I really enjoyed this, because it was a well-written piece. I do think it wouldn't hurt to add a little emotion into it. Narcissa seemed almost dead, in the emotional sense, and I believe that even a woman who has gone through what she has would have some feeling left in her. While it was amazing, I also think that the persons in the work wouldn't have talked so properly. Narcissa and Andromeda, perhaps, but certainly not the younger ones. Good job. Keep writing!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. I am grateful your comments. This story was written under deadline, so all constructive comments are deeply appreciated. I am glad you liked the story, and I thank you for your kind encouragement. Report Review
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