A mysterious and fascinating first chapter. Well-written.Author's Response: Thank you so much. Glad you liked it. Report Review
I hope you'll put the following chapters soon!! I don't know how I will manage to endure the wait. XD
(I love very very much the title too ; it's so poetic... for some reason, I feel like "Judas kiss" is like a serpent kiss. That fits well with Draco.)Author's Response: lol, I'll try my best to get it out as soon as possible, so just keep checking in :D
as for the Title, I like it too. It's actually a song title, which is kinda corny... because usually I don't like to do song titles, but it fit really well. Just because of Judas, and well, a kiss, it just fit, as you said :D I'm glad you like it, it took me a while to actually come up with a title, so yeah lol Report Review
"The Boy who Lived no more" I love this sentence!
"You die doing my command. If you would have been killed doing it, you do it anyway, because, and you should know, it's better then being killed by me." That's also brilliant! It's so true. It fits him so well to say it. It's so horrible.Author's Response: aw, thanks so much, it's nice to hear from new readers of Judas Kiss. and I'm so glad you like it!! Report Review
I love your story more than ever! The last few lines are BRILLIANT!!! It sounds so right, so real. I think my heart stopped beating for a few seconds.
You said that sometimes, the way you wrote between Draco and Harry doesn't seem to flow right. But I think that's a bit normal. Your Draco is much more mature than the one in Rowling's books. As you keep telling, he's changed too, so to me it is normal that their discussions sound (maybe) a bit "unusual" or "unexpected"... But it's charming and it makes your story very interesting because the characters have more depth.Author's Response: awww thanks!! I guess in a why your right. I try my best to write Draco as the character I see him, changing and everything, but still make him slightly canon as well, because he's in the transition, and i always find it a little awkward, but in the same way, I guess it would be a little awkward for him, because he is changing.
and I'm so glad that you liked this chapter!! it is difinately my favorite so far, just because i worked a lot on it and it turned out pretty much exactly as I wanted it. I wanted to go for a chapter that made you read and different paces (you know, quick during action, slow during intense, quiet moments lol) and I think I did my best at pulling it off, so it's good that you liked it!!!
thanks so much dear!!! Report Review
O_o To me it's the most amazing chapter since the beginning. So dark! I like how you goes from Draco's mind to Harry's to see what they think. It's so odd to "see" them face to face having breakfast... :-) It would be funny if the story wasn't that sad. I like very much how you see Draco too. I think that the way you see his relationship with his parents is quite correct. Thanks for the story. It's a pleasure to read it.Author's Response: thanks! I sometimes think the way I wrote between Draco and Harry didn't flow right, so it's good to hear that you liked it! Report Review
I love this "fight" between Draco and Harry! It's so well-written.Author's Response: thanks! i spent a lot of time on it, so I'm glad you liked! Report Review
Unexpected events!! I like very much this chapter. I like how you write it.Author's Response: aw, thanks so much!!!! Report Review
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