I like the premise, but... I believe you should have kept the whole thing in one scene. For instance, have Cho at the wedding the whole time and tell the back story in flashbacks when people mentioned the word 'sneak'. I usually see 1 shot stories done that way.
Good story though.Author's Response: You know what, that's a really good idea. That would've made more sense, seeing as, like you said, it is a oneshot. I might redo it sometime or other. Thank you for the suggestion! Report Review
'Happy to oblige, Snape jumped on top of the table and began singing at the top of his lungs, stomping his black cowboy boots in rhythm with the song'
Absolutely Ridiculous! The story went from silly to down right ludicrous! I loved it! Report Review
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