Poor Scorpius :( A little bit dodgy and skipped around. You move rather quickly through the plot. Im also not quite clear on Roses character. Im waiting to see if it is intentional or not though. She seemed almost slutty before but now im getting more of an innocently permiscuous sense if you get my drift. More from Scorpius though, like she wants the relationship and romance and won't skip out on an opportunity for it. Hmmm I'm gonnalove see more. I speculate too much haha. I'm still loving your humor by the way! Keep writing Liz!
Love and sparkles, Gabby Report Review
I enjoyed this a lot. Its definitely a fun piece. The only thing I would suggest is perhaps adding chapter titles. Little silly ones, you know? I always get a kick out of those and if it gives you an edge, why not? You keep writing girl, I'll keep reviewing :) loving the fluff and a somewhat slutty Rose. It's a very different take on it and it's interesting, kept me hooked. I'm eager for more. Happy writing! Also, your banner is fantastic!
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Please update soon. I love this story and an update would be much appreciated :) Report Review
omfg please update soon! Report Review
once again another amazing chapet please update soon!Author's Response: i will! as soon as i finished the next chapter! :) Report Review
omggg youu need to updat ASAP! Report Review
you have to update this ASAP i love it! please update!! do not abandon Report Review
when is your beta getting back from vacation?? i am obsessed with this story now and i ned a new chapter!! Thanks, jkr_lover aka kittykatAuthor's Response: she's back already! and i'll post the next chapter now! lets all wait for it get validated! thanks for the review! :) Report Review
haha i love this chapter... especially the title... But really, who understands women?Author's Response: Thanks! Well, it's actually the theme of the story. Something I got to think a lot about when writing it. Report Review
13: Listen to her, not just look at her.
14: And look her in the eyes.
haha my mom told my fiance that when he met my parentsAuthor's Response: She did? Haha, that could only have been fun . Report Review
10. Always let her know sheís right.
11. You never are, even if you donít think sheís listening.
haha that is sooo true!Author's Response: Yeah, boys needs to be careful around that. I have a few friends who are boys, and they just don't get that I'm always rigth! :P Report Review
6. Spitting, farting, or burping in front of her is banned.
haha lol as if that wanst already a given fact.Author's Response: Haha. But James needs to be told everything :P Report Review
Wow, can i really be the first reviewer! Your story is amazing, please continue it!Author's Response: No, you're not the first to review, but unfortunately all of my reviews got lost in the past days :( Report Review
Ok first off just so you know, I absolutley love this story, however there were a few mistakes. It was a little confusing, your P.O.V. is nice but it also is a little off, a little third person, such as: "Tears created small rivers down my cheeks, my mouth dropping slightly as I took the scene in..." The my's seem out of place try replacing this quote with feelings rather than descriptions, however there was a nice transition into "Pansy, the pugged-nosed whore, laying in Draco‚Äôs bed like she owns the place and Draco, stepping out of the shower, towel hanging just below his cut lines, water droplets still fresh on his toned, pale torso‚Ä¶" This was nice. Congrats on a great story!
-Gabby Report Review
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omg!omg!omg!omg!omg!omg!Author's Response: hahah didn't see it coming? x Report Review
Ok, when i read that last part i literally screamed! My husband thinks im crazy, and my babies started crying. Yes, i was being a little overdramatic, but, that's what writers are, passionate and overdramatic. Great story and chapter, i love it!Author's Response: Thanks haha. Don't worry, sometimes when i read stories, i either laugh so hard I'm crying or scream "OMG OMG OMG" while looking away from the screen if it's embarassing lmao my whole family think's I'm the nutjob:P
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I don't understand how this is completed. You could have taken this storyso much farther, it is great!Author's Response: It was actually just because I was bored. I have other stories to complete. But anyway, if I did go farther where would I go? I don't have any ideas. Report Review
I like this story, but it was slightly cliche. Hermione's and Ginny's emotions were a little bit on the high end I understand that they were still upset, but there was something that seemed off.Author's Response: I'll be honest... I don't think I was actually thinking when I wrote it... I had a different idea then other things happened... idk. Report Review
If you delete this story, I may just have to murder you! (Not really, then you wouldn't have the chance to put it back on) It is incredible!Author's Response: >.< I wouldn't say incredible to be fair. I miight do :P x Report Review
OMG, who would dosomething like that! What a bitch!Anyways, this chapter was great! Rose was kinda all over the place, but hey, she's pregnant that's just the wayit's gonna be.Author's Response: Thank you! (",) Report Review
Congrats on getting trusted author! This chapter was amazing! And the new banner is gorgeous! Please update this story first ! It is your best by far!(not that your others arent good too.)Author's Response: Thanks so much! x Report Review
I would love to be your beta. I actually have a spot open, and would be honoredif you would like to take it. You can email me at firstname.lastname@example.org if you are interested. Report Review
I heard that you need a beta,and I would be honored to take on the job. If you are interested, please emailme at email@example.comAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
That was cute. But something that I can't put my finger on kinda threw me off though. It was good, don't get me wrong, but it just seemed a little strange.8/10Author's Response: Yes, this is another one that I have to re-write. I'm not happy with how it's turned out at all, I need to take it back to the drawing board!! Personally, I think 8/10 is too high for this, sorry! :)
Thank you ever so much though!! Report Review
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