I really like this its amazing.

But I think you have the american and english years mixed up they are in there 7th year which is their last year and they turn from 17 to 18, so they are both already 18, not 17 nearly 18. I just thought to let you know as it makes quite a big difference. I am really loving your story though, I have been reading it non-stop ALL DAY seriously it is like 3 am!

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Just to let you know, when Lily get dressed after writting in her diary you say she puts on a "jeans skirt" I just thought it sounded a bit wrong. I guess you must have had a mind blank, I get them all the time, so the phrase is Denim skirt. I love this btw :D

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What year is this? Cause in Britian you cannot be 16 and in the 7th year, I think it is your grade 12.

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I really like this, honestly! But there are two mistakes, well one real mistake and one that is a misused phrase, on the second line.

1. The use of the word, "Mom". They live in England and therefore they are not American, so they call their Mother Mum. They do this in the books, so there is no excuse really.

2. "and my sister could care less" the phrase is couldn't care less. That isn't really important. I just think it would make it flow better and give a better impression on the beggining of your first chapter.

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I've changed my mind. I'm not hooked at all. Bye

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Christmas is over, good night- I mean really? He is just being stupid and petty. Silly character portral.

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"rare appearance in Britain of snow"You seem to be the only one in the world that relises that it does not snow in Britian! Good on you.
"The blooming cheek told off by my bloomin house elf" That is stupid, the real harry would not mind, GRR you really have got all the chracters all wrong.

"Harry you aren’t going to believe this but the shop is being robbed, there are six wizards in Death Eater masks and they have all of us standing at the counter" a) why would Death Eaters rob a shop? *gives condesending look* b) Hermione isn't an idiot she could get rid of them herself.

"HOW DARE YOU POINT YOUR WAND AT MY HUSBAND,” This proves my point b above and also, would you really shout that and warn them that you are going to attack them?

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“How would it look if memories of your love for a Muggle born witch were released, memories of you and your best friend, my mother" Quite frankly I think this is a very cruel thing for this Harry (I call him this Harry because you have got the character VERY wrong) to do. The real one would never do that. This Harry called one of his children Severus so I do not think he would do this to Snape.

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Typo (yet again :D)Dresses and new under wear were- underwear is one word not two.

swimming in the Weasley pool- the Weaslys can't afford new books, how are they going to afford a swimming pool?

However I really like the idea that Harry gets Order of Merlin first class! It would make sense after all, and it is a brand new idea which I have never seen before!

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Yet another complaint, do you not think this is a wee bit degrading and sexist? -->"Now what I propose is that you distract Hermione buying her a new dress or something, I will of course pay for it as no doubt you already have her present sorted."

And I don't really like the way you have made Harry and Hermione's characters, I mean there is expanding on the book and then there is just making it up completely.

(Still hooked)

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He is a typo-"Aurors came for the three wrongdoers and took statements from all involved. Harry found that Malfoy had used his influence and gold to get him self and Bellatrix out of prison." It should be himself not him self.

I don't really like your plot or your writting style, but you still have me hooked don't know how you do it (and the last bit was a compliment :P)

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I really like your story but are you aware Italy is even colder than Britain? They get proper snow and it is colder than Britain. They would not be wondering around in beachware and if they went in the water they would all probably die from hypothermia. If it wasn't on a moutain it would have been ok. But it is on a mountain so...

Author's Response: I'm glad that you decided to review, I hope to hear from you again on other chapters to see what you enjoy about my story :) Yes, I do know that about Italy. The story itself is very AU and the southern part of Italy is based loosely off of Greece in this story. The mountain itself is not a stereotypical mountain, it is more like a cliff going down to the ocean, similar to Greece. Thank you for your concern and review on my story. :)

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I really like this. It is a shame it is so short, I think it would be intresting to see how it could have panned out. The idea of Teddy and Gabrielle is intresting, I have never heard it before but I think it is an intreging possiblity.

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this is good! its funny and quite light heartede at the end. is this how you imagend it to happen? do you like jk version?

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im reviewing this coz u have asked me too AND it is amazing so i dnt mind (aand i cant speell aere youhavppy becki) nor can i type. :)

Author's Response: i know, laura, i know

:p

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same becki same grrr you dont write much at all grrr but hahahahahaha i know her im sitting next to her sandshes telling me the whole plot and im nt gunna tell anyof you unless... lool love ya becki

Author's Response: haha. no

you know nothing. NOTHING

lmao ;)

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OMG her brother is ALIVE and how how how how and yay ur updating quickly

Author's Response: :D

*not saying*

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i love it update quick i ned my erin fix

Author's Response: haha riiight

ever mentioned that you scare me, stocky?

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awsumness ellie and you better start writting the next chapter cause i want to read it in english/geography tommorw!love you xx (ps i LOVE it the way you show his emotions is amazing)

Author's Response: AW! major sqee! you are so cute! Uh, next chapter should be finished soon, I promise you can read it! thanks, i have to admitt, i was quite pleased with this one! =P

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iam sure foruums is spelt with two u's hummm love it and guess what? i get to read it before all you suckers!! ha ha

Author's Response: Uh, am I supposed to reply to this? Forums has 1 R, sweetie.

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right how do I put this on my thingiy on the foruums this is the best your have written so far! love you xxx

Author's Response: OMG, you are the sweetest! i'll tell you right now, in life, it's easier!

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good but wtf about the houseelf?!! and it is not a very good ending :) luv you :D

Author's Response: i told u in ict

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i like this but do you really think luna lovegoods mum is called cathy? very normal name. and i like the fact that the name of the quibberler came form the ship keep on writing

Author's Response: Yes I think she had a normal name. Even if you are a bit special you don't have to have a strange name. She didn't choose her name by herself after all. :)

Thank you for the review!

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i like it but it needs to be longer add MORE YOU WILL ADD MORE!

Author's Response: you tell me what to add and i will :P

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that is very predgest against squibs you know... SQUIBIST!

Author's Response: LOL this is a free coountry with free speech. whatcha gonna do? promote the fairness doctrine? :D

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