Wouah! That's so well-written. Amazing! An awsome piece of work. 10/10 of course!Author's Response: I do try to write well ;) Thank you. Report Review
Stories written for personal satisfaction are always for me the best ones. They are written with more passion and thus they're facinating to read because we can feel that the writer enjoyed his job.
Personally, I love really much your story. I enjoy reading it very much and the more you write about it, the more I want to read. Sincerely.Author's Response: I'm so glad you see it that way, and not that it's selfish of me. I do love sharing it with you all, and thank you for noticing that this is written by me, my way. I've had a few people demand that I change this and whine about this, so I just had to state my ground.
I'm so happy you still love it and that it keeps you entertained.
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I love your story! It seems so true. I mean, I feel that if Rowling had written the Marauders' story, it would be exactly the same than yours. Moreover I really like how you write about Sirius, Remus and James, their personalities, etc. Very good work to my mind. It's a pleasure to read it. Report Review
!!! I thought that they would eventually go on their love affair... :(
The end is so cool, how you managed to make links with JK Rowlings' end like when JD go and see his friend James... things like that.
I really enjoyed this story. So, if one day you decide to write more chapters... ('cause you said it was finished but, who knows ? ;D ) I would be glad to read them.
10/10 for this fascinating story.Author's Response: Sorry, but I couldn't do the sappy thing and have Draco and Artemis fly off into the sunset on a Nimbus 2001. I'm one of those writers who worships canon, so I love working canon events into my fics. Lol, I think I've moved on from Artemis for good, but hopefully you check out some of my other fics (her kids are actually characters in We Gryffies). Thanks for all your reviews! Report Review
I like very much how you wrote the end of this chapter. It's briefly told how everything happen so suddenly, but it shows how much she can't believe it and how much she's shoked.Author's Response: This chapter was so hard to write, since I love Dumbledore so much. But I wanted her character to be more significant in the story arc of the books. Report Review
That Hermione Granger... Always here when she should not. XDAuthor's Response: Haha, I wrote that when I hated Hermione. Before I realized that I AM Hermione, no matter how much I try to be different. Report Review
Such a funny story!!! I luv it.Author's Response: Haha, I didn't really intend for this fic to be funny, but somehow the humor slipped in... Report Review
As good as ever...Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
If I were her, I would never have agreed to play "Truth or Dare" with Draco and Blaise together!!! She's completely crazy.Author's Response: Aye, Artemis is crazy. All those unbalanced brain chemicals as a result of generations of pureblood inbreeding. Report Review
O_o This girl turns to be a real rascal!! Poor Blaise... I was so afraid that he came out at that moment and saw them. I feel so sorry for him. XDAuthor's Response: Silly Artemis. And poor Blaise...but he'll turn out just fine. Report Review
Your story is so funny and original. I like it very much! I like also your writing. I mean, no part of story is boring. It's always interesting, funny, fascinating to read. Thanks for it.Author's Response: Thanks! Most glad that my writing isn't boring...that's a four letter word to writers. Report Review
Really cool! An unusual story quite fasinating. :)Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! My main goal for this fic was for it to be different from the other Draco stories, so thanks! Report Review
aw... It was so strange. This woman is so... O_o I like very much how you wrote this story. We (readers) become soon fascinated by Blaise's mother and the unusual way he describes her. Really cool!!!Author's Response: aw, thanks so much!!! I think I meant for her to be a little, weird, but in an awesome way xD so i'm glad I sorta pulled it off lol.
thanks for the reveiw!! Report Review
A wonderful chapter again. I long for the chapter in which Hermione will go to the Malfoy Manor!!! I know it won't be the next but !!! I wish you had already written it!!
And I just wondered : will they go to Hogsmeade?Author's Response: Thanks. She might not even go to Malfoy Manor. I haven't gotten too far with that. It's in limbo. Who know's though, maybe they will go to Hogsmeade! Report Review
I can't think of anything else to say except that your story is really cool. I mean, I like the Dramione stories, but it's sometimes a bit boring because it seems to be always the same story each time. But yours is different.
First, Draco/Hermione don't suddenly jump on each other when they discover how handsome they are ;) second, the story around Hermione is cool and unusual. I mean, now I've plenty of questions in my mind such as 'will she really become a Death Eater', and etc.
And what is nice about Draco/Hermione's relationship is that the shift in their relationship is not a sudden one. They don't wake up one morning and find that Draco is nicer than before because he suddenly understood that he was in love with Hermione (or stuff like that). In your story, we see the shift... it happens little by little. It's nice. And moreover their relationship develops with Hermione's new personality.
When I think about it, I think that there is only one part in your story that I didn't like very much. It was when Draco and Hermione have a struggle together. I can't see them fight that hard and Draco beats her... But that's all.
As you said earlier I'm completely addicted with your story. I'm so glad to have found it. I enjoy it very much. So please go on ever and ever again...Author's Response: I agree that Dramione stories all follow quite a narrow path, with tons of cliches and a lot of sap. That's not what it's about for me. I want it to come across as a hate turned tollerable turned friends turn something more. It has to be in steps in a novel-lenthed story.
I'm happy that Dark Intentions is leaving questions that you are yerning to have answers to. That's great; it means I've reached my goal of creating a well-pitched mystery.
I'm sorry that you didn't really like the physical fighting. I understand though. The only point I was trying to portray by such a scene was that Drace was violent to no end, that he had no boundries as to where he needed to stop. It also showed the extreme hate between Hermione and Draco. I promise it had a point. I think that if I hadn't added it in the relationship between the two would have progressed way too fast. Draco is a Death Eater after all. Her has no mercy for filth. Isn't that basically the pureblooded motto - excluding the Weasleys' and few others.
Anyhow, I hope you continue to enjoy this story, and that it keepes you hooked to the very end. I feel blessed that I have such dedicated reviewer/readers.
I'll update tonight!
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I love your story more than ever.
Just one thing... I found "strange" that the Dark Lord allowed Draco to ask questions.Author's Response: Well Draco has been brought up around the Dark Lord. His father - in this story - is one of the highest ranked Death Eaters. More or less, Draco is favored by Voldemort. You will see why as more chapters are validated. Report Review
Oh yesss I was just dying for it!!! It's so coool! This is the best chapter of your story. It's awesome! BRILLIANT! ... XDAuthor's Response: Thanks Crystal. I can tell that you are actually fascinated with this story and that's amazing to me. Report Review
AH!! We're about to know! The last part is awesome because we know we may learn something about Hermione... Well-written!Author's Response: Thank you. It's addictive isn't it? =) Report Review
I LOVE this chapter, especially when Malfoy welcomes her at her new house.
"the greatest house you will ever see" it sounds so well.Author's Response: Thank you. That is quite a good part of the story. Report Review
A re-sorting, why not? I don't think the idea is that bad. I sometimes wonder if it couldn't happen, for Hogwarts' students are teenagers and obviously, in seventh years, they change a lot... Could one be brave and loyal all his life, worthy of being a Gryffondor, whatever happen to him? The fact of being sorted "forever" in a house has always bothered me.Author's Response: Yes, I really like that concept. I think that there should be a point where they are evaluated to see if they are still true to their house. All in alll, I'm glad you liked it. Report Review
It was funny to read Draco's reaction with Pansy.Author's Response: Yes, she's quite unbearable in this story. Report Review
So coool!! and so funny too. It's a real pleasure to read it.Author's Response: Thank you, again! Report Review
Yeah, it would be weird to hear Malfoy and Hermione spoke normaly ;D Again a fascinating chapter. (I can't stop reading ; I want to know what's going on!!)
About criticism... Well, there's just a thing that I could say. In fact, when you speak of Hermione, you say : "the dark-haired girl" or "young woman" things like that... But there are a lot of them (to my mind). And it's a little "ponderous" ?!
But really your story is great so... I'll go and read the next chapter. ;-)Author's Response: Thank you for the criticism. I was nicely put. I will go through the chapter and try to minimize such 'ponderous' prases. Report Review
I like your "tons of hidden elements", it makes the story so interesting! I'm really fascinated!Author's Response: Thank you. It's been fascinating to write as well. I get lost in it. Report Review
It's so original! It's really a nice piece of work. 10/10Author's Response: Thanks. I'm happy I'm able to break the generic mold that seems to follow all Draco/Hermione stories.
Great rating. Report Review
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