I loved this! :) very cute.Author's Response: thank you :) Report Review
I think you pulled it off just great ! Wonderful chapter as always!Author's Response: aw, thank you! Report Review
I love this story, you really must keep on writing.Author's Response: ahaha, must admit I've been having writers block as of late, but thank you! Report Review
Great chapter as always xxAuthor's Response: thank you xoxox Report Review
Yet another wonderful, wonderful chapter, my dear! Great job :)Author's Response: you're really much too kind, thank you! Report Review
This is absolutely amazing, keep up the good work!Author's Response: hahaha, thank you!!! Report Review
You've written an amazing story here!Author's Response: aw, you're very kind, thank you Report Review
I loves this, this was really good! Keep up the good work!Author's Response: makes me so happy to read that! Report Review
Yay! I loves this! Keep up the good work!Author's Response: hahaha, thank you! Report Review
This looks great! Keep up the good work!Author's Response: that means so much to hear, thanks! Report Review
This is really good! Keep up the good work!Author's Response: thank you, appreciate it! Report Review
I love this, this is really good! Keep up the good work!Author's Response: thank you, I appreciate the review! Report Review
I favourited this years back and rereading it now I still love it beyond words. You write beautifully. It would be a shame to put such a gift to waste.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
I loved this. I really really loved this. You write beautifully, my favourite line was this one: "It is easier, being angry. You understand that, acknowledge it in the pale grey of the early morning when the space between you and Victoire is wide, when the sheets are cold and her shoulder an ice-berg." well, honestly I loved the whole thing! :)Author's Response: thank you so much for such a lovely review! i am really happy you liked this and cheers for the compliments!
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I actually really liked this. I think you hit it spot on; the characterization of Snape is amazing! I loved your wording and the small powerful lines. If there was one thing I could say you could improve it is the short sentences: a whole oneshot filled with oneliners is almost poemlike, and while I like poems, I think that maybe you could have filled out some of the oneliners with a bit more description. I'm not saying that you need to write 3000 more words, no, but maybe just make the paragraphs longer? Just to make the story flow a little better, the oneliners make the story a little fragmented to read - it doesn't flow nearly as well as I think it could have if you had made the paragraphs longer. It was still awesome though, I loved it! :) keep up the good workAuthor's Response: Argh! Thankyou, first of all for this awesome review!
I know... I've re read it over and over and it seems so... bare? I do need more description and more... I don't even know. Thankyou so much for your criticism, I'll have to edit it :)
I loved writing Snape, he's such an interesting character. I don't think he was ever purely evil... just... misunderstood?
Anyway, thanks again for reviewing :) It made my day! Report Review
So I will confess to you, that I am absolutely rubbish with these things. I hardly ever leave reviews and I hardly ever even READ stories here... xD But honey, this story!!! My GOD, I started on it today and now I've finished all of it and I WANT MORE!!!
You've captured me completely!!! I lovelovelovelove Sirius in this fic; he's mesmerizing. All the brooding, everything fits, I mean, this is exactly how I wanted him to be. Which is why it's breaking my heart to read about how those two * teenagers can't pull it together and just hook up!!!
Ps. I like Ray :) He's adorable (NOT as Boyfriend-material for Debb, though! I repeat, NOT FOR DEBB)
Keep the good work up, I'm loving the angst, the romance and the humor in this fic! 10/10 Report Review
This was lovely :)
I really adore your writingstyle, it's gorgeous!! Well done!! Report Review
so, i popped into the chapter-updates-forum for the first time in my life and for some reason I pressed the link leading to your story. I started reading from chapter nr 5, but funnily enough the story CAPTURED me. Don't ask me what it was, because I honestly don't know. But your story is refreshing.
It's not a typical Sirius/OC-story and God, I really needed a new take on that old romance haha
so thank you! I really like this story and for reasons I shall not begin to grasp, I'm obsessed with this story and I've favourited it!!! I can't wait to read the next chapter!!! :D Update soon, please!
Good job!! Report Review
wauww!! i absolutely love this story!!! can't wait to read more!! Report Review
Hey! Im in love with ur story! I was so sad to see that there were no more chaps:( what happened? u havent updated in 10 months... Lack of inspiration? Writer's block? Hope u soon get inspired anyways!! I cant wait to read more!!:]Author's Response: Sorry. I actually sort of delayed updating and then life got in the way. I'm glad that you like it though. =) I'll try to update again. Thanks for reviewing. Report Review
ABANDONED? oh, no! :( thats sad. I wish you would find the inspiration again, its so sad to see such a talent go to waste;(Author's Response: I'm so sorry :(
I still write, just not harry potter so much. Report Review
well this certainly looks interesting!! I can't wait to read more, the whole plot lured me in. The story was very very well-written, I loved the part where we were in the mind of the killer and also the writing style you used with him/her.
Might I suggest that you put dates on the days, I'm assuming the Thursday is before the tragic Friday where Rose dies, but it seems slightly confusing since we go back and then forward again. (the Saturday is the day after her murder) So a set of dates may be of help.
Can't wait to read more!!
10/10 wonderful, my dear :] Report Review
Hey, your requested review:]
You have some grammar mistakes here and there in the story, one is this: in the short summary of the chapter-thingy: loose is lose.
- He was the boy who was your first kiss, most likely in a game of truth-or-dare. He would be the type of kid who would take you to the school balls or dances if you didnít have a date. He would dance to your favorite songs. He was the best friend you had ever dreamed of. He was omnipresence in your life, wasnít he, and I bet that you couldnít ever think of life without him. -WOW!! amazing... absolutely breathtaking. I adored that part. so heartfelt, and so so sad. Beautiful.
The way you write captures the reader and makes us want to read on, very well done!
It was a very well written chapter, I loved it all and youve got me hooked. Cant wait to read the next!Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing. I'm so glad you liked it :) Report Review
wow... that was... sad and... kinda creepy?
While I lie here, in the darkness of the night, just on the edge of going into 'The Forgotten' and I can see movement in the shadows, I should tell you who I am.
- this part doesn't work for me quite; the last part seems very sudden and doesn't really fit with the rest.
either it should be;
While I lie here, in the darkness of the night, just on the edge of going into 'The Forgotten' where I can see movement in the shadows, I should tell you who I am.
While I lie here, in the darkness of the night, just on the edge of going into 'The Forgotten', I should tell you who I am.
other than that this was a really nice piece - not that fluffy I'd say but it gave a whole new perspective on things.
Congrats on the ending: it was totally unexpected that Lily would be dead.
I thought it was very sad: to be lost and not be found before your owner is gone. I wouldn't think I would be with her forever because she wouldn't be there, she would be like him, unmovable. Dead. But, yeah, guess it's a bear's pov :P
It was a very very nice and different story:]Author's Response: thank you.
I'll change the part that you pointed out =]
I wrote this because I like doing different POV's that haven't been done before.
And about the ending, the bear will live on forever and ever, and it doesn't really think about the fact that it's owner is dead, just that its back with her.
thanks! Report Review
hey, Sunflower from the forums to fulfill your request!
This was beautiful, I couldn't sense at all that you dislike this ship. The characterisation of Harry was magnificent; the whole scene in the wedding chamber was amazing and so sad, it was perfect, especially the last line where he tells Hermione, 'Be happy'.
The ending was extremely good as well, Harry would never have reached out and taken Hermione from Ron; he would rather sulk by himself (forgive me for saying this) and live on in misery, knowing that Hermione and ron are happy. Always self-sacrificing.
This part I loved:
Harry wanted to wipe her tears but knew he couldn't. Not only was he forbidden to look at her, her tears belonged to someone else now.
the part that didn't work for me was the fact that Harry, Hermione and Ron hadn't kept contact. It just doesn't seem realistic. Hermione, for one, would never allow it, Ron's mum would never let him, and Harry and Ron are best mates. I doubt it would happen, even though Harry wouldn't want to hang around to see the two together, no, I don't think they'd let him.
It was very sad, thinking he was all alone, Ginny engaged, he never saw his friends, then he practically had nobody?
I loved the story, but thinking about it; I don't think it would ever happen that he would lose contact. Sure people grow apart, but not the TRIO..
The lyrics fit perfectly to the story, absolutely perfectly.
What I would have liked was maybe a little more indicating on Hermione's feelings. It was a bit unclear I felt, whether or not she was in love with him or not. Im guessing she was and she just moved on, with Ron.
Overall it was an amazing piece of work, no typo's and spelling seemed fine.
So very heartfelt and sad, it was extremely well-written.
Very well done!!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I can't thank you enough, really. That section you picked out was one that I worked really hard on and I was hoping someone would notice it. Thanks!
Well, I understand your concern about the trio not really keeping in touch, but in all fairness I did label the story AU. And for the sake of my plot, they had to keep out of contact so that it was awkward to see each other at the reunion. I'm sorry you didn't care for this aspect.
About adding Hermione's feelings, I didn't want to add her side of the story because I wanted this to really be all about Harry. I chose not to add Hermione's thoughts because I showed all I wanted to show in the scene where they stood back to back. I wanted the reader to inference based on what I'd already written about Harry. Thank you for guessing. That's what I wanted you to do, but I'm sorry if you didn't like it.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your review ^_^ Report Review
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