Hahahaha this was brilliant! I loved the fact that you kept daphne and pansy his friends, but I loved that you made Astoria better and above them. It was like she may have faced the same things, but she was above the level of drinking. You created a whole world for a character we really know nothing about, but you made her fit into the one we know as well. You made her manipulative and seductive so that she was not going to be over run by Draco, but that she also did not rule over him or run the family as apparent so that it would destroy him. I think this story had a lot of back work done on it, and I think that's the greatest accomplishment of this story. The story overall was amazing though. Great Job on going out of your norm :)
Am.GinnyAuthor's Response: This is such a lovely review; I can't help but smile every time I read it. I'm very happy to hear that the characterisation of Astoria worked out here; I, too, believe that Draco would've needed someone who'd be there for him but not cave into his every whim and follow his every order. Additionally, I'm glad to hear that she seemed to fit into 'their' world while being slightly different.
Again, thank you so much for your kind compliments. :)
-Manno Report Review
Okay, I honestly challenge you to go back with this story and rewrite it. it's not bad at all. Don't get me wrong, I love this story, but i think it is more of a novel rather than a one-shot or a short story. I think you need to really expand this story. It has a lot of promise if you sit down and figure out where it is going. It doesn't have to be extremely long may be 8 or so chapters that Rose is discovering the truth about her mother and her love life. Maybe in the end have a great daughter-mother where hermione explains everything that happened and how love sometimes causes hurt. I just really challenge you to expand this story. It could be your best story yet. Overall brava
am.ginnyAuthor's Response: Hey again! :)
Hmm, I'll definitely think about making it longer, extending it. I'd have to work out where to take it and what I wanted to do with it.
Im glad you liked it though! :) Report Review
hahaha very cute and interesting! I like where this is going, and I will definitely be reading the next chapter with a review. It's an interesting take on the life of hermione and ron, and I definitely thought you did well creating a relationship between hermione and draco for as few words you had for it. I feel like the characterization seemed to go in and out, but that could have been due to such the short amount of time for a connection between reader and characters. I would suggest expanding this so it gives the reader more background maybe a flashback or a lead up to going to the attic rather than starting there. It feels almost like you started in the middle of the story rather than the beginning. Other than that, I have no suggestions. Here's to a big a big well done! :)
Am.GinnyAuthor's Response: Hey, thanks for reviewing!
I'll go back and see what I can edit, maybe try and explain why she is in the attic.
I'm glad you liked it though! :)
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This was an absolutely brilliant story. i think there were a few mistakes, but i have ceased to remember where... Sorry I really wanted to read the story. *shifts eyes innocently* Okay It's been driving me insane. I got that it is next gen, and I'm guessing the narrator is a OC. DOES SHE HAVE A NAME?! I must know the name. Yeah it's been my thought the whole time. I totally just wanted to skip to the end to find out the name, but i refrained. I was disappointed when I saw none though. It made me sad. :( Overall well done. :) It's like a nice memory book without the pictures. Kudos
Am.GinnyAuthor's Response: Hey!
Thank you so much for this! That really made me smile, so thank you. It is a really long story :P I don't think I really bothered to proofread/edit it that much after I was done writing it!
Haha, I can understand that - I wanted the OC to be ambiguous. I think having a name in there would really change the flow and the kind of story I was telling. Also, I had no idea what name to choose (and a name really defines someone I think), so that's another reason why I left it blank. I suppose it would have been a nice surprise to see a name at the end - but would it really add a lot to it seeing as she's just an OC? I'll think about it! But thank you so much for the kind words! I really appreciate the review!! :)
- Charlotte Report Review
Wow... That was intense... It felt like a interior monologue that was actually a letter to the person having the monologue. Such a weird concept. Really great though. It was very unique, and at first it was hard to get through because it was like ok i know this okay i know. Then though it was like boom total AU while being the real universe. Totally great. Well done
Am.GinnyAuthor's Response: Thanks a bunch for the review, I'm glad that you liked my story :)
-Liz Report Review
wow this story... this story had kind of a grace to it. It was kind of like Ginny was narrating to an interpretive dance. It was definitely beautiful. The song fit perfectly and formatted to the story. The words painted a beautiful movie in your head, and there was never an instance in which you just wanted to close the page and move on to a new story. Brava! Well done
Am.GinnyAuthor's Response: Wow, I didn't expect someone to dig back all the way to this story! It's lovely to hear that you enjoyed it, and even thought it beautiful - I'm glad that you liked it that much! :) Report Review
SEQUEL!! SEQUEL!! SEQUEL!! This story DESERVES a sequel!! It was well thought out, and it seemed to stay true to the characters. I haven't ever seen a story like this one, but I loved ever minute of it. It showed how when it really matters petite little differences mean nothing. It had some great moments where you just laughed so hard, but by far the best part was CAMMANDO!! ;) Great job definitely hope to find a sequel to this someday. Lovely job Report Review
Here's a parcel I was told to pass to you ;)
AH!!! this was so brilliant!!! You should totally and completely turn this in to a short story or a novel or something! It was such a unique story line. I feel like we forget that squibs do exist in their world, and so we leave them out of our stories. I loved that fact that you took the forgotten and made a story out of it, but the fact that you to the forgotten and threw it on one of the beloved children that most definitely should've had magical powers. This story was so wonderful that i didn't even care about the grammar or anything that says a lot about a story ;) My one piece of advice would be to expand the story, but that is definitely up to you. You have quite a lovely story here ;)
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Hey hey hey. I thought it would be cool for me to review you back for Passing the Parcel.
Anyways, wow wow wow!!! O my freakin' goodness! So so brilliant! Loved every minute of it even if I knew who all the unnamed people were and guessed the downfall part right! Ah it's so brilliant though. Quite a unique twist and so well written.
i just had to point out on thing. I think this sentence is missing a word: "After two years of fighting the enemy as the leader I was finally able to one of the ‘greatest’ wizard I was trained to hate..." It could just be me, but i'm definitely feeling like a word is missing.
Other that Just Brilliant! Well done!
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hahaha this is brilliant! Though not a lot of action and a mellow fic, I love the fact that you focused on the fic as the hat. How much better is it that way?! :) Great job and quite the unique story. ;)
Am.GinnyAuthor's Response: Hey, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
So much better, I tried writing from the founders p.o.v but it was so hard, this was surprisingly easy! :)
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Wow this was a great idea for a story! However, there was a lot of telling instead of making me feel the emotions. I realize this is probably the first fic you ever wrote, but I really encourage you to go back and write it with more emotion. Not only that though I would love to see more details in this story and just have it expanded all around!!! It would be so great! Even as is though, I loved it. great job.
Am.GinnyAuthor's Response: Hey, I'm glad you think it's a good idea for a story, was thinking about making it into a short story or novel!
I'll take that into consideration when I go back and edit it, thanks for the advice! :)
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hahahaha I love it. Absolutely LOVE LOVE LOVE IT! The chapters just keep getting better and better. I had a hard time with harry being such a jerk, but i'm okay with it as long as they stay friends! :) Hope to see you update soon! :) Can't wait for it either.
btw nice touch of the staircase.Author's Response: Yes, he has just lost himself for a moment. I think it will all be explained in thenext chapter. He's just making friends and is worried about what the sorting hat said. Thank you for reading this and the reviews mean a lot :) Report Review
o likey likey likey. Losing the friendship, gaining the friendship. Discovering the the truth through the friend. oh it is all just so brilliant! Well done well done indeed! I just can't stop reading this! :DAuthor's Response: Oh yeah, I just did that. Thought it would be a cute change. Glad you liked it Report Review
o brilliant turn of events. Loved this chapter so much. i can't believe your making her go to a boarding school :o how awful can you be ;) haha anyways, on one thing stood out to me and that was life in the third paragraph from the bottom. It should be live not life. Otherwise brilliant. on to chapter 4 Tally Ho!!Author's Response: Ah thank you. I will go over it. Damn you typos!! :D Report Review
hahahaha such a better chapter than the last... of course his hand had to get sweaty. He's probably never talked to a girl let alone held her hand. That was brilliant! Well done! excited for chapter 3 :)Author's Response: I tried to make it known that he was extremely nervous. Thank you for reading :) Report Review
hm interesting I definitely liked it. It was a new twist to an old story kind of. I always do enjoy a Harry and Hermione meeting before Hogwarts story. Pretty well written. I could argue over grammar mistakes, but they all seemed to be a two way thing. I am really looking forward to the next chapter, and yay for Harry gaining a friend and joy! :) Good jobAuthor's Response: Yeah grammar is so hard to spot when I haven't printed out the work. Thanks for providing me with my 800th review!! :D Report Review
Hmmm well I loved the plotline, but the story structure was very choppy. I also thought if you had started earlier or explained more of what happened between them, it would have help connect the read to the character. I like what you have here. it is really good, but you are telling me a lot of things not showing me. Take the extra time to describe her tears or the feel of her heart being stabbed when she hears the voice. I think if you take a little more time to expand this story it could be awesome rather than good. Just some friendly criticism. Overall, well done.
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I see why this story has 21 reviews. A mixture of pure, beautiful romance and quick, trashy romance which i think was the point. It was a beautiful read and can't wait to read the rest of Liza's stories. 10/10 Report Review
Wow I can honestly say I've never read such a beautiful yet intense story before. The writing was eloquent and well done. 10/10 Report Review
hahaha lovely chapter. Highly entertaining. Can't wait to see what's next. :) Report Review
Aw i can't wait to see where this is going!!! Um terra is cheating on Sirius?! Is that why their child doesn't fit in? Or is it the awesome story twist of the girls being switched at birth? Oh I really must know. gr...great story! 10/10Author's Response: No Terra isnt cheating on Sirius, god no. It's just that she has blonde hair and her son has blonde hair and Sirius has grey eyes and their son has blonde hair and grey eyes. While his sister because she has her fathers hair and her mothers eyes :) Thanks heaps :) Switched at birth, who? Sorry tad confused lol :) Report Review
HAHAHAHA oh sirius and James will never grow up. I really liked how you brought Petunia into this chapter. I really want to see if that goes anywhere. I kind of hope it does. LOVED IT! 10/10Author's Response: Hahaha no they never will, not completely anyway. Thank you heaps :) Report Review
hahaha humorous chapter. Although I am honestly so tired it's kind of just like in and out. Don't worry though I know what happened and I won't forget! :) yeah we graduate at 18. Although my class has a few summer birthdays so they're 17. Yeah I really wouldn't change my class for anyone. great story... 10/10Author's Response: Thank you :) hope you enjoy the next few chapters
AW! AW! AW! I CAN'T EVER SEE THIS STORY GETTING ANY BETTER!!! (but I know it has to!). hahaha well actually i love school normally and am excited for it, but I'm a senior this year. We went over our snow days though so i graduate on friday, but still have school on monday and tuesday. So i have no work. It's pretty awesome actually! :) So yeah I'm as pumped for school maybe a little less than i am for this. Because I'M SO PUMPED for this story!!! WOOHOO! :) 10/10Author's Response: Wow thank you and i hope you think it gets better :) Im really glad your enjoying it, it absolutely brightens my day to hear what you think :) I'm a year 12 this year, so final year of high school, Australia's a bit different school wise i think as we're 17 when we leave and you guys are 18 aren't you? :)
Thanks for reading and reviewing and i hope you enjoy the rest :) xx Report Review
Gr I want to read more, but it's midnight and i must get some sleep before school tomorrow... Great chapter. You have me pretty muched wrapped around your finger for this story. I want to know how it ends already! Ah! I might die in the next day just a forewarning. 10/10Author's Response: You get some sleep so you can be as pumped as you can be for school, which if your normal wont be too much lol :) I'm so glad your enjoying it and i cannot wait till you get further :) Thanks for reading and reviewing. Report Review
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