes me smile to hear that. Or see it. Whatever. Anyway, Jane is one of my favorite characters simply because she is super relatable, but she also has so many pieces of me in her. Insecurities, fears, etc. Love it.

when you feel during a story...that is something you can't duplicate during a movie or whatever. Movies just show you something and tell you how to react. Books/stories make you feel, whether you feel sad, happy, irritated, dumbfounded, etc. I love every part of it. I'm reading Kathy Griffin's book right now and I'm hooked because it really makes me feel.

Trust me, if anyone can relate to your distaste of high school and need to go to college, I can. I'm going to try and email you soon, but unfortunately I have also been sucked into insanity at the moment. As soon as I can though! Things will get better. It's one of those things where you just have to hold your head up high, ride it out, and know one day you will totally write a random short story about it.

Pfft. How could I get sick of you repeating compliments? I do love them, you know. HAHA

Thank you so much for this amazing review. I really do appreciate it!


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Review #8, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Underground Tension (and Squiggles)

14th November 2010:
Aw, I have to say I really like Binkís characterization. Big surprise thereÖ Seeing as I like every single one of your characters and how to characterize them! Just sayiní. Itís cool how he and James are relatively close. I always find that itís important to have someone you can talk to and be close with. Obviously. Bink is so fair, saying he doesnít want the captaincy because he knows that James will probably end up wanting it and he doesnít want to create drama there. AW. That was sort of a big AW moment there.

I feel like James would compare something to the color of Victoria. He has too. And I love Victoria. Itís so cute to see that James has such a special place in his heart for dear old Victoria. Sheís such a diva as you have said! And thatís funny how they met over Quidditch stuff. Typical Bink, Typical Meta. They both like Quidditch.

For some reason, I feel as if Bink and Meta were probably adorable together when they were just starting to hang out and kept everything a bit of a secret. I donít really know why, but I just have that feeling that they would be adorable. I sort of like thinking that they had a thing, because it just seems cute. I think Bink seems like a character who would care so much about a girl. Heís so adorable. I would date him! He seems very sensitive in a way.

A fling of danger seems like it is fitting for Bink. PURE perfection in your writing here. This is one of my favorite chapters of the story!

THEY ARE GOING TO THE GROTTO! TO PARTY!!! WAHOOO! I want to go and see all the boys shirtless. Because I bet that all of them are very attractive and so hot! Especially shirtless. I love nicely defined abs.

Sorry, this is such a silly review kinda. Iím tired and itís Sunday. Youíre allowed to act tired and silly on Sundays, and Mondays, and Wednesdays, And Thursdays, and Saturdays, And Fridays, BUT NOT TUESDAYS. I donít particularly like Tuesdays. Just kidding, I donít honestly have a preference about the days of the week. Although I must say I do like from Thursday- Sunday the best. It seems as if my weekend always starts on Thursdays, even though I have school Friday. I donít know why. OKAY, WE JUST DIGRESSED LIKE A MAJOR AMOUNT. HEY, Digression. WHAT IS UP, dude? Digression is pretty much the story of my life. I face it on a daily basis. I just always end up talking to it. And avoid doing something probably very important. Alright, never mind more stuff about digression. This review is probably long. Like my other ones. I like leaving long reviews. Itís fun. Okay, I SERIOUSLY need to stop going off on rando tangents!

Haha, I have to agree with James here. I donít really know what a grotto means either. Until I read this chapter. I had only heard the word grotto in a song, from the musical Dirty Rotten Scoundrels. Yeah, you probably havenít heard of the musical/seen it or are familiar with it. But, then again, maybe you are.

And James isnít breathing.. Okay, can I be the first to give him mouth to mouth and save his life then make out with him passionately? DARN, heís wonderful.

Oh goody, Iím glad that Al and Paloma are progressing. They would probably make a cute couple. And Avery is asleep. Time for James to pounce. If I canít get James, Avery is the only person who can. JUST SAYING. JUST LAYING DOWN THE RULES. MY BOUNDARY RULES. I AM OKAY WITH THAT.

Hahahahahahaha. I JUST DIED TIMES A MILLION AT THIS LINE: ďMerlin with a garden watering canĒ HYSTERICAL. SO SO SO FUNNY.

AND AVERY AND JAMES WERE SNOGGING! YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY!

Avery seems like she is so confident about everything. I wish I had her confidence. But, I really like how she just answered James so matter of factly and was like: ďWe didnít get hitched.Ē

Smart girl.

SNOG BUDDIES. Sounds alright, only if James pretends he is snogging me when he is really truly snogging Avery. Or the fact that he wishes it was me he was snogging. Or the fact that he just knew I existed. URGH it makes me so upset sometimes that this is fan fiction and not real life. It would be wonderful if it was real life. Iíd die to go to Hogwarts, and be a witch. But, thatís such a load of fantasy land. And I wish it were true because it seems perfect. And I would like to be British. That would be pretty cool.

Anyway, I loved this chapter. I love the progression in the James and Avery characters. And I love your descriptions and the grotto. And I bet there will be a lot more snogging coming up and everything. And I want to know more, and I want to read more. And just skip ahead, but I know I canít read more because I have to go to bed right now. AND THAT MAKES ME WANT TO CRY. GRR. But, I have school in the morning. THEN DRY LANDS AFTER SCHOOL (RUNNING/WEIGHT LIFTING/DRILLS for swim team) THEN AN HOUR SWIM PRACTICE AT NIGHT! I AM GOING TO DIEE TOMORROW/ THIS WEEK. I AM GOING TO THE MIDNIGHT SHOWING OF HARRY POTTER TOO LATER AND THEN FIVE AM SWIM PRACTICE AFTER I WATCH HARRY POTTER LATER THIS WEEK. HELLO EARLY DEATH, JUST LET ME WATCH HARRY POTTER. I LOVED THIS CHAPTER! YEYYY!

Author's Response: I'm glad you like Bink. He, out of the three Chasers, has the least amount of characterization because he was hiding a pretty big secret, but things are coming out with him and I really like it. Especially his sleep-talking. Fabulous!

Bink really is sensitive. Moreso than the other two Chasers. And yeah, I see him as rather standoffish around women but still very cute. He blushes a lot. And yes, Bink gets a little obsessive about danger. He tackles things head on...except telling his best mates about dating a girl. To be honest, I think he wanted to keep it a secret because it wasn't going well and he knew in order to tell them, he'd have to be in LOVE. Which he wasn't. Not even close.

It's Tuesday today. And the Internet already cut at work causing me to get an ear full from a guest. Bah.

I actually AM familiar with DRS, haha :)

I'm glad you have boundary rules that include Aves. She'll be overwhelmingly happy!

Avery's confidence is something I love. That was one of her traits I pulled from myself. I wanted her to be extremely confident, but sometimes faulter (that happens when her father is involved).

Yes, a lot more snogging is definitely ahead!

I hope your school stuff is going okay :) And don't worry about Friday, the movie will make it TOTALLY worth it (and awesome). Thanks for the stellar review! xoxo



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Review #9, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Eyeball Torture, A Shower, and Purple Silk

14th November 2010:
Meta is such an annoying character. Like honestly, she broke the code. And knew what she was facing when she broke it. She deserves to be bald. TAKE THAT YOU LITTLE EVIL TWAT WHO MAKES JAMES MAD. GO AWAY!
"I love the hair. Brings out yourÖĒ I paused. ďErm, brings out your hair.Ē Haha, James is so clever, and adorable, and beautiful, and wonderful, and funny. SIGH. WHY CAN'T HE BE MINE, ALIVE, AND REAL?

I laugh so hard at James' inner thoughts. They are really so funny. He thinks/ well, you think of the most hilarious things to make him think. It's quite brilliant actually! Why can't my inner thoughts be that funny? Okay, I admit at times they are, and I'm laughing at what I think. But, like James is brilliant.
"Big f***ing group of lions." Hysterical.

I love the list he makes up in his mind. So funny, that he has to break it down into a list. Hysterical.

OH TWITWIZARD, you have a motive and want something else. Stop with this rude annoying be nice to James, then be a jerk to him. Really, you are horrible! You are never going to be as good as James! And you could never treat Avery as well as James does! So, stop being fixated upon being better than James and wanting Avery. REALLY, GO GET UP OFF OF YOUR HIGH HORSE AND STOP. Ew, punch. Is that the best you can do? LAMESAUCE. YOU ARE LAME EMERSON! LAME. DO YOU HEAR ME? LAME! AND STUOPID.
YEAH, STUPID.

Haha, Avery would use James' bathroom. And she would take forever. And James would pick pink for Victoria. He really is such a softy underneath his hard layer. WAR PAINT? Haha. And I would be scared of an eyelash curler. Those things are evil. I hate using them. But, I do. Because I grin and bear it. James, there are some things you just won't understand about girls and makeup. It's all about looking good, who cares if it hurts? Beauty is pain. Pain is beauty!

AH! Hello Parents. It's funny how they made such a big deal out of the castle after going to school there for seven years. Ah, nostalgia. But, why would they need a tour? Harry probably knows the castle better than anyone. Haha, why would Ginny yell at Georgie for stealing a toilet seat? She really is like Mrs. Weasley now! Georgie is so cute. I love his character and I have to say I really miss Fred. It just isn't the same without him. OH! WHY DID HE HAVE TO DIE? DEATH IS SUCH A TERRIBLE THING?! COULDN'T MALFOY DIE INSTEAD OF FRED? OH JK ROWLING HOW MUCH YOU MADE ME CRY WHEN I READ THAT AND THEN REREAD THAT. I AM VERY ATTACHED TO FRED!

Dara Wood seems like a downright evil little thing. I would have beat her out if I were James. Seriously, she has no right to butt her head into the issue about the code. It isn't that big of a deal and James has taken care of it. What is the big deal? And how did she find out? Maybe it was Meta, who wrote her and told her. And Meta probably made herself seem like a princess. I just snorted, Meta could never seem like a princess. She's too much of a nasty little nasty.

James and his inner battles about Avery. He is falling for her hard, no doubt. But, I'd be so confused too if I fell for my best guy friendÖ Actually, I probably would realize what was going on because I love my best guy friend. And some guys you just can't help but love. James is such a cute best friend for Avery. I think they'd make a cute couple, but I'd worry about what would happen if they ever broken up. Would they get that friendship they have back? Probably not. And that would be pretty darn sad. So, then I would worry. But, the thing I wouldn't worry about is the code.

I can't wait to hear what happens between Meta and Bink. I bet that it's brilliant! OHHH! Bathing suit time. Means I get to see my darling little James in a bathing suit. And check out that six pack! Darn, I wish that I was really in your novel. You should make a Rachel character. Or don't and say you did. Haha. But, that would be funny. I wouldn't be annoying like Nia. I would be cool and James would like me. I'd be like Avery, except James would love me. AH, dreams. AH! AH! A grotto. This has got to be good. Can't wait to read!

Author's Response: How I enjoy your reviews!

That's actually one of my favorite lines. I can picture him twisting his fingers as he says it. haha!

Ah, thank you! My thoughts are quite strange at times, and at so many times I just give them to James. I actually had a really funny thought the other day and texted it to radicallyali. James isn't going to say it though, I think it'll be Freddie. He can always get away with more having addled brains.

Dying at Twitwizard. Oh my gosh.

The eyelash curlers are so strange. I actually got that idea from a few of my guy friends who had absolutely no idea what they were. I enjoy them, make my lashes look rather lovely! James wouldn't understand though.

I figured the tour was more of a "tell me about your experiences here" than "show me this place." You know what I mean? I'm sure Harry and Ginny knew they wouldn't get anything out of their kids sitting in the Great Hall. But walking around Lily might let it slip that she kissed--no, wait. I have to wait for a later chapter to drop that bomb.

Can't discuss Fred. Will break into tears.

Who knows how Dara found out? The important thing is she already hates James and wants him to fail because she didn't. Meanie. I like that Meta is a nasty little nasty.

Ah, I hope things work out for them. If they ever get together.

Haha! A Rachel character could get interesting. That's for sure! thank you so much for the amazing review! I can't wait to see what you think of the rest :)


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Review #10, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Wesley's Confidential Internal Issues

14th November 2010:
Hi. I want to read chapter 28 right now. Because the title sounds so heartbreaking and good. And I want to make sure my dear old Jamesie poo is alright. But, there are so many things separating me from this and that chapter. One- the fact that I haven't read the chapters that lead up to that chapter. And two- the fact that I haven't reviewed. Well, I got in a nice little episode of CSI New York. It was sort of a disappointing episode. Boring. It put me sort of to sleep, so I'm like falling asleep at the computer. But, it's fine. I read your chapter first and now feel like I can have a good nights of sleep. Because I am in a good mood. COLLEGE ESSAY- DONE. CSI NEW YORK EPISODE- MAKES RACHEL SLEEPY. AND CHAPTERS OF YOUR STORIES- MAKE RACHEL HAPPY. TALKING TO A FRIEND FROM THE SHOW I WORKED ON SEVERAL WEEKS AGO- MAKES RACHEL MISS HIM BUT SO HAPPY TO HEAR FROM HIM! And here is the worst grammar right here. It's late, give me a break. Give me a break of that kick kat bar! This good mood causes me to break into song, you know. I can't really help that. Sorry, if this review is random.

Hahahaha: I love how you are throwing in the lines: Got To Get Back To Hogwarts, that can't be a coincidence can it? It has to be off of A Very Potter Musical? Which I love. AHHH! SO BRILLIANT. HARRY PLUS THE MUSICAL= WONDERFUL.

Ginny reminds me so much of Mrs. Weasley, going into a packing spree. She's got so much of her mum in her. Aw.
I love Mrs. Weasley, she should appear more. Just randomly. And be like Hello. Or on second thought she doesn't have to. I just love her. Haha.

WELCOME TO ANTARTICA JAMES! I laughed about the bit of the penguins. James' inner thoughts are so funny. I always laugh at what he is thinking. It's always so amusing to be inside his head. I think that is part of what makes this story so great. We are inside of James' head. You write him so well too. So, that's always a plus. Ya know, ya know?

UGH, I did not miss Meta while I was on vacation with James. Did you hear that? ME on vacation with James. Yes, I was in a way. You see, the way you wrote it made me feel like I was there. So I can say that I was on vacation with James, happily. And saw him shirtless many times, darn boi! You so gosh darn fine! Meta is just annoying though. Her personality is so rude. Can she just go accidentally burn herself on the portrait of the fat lady? I don't know why I suggested it, it's just comical.

Jamesie, always the responsible captain. I like how he is sort of somewhat taking control of his team. And coming up with these plans. What a darling kid. OH! You are going to hate me and I hate to be nitpicky and point out something to you because your story is literally flawless and I did notice this one small accident in a sentence. You wrote:

"Please be there five minutes early read to run."

- I believe you missed the Y in ready. AH, SORRY TO POINT OUT AN ERROR. DON'T HATE ME FOR IT! AH! I just saw that and thought I should tell you so that you could correct it. AH, I feel bad pointing out mistakes. Because your writing is so flawless and I just saw that one tiny thing.

Another thing I did not miss while being on vacation with James. NIA. Sorry, but I didn't. James is mine. And he is sometime shared with Avery. Because she is the only one who is suitable for him while I can't be stuck in a fan fiction. SOB SOB SOB SOB. But, James made me laugh. JAMSIE, is the only nickname I call him and even he doesn't know about that. I would never ever dare call it to his face. I promise, James. I know that I don't want to get hurt by you.And don't want you to get mad at the love of your life. Nia, is so whiny and needy though. AH.

Apparently Emerson who is a stupid twitward and dumb and smelly and disgusting uses the word ravishing. Somehow it suits him. He seems so old fashioned. Avery can't see anything in him, can she? I don't like him either. I love even the characters that you write with characterizations you want to hate, you just can't. Like you write them so well and I want to hate them, but I can't.

I GIGGLED so hard at this line: "She looked at her baggy sweater and jeans. Brow raise. ďYeah, okay.Ē She went for the door." I can just picture Avery doing that. CLASSIC AVES.

Fred is so harsh, yet so funny. I don't think I have told you how much I love him. Well, if everything doesn't end up working out with James. Which I cannot simply see why it WOULDN'T WORK OUT, then I'd go for Fred. Aw, Love this line: "Please tell me itís some awesome tournament where I can get rid of my little sister,Ē muttered Fred. ďIím thinking dangerous dragons or something.Ē

Honestly, it's hysterical. The way you are able to get dialogue so spot on perfect. That's always so hard for me to write.

Hahaa, the public humiliation thing was so funny. The t-shirts are pure brilliant. I love Meta's.

COSTASO, I hope I SPELLED YOUR NAME WRONG. BECAUSE I DON'T LIKE YOU EITHER. GO AWAY. IF I CAN'T HAVE JAMES. AVERY CAN.

It's so funny how James can get out of walking around the entire castle at night and being out of bed after hours. Aw, Neville. Always such a softy.

This was such a good and funny chapter. I can't wait to read more, but I'm afraid I cannot do that tonight. MUCH TOO EXHAUSTED NOW. BUT, YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY! FOR A GOOD CHAPTER AND!

HOLY CAPS HOORAY! LDSAKJFLDKSFJ. SERIOUSLY LDKSJF. AMAZING. LDAKFJLK. YOU ASTONISH ME WITH YOUR WRITING SKILLS. ANDLKSJF. And honestly, I hope you know that I wouldn't say that if I didn't mean it. Your stories are amazing! :)
talk to you soon!

Author's Response: Yes, you probably shouldn't just jump to 28. Things won't make sense. haha! As for CSI, I don't like the show to be honest. Some of them are interesting, but I'm just not into it. the only of those "kind" of shows that peaks me interest when Fiance watches it is NCIS. House is awesome, but that's a totally different kind of show. I'm more of a Friends, Gilmore Girls, Say Yes to the Dress sort of girl. Oh, and anything on Food Network. YUM.

Just made myself hungry.

Yes, those lines came from A Very Potter Musical. Shout out!

I don't know if it's because you're tired, or hilarious, because your review cracks me up. Mrs. Weasley just being like "Hello." hahaha.

Thanks about James. My favorite things are always James's internal thoughts. He is so wonderful and absolutely cracks me up. He thinks a lot of things that I think about actually.

Meta to burn herself on the portrait of the fat lady? How exactly do you imagine it? Because I'm interested now.

HAHA. I do NOT hate you for pointing out a typo. The story is littered with baby typos. I don't fix them because that would mean putting the story back into the queue for a "y" on the word, haha. And then waiting another few days to get it approved. I know they're there. When I reread the story in Word I fix them, but they're there on HPFF unfortunately. I hope they're not too glaringly distracting though!

Yeah, I don't think James would like Jamsie. Mostly because I had a friend once and her nickname was Jamsie. And I don't like her anymore. So yeah. That just brought down the high quality happiness of this response, lol! But James really doesn't like any nickname other than "glorious captain" because, well, he's a pompous git.

I love that Emerson is a well-rounded character and you want to hate him, but you love him at the same time. At least I do!

Haha Freddie is FABULOUS. So you wouldn't mind him tailing you in a dress? And having addled brains? thanks for the dialogue compliment! I love dialogue. Hence half of my story being made up of it. My original work doesn't have much dialogue actually. Strange the way that works, isn't it?

You actually spelled Costaso's name right. Maybe that's him getting revenge? Dunno.

James pretty much owns the school. I think before long he'll realize that a lot of people do care about him and let him get away with a LOT. haha.

Thank you so much :) I really appreciate the wonderful reviews you have been leaving me! They make my day. Knowing so many little things about the chapter make an impact on people makes me hecka happy! THANK YOU!


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Review #11, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: The Aftermath

12th November 2010:
Hi, hi, hi. Look who is back to review this story now too. I am on a roll! How I have missed reading this story. Why I haven't came back and reviewed/ read is so sad. I've just been so crazily busy with life. So don't worry, I haven't died.

The first thing I noticed about this chapter: The chapter image. And boy, I'm glad I noticed it. Get me an Italian boy! Costaso (hope I spelled that right.)is so drop dead gorgeous. DARN. Why aren't there any this good looking men near me? Instead I get to see the ones whose faces are covered in acne, have much too facial hair, and things like that. Oh, I'm a horrible person to say this all in a review. But, please don't mistake me. As much as I like looking at hot gorgeous guys, that's not all that matters. I really like when guys have great personalities as well. I LOVE HOT GUYS WITH GOOD PERSONALITIES!

Okay: James. I'll tell you something, you did like it. You should have stayed for more. I don't care that Avery is your best friend. And that you would be cheating on me if you snogged her, but you shouldn't have left. The code doesn't matter if you have an emotional feeling of love towards someone. Who on earth even invented the code? I forget, was that said earlier in the story?

Al- WHAT A SNITCH! WhY YOU GO AND TELL LILY, BOY? Worst, grammatically written sentence up there? You bet! Lily makes the most sense out of any of James' siblings, and I agree with Wesley too. James needs to talk to Avery.

Although, he talked to her about the completely wrong thing. Boo! James get with the game. Get some guts. Work up that courage, that I know you have that is deep within you. Jamesie, James, Jamie, you have so much courage. Just talk to Avery discuss the truth.

But, the thing is. Saying to want to forget about something makes none of them forget about something. And I can't believe that Costaso was there. And Avery just talked to James about how he should be a runner. They should have sat down and talked, honestly. They are best mates after all. That's kinda sad that James didn't have enough guts to say anything. But, I do completely understand where he is coming from.

I'd feel really alone if I was James, too. I would hate to walk around the village by myself for the last few days of any vacation. I mean vacation is the time you spend with Family time, and friends. But, James is separating himself and being all alone. It's sort of a tragic feeling there.

YES YES YES YES! I am so glad that Avery put stupid twit Costaso in his place! That made me laugh so hard, while James listened on the extendable ears. What a brilliant scene.

By the way, I love in your authors note how you wrote: Gotta get back to Hogwarts! I don't know if that was intended or not, but have you ever seen A Very Potter Musical? It's like my favorite thing ever. And there's a song about how you gotta get back to Hogwarts, and it's my ringtone on my cellular.

Ah, so after this entire chapter. Which I loved. I am so glad to be back to hopefully review the rest of this story soon. I love it a lot and it's so much fun to read and I honestly look forward to every single update. And since there are several chapters written, who cares about a chappie a day! I think part of what makes this story so wonderful is how well you write, and how well you seem to do the characterizations. I loved James' inner battles in his head about whether or not he liked Avery. It really is brilliant and great!

:)

Author's Response: I'm so glad you haven't died. I would have been mondo sad. And that's more than regular sad.

Yes, I do love the dishified boys as well. Though personalities always reign supreme. Like pizza, but less greasy. I love someone with a sense of humor and who appreciates me, you know? You can't associate yourself with people who don't understand or appreciate you. Life lesson right there. Straight from Mistress.

No, it was never said who invented the Code. It was just said it was started after Harry left Hogwarts and before Maxwell (James's first captain for two years) came to Hogwarts. And it had been working so it was probably just a few years after Harry had left.

I can make up a backstory of the Code if you'd prefer.

Al knew if he couldn't help, Lily could.

That whole mini-scene was meant to be slightly tragic really. Just thinking about being in southern Italy on vacation, surrounded by people but totally alone. It's tragic. I threw aviators in there to make it not so bad. They make things better.

Ah, have I seen A Very Potter Musical? Yes, which is an understatement. By now I'm sure you know that. I was actually in the audience for the live performance of A Very Potter Sequel. I also attended the Meet & Greet. Harry Frickin' Potter is my ringtone. So it's safe to say, yeah, I've seen it :)

I'm really glad you're enjoying it! Makes me so happy :) I really have the BEST readers in the world. Anyone who contests that can get an Emerson-punch. THANK YOU!


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Review #12, by rachm34Hide and Seek: Raising the Drama

10th November 2010:
HI! HI! HI! HOLY CAPS IS BACK! HOLY DASH, that's WHAT MY SIXTIES TEACHER SAYS. BUT, I DON'T LIKE HIM. HE GAVE ME AN 85 FOR THE QUARTER WHEN I HAD NOTHING BELOW A WORK. GROWLING AT HIMÖ GRR. ANYWAY! FAVORITE DRESS IS PROBABLY JANE. I WISH I COULD SEE A PICTURE OTHER THAN THE CHAPTER IMAGE.

BUT, GUESS WHO IS BACK TO REVIEW YOUR STORY! FOR A SHORT TIME. BEFORE ALL THE COLLEGE APPLICATIONS GET OUT OF HAND AGAINÖ THE FIRST BATCH ARE DUE MONDAY. HOLY S-Ö. H. Ö. OUT. IT'S CRAZY.

ANYWAY, I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH. I AM SO HAPPY THAT YOU FINALLY UPDATED. I HAVE BEEN MISSING READING ABOUT HOW SEXY OLIVER IS. HE REALLY IS GORGEOUS. AND I DO MISS FRED'S LEG JOKES EVERY NOW AND THEN. FUNNY, HOW THEY CHOOSE LOU TO BE THEIR SHOPPING BUDDY. I DID NOT EXPECT THAT.

BUT, I LOVED THE CHAPTER AND TRYING ON ALL THE DRESSES. I LOVE TO SHOP AND I FEEL AS IF YOU COULD HAVE WRITTEN THAT SCENE ABOUT MY LIFE BASICALLY. I FELT LIKE I WOULD HAVE FIT RIGHT IN WITH ALL THE GIRLS SHOPPING. OH, WHY CAN'T MY LIFE BE THIS STORY? WHY CAN'T I BE DATING JAMES OR OLIVER WOOD? OH, THEY ARE BOTH SO DELICIOUS AND SEXY. I WANT THEM. I WANT THEM. I WANT THEM.

THIS REVIEW IS GOING TO GET OUT OF HAND. BUT, CAPS ARE A NECESSITY FOR MY FIRST REVIEW IN FREAKING FOREVER. I WISH THERE WAS NO QUEUE SO THAT YOU COULD UPDATE EVERY DAY. WEREN'T YOU AT TRUSTED AUTHOR STATUS? BY THE WAY, YOU SHOULD EMAIL ME AGAIN SOON. I THINK I REPLIED TO YOUR LAST ONE. I ENJOY HEARING ABOUT YOUR COLLEGE ADVICE AND EVERYTHING!

CONGRATULATIONS ON GETTING PUBLISHED. YOU WILL HAVE TO LET ME KNOW WHEN IT COMES OUT SO THAT I CAN GO AND READ IT. I CAN'T WAIT TO READ IT. I REALLY HOPE IT COMES OUT IN MY AREA. THAT IS SUCH A HUGE ACCOMPLISHMENT. I AM PROUD OF YOU, AND I AM VERY SURE THAT YOU ARE PROUD OF YOURSELF.

WELL, WELL, WELL, LA, DE, DA, I LOVED THIS CHAPTER. YOUR WRITING IS WITHOUT A DOUBT FLAWLESS. YOUR CHARACTERIZATION IS SO WONDERFUL. I FEEL LIKE I KNOW THE GIRLS, AND THAT THEY ARE REAL FRIENDS OF MINE. LIKE THEY COULD BE STANDING NEXT TO ME, LIVING AND BREATHING, FLESH AND BONE AND YOU WOULD HAVE THEIR CHARACTERIZATIONS DOWN TO A PAT. WOW. IT'S REALLY GOOD WRITING. SHAME, IT'S FAN FICTION. AND YOU CAN'T GET THIS STUFF PUBLISHED. THAT WOULD BE COOL IF THERE WAS A BOOK OF TOP HARRY POTTER FAN FICTION SOLD. I COULD GUARANTEE YOU THAT YOUR STORIES WOULD DEFINITELY BE IN THERE.

I HOPE THAT THE CAPS AREN'T DIFFICULT TO READ. AND I HOPE THAT MORE OLIVER IS IN THE NEXT CHAPTER. THERE WAS SO LITTLE OF HIM. *CUE A SIGH*. HE IS SO BEAUTIFUL, HOT, SEXY, WONDERFUL, CUTE, TALENTED, AMAZING, DROP DEAD GORGEOUS, A GUY WITH A HOT SIX PACK, AND FLAWLESS. I LOVE HIM. WHY CAN'T I HAVE A BOYFRIEND LIKE THAT? WHY ARE THERE NO GOOD GUYS IN MY SCHOOL LIKE HIM OR JAMESIE? I DON'T KNOW. THAT IS A VERY GOOD QUESTION THOUGH. ACCIO GOOD LOOKING GUYS, KIND GUYS, NICE GUYS, WHO LIKE ME LIKE OLIVER LIKES JANE.

OHHH. FASHION EMERGENCY? YOU HAVE TO UPDATE SOON, BECAUSE THE SUSPENSE IS NOW KILLING ME. AND I REALLY HOPE THAT KATIE AND GEORGE GET BACK TOGETHER. THAT FIGHT THEY HAD WAS VERY SILLY AND CHILDISH. ANYWAY. LA LA LA. I LOVED THIS CHAPTER.

IT WAS:
AMAZING
FANTASTIC
FLAWLESS
THE BEST
WELL, YEAH, SO GOOD.
KABAM!
FUN TO READ
I LAUGHED
I GIGGLED
I WISHED IT WASN'T OVER AS SOON AS IT WAS.

:) LOVE YOUR STORIES, AND CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT UPDATE!

Author's Response: AH CAPS. HOW I MISSED YOU.

I will probably be able to throw you another email in the coming days. One of my coworkers is on vacay right now and with my boss also on vacay I've been living at work this week. Right now I'm hanging out on a 9 hour shiftie.

I'm hoping you're not just back for this chappie, because BTQC is in the queue as well...haha

I have the images of all the dresses if you want to see the whole thing, haha :)

I doubt the magazine will be released in your area because it is out of a program in a college, but I'm sure you can order it if you want to read it. That would really mean the world to me, but no pressure. sometimes getting a hold of stuff is HARD! haha.

I would love to get fanfiction published, haha. I self-published Keep Away just so I could have it for myself in book-form. And I designed the book cover :) It looks fabulous!! After the last chapter I did several pages of my favorite reviews!

The guys in your school aren't like Oliver or James because of that pesky thing called fiction. They have a lot of guy traits but if they were real guys I'm convinced Oliver would be a playboy and James would be a bit of a jerk with a huge superiority complex. Even if he didn't, he wouldn't talk to me haha. But in fiction, they are whoever I tell them they are. So let's try to make them real! haha.

I promise to update as soon as possible!! xoxo Thank you SO much!



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Review #13, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Flashes (of Reality)

3rd October 2010:
OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?

OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?

OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?

OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH, OH MY GOSH!!! WAIT? REALLY? HOLY COW? OH MY GOSH!!! OH MY GOSH! OH MY GOSH? SERIOUSLY?

I AM OUT OF CONTROL CAPS RIGHT NOW BECAUSE I CANNOT EVEN PROCESSED WHAT JUST HAPPENED. SERIOUSLY? WAIT UP A MINUTE? THEY KISSED! WOW

This review is going to be short because I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT. But, I have to say. I could totally somewhat see the kiss building up. I think that James started to realize his feelings for Avery within the last couple chapters, but didn't realize that they were for love. I bet though, even though I have never read anything from Avery's perspective, that she has loved him all alone and hasn't told him because she doesn't want to loose her best friend. And she knew the consequences, and everything would end up awkward.

Did James seriously run away? And he said he had to check on his muffins? He doesn't even cook! That's smoothe, Jamsie. Real Smooth. Although, I wish James' lips were on mine. I feel so excited to read this. I sometimes pretend Avery is myself so I can be best mate/lovee to James. Plus, Avery is very pretty in the chapter image.

Harry and Ginny, really must have drank a lot. They are acting like children. Snogging. Ew, I would have been so disgusted if I were their children. Like, I understand they have to show affection. But, that much? I hate when my parents kiss each other. It's just something I guess children hate to see their own parents doing. Even though we all know they do it. Hehe, that sounded dirty.

James is such a good big brother. I loved the dance with Lily that was really really cute. And Wesley dancing with Avery. James' mind must have been going bonkers. I really want to know who she kissed. TELL ME, TELL ME, TELL ME! I'm dying here.

I really didn't like James and Albus fighting. I wish they were closer. Like, I know they are close in a sense. But, I hate when siblings fight. It makes me sad.

This chapter was crazy insane. I am so excited to see what happens next. Once again, I'll tell you to go publish your book this second and have it sold near me/mail me a copy if it isn't and then I want to read it because I bet it is wonderful. Check yo' email gurl, I've emailed you. And also, respond to yo' reviews because it's been so long since I have heard from you and I want to know your input on your story as well!

The beach sounds lovely in Italy. I want to go to this part of Italy. It seems absolutely beautiful and how James went looking for Avery. That is so cute. But, honestly Italy sounds flawless. Let me fly/floo there now. WHY CAN'T I REALLY BE A WITCH? Because, sometimes I seriously come into a run and try to switch on a light using lumos. It's really sadÖ Pitiful actually.

WRITE MORE/LET ME NOT RUN OUT OF CHAPTERS ANYTIME SOON! LOVE THIS LOVE THIS LOVE THIS

Author's Response: I got this review while in my living room with my college friends. I called over my bestie (who also writes fanfiction) and said, "This is why I am a writer." And then I pointed at the large all caps section at the beginning of the review. Thanks :)

I would say "like" instead of "love." Neither of them is in love with the other. I'd say Avery had feelings for James ever since the outside scene by the lake, but none of the feelings are love this soon in their weirdo relationship. Or lack thereof.

If it was a few years ago I would have completely agreed with you on the parents kissing thing, but now that I'm 22 and I want to kiss my fiance all the time, I have to say that my kids can just deal ;) Kids really are that way about their rents though. I know I was. I'm probably the person that would see them wrinkle their noses and then kiss some more. I'm such a jerkface. haha.

I love James and Lily dancing too. Definitely one of my favorite parts of the chapter. As for who she kissed...you'll just have to wait and find out!

I'd love to go to Italy. I'm half Italian so I think it would be pretty awesome. I made up that location, obviously, but I'd like to go there. Southern coast with a beach. Unheard of! But I love it all the same.

thank you so much!


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Review #14, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: The Potter Family Extravaganza of Lurvv

3rd October 2010:
And here we are, going on an adventure to go on a holiday with the Potters. YAY, YAY, YAY. Let me just point out that I am very MAD right now because half of my last review got cut off. SERIOUSLY? That made me want to cry. PS. WHERE ARE YOU? I havenít gotten a replied review in like three days and that makes me worried that you are dead. But, then again I am sure you are fine and just busy so yeah no worries champ.

Shame on Harry and Ginny for arriving late. I wonder what they were really doingÖ. Haha, just kidding. I have such a dirty mind sometimes. Itís BAD.

James is a mammaís boy and so am I! We have so much in common. Except, that I am a mammaís girl. This is part of the reason why James and I should be in love.

How come the Potterís are always so awkward? I bet itís really cute though if you are an outsider of the Potter family.

WHY is everyone so sleepy? Oh wait, itís because itís the end of term where they have worked their butts off. I would be sleepy all the time if I went to Hogwarts. HECK, Iím sleepy all the time now.

I love the description of the Potter home. Could I please move there? Right now? Can I live there with James once he and I get married? Alright, I am sort of bordering on obsessive fan. Itís okay because he is hot. Right?

Jamesí room fits him perfectly. That is such a good description of the room. So many people write about James, but they never seem to write much about the Potter home. These are things that really avid readers want to know.

Haha, Ginny is getting her momís genes. That could potentially be bad. But, who doesnít love Molly. ďGET AWAY FROM MY DAUGHTER, YOU BEEPĒ

One of the things I have started to really love about Avery and James is how they are so intuitive about each other. Avery always knows what to say to Jamesie and it is the right thing. She also knows in to step in and help him out when he is at a loss for words like when they are talking to Ginny.

I know that Harry loves James. But, he is sort of being irrational. I probably am at that stage, where I just want my dad to let me do what I love. Which he is doing. He supports me a hundred percent. I just donít really see yet why Harry isnít a hundred percent behind James. For the moment, James is focused on Quidditch. He doesnít need to do anything else with his life for the moment while he is still in school, but he does need to start thinking about the future. That has to come up sometime, seeing he is a seventh year. I think that they are probably both wrong on their arguments. Harry needs to lay off his son a little bit more, and support him unconditionally because no matter what they will always be family. James needs to start keeping an open mind about the future. If he wants to go for qudditch, let him go. But, he has to think of his other options as well. But, I do get that Harry loves James. I think Avery is trying to make James realize that.

Hahha, James and I will really get along. IF HE WAS REAL. SERIOUSLY, I NEED TO FIND MY JAMES POTTER IN THE WORLD SOON. I love the name James. Itís my favorite. Because of Harry Potter. I am going to name my child that if he is a boy. His name will be James Andrew. And if I have a girl her name will either be: Andy or Jamie.

The five thirty in the morning part was funny. I giggled through out the first two paragraphs. James and I actually think on the same brain wave here. I love how you said how five thirty came around as Albus. That was so well written. PLEASE, GO WRITE A BOOK. NOW.

PUBLISH IT NOW.

Italy sounds beautiful. Have you ever been? I really want to go! Seriously, itís like one of the most beautiful places in the world. I also think that you could get some amazing and outstanding photos there. Since I am into photography and writing, those are like two of the things I want to go to college for. I have to apply so soon eek. STRESSINí Time is here, yo. Woah, this is the first time all review I have broken out into my ganstaí speech, man. Didnít you think I would break it out sooner? Wow. Haha, I am shocked at muh own selíf.

The Potterís are going to have such a relaxing and nice vacation. I can just tell. Italy is just beautiful the way you describe it. I want to go there for my honeymoon. Gosh, I am already thinking way ahead. Not even out of high school yet or into college.

No matter where Avery goes, there always seems to be some type of strange man who hits on her. Costaso. SERIOUSLY, she getís an Italian boy. Well, the good thing about men from Italy is- they are hot. Like seriously, drop dead gorgeous. Just think about tan skin, perfect bodies, nice eyes, that cute adorable and irresistible accent. HOW could anyone refuse? But, the problem is James being over protective. I even jumped with how strong Costaso came onto her. I donít think I would let Avery go for him if I were James. I would be my big old protective self. But, since I want James. I would say, yes, Aves. You can have him. I also love the name Avery, maybe Iíll name one of my children that. But, I want James to be my first. I will have a kid with James then name her/she/shim/it something that is pretty.

Hahaha, Harry and Ginny. They are still children at heart, arenít there? I feel like that is acceptable. They are young and in love. Harry never had a real childhood so he can be like that.

LILY HAS KISSED A BOY. I bet itís Wesley, I am dying to know who. OH, please tell us. Or me. I am dying to know. PS, check yoí email gurl, Iíve emailed yo.

Hhahahaa, I think James is starting to get feelings for Avery. In my case, bad. In the story case, this is so cute. I hope he realizes he could potentially break the code. But, if itís love. FORGET about the code boi, and follow yoí heart. I canít believe that he is reacting so strongly to seeing her in a bathing suit. Haha.

What a wonderful chapter, I cannot wait to read on!

Author's Response: You don't want to know what Harry and Ginny were doing.

I am so fond of the mamma's boy-ness that James has. It seriously cracks me up. Just another way he tries to be macho but really isn't.

Yeah, I think if I had to go through all of those exams I'd be sleepy too. I slept for days after my college exams in the winter and spring haha. All nighters are always fun. Well, sometimes they really can be.

So glad you like my description of the Potter home! I have it completely laid out in my mind. I'm nerdy like that. I love his room. I feel like he would be similar to Ron in the sense that he wants all the stuff in his room to reflect exactly who he is.

The Harry/James sitch is a bad one because if it was any year other than 7th, I'd say Harry was in the wrong. But there are two sides to every story. They're both in the wrong, which is my favorite kind of conflict. James is being moody and a teen and refusing to see any point of view other than his own. He doesn't have a plan B, and, to be honest, he has one term to figure out what the heck is happening after school. And he doesn't care about anything other than Quidditch. What if he doesn't get drafted? But Harry is freaking out too much and is thinking James doesn't care. Harry is right about a lot, though. James needs to think about more than just Quidditch. He doesn't have to forget Quidditch, just has to think about other stuff too. Part of that was the sibling thing. Harry, though, isn't supporting James the way he needs to be. You'll see more of that in the flashback. I digress.

I can't tell you who Lily's been snogging! That's a plot point, haha.

James is the kind of boy who reacts to physical things before mental things, and thus starts to notice Avery physically before emotionally. Get me?

haha, that was ranty of me. Thank you so much!


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Review #15, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Picking Bones

1st October 2010:
This is going to be a really really short review. Because, I need to move on to the next chapter pronto. HOLY FREAKING LORDY OH MOTHER OF MINE. SWEET SISTER. WHAT ON EARTH IS GOING ON. JAMESIE.

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Dear James: Even though I wanted it all along, I wanted to be the one you started to slowly develop feelings for. Not Avery. But, at least you have good taste. I see a hint of those feelings now, don't I. Boi, boi?

Lily is such a good sister to James. Seriously, she has so much of Ginny in her. I love how much she obviously cares about him. She is also very wise, smart, and knows what she is talking about. It is probably very comforting for James to have both her and Avery.

I cannot believe Blink. He is frustrating me. Maybe, he wants to take part in one of those growls for Emerson? Is this a warning? Or should I give him a little itty bitty, teeny weeny meek one? I like saying it in my mind so I think he deserves a small growl. Ready? Are we all set? Are you sitting down so that you aren't about to fall over with the force of my baby growl? I hope so. But, seriously. Sit down now, so you don't drop anything. Ready? Okay- here we go. The unleashal [which should be a word but isn't] of the baby growl:

Gr. Gr. Gr. HISS

There is was folks, nice and gentle and ended with a hiss. But, really Blinkie. Be nice to your friend. Be nice to your captain. He just really only wants to talk to you, and you just have it stuck up your man butt and are walking lopsided with your rudeness. Straighten up, stop it. Blink, do I have to come into the world of Harry Potter/James and show ya who da boss is yo!

By the way, I emailed you. Check it, respond. :]


I think that Fred should at least try to help James, instead of getting on his bad side. Fred is acting rudely too and it annoys me. Because, all dem hoiiit boys aree actin' rude, yo'. I'm bringing back the gansta language. Wohoo. But, seriously. Fred and Blink need to go see Madam Bones and ask her to untwist their knickers and then take a chill pill.

And I am glad that Avery went back upstairs with James to help him pack. Again, she gets good friend points. She has a lot of those in my book. You wrote her so well. It's so good.

The fight between James, Blink, and Freddie was EPIC. I could actually feel the tension in the room I am sitting in, and it sent chills up my spine. It was seriously a very effective argument and I loved how you wrote it.

Emerson does not need to be a stupid wizard and ask James how he is. OBVIOUSLY, he knows. OBVIOUSLY, he is just trying to get James to react so that Emerson can do something else rude or utterly obnoxious like stick Jamsie in another detention. EMERSON. YOU GET YO' BEHIND, GROWLED AT YO! GRR. GRR. GRRR. GRRR.RR.RR.RR.R.RRR.

Author's Response: Boi, boi! Love it. And yes, you do see a hint of those feelings. James starts to notice Avery physically, which is always a good sign.

I do feel for Bink. Of course, he overreacted, but right now Bink feels like he was humilated in front of everyone and called out on very un-manly things. So he was just instantly threatened and wnated to regain some of his manliness.

Is your Bink typo-ing on purpose or accident? I wasn't sure :)

I love that fight between the boys. It was insane to write. Really epic-ness. I'm glad you lurved it!

Thank you! Loved the excessive growling, haha!! :)


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Review #16, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Snowballs Bring Out the Honesty

30th September 2010:
OH MY GOD. OH MY GOD. OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH MY GOD!

OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH OH

OH MY FREAKING WORD. WHAA AA AAAT? META AND BLIK? WAIT, REALLY? Seriously? FOR THREE AND A HALF MONTHS? WHAAA AAT? WHA? WHATT IS GOING ON HERE? WHY DIDNíT I SEE THIS COMING?

What a great twist. Really. Itís brilliant. I bet none of your readers expected it. Oh, Blinkie is going to be in deep trouble. BREAKING THE CODE. WHATA B.A. So ba right there. WOW

I got really worried at the beginning of this chapter when Victoria was humming. What if she was sick again? I would cry. Honestly, I would.

Haha, Fred and his weird salmon color boxers. What a champ he is. Why does anyone own a pair of those? I feel like that is something that only Fred would wear.

Emerson is so gross. And probably slimy. Does he really only think of doing Avery? EW! There is no way James will let him get to lucky number seven. I would have killed him if I was James.

YAY! FOR SNOW! SNOW ball fights are so epic. Seriously. That was such a well written one. Normally, they are so lame when they are written in stories and clichťd. I am so glad your story isnít lame and that it isnít clichťd. I really like how well written this story is. I honestly feel like I am in every single scene that you create and that is obviously a very good thing to feel. I really like being able to feel all the feelings that the characters feel. If James feels anger, I feel angry. If Avery feels something, I feel that too.

LILY IS BRINGING WESLEY? WHY didnít James freak out about this more? OH SHAOUT! I really wish it would let me in the review box type out a lot of letters, in a row instead of taking them away if I make a word really long with the same letters. That is really annoying. MR. REVIEW BOX, I would love it if you let me swear in here and write longer reviews and have really excited words that have many of the same letters. But, maybe in a way Mr. Review box you are helping my grammar, a little bit. Donít count yourself off the hook though, because I still am annoyed with you. GRRR. You get a grrr.

Can I grr at Emerson right here? I feel like a GRR. GRR. GRR. Is now necessary for most of the chapters.

Haha, Nia is so bad at sports. I laughed when she was practically on the ground crying.

I really like Lily. Her character has really developed quite a lot. My cat, Clyde says hello. That would be if he could talk. He looks a little bit like Victoria, except not at all. Anyway, I really like how Lilyís character has developed a lot. It seems to me that she is very strong like her mother and has many of Ginnyís similar qualities. It takes a reader a little bit to see that too, and I like how you made us read a bit into the story to figure this out.

Can I just do something? RIGHT HERE! RIGHT HUR, YALL. YO, I AM TALKING GANSTA. WHADDUP? EXCEPT. I didnít really want to talk all gansta, and get up in yo grill right there. What I wanted to do was give James and Avery a big BEST FRIEND: AW. AW Aw.ww.w.w.w.w.w.w.w.ww.w.w.w.w.. See, I am trying to cheat the code, to make that word a lot longer. Because they are the cutest pair of best friends, and that needs to be applauded. It is adorable. Although, if I was Avery I would just grab James by the face and kiss him. Really really, really passionately. Because, if I were Avery I would be secretly in love with James and not talking to Emerson. I would also break Emerson in half I was Avery and do something really mean to him.

Wow, I am a horrible person when I think about Emerson. I promise you in real life, I am actually a nice person if I do say so myself.

Another thing I love about reading this story, which I have already mentioned in probably one or more past reviews. I love to be in Jamesí mind. He is such a funny character. I love to see how James thinks of himself, because really he is a bit cocky but that is what makes him wonderful. I think that his character reminds me so much of people I know. I like that confidence he has. I think it is sexy. I also think he can be a gentleman and has a lot of feelings that are becoming revealed to the reader. Honestly, if he didnít have feelings he wouldnít do all the things he did.

One last thing, another big. OH SNAP for Blink and Meta. I am just sitting here, stunning. I gasped out loud when I read that. SO unexpected. I cannot believe that you threw that little twist in there. You are sneaky, muh friend.

And Lily is right it isnít Jamesí fault. He is doing a great job as captain. I love this story. Onto the next chappie soon!

Author's Response: That is my favorite twist of the whole story. Okay, not my complete favorite, but I've been hinting at it since chapter like two and I loved the way it worked out. haha. So I'm loving the shocked-ness of your review. Deffs :)

I think three or four people saw it coming a couple chapters ahead of time.

As I'm sure you know, I do love snowball fights. I love participating in them in reality, and I love writing them haha. So I'm glad you liked it! I wanted to make it more of a team effort instead of a free for all. James would want teams. His whole life is about teams, yet he always goes it alone. Hence, the snowball fight playing out the way it did.

James is at the poitn where he knows he's goign to hex Wesley, but he's not going to do it quite as often because there's nothing he can do about Wesley going. Plus, he knows they'll b together the whole time haha. Hopefully!

I'm glad you saw that about Lily's character. She's a lot like Ginny, and just like Ginny in hp, she takes a while to get her footing in the story. She doesn't need anyone's approval to be herself, which I was showing a lot :)

I love that you're cheating the review box. Win.

I belive you're actually a sweet person. I think that kind of stuff about Amanda all the time haha.

Thanks so much! You're right, It's really not James's fault. But he takes responsibility as a captain, silly boy.

Thank you!!


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Review #17, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Salads (Side of Slytherin)

30th September 2010:
This chapter had so much packed into it! Holy crap, I loved it. I just want to read this story for the rest of my life. This and all of your other stories.

First of all. I cannot, and I CANNOT stand CLINT STUPID TROLLMOUTH IDIOT UGLY PUS LAWSON. WHAT A RUDE PERSON. CAN I GROWL AT HIM, LIKE I GROWL AT EMERSON? GET READY. ARE WE READY? OKAY. LET'S GO. GR, CLINT. YOU ARE STUPID. YOU ARE NOT VERY SMART, AND UGLY AND YOU SHOULD GO TAKE A TRIP AND JUMP OFF OF A CLIFF AND COME BACK AS A SEED AND DIE AGAIN AND HAVE A MISERABLE, MISERABLE LIFE. DON'T BE MEAN TO MY MAN. AND SERIOUSLY, BOI. JAMES IS SO TALENTED AT QUIDDITCH, IT'S YOU WHO IS NOT TALENTED. IT IS YOU WHO IS STUPID AND LIKED BY NO ONE.

SINCE I GOT THAT RANT OUT OF THE WAYÖ THANK GOODNESS. WE CAN CONTINUE ONWARDS WITH MY REVIEW. I FEEL AS IF MY REVIEWS HAVEN'T BEEN UP TO PAR LATELY, SO I MUST GET BACK ONTO MY GAME. INCLUDING LOTS OF CAPS!!! HEHEH.

Haha, James is having bad luck with Nia. The "I don't date players," was pretty funny. Nia thinks she is playing hard to get. Well, it seems like she is. It's okay. James was never into her, or Elizabeth, or maybe even Avery. He was always and constantly and will eternally be in love with me. Let's not even worry about that, because we are so certain on that fact. You should make a character named Rachel who is hopelessly in love with James and speaks in all caps, and is a best friend to Avery and James. But, James just doesn't know she has a crush on him and she is so beautiful that James just goes: "Oh hot day um this is my jam. I gotta get with her." Except, I'm kidding. It would be kind of cool though, kidding.

OH MY GOSH. AND POOR POOR VICTORIA. I got so scared there for a moment thinking she was going to kick the bucket. If she had, I probably would have cried. IN REAL LIFE. NOT A JOKE. SHE IS SUCH A GOOD LITTLE PET AND SUCHA DIVA AND SO FUNNY TO READ ABOUT. I WOULD HAVE BEEN HEARTBROKEN AND FELT AS IF I HAD LOST ONE OF MY REAL PETS. I LOVE HER. HONESTLY, IF SHE WAS A HUMAN WE'D BE BEST FRIENDS.

THAT WAS SO FUNNY, how Nia came in and Avery and James were being the best type of friends ever and cuddling. Nia needs to calm her hormones. Seriously. My friend said that line to a teacher the other day, it was pretty funny.

And the new robes came in, that is freaking fantastic. It must have felt so good, as you mentioned how James felt the robes in his hands. Sigh. That's lovely. Imagine how James would feel if I was in his arms. Opps, did I just type that or think it? Sigh, James is beautiful.

And the Italy trip seems so exciting. He and Avery are going on a trip with his family. For some reason, I have a teensy weensy feeling that something may happen between the two of them. I really hope their friendship doesn't die. Because I might cry. Honestly. I would cry.

Also, I think you should update every day with a new chapter, then I never will run out of chapters to read. Because there are nine more chapters for me left to read. There is no way in heck, that I can stick to my one chapter a day theme. I really like this story, I'm actually going to tell you that it is very likely for me to read on and review. Because I love reading your review responses, and they always make my day. Especially today, I hope you responded because today has been bad. I ALMOST DIED. No, really. I almost died.

I was in a traffic circle, and the other cars if I am in it are supposed to yield to me. A car cut me off and I had to get up on the curb. I literally almost died. It was the scariest experience I have ever had driving. I just started crying afterwards and wanted to go home and read you story. Which I am doing now, many hours after the event.

I am really annoyed with Edwards. Seriously, he has no right to give my Jamesie another detention. This line made me die. It's so clever, you are so humorous. Oh my gosh. I died.
ďSeriously, Edwards, you know how to make peopleís lives fantastic. I should give third world countries your number, really."

I also laughed at this:
"even though Elizabeth wanted to discuss names of cats or something"

Oh my lordy, that was too funny. YAY for Avery. For saying no to Emerson Smelly stupid head face. Honestly, why would anyone ask someone out to go on three dates. That is such a random number. I would just smack him, then kick him in a place where da sun don't shine so that he can never produce children and then be like. I AM THROUGH CON YOU.

YES. I WENT INTO SPANISH THERE FOR A WORD.
I AM A CHAMPION.

THIS STORY IS AMAZING. I LOVE IT. I CANNOT WAIT TO READ ONWARDS IN A FEW MINUTES.

MY REVIEWS ALWAYS TAKE SO MUCH TIME TO WRITE. HAHA, I LITERALLY HAVE SAT HERE AT MY COMPUTER WRITING IT FOR LIKE TEN MINUTES. I AM OBSESSED WITH THIS STORY. IT'S FLONDERFUL. YES, I PUT AN F IN FRONT OF WONDERFUL. BECAUSE IT SOUNDED COOL. I AM COOL. I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS.

I LEAVE YOU WITH:
ONE MORE GRRR FOR EMERSON.
A PUNCH OF CLINT
A HORRAY FOR AVERY AND SAYING NO
A DAY UM T HAT JAMES IS HOT FOR JAMES
A COOKIE FOR VICTORIA
AND OF COURSE A LONG BUT REVIEW FOR YOU

Author's Response: Ah, caps lock. One of the best keys on the keyboard. Sparta presses it quite often, though right now she is curled up on my left side sleeping in an awkward position. Because she's awkward.

As for Clint, he's such a tool. I was really sick of Scorpius always being the antagonist in next gen fics. He wouldn't be the antagonist for James. For one, he's a year younger and James would just step on him. For another thing, overdone. Not that I haven't thought about another fic featuring blond boy wonder.

I can't believe you just quoted "oh hot day um." I seriously lost it laughing. Like, when that song first came out I was making out lyrics left and right. Love it.

Aw, I would have cried if Victoria died. That would have been so sad and would have completely changed the story. Victoria is wonderful and compliments James perfectly. Similar to Avery :)

Calm her hormones. I like that.

I love the way you think about Italy. Yeah, by this time you know that part of what you said is definitely correct haha.

I am glad you didn't die!! That's horrific!!! I'm glad my story made it better. Seriously, I sound like lame to the extreme, but it's things like that that keep me going.

I love the list at the end seriously. I think Victoria would love a cookie! haha.

Thank you SO much!!



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Review #18, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Scare Tactics (and ants)

29th September 2010:
Hi,
So. Everytime I try to post a review it ends up giving me the: "This review is too long and exceeds the 6000 character limit" crap. I mean, give me a break. Let me write a review.

How about this. I write a really short, pathetic review because I am about to go to bed in about five seconds.
Okay, five minutes.
If I can fall asleep that is. I have such a stressful day coming up tomorrow. :[ Three tests, a huge project due. I love my life.

Anyway, I loved this chapter. I can't believe that Meta is meeting with a scout, whatta annoying move on her part. And Emerson is gross and slimy and ugly. I laughed so hard when Victoria was eating his things and James was petting her. I really laugh a lot at this story.

Elizabeth seems to be a little bit nosey. Seriously, why do you know so much about my Jamesie. AND GOOD MOVE LILY! You look more like your brother each day. I like how she thinks of clever things.

I wish Avery would see right through Emerson, and get rid of him. Something about him annoys me profusely.

Okay, I'm sorry this is such a crappy review. I promise my next one will be a lot better. Have a nice night! I'm legit going to bed this second. I shall be back tomorrow!

Author's Response: I hope you did fabulous on your tests!!!

I can believe it about Meta. She wants to be one step ahead of everyone else without working as hard as everyone else. She cuts corners. I'm glad you laugh a lot during the story. Makes me seem less crazy because I'm always laughing while writing it!

Thanks for the lovely review!


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Review #19, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Preposterous Pink Puddifoots

29th September 2010:
So hai, well, it's me again. Remember me? It would be a pity not too! I am so glad to click on this chapter and the first thing I see is lovely Victoria in your chapter image. Hai, gurl!

Aw, Avery is so cute and thanking James for calling her beautiful. What a good friend. JAMES, CALL ME BEAUTIFUL. Now, seriously. Do it. I dare you to, man. Please? Now, I am begging you. By the way, I legit promise I'll email you soon then we can chat somewhere other than in a review box! haha. I'm just so busy lately.

Nice segway from the 'you are beautiful' part into the *&**ing socks. Haha, I laughed at how easily it segwayed into it. It was so flawless, and done in ease.

James should never forget to feed Victoria. She's quite a diva, who cannot be forgotten. Nuh-uh! (Sorry, about the amount of sass I seem to be giving in this review). But, I laughed really hard thinking that James should probably be an owl man but he is so much cuter with a pygmy puff that it doesn't even make a difference.

Speaking of dates, I am almost in the same position as Jamsie. Well, not really at all. I just sometimes would like to think I was. This kid at my school asked me to go out with him sometime, like Nia did to my JAMES. And I didn't want to hurt his feelings since our families are friends so I said yes. And now I have to try to avoid him at school, because I really don't want to go on a date with him because he's not really my type of guy and like two and a half years younger than me. But, he's nice enough and facebook chats me a lot. So, yeah. That was just me going on a rant for a story time. I hope you enjoyed a tidbit fact about my life.

Avery is so much like me. How she is disgusted/yet loves the male antics at the same time. All of my closest friends are guys. I relate so much better to them. And even when they have guy talk and I don't really stand it that much I do like it at the same time. It's nice to not have to be worried about crap like makeup, being skinny all the time, and clothes and all this obsessive girly stuff that I am not into a hundred percent of the time because it is so superficial. I like how most guys are pretty real and genuine when they talk to you.

The "I'll owl Merlin about it" line made me crack up. OH! SO CLEVER! I love your lines because of the humorous and light tones they have to it. Even within the midst of a serious chapter, you tend to make me laugh somehow.
No wonder Emerson's ties make Victoria sick. IT's because Emerson is so ICKY! ICKY ICKY! Oh hai, caps for a second there. WANT SOME MORE CAPS? HERE WE GO! CAP TIME! YAY! GR, EMERSON, HOW I LOATHE YOU AT TIMES BUT YOU MAKE ME LAUGH TOO BECAUSE YOU ARE STUPID AND PROLLY UGLY.

May, I just ask a question here. Can you clarify this? Why does Emerson even have a dress in the first place? I believe you wrote it back in a few chapters ago that he was fixing it or something for his sister. Is that really why? Because, maybe he just wants to keep it because seriously he is a woman. And he's just so ugly to be a woman so his parents enrolled him at Hogwarts as a man. And that is why he always has the curtains closed around his bed, so no one sees him. Just a false theory there, but funny nevertheless.

But, yes. I am so glad that James looks good. I am swooning over him, even though he isn't even real. He feels real. I love him. I want to marry him, and Oliver FREAKING SEXY HOTTY MCHOTTY WOOD. By the way, update that story soon. I am dying for an update.

This line cracked me up: "Blimey, I looked amazing. Any woman would be insane not to fancy meóor Avery because we just couldnít have that. "
I love how James thinks so highly of himself. Confidence is so sexy in men. Even if he's a little bit cocky. That is even sexy about him. And I think he's such a good and caring fellow. Look at how much he cares about Avery, Lily and everyone on his team. I think he would make a wonderful father one day. Look, at me! I'm such a champ. Already thinking about me and James married with children.

Emerson is probably lying about loosing his V-card. And if he did loose it. He probably did it with like a spider, or something creepy like that. or a toad. Or a really ugly girl.. BAD thoughts. GET THEM OUT OF MY HEAD.

Haha, Madam Puddifoots, where the most painful of dates always happens. I always giggle whenever I read about it in any fan fiction or the books. SPEAKING OF WHICH, Why can't JK Rowling write another book like- about Harry's parents and how they fell in love, because that's a mystery or about Harry's kids at school? Wouldn't it be wonderful if she continued this joyful experience of books? I think so, yesssum.

James' eyes must have gotten so big when the lady told him that they didn't sell alcohol. He must have needed something to get through an adventure to Madam Puddifoots.

I was laughing in my room by myself about how steak was died in pink and how steak was supposed to be manly and my little sister came in and asked why i was laughing so hard. It's HACKING [one of my favorite words] HILARIOUS. HI CAPS!

JAMES GAVE HIS SHIRT TO NIA? OH NO HE DIDN'T! WHY DIDN'T HE GIVE IT TO ME. OH WAIT, WAIT UP A SECOND. HOLD UP ON EVERYTHING. CEASE WORDS FOR A MINUTE. I REALIZED WHY. I AM NOT IN THIS STORY AND THAT IS SAD THAT HE DOESN'T EVEN KNOW I EXIST. HAHA.

BUT, THAT WAS SWEET OF HIM. IT WOULD HAVE BEEN SWEETER IF HE DID THAT TOO ME. AND META IS SUCH A LITTLE TURD MUFFIN POP FOR DOING THAT TO JAMES. OH NO SHE DIDN'T. NO, GURL YOU BACK OFF. BACK OFF META, YOU ARE STUPID. YOU PROBABLY CAN'T EVEN SPELL THAT WORD.

Avery and James, are the cutest pair of bffs ever. I adore them.

And EMERSON makes me want to barf all over his wardrobe and over him. he is disgusting. Why is Avery going on a date with him? EW, Avery. Get a better man.

I loved this story once again!

Author's Response: This was seriously one of my FAVE chapter images. Victoria is such a diva. Note the tie in the image. Her favorite delicacy.

I think everyone sees James as more of a tough sort of owl guy. I wanted to prove in the first chapter that James was not as manly as he thinks he is, or as he wants other people to think he is. Enter: Tory.

About that guy that you're trying to avoid. I know it's super awkward and I know, especially when I was a teen, I tried to avoid stuff like that too. Seriously, I was in almost the same situation. But I think he'll appreciate it a lot more if you come clean and just say hey, look, I've been thinking and you're not really my type of guy. Don't use the friends line unless necessary, but I think it'll be a lot better than you just completely avoiding him. Yeah, he'll probably be sad, but better than upset/mad you're blowing him off, know what I mean?

I'm the same way about having guy friends. I have a lot of guy friends. I do have a lot of girl friends from college too because you just don't go through college without scraping some of those :)

Emerson can sew, just like he can bird watch, haha. Yeah he was actually fixing it for his sister but he has been having more things on his mind...like hating James and wanting to get into Avery's pants.

I love James's cockiness. Seriously, that's like my favorite part of him. It's hilarious and just so...him. Sexy too.

Emerson probs did it with a spider...cannot control my laughter right now. The visual is just gross, yet somehow it makes sense. Creep-tastic!!

I would so much rather read a next gen JKR book than a Marauders one, mostly because I know how the marauders book is going to turn out. And it's not a happy ending. I mean, it is, but it isn't, you know? I'd much rather know about next gen stuff. I would assume if she ever did it would be in Al's POV, but according to that Oprah interview she said she was toying with the idea of another Potter book. Whatever she wrote, I'd be all over it.

I noticed hacking is one of your fave words. Loving it!

I bet if you were walking back with James in the cold he'd give you his shirt. He's sweet like that.

And yes, Meta is a turd muffin pop for doing that. I'm trying to visualize that but it's not clear. Gross, though.

Thanks so much for the review :)


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Review #20, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Allie-poo, Wessy Pessy, and a String Bean

28th September 2010:
You know what's funny that I forgot to mention in my last review! I have a friend named Ryan Walters, seriously. And he is not annoying, that much. He's actually a pretty cool and seriously such a smart little guy. and he's not little either. Don't even worry. I haven't seen him in months though, I should probably talk to him soon. Thanks for reminding me.

NOW, onto the chapter. The last one I am reading before I go to bed. I have been exhausted lately, and cold. What if I have mono? That's really bad? I probably don't though and am just thinking of the worst. Plus, then it was warm today and I was warm. But, mono is bad and I haven't gone around kissing anyone so how could I have mono? I don't really know. So yeah, let's scratch mono off the list for reasons why Rachel is tired and sometimes cold when the weather is cold.

HOLY MOLY! OH SHUCKS! OH DAY UM. A LOT FREAKING HAPPENED IN THIS CHAPTER. WOAH. Wait up a minute, let me BRAIN JUST PROCESS IT ALL FOR A SECOND. ARE YOU WAITING? PLEASE? OKAY. GOOD.

OKAY, BRAIN PROCESSED IT.

Okay, so James gets drunk. It seems it happens on a regular basis. And every time it happens, he seems to get into more trouble with grumpy kins stupidoid [another made up word there, you see] Emerson. EMERSON, BLAH. GO FIND ANOTHER WOMAN WHO ACTUALLY IS LAME LIKE YOU! YEAH, EMERSON THAT IS A GOOD PLAN. GO FIND SOMEONE BORING AND OVERLY OBNOXIOUS. DREAM MATCH? I THINK SO?

OH GOOD GOODNESS, THE CAPS HAVE BEEN RETURNING A LOT LATELY? THEY ARE JUST SO MUCH FUN TO TYPE IN THOUGH. YOU HAVE TO UNDERSTAND. THIS IS HOW I LIKE TO TYPE BECAUSE THE TEXT LOOKS PRETTY LIKE THAT. AND I NORMALLY DON'T HAVE THIS BAD OF GRAMMAR, I AM JUST ALWAYS IN SUCH A SILLY MOOD WHEN I REVIEW YOUR STORIES BECAUSE THEY ALWAYS PUT ME IN A GOOD MOOD BECAUSE THEY ARE ALWAYS SO HACKING [ I LOVE THAT WORD] HILARIOUS. BUT, EMERSON, PLEASE GO FIND YOURSELF ANOTHER LAS.

DON'T PUT A FINGER ON AVERY! SHE IS MUCH TOO GOOD FOR YOU! GRR.GRR.

I cannot believe that James finally got his anger out on Emerson. If I were Avery, I would have let them go at it a little longer. AND, HELLO NIA. Thanks for coming back, girl. Nice to see you again. That was funny how James was so drunk and everything. You write your drunk scenes in such a funny manner. I always giggle when I read them, even if I am reading them when I should be asleep or doing homework.

But, yes, I am so glad that Albus got over that snuf and isn't so rude to James. YAY, good for him to talking to Paloma. Even though he was so obnoxious, previously. You gotta feel good for that chap sometimes. He is a bit in the shadow of good old hotty Jamesey poo.

Wes' character, I'm not sure if you are aware of this or not. You probably are, but he is actually very funny in a quiet sort of way. I love his personality, and how he is always talking to Lily and James goes off trying to hex him. BLOODY BRILLIANT. How do you always think of the best things in the world to incorporate for your stories?

I can't believe that Emerson found out about Victoria eating his clothes. Victoria should eat everything in his wardrobe, then leave him with nothing so he has to go to classes naked or just suffer from dying in the dorm alone. Then she should eat his wand, then he can no longer be a wizard or anything. Then maybe he's shrivel up and die.

I am a horrible, cruel person. Plus, I don't really want that to happen to him. He adds such great dynamics to the story. It is actually very good to have such a negative character to play in on such an upbeat story. SUCH A GOOD TWIST.

Ah so little baby Wesley, finally gets to learn a little bit with the big boys and learning about the grades. Good, he is growing up. *tear, tear* how beautiful it is to see baby Wesley grow up. Haha, well I feel like such a mother watching all these characters grow. I love the continuous character development that you add into each chapter. It really makes this story phenomenal. I like to learn more about the characters each chapter instead of them being flat and boring. THAT WOULDN'T BE MUCH FUN.

One of the phrases that James says, absolutely kills me. I want to just crack up every time. Indeed, I do really crack up really every single time in my room in the dark all by myself.
ANYWAY. MOVING ON. SHALL WE? Let's? I hope I haven't ran out of room in this review box. That would be such a pity.

The phrase that James says that kills me is: "That sounded legit"


But, the legit thing is hilarious just because I can relate to that and know people who overuse this word.

Author's Response: That's what I do: remind people they need to talk to their friends named Ryan Walters. It's how I roll. Secretly, I'm SO good at foreshadowing that I knew that would happen. That good.

I hate being cold. Seriously, it's like a pet peeve. And right now we have to keep the sunroom door open even though it has single-paned windows because Sparta's litter box is in there. So I close it except for a little crack where she can squeeze in because I get COLD. And I don't think you have mono, though you can get it other ways than snogging :) So watch out, mono face.

Loving the brain processing. Seriously. Glad it managed. It was like booting up and all that. Almost typed booty. Don't have your brain booty up or you'll be acting like Libby or Bridget or something.

Are you growling at Emerson? I think you might be.

I'm so glad you are enjoying my drunk James scenes :) He is losely based off of people I know when they have a few too many. The velvet thing or whatever the fabric of the couch was, that scene was based off something one of my friends did. Absolutely silly.

I really do feel for Albus. He goes so unnoticed just because James is the captain and hot guy of Gryffindor house, you know? But James was also wrong in the situation. As was Albus. Those are my favorite conflicts. When it isn't just one person. Look back to all the fights, etc. Almost always both people are at fault.

I love Wesley. He has such a bold personality, but in a quiet way. That's my favorite thing about him. I wanted him to be someone that was in the learning process, but had confidence. I think I did that well :)

Victoria could eat all of his clothes and leave him nude, or, or, or...James could replace them with something else ?

I love that about Emerson though. He really is a negative character, but he's not like evil or anything, which wouldn't work well. He's just a guy ticked off that James has life so easy because he plays Quidditch, whereas no one listens to Emerson about anything because he's a jerkface.

Flat and boring characters (not in the grades sort of way) would really suck. I agree with that. I am obsessive about character development. Every story I have written, original or not, is character driven. I often have a really hard time with plots. My secret right there, haha.

I am one of those people that says legit, but not in the obnoxious way. I do say it though. Because I think I'm far cooler than I am and I think I shouldn't waste my breath for the last two syllibles of that word. Lameo. But i could picture James like brushing his shoulder off, you know? haha!

Thanks for the killer awesome review with sprinkles on top! Thank you!


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Review #21, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: The Ramming of Fred Weasley

28th September 2010:
Hi again, I am loving reading more chapters. I must tell you that I love to get within Jamesí mind for a story. Oh, and my cat Clyde, is sitting next to me and I am laughing out loud while reading this story and he is just staring at me. He reminds me of Victoria in a way. I wish I could feed him ties though. Heís such a darling little pet.

ANYWAY, to your story. I LOVE this chapter.

This line made me laugh right off the bat: The stands were completely packed with scarlet and gold and ugly Ravenclaw colors.

Of course James would not approve of reffing stuff. I feel as if that seems a little bit beyond his mind. Haha. Personally, I think that he makes a great captain. The dedication for his sport shows that he can most definitely can handle a job such as this important captainship. He is so serious about it too. I bet he is teaching the members on the team a lot, even though you didnít say much about that. I really think this was such a well written chapter. Haha.

Haha, Fred and his women. Of course he would have done someone else on the Ravenclaw team. I like how James thinks about this. Haha, and doesnít seem very concerned either that he is thinking about all of his best matesí girls heís been with.

I love being inside Jamesí head. There is something about it that just makes it so funny. OH MY GOD- my cat just came and bit my foot. Why canít he just stop. THAT HURT. Sorry, Iím digressing, and providing you with so much information that you probably donít need to hear about my own life. But, inside Jamesí head everything just seems so hilarious. Seriously, I wish that James was one of my best friends. UGH, why canít he be real. That would be so bloody wonderful.

I would be so proud of Avery, she is such a good keeper. Iíd like to have her on my team. Poor Jamesy and the bludger! DONíT YOU GUYS GO AFTER MUH MAN! I LOVE HIM AND HE CANNOT BE HURT. Oh, and just so you know, I am typing this review as I read your story. So yes, this review is probably long and full of a lot of my personal thoughts and it is indeed in chronological order. I hope that it lets me post all of this.

HAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHA. Niaís sign. I just died. And how James was joking and how it wasnít about Kay Davies. OH my gosh, you have me cracking out aloud over here. Thatís so funny. I would not want to be thinking about that while I was playing Quidditch. Now, my cat is using me as a rubbing post. SERIOUSLY? I would like a pygmy puff for the moment. I think that would be nice.

I am cracking up about how Jamesí is thinking about all the girls on the team who did Fred and the conversations they would have. That is hysterical. Jamesí personal thoughts are definitely one of my favorite things to read in this story.

WOW. SERIOUSLY. FRED I WOULD BREAK UP WITH DAVIES. WHAT A B-IÖ YOU GET THE PICTURE. I DONíT WANT MY REVIEWING PRIVILEDGES TAKEN A WAY. But, REALLY. THAT MAKES ME MAD. AND how the Madam Horrible Ref, nice nickname Jamsey. Real original. Thatís funny though.

Haha, foul loathsome woman. James makes me laugh. I am cracking up here. This review is already close to six hundred words. Please let me post it. Maybe, I shouldnít type anymore and give you the end of my chapter thoughts. But, wait. I like typing.

HAHAHAHA, Meta Maggot. What a charming nickname. Oh dear, James. I agree. WHY IS HE SO HOT AND FICTIONAL? SERIOUSLY CANíT HE BE MINE? Hahaha, Meta is so rude. I hate her.

Oh, Scorpy and LawsonÖ Sitting in a tree. K-I-SSing How funny James is knowing what Scorpy is doing to Lawson.

Meta is seriously disgusting. How can she be disrespectful to her own team and friends.

OH HOW THE HECK. WHO BROUGHT GLITTER to a Quidditch match? I giggled so hard. How random. YAY GRYFFINDOR. FIRST WIN OF THE SEASON. TAKE THAT CLAWS! STUPID CLAWS! DIE DIE DIE!

Aw, I love Lily and how good she is of a sister to James. Seriously, that is so cute.

SOMEONE BETTER GET AVERYíS DAD SOME FASHION LESSONS, YO. WHAT A BAD SUIT. SERIOUSLY. I CAN JUST PICTURE IT IN MY MIND IN A PICTURE.

WHAT ANOTHER WONDERFUL CHAPTER. THIS REVIEW IS WELL OVER SEVEN HUNDRED WORDS AND MANY CAPS SO IT BETTER WELL POST. WOHO. I LIKE HAVING ALL MY CAPS RETURNED EVEN THOUGH IT SEEMS LIKE I AM YELLING. REALLY, IíM NOT. I AM JUST EXCITED. WHAT A GREAT WRITTEN CHAPTER THOUGH, SERIOUSLY. I AM GOING TO ALLOW MYSELF TO KEEP ON READING TODAY. EVEN THOUGH I THOUGHT IT WOULD BE A CHAPTER A DAY. SOMETIMES YOU JUST HAVE TO LET YOURSELF HAVE A PRESENT. LIKE THIS. WOW, I AM SO FUNNY SOMETIMES. NOT REALLY. WOW, THIS DOESNíT MAKE SENSE.

BUT SERIOUSLY, LOVE THIS LOVE THIS LOVE THIS. SORRY FOR SUCH A SCATTERBRAINED REVIEW THAT PROBABLY MADE NO SENSE. TELL VICTORIA I SAY HI, AND MISSED HER IN THIS CHAPTER. I HOPE SHE IS IN THE NEXT ONE.

Author's Response: I really think that's what makes this story so great, the ability to go inside of the mind of James Potter. That's what I love about Jane as well, but it's not quite as deep into her mind as it is into James's. Clyde sounds like a dear! Sounds like my kitten actually. She's finishing up her teething stage right now and still feels the need to bite everything. That includes me.

I think you're completely right about James being a great captain. Yeah, he can go a little crazy sometimes, but he's really good at it. I'll get more into detail later about how good of a captain he really is. Btw, your review just gave me an idea that I wrote down on a sticky note. From responding to reviews at work I now have 5 sticky notes of stuff to add in. See how important reviews are? lol! A lot of my ideas stem directly from them.

Nia's sign is funny every time I reread it. Oh, also it should let you post things over 1000 words no problem, but I have had one review that was so long I physically couldn't respond to it. Nire truly is a beast in the review department haha.

I like how the nicknames James comes up with aren't original, but they aren't horrible either, you know? Between Twitwards, Twataso, etc, I think he does okay for himself haha!!

I'm loving the "yo" you added to the end of your sentence. You would enjoy some of my tweets for that reason haha.

I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter! I really loved your review. It definitely made me laugh and gave me a little insight to YOU. Which is always fun :) thank you so much! I'm looking forward to reading more of your reviews...and don't worry, Victoria will be back. She's a bit of a diva to be honest haha!!


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Review #22, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Sunrise on Salmon Patties

28th September 2010:
I have a new theory on this slash life in generalÖ. ARE YOU READY LADIES OR GENTLEMAN? OR ANYONE JUST READING THIS REVIEW? A chapter a day plus, will make me happy. There' that's the simple theory. I have read one chapter of your story at least every day since I've started it. I always look forward to reading it, always think about it at school. I'll be sad when I'm waiting for chapters, and finished until you update for the moment. If that makes sense? I just love reading this story, and am excited to read it when I get home from school every day.

I JUST HAD SUCH A BRUTAL ANATOMY TEST! Thank goodness, I think I did okay. And thank goodness for eight plus hours of studying yesterday. I'm just hoping it's at least a B plus, I'll be happy with that. I'm so hard on myself. So I thought, I'd read this chapter the second I got home from school to make it up to myself.

I loved this chapter. Cue: Al's stupidness, though. He is so jealous of his brother. Seriously, Albus take a chill pill and calm the HECK down.

I'm glad that everything is cool with James and Avery. It wouldn't be good if they were upset with each other for James going to make sure Avery was okay. I really like that bestfriend ship stuff they got going on there. CUE THE AWS times three million. I want to have that friendship every day. I love it. It just makes me grin a little bit every time I read each chapter. So, I see that you had your twenty first birthday. I truly hope it was all the excellent of the excellence.

I disagree with James, I think he does have feelings. He's not a robot. I mean, I understand where he is coming from. He cares about quidditch so much, but he still has feelings. He wouldn't want to follow Avery and make sure she was okay, if he didn't.

STUPID EMERSON. He makes me so annoyed. SERIOUSLY. WHAT IS UP WITH THAT DETENTION, YO? He also needs to take a chill pill. I HOPE VICTORIA EATS MORE OF HIS SOCKS. EAT THEM VICTORIA AND TAKE A BITE OUT OF EMERSON'S STUPID BIG HEAD WHILE YOU ARE AT IT. THEN HE CAN BE OUT OF THE PICTURE. hehehe.

But, wait a second. What is more stupid than Clint? Not Emerson. But, Scorpius. Hahahhaa. This chapter made me laugh.

I AM SO PROUD OF LILY! wAY TO KICK SOME BUTT GIRL! WOHO! What a b.aÖ.. Yeah, she's awesome.

What another great chapter. I am going to allow myself to read on the next one. GO GO GO GRYFFINDOR! WIN THAT FIRST MATCH BECAUSE JAMES IS SO SO SUPER SEXY.

Also, this review is not in chronological order of what things happened in the chapter. I hope that's okay. I also took like two minutes to spell the word chronological correctly. It has been a really long day, with a lot of studying and a really long test. It's okay. I have excusses.

That word was spelled wrong too. * excuses.

Also, I wanted to say that I can't believe Fred is getting tired with his girl friend. She is evil that one.


I LOVE THIS STORY
I CANNOT WAIT TO READ MORE. Can I mention, that your responses to my reviews always make my day too and that's part of the reasons why I love reviewing. I also like how you answer all of my reviews. See, when people don't do that to a story I really like I get mad. I'm always like: GR
That's the exact sound I make in my head. I am a little crazy sometimes. It's okay. I promise I am not that insane in real life. I really am not. It just sounds insane in my review. I am always so bubbly and a little crazy.NOT REALLY CRAZY. Hahaha, I am pretty sure I am not that crazy

But, I seriously like how you respond so nicely to my reviews because it makes me want to keep on reviewing.

I LOVE THIS STORY
A LOT
ALOT A LOT

THIS IS HOW MUCH I LOVE THIS STORY:

SO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCHSO MUCH SO MUCH SO MUCH TIMES THREE BILLION CAJILLION MORE. I LOVE YOUR WRITING

Author's Response: Ah, usually caps make me feel a little scared, but I love the caps in your reviews. I mean, heck, you got a dedication out of them! You're not forgettable, that's for sure lol! I like your idea about reading a chapter a day, though I see it was "three chapters a day," which I loved. Not gunna lie :) Work yesterday was "one of those days" where everything was awesome at the beginning and then the credit card reader kicks the bucket while people are waiting and the boss isn't answering her phone...those days. So you're not the only one who rambles about her personal life!

I'm glad you did well in your anatomy test! I never took anatomy, took environmental science instead. I'm much better at that. Took some in college too for silly general education credits. Didn't do so hot, but still passed :)

I really love the friendship that James and Avery have. I built it off the friendship my fiance and I share (minus the whole actually being together bit) because we're absolute best friends. My 21st was truly amazing :) so much fun. Just had my 22nd a couple months ago so that was fun too! Spent it relaxing at a cottage. Yes.

Oh, James definitely has feelings. He just doesn't want them. He wants to be manly macho face! haha

It's okay the chap isn't in order. I know what you're talking about since I wrote it, so no big.

It's a serious pet peeve of mine when authors don't answer. To be honest, that's why I've stopped reviewing some stories. I know, that sounds so horrible, but after leaving 35 reviews on a story and hearing nothing, it really ticked me off. I respond to every single review I've gotten because I love my readers. I'm not some big-shot author making zillions of dollars or anything. I'm just a college grad living the dream. You know? Why, if these people can leave me love, should I not return it? Like anyone's life is too busy to say "thank you." Sorry. That was a rant. I've actually refused to read sequels because the author communicates with no one and still begs for reviews. What a turnoff. /rant

I don't think you're crazy, haha! Your reviews brightened my day so much yesterday and I'm looking forward to the next one :) Yay!

And I LOVE YOUR CAPS LOCK BUTTON SO MUCH IT CRACKS ME UP LIKE WHOA.

Okay, I've gotta get back to work because this is my first day learning first shift and it has a lot of different things. Including smiling and pretending to be awake. Thanks for the amazingsauce review!!


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Review #23, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Liar, Liar, Doc on Fire

27th September 2010:
OH my lordy, oh my lordy. I just want to use so many words right now to express how stunned I am.

FIRST OF ALL, JAMES. WHY DO YOU GET SO DRUNK BOI? Just kidding. That was a very funny and light part of the chapter. I really liked the Halloween Party and I'm so glad that James was a git to Emerson. I don't like him.

And good old Victoria, always showing up randomly. I love that pygmy puff and how she eats all of Emerson's ties. I really like how you have her appear in several of the chapters. I look forward to hearing about her, haha. Random. I know. But, I like it.

WHY does Avery like Emerson. I think she and James would be so cute together. Best friends becoming lovers. But, then it would be weird if they broke up. So maybe a random hookup would be nice. Haha, I sound so weird. But, Avery and James are the cutest set of best friends ever. She reminds me a bit of me and my best guy friend. Who I have recently gotten a lot closer with.

I can't believe how brave Avery is. That was such a good speech. I know that I would never have the guts to do that to anyone who I once cared about. She is so strong. I hope she isn't too mad at James for watching out for her. I'd run into his arms and cry if I were her, but I know Avery probably wouldn't do that.

I love how well you write characters. And I'll definitely email you soon, dude. I love this story so much. The characters seem so real to me. I think I feel that way because I can relate to them pretty well. I know people who remind me of so many characters.

HAHA the Rachel character who types in all caps, which I haven't done much this review. Maybe it's how serious the chapter ended. BUT, I gotta say OH MY GOD MAN YOU WRITE SO FREAKING GOOD. I can't wait to read more.

All day at school today, I kept on thinking how I couldn't wait to get home and read. Well, now I have a huge test tomorrow but at least I am reading now after I studied. It feels like a nice reward.

I loved this chapter. And I think you're right, you don't have to outgrow fan fiction and can always write on the side of real stuff. But, yeah. I want to read some of your original work, publish it! Haha. I LOVE THIS CHAPTER

I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH
THIS IS SO GOOD
GO WRITE A BOOK RIGHT NOW

SERIOUSLY I LAUGH SO HARD READING YOUR STORY

LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE TIMES A THISINSANDOU TIMES. WHICH ISN'T A WORD. HAHAHA

LOVE THIS

Author's Response: I'm laughing like an idiot right now at work. It's good no one is here or they would think I am a nutter. Which I am a bit, but that's totally not the point. "Boi" was what put it over the top.

I'm so glad you like Tory! She's one of my favorite parts. I know in a lot of stories they just have a pet to have one and it never shows up. Victoria has a personality, as you'll see as the story develops, and she's quite the diva to be honest haha.

I don't think Avery really like-likes Emerson. It's sort of a new thing. Like, okay, she can't date Bink or Freddie, and she probably isn't interested in anyone younger then her, which then leaves James, Emerson, and the people in other houses. Puffers are out of the question, Slytherins consist of people like Clint Lawson, and I guess Ravenclaws are okay, but she probably wouldn't go for them. So Emerson is sort of like a...well, okay, fine, if I have to date him then I will. lol. Longwinded response to Avery's reasoning lol.

Yeah, Avery isn't much of a run into James's arms and cry person, but you're right. She's a very strong woman character, which I totally admire her for. I have a feeling she has bottled up those feelings for a little too long.

I was almost missing the caps there for a while, haha!!

I'm glad you studied first! Gotta get the good grades (the academic kind) so you can enjoy reading, etc without being stressed :) What a great reward! You need some ice cream too or something to go with James.

Haha, I am trying to write a book. Like I said, it's just so darn hard without my classes, etc, pushing me. I'll figure it out. Gotta get my life in balance, and once I do that...book time! haha :)

Thank you so much! Love your review! Looking forward to the email!


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Review #24, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: The Tornadoes & Dr. Legace

26th September 2010:
Okay, one last chapter to read, one last review. Here it is. Before I fall asleep, right now. Because I am going to be dead for school tomorrow.

HERE WE GO. Better make it epic. I am starting to get the idea that I am going insane. But, really, I like reading your stories because they are just so good. Why can't I swear on here? By the way, i found your blog and your twitter. But, I don't have a twitter. Also, you should get a formspring so that your readers can ask you questions about your stories. Just throwing the idea out here.

Now about the chapter:

JAMES BREAK THE CODE AND GO FOR AVERY. I like what you to have got going on. I want to be James' best friend and have that close knit friendship that they have. I get along much better with the boys anyway, and feel close but not that close like some of my friends.

WHY CAN I RELATE SO WELL TO AVERY?

Meta makes me laugh, what a great secondary character. Even when she barely appears in the chapter, I laugh just about the way you write her. Whatta annoying person she is. But, how clever you thought of her for your story. I think she adds to the wonderful dynamics of the story a lot.

Paloma annoys me. Stop being so easy for James to get. And go with Albus. I feel like Paloma and Albus would be such a cute couple. I wish Albus would straighten up and stop being so rude to James. James doesn't even fancy Paloma. I hate how she just drools over James.

JAMES IS MINE TO DROOL OVER. HEY! You should write a character named Rachel: and base her off me. Hahahaha, just kidding. I am overly exhausted that is why this idea and whole review sounds absurd.

I really like this story. I have so many favorite quotes. I must say I read the first chapter months ago, and then somehow never read anymore. I am horrible. But, I'm so happy I am reading it now.


I LOVE THIS. Seriously. Your writing is incredible and flawless. I cannot wait to see what happens because I feel as if this story could move in so many directions.

I don't like Emerson, I'd be over protective of Avery if I were James too. He sounds like a tool in a way. And Clint Lawson is dumb. But the way you write these characters, make them very enjoyable to read.

I love how I feel like I am there in the story. I feel as if I know people who are just like these characters. It's pretty amazing. You really make me feel as if I am in a whole new world reading your story. Not just in this story, but your other ones. What are you trying to pursue in school? Writing? Because, please let me know when you write a book or something. I love this. Oh gosh, I don't think there is enough praise I could give you.

I love the way you get into James' head, and have his thoughts so funny. He makes me want to laugh. And I do wish he were closer to Harry because Harry is also hot. Gosh, darn it. Why do I love so many fictional characters.

I would marry:
Oliver SEXY wood
James Potter 2
James Potter regular
Sirius Black
Fred Weasley
Dodger ;]
blink

and SO many more.

You must think I am insane.
SERIOUSLY, you must be sitting at your computer being like: What is this crazy fan girl thinking?

And also, I love Rupert Grint a lot. I want him to be my husband.

I HAVE GOT TO STOP BEING SO BOY CRAZY
I CAN'T STOP THOUGH
I LOVE BOYS
I LOVE THIS STORY
THIS REVIEW BETTER BE ENDED BEFORE IT GETS OUT OF CONTROL AND OUT OF HAND
I FEEL AS IF THIS IS THE DIRECTION I AM GOING IN


adfjkladskjfdalksjflsdkfj seriously. LOVE THIS

times three billion cajillion dillion zillion million ellion

now I'm just making up words, and sounding insane.

Author's Response: Okay, ignore the part in the last response about me giving you links then, haha :) You should really get a Twitter. Besides following, you can follow the delishified Tom Felton, etc. I update a lot on there. Like...to much. A lot of stuff about the stories, sneak peaks, chapter images, etc. If you want to. I do like the formspring idea. Maybe I'll do that! Though technically that is what my MTA page is for, questions...though no swearing or raunchiness so those would probably be geared toward the formspring or twitter lol.

I really love James. He is so...me. But a boy. And obviously super extreme. But I just get in "moods," I will call them "James Moods" where I just think and type and speak in that mindset. Obviously he's not all me because I'm not insanely obsessive about sports (hockey comes close though), but he's close. He's so passionate and loyal. Love it.

I love Meta. You will find out a lot more about her as the story progresses. All of my secondaries have pretty developed plots in this story, which differs from Keep Away where they only had minor plots. All of which I loved, but this story is a lot longer and thus has lots more plottie plot.

Ah, Paloma. Struck with a big crush on her Captain. Something tells me Paloma has always had a thing for James. Even before he was Captain it was obvious he had a way with the ladies and I am quite sure she thought that since she made the team he might see her in a different light. But you're right, her and Al would be much cuter together. Al just needs to get some things straightened out. And so does James. I'm sure it'll work out :)

Haha. And the character of Rachel would just yell and talk in ALL CAPS all the time. Am I right?? Haha. I am actually doing that for an upcoming character, but I can't give anything away. It was an extenuating circumstance that required a character be made to honor someone. I also based a character (Amanda) in Hide and Seek off a real person. But not in a good way, lol.

haha. It's funny you ask what I went for in school. I actually just got a degree in just that. I can elaborate more in an email, though. Let's just say I know my way around characterization :)

I am definitely not thinking, "What is this crazy fan girl thinking." Honestly, I have a wide smile on my face (also from watching my kitten act like a psycho) and I'm enjoying these reviews so much. They really make my day.

Rupert Grint is a hottie. He looks much better in person. I have photo documentation.

Thank you so much! And don't be down on yourself for making up words. I do it all the time. Twitwards, anyone? haha.



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Review #25, by rachm34Breaking the Quidditch Code: Fort Ridiculously Brilliant and Super Wicked

26th September 2010:
HI HI HI HI HI HI HI

So, I read your response to my last review for your other story. And must tell you, here I am again reading this story. BLOODY FREAKING GOODNESS IT IS AS ABOUT WONDERFUL AS THE OTHER ONES. JAMES IS SO HOT
CAN I HAVE HIM, OLIVER AND OTHERS?

PLEASE?

Actually, I feel as if I relate so much to Avery in this, it's crazy. Haha, and sorry I haven't been reviewing every chapter but I LOVE YOUR STORIES AND JUST KEEP READING AND SOMETIMES AM SO INTO THEM I FORGET TO REVIEW

IT DOESN'T MEAN THEY ARE NOT WONDERFUL

I ACTUALLY LOVE THIS TIMES A MILLION GAZILLION! This is going to be really short, because it's late and I am going to bed. Thank you for the Happy Birthday! I love this story but I must admit I'm more partial to Hide and Seek, because I love those characters.

Honestly, can you go read a book? By the way, I meant write a book and am too lazy to go back and erase any errors. I hate the backspace button when I say something I don't mean to say. Haha, and rather just leave it and type more. I type faster than I back space. Weird, random, but whatever.

And also, I think I remember reading that you have a blog. I want to read it. What is the link? And please, go write your original story so I can go buy it.

GAH
YOU ROCK
YOU RULE
YOU ARE A QUEEN AT WRITING STORIES
I WANT TO READ A BOOK WRITTEN BY YOU
SERIOUSLY

THIS IS AS AMAZING AS AMAZING. I LOVE THIS STORY TOOO

GAH, I might seem like an obsessed fan girl for all these boys but I can't help it. And I'm 18 now! And still love your stories. Guess, I have to keep checking for reviews on this story. I have so much more of it to read, so that's good. WO

LOVE THIS

YAY

Author's Response: Hey there! I'm so excited to see a few new rando reviews! What you need to do is start a list of dishified guys you call dibs on. Of course, my list is pretty much all of the hot guys I write about. Excluding Emerson because he's a nitwit.

Avery is someone I really relate to a lot. In all of my main and secondary characters I put a little piece of myself, just to help me write them. She has my laid back attitude, need to appear fine in the surface, and my carelessness. I love writing her and I think she is the perfect buffer for James.

I totally understand if people don't review every chap. I know sometimes it's super exciting to just click "NEXT" and get the heck to the next chapter to figure out what Fred did while drunk talking about shrimp or what Wesley will get hexed for next. It's always great for us authors to get reviews, though for me those are what inspire me to keep writing. Sometimes I get a really cool review with a prediction, which might give me an idea. Or just a super neato review saying how much they love so and so about the story and then suddenly I want to write it! And I do. The other night that happened and I wrote an entire chapter before I went to bed.

You're welcome for the Happy Birthday and you're allowed to like one of my stories more than the other, haha! I obviously can't pick sides because I'm the momma, but you're allowed! lol.

As for the book, I actually do more original work than I do fanfiction. Fanfics just keep me writing during my off-times or when I'm working a lot. I'm working on a novel right now but it's in the planning stages. I need to get back on that, but it's difficult when you don't have every chapter 20+ people telling me they love it, you know? haha!

I do have a blog, but it was put on the backburner this summer because of my relentless hunt for a job. I do have one now, but I still haven't gotten back to the blog exactly. I'm trying to figure out 100% what I want to do with it. The link is on my author page, I suggest heading there, or when you shoot me an email I'll give it to you then!

I don't think being 18 means you need to outgrow anything. I think there is a big sense of needing to grow up and out of stuff like fanfiction and Harry Potter, but the truth is, if you love something you should stick with it, even if your life allows you to minimize it. Heck, I still rock out to BSB every once in a while when cleaning and I'm 22. Do what makes you happy :)

Thank you so much for the lovely review! Reviews like these make nights after work so much more enjoyable, hehe :)


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