Wow! I loved this story. It was so interesting, and I haven't read any Ron/Hermione in a while and I love them. Your characterization was right, and I think Harry/Ginny was a bit more lovey-dovey than they usually are. I like the idea of a game show. I can't wait for more to come I loved this story!! :)

10/10 overall

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you loved this. Harry and Ginny are a newly engaged couple- I think they have a bit of a right to be lovey-dovey for a bit :) I'm so glad you think my charaterization is right (I try, I really do) and I'm glad I got you reading more R/H, the best couple ever (tied with Harry and Ginny, of course! I hate cannon, can't you tell? ;) ~writergirl8

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That was a great chapter!

I loved the rich detail that you provided to make the scene alive. Also, this is a different character for Astoria that I've seen so far. I like her. And as for Nott, you have a humourus way of adding him into the story. The way that you have Astoria trying to turn him off is hilarious. I enjoyed this chapter!

10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: I'm happy you liked Astoria's character ^-^ Thanks for reviewing!

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Hello! I'm here with you're review. (:

This was very interesting. I liked the detail and imagery that you used here. It really helped a lot and I could imagine every detail that you described with the room. I also like the situation you had at hand. I rarely read stories about Teddy Lupin and the ones I do usually don't have this much detail about his emotions or background in them. I really like what you've done here and it's a brilliant idea and well written!

In your request you mentioned that this was your first next-gen. I think that you have done a lovely job with it. Since we don't really know that much about Teddy we can explore his character more deeply than any of the Marauders or Hogwarts Era characters. I like what you did with it, and for your first next-gen, it was lovely.

10/10 overall :D
great job!
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

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Oh, just bloody brilliant! I loved the whole thing, it was beautiful. I listened to the song while reading it and it definetily had an impact. Your sense of character and dialouge was great! Fantastic job on your first R/Hr :)

10/10

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Hi there! Sorry it took so long to get to the review!

I liked this chapter. It didn't have a lot of action, which is always good to wind down a bit in the middle of a story. You have amazing dialogue here, which gave a lot of background information. I like Teddy's character, I've never really seen it in any other story, and this is truly an original. I can't wait for the next chapter!

10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo form the forums

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. Happy to see you enjoyed the chapter. It was much watered down, action wise that is. There are a handful of questions needing to be answered, so I thought I'd address some. I'll let you know when the next chapter is posted!

xx.
Collette

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Wow! This is a really great story =)

I love what you did with it. Your characterization, flow and everything else is exquisite. Unfortunatley I can't continue reading because it's longer than four chapters, but I might be able to read them some other time and you might get a review on the last chapter. I love the description that you put into it. Sometimes I think that a Triwizard story would be cliche, but this definitely isn't.

Great story!
10/10 overall :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Hey! I'm so glad you liked the story!

I try to work hard at all the aspects of a story - I don't like to have anything let it down and people to think, "that would have been great were it not for the..." I like to know I've done my best. I totally understand you not reading beyond four chapters (especially when I'm updating like a mad person!) but if you do ever get some time please, please do come back and read.

Just a review on the latest chapter would be great I don't mind at all, but it would be lovely to hear what you think as the story has gone on. I am ultra-relieved you don't think this is cliche, that's something I try especially hard to avoid, I want what I write to be a bit of a change from the norm - something new.

Thank you so much for the lovely reviewes! I hope to see you back one day in the future! :)

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Another great chapter!! I like this one =)

I like the fact that you haven't made Rose a Mary-Sue character. She is just your average girl trying to make it through the Triwizard Tournament, and that's a good thing! But maybe you could branch out on her friends personalities? It seems that you have done that already, but just emphasize on them a bit. Of course this is only the third chapter and I see you have seven, but maybe take my advice? I honestly have been a victim of Mary Sue type friends, and really had no idea what to do with them.

As for flow, I love it! Again, it's not too fast or too slow. I like all the descriptions that you had for the rooms. Detail is important, and you certainly had it.

This is a great story and I like it a lot!!
10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Hey! :)

Rose is a great character to work with because although she's canon I can still characterise her as I like really - I pretty much have free control. I always try to steer clear of mary-sues, I think it spoils a story so I'm glad you like her character.

Her friends are definitely worked on later in the story - because I've been working a bit madly there is in fact now 13 chapter! and so I've had plenty of time. As I was writing more chapters I was realising we weren't seeing so much of her friends so I brought them all in and made sure they had very individual personalities and feedback thus far on the later chapters seems to be pretty good so I can't wait to see what you think :)

As you said, Mary-Sue type friends are hard to work with they just become followers/taggers-along so I made sure that didn't happen to mind, hopefully I suceeded!

I'm really pleased you thought the flow was good and the descriptions. I really like to get the details in my story without overloading the reader and them thinking it was too much.

Thank you so much! You are very kind and thank you so much for reading and reviewing the story I appreciate it so much! :)

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Another great chapter!

The length was satisfying. I liked how you made it so the story didn't go too fast, or too slow. That's always a good quality in a story. I did find a problem with the speed up change in Rose and Scorpius's relationship. I think that Rose would have had to think about having a truce for a couple days before she would agree to it.

I really liked the idea of them going to Durmstrang instead. I think that it will bring Scorpius and Rose closer together.

Overall I am enjoying this story and I like what you've done with it. 10/10 on this chapter!!

--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Hello again :)

I\\\'m glad you liked the length, as you will see they are a bit up and down, I never really go over 4000 (except by less than 100 ) and always have over 2500 which I quite like as a length. When I\\\'m reading I love having really long chapters it just isn\\\'t as easy to do when you\\\'re the writer!

Rose and Scorpius\\\' relationship is also a bit up and down! I know it may have seemed fast and I was so worried it would, but I put it down to firstly the seriousness of the Tournament, a shock like that is bound to push anybody into forming alliances - even with unlikely people, also they didn\\\'t start out as complete enemies, they jsut didn\\\'t really get on. But I know exactly what you mean, their relationship is still built on gradually I think the truce was more of an action really - to show they\\\'re trying.

I loved including Durmstrang, it\\\'s a great place to write and I think it provides a much different atmosphere to Hogwarts. It also means I\\\'m not inclined to copy happenings in the GOF which might have happened had I kept it as Hogwarts.

I\\\'m so pleased you like the story and I massively appreciate your helpful comments. Thank you!

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Hi there! Sorry this took so long, here's your awaited review =)

I like what you've done here. It's a good start. I haven't really read any Triwizard stories, so it should be interesting. I think you've got the grammar part down, I don't see many mistakes on that note.

I found that you didn't have a lot of paragraphs. Maybe you should go back and combine some of the short sentences and make then into mini paragraphs? It would make it a lot easier for the reader.

The first sentence was an eye catcher. I liked that it pulled you in, and that's good for a first start. But I found that it was kind of predictable. Just a little bit, what with this being a Rose/Scorpius. It's not bad, but maybe you could switch things around and try not to make it predictable? Sorry if I'm sounding rash.

Other than the things I mentioned, this was a very good story! I enjoyed it and it was easy paced. Onto the next chapter!

--ron.weasleyxo from the forums
9/10

Author's Response: Hey! No problem at all, we all have lives to be getting on with and I know from personal experience having a review thread can get pretty busy!

I\\\'m glad you thought it was a good start. There aren\\\'t masses on Triwiz fics about and the majority are AUs/different POVS from Hogwarts genre or focussed on Albus in Next gen so I was glad to write something pretty new and unusual in teh archive.

The prargraph problem is that chapter one has already been resubmitted because literally every reviewer said it was too chunked together and I needed to split everything up which I did, I hate having it so much apart but people seemed to think it was easy reading. Hopefully I\\\'ll get to go back and bunch some together to make it better so thankyou for pointing that out!

Trust me as you continue you\\\'ll see this isn\\\'t predictable :) My entire intention with this fic is to make it entirely new and refreshing, both in terms of triwiz fics and Rose/Sco ships, so I really hope I succeed in your eyes.

I\\\'m really glad you enjoyed it, thankyou very much for such a lovely and helpful review!

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Hey girl! Here's your long awaited review--sorry it took so long!! Great story here :)

I love the context. Your explanations and detail are exquisite. I didn't see any grammar mistakes, well...just this one "you just fell it, mate" should actually be "you just feel it, mate." I don't know if you saw that, but that was all that I saw! I was kind of confused when Aiden and Fred were talking, but maybe that's just me lol. Anyway I really like your flow too. It makes sense and it doesn't go too fast. Great job with the story so far! I'm enjoying it :)

10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: thanks ronnie! *hugs*

those little grammar mistakes like that are tre embarrassing!

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Oh my goodness! I honestly think this is one of the best Rose/Scorpius stories that I have ever read, seriously. I honestly have no complaints. However there was a bit of grammar issues, just a problem with 'their' or something like that towards the beginning. I loved the immediate passion you described between the two. It really was a great love story. The dog tags reminded me of that part during Pearl Harbor, you seem to be British so you might have not seen it, but it was a really good love scene. Your details and descriptions were absolutely amazing. The characterizations did seem a little bit too flawless, but I guess I could see where you were coming from.

Great story!! I loved it :D
10/10 overall.
--xXmalfoysgirl4everXx

Author's Response: *reads review & laughs*

I totally got that scene off Pearl Harbour haha. When I wrote this one-shot I have just finished watching that film at school for History xD Best film ever don\\\'t you think?

I\\\'m really happy you like it, it\\\'s my first Rose/Scorpius and I was really worried of how it would turn out. But it seems like people like it :)

Thanks for the review!
x

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I liked this! It was funny, and I like the situation you played with. It ended nicely! The flow was alright, a little too fast, but good anyways. I usually don't read Arthur/Molly stories, but this was a good one. Great job!

10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Thank you so much for getting to the review :) and thanks for all the advice.
~nicky

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Another great chapter! I really like the angst you give him. It really helps the story flow a lot better. I also like the fact that you have the newspaper clippings added in. It adds a little something to the story, and it makes it more interesting. Overall, I like this! Good job, and keep writing!

10/10 overall
:D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Thank you for your comments on both the angst-y-ness (haha, I just made up a new word) and the newspaper clippings -- those were probably my main areas of concern in this chapter. I'm glad you liked it!

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review what I have so far!

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A great start! I like this story so far. I usually don't read about Quidditch, so it should be interesting for me.

As for grammar, I have no problem with it. You did an excellent job with it! I like the flow too. It is a fast read, but you seem to fit everything in at just the right places.

Great job so far!
10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: You're right, it is kind of fast...I'm working on drawing out my writing a bit more and making things longer, but I'm glad you still liked it! Thank you for the review!

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Oh my gosh! Not another cliffhanger! Well, besides that...wonderful chapter! Everything about it was amazing. It did get a little boring before James talked to Harry in the fire, but I guess it keeps people reading. You've got a great story going here! I'm sorry to say that this is the last chapter I'll be reviewing. It was an excellent read though, thanks for requesting!

10/10 overall
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Hello again! I'm happy you've liked the story. I'll be sure to request again once the next few chapters are up! Thanks for the reviews!

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What can I say, this is pretty awesome! I love the action.

Again, I have nothing bad to say about this story! Everything seems to be in tact. Your flow, characterization and all that goes with it is simply superb. I love how you took the situation, and how the guys are handling it. I also liked how you had Scorpius come into view. Great job so far! Onto the next chapter.

10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Hey! Glad you like it and I hope you continue to enjoy it! Thanks for reviewing!

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Another great chapter! Good job.

Again, I really like the characterization you give James. Carefree, yet not too laid back. I also like the OC character, Aiden. He seems like a good friend for James. Flow is good again too. I really have nothing bad to say about this story! You're doing well with it, and I can't wait to see what happens next.

10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Hello! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. Thanks for your review!

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Wow! This is a really good start. I like the plot, and I can't wait to see what you're going to do with it.

The characterization you have of James is great. Since he isn't really described all that much in the Epilogue, we can basically give him any traits that we as writers want. I like what you've done with him.

Flow is going great. I think that this might be your strongest point so far, and I like it. It's not too fast, or not too slow and boring. Great job!

9/10 so far
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Hey, sorry my response is a bit late! I'm glad you like it so far, and I hope you like where I end up going with it! Thanks for reviewing!

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Ah, cliffhangers! Such devils. Well, I guess I'll have to wait until the next chapter!

Great second chapter, though. I liked the flow. It was kind of predictable that Ron was going to find Hermione in the park, I could kind of see it happening, but it was great nonetheless! The characterization and cannon-ness of the story was excellent. Great job!

10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: I'm glad everything is working out smoothly and you are liking it. Yes cliffhangers. Every story has to have them, right? :p if you are still interested in findig out what's going to happen next, I'll drop by your thread next time my chapter is up!

Thanks dear!

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Hey hun!

I really like the start. You seem to have a great potential going here, and I like the story!

I'd like to say that the flow was pretty interesting. You started out with Ron, and then kind of switched point of views between Harry and Ginny. It wasn't too fast, or too slow. A little bit of advice though, there might have been a bit too much description at the beginning. Maybe keeping it to a minimal would help?

Great start!
9/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Thanks for the review hun! I'm glad you are liking it.

As for flow, i'm glad it's going smoothly. That was one thing I was worried about. Description is one thing I have a problem with too. I either have too much or too little. I'll try and work on that more.

Thanks for the review dear!



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Wow. Just wow. I found myself literally two inches away from the computer screen, reading like mad, desperately wanting to know what would happen next.

You have an amazing story going here. I love the Victoire characterization, it's different. And as for the flow, I think you did excellent. You didn't rush, and nothing went too slow so I wasn't bored at all with it. I also liked the length. It wasn't too long or too short. Just right. You're doing well with this, keep it up! Update soon...please!!

10/10 =D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. It brought such a smile to my face. I am glad you enjoyed this because I was so nervous about it.

I will do my best to update soon, and I will make sure to let you know when I do!
xx.
Collette

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Didn't see that one coming! I actually think it fits the story challenge. All of us always see Victorie as this charming, Mary-Sue type character and this story is the total opposite. I had just one question though...what did Rose do? Steal Victorie's boyfriend?

On your request you asked if it was a creepy-ish type story. I thought it was alright, but not one of those chills up your arms, gut retching, nasty kind. It was a little more towards thriller, but I liked it none the less. There was an air of mystery to it, since we really don't know who is who yet. I kind of got it as I was going on, and in the end I did figure it out. Maybe you should recognize the characters at the beginning in context or something like that.

10/10! Great job! :)
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Hey thanks for the wonderful review! Yeah, reading over it, it is much more on the thriller side, but I'm alright with that, I'm not really into the gory stories. :) Thanks so much for the review and all your time and effort!

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This was wonderful! I really liked it. Even though they broke up, it was a great romance story. The flow was extraordinary, and I think it had a high potential. Your characterization of Scorpius was great, and I liked how you got into his head. On a side note, the song I was listening to (What Are You Waiting For, My Favorite Highway) fit perfectly with the story. It helped with the emotions a lot! Great fic!

10/10 :)
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! I hardly ever write from a guys POV so I'm glad you think it worked out; haha, it's encouraging ;) I've just downloaded that song - you're so right! It really does suit it ^_^ I might consider changing the lyrics...but I do love James Morrison, lol. We'll see ;) Again, thank you so much for the review! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

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Wow! That was great. I loved it =]

The emotion you put into it was unimaginable. You really lay down the law and make the readers feel what she's feeling. I always knew the only reason why Narcissa decided to keep on going was Draco. The flow and characterization is excellent too. I've never really seen a lot of Narcissa fics before, so this is one of my firsts.

Great job, 10/10!
--ron.weasleyx from the forums

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your positive response. I've always loved Narcissa but I hadn't read many with her either.
Thanks again for the review.
xx

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Aw, that was so sweet! I loved it! It was so great, I can't get over it!

The flow was just right, you split the past and present perfectly and there wasn't any confusion. The characterization of Tonks was done well also, and I liked the missing moment situation. This is one of my first Remus/Tonks; I normally don't read them, but, it's canon so I like them. Great job! I was almost to tears when I got towards the end!

10/10 :D
--ron.weasleyxo from the forums

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it ... and sorry for almost making you cry...

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