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Review #1, by JPKSins of the Innocent: Express thoughts on life

10th April 2011:
Hey! Jordan Paige x3 here from the forums and the review swap.

I think this story is off to a good start and you have definitely set the scene well. I would suggest (possibly) getting a beta, though, as some of the punctuation and grammar was off (apostrophes, for example). A beta could also help with sentences because some seem a little too long to me and could probably be cut down some. Watch out for dialogue, too; remember the time period they were in Hogwarts - I would assume words such as 'amazing' and 'awesome' were not really in use then.

Overall though, this was a good start and I am interested in it when I have the time. It's a really good start for your first fic.

Author's Response: haha too long sentences-I recognise that a bit too well :)

Thank you! for the review, I've been looking for a beta but noone seemed interested in helping me raise this baby :'( haha but I'll try again because I know my grammar isn't the best (english being my second language and all) and I'd really need one.

Thank you again! and I'm so happy that you think it's a good start that made you interested!

*huggles*


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Review #2, by JPKAlways: Always

25th November 2007:
Arh.

*Sniffles*

That was amazing, I absolutely loved it. By the end I was almost in tears.

You do not suck at one-shots, I actually think your quite good xD.

I adored your use of metaphors, my favourite being – as softly as a lullaby, it really brought that scene to life.

- Jordan.

Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! I wanted to make it angsty, so I'll take it as a compliment that you were almost in tears. thanks for the review :)

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Review #3, by JPKNot Quite Love: Don't Look Back In Anger

23rd November 2007:
Awhh. I loved this story, and I must say I preferred this epilogue to the other, you are right - this one is more fulfilling. Keep up the writing your doing a spectacular job. *Grins* Jordan Paige x

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! It's interesting to see which epilogue people prefer, because believe it or not, it's about 50/50. I like this one better too ;)

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