Kind of strange! But very well written and scoped. I look forward to more!Author's Response: Thankyou, strange is good =D Report Review
Quick update!! I liked the dynamics between Hermione and Draco; very skillfully done. Update soon!Author's Response: Hey-a! Yep yep...I just couldn't make them overtly sappy :D Thank you so much! Next update will be on the 2nd or 3rd :) Report Review
Haha! Hilarious! Especially the whole 'hair' dealio! Report Review
Great chapter! I live Janelle; the funniest character EVER! Freaking hilarious! Update soon!
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Great chapter! Update soon!Author's Response: Thank you sweetie ^_^ Report Review
Hilarious! I tried my hand at a comedy fic a while back... but, needless to say, it didn't make it out of my computer. So congratulations for this amazingly written chapter!
Many thanks, Becky x Report Review
Loved it! Update soon! Many thanks, Becky x Report Review
Wow. I think this story is amazing! It's beautifully written and really captures the disease very realistically. It's really exposed anorexia for what it really is; the mutilation of the body and brain alike.
I've had some unfortunate issues with food. I don't think I could class myself as having an eating disorder exackly, but this story did really get to me. I think perhaps I should seek some help. I don't know. Hermione's story is different; she's severly underweight by now and I'm, well, not. And Hermione's eating hardly anything with the occasional binge which is like an exaggerated version of my eating habits. You seem to know a lot about eating disorders. Do you have any personal experiances in the matter?
ANYWAY, I loved this story because it was so fresh. I DESPISE stories that have Hermione transform over the holidays and she comes back in september as this georgeous bikini-babe or whatever. What sort of message is that sending out?
Please update soon! I adore this story! Many thanks, Becky x
10/10Author's Response: Definetely go and get help. :) The sooner you speak out the better, you might not consider yourself underweight but if things continue to get worse it will be and you may not even realise.
From personal experience I wish I had gone and seen someone straight away instead of thinking I could keep things under control, it starts off with odd eating habits and this can escalate.
:) I hope things turn out well. (I can't stand sudden-babe-Hermione stories.) Thanks for the review! Report Review
Very good, as usual. I just love Claire and your writing style is just amazing! And extremely funny! Many thanks, Becky x
P.S. Good luck with your exams! I finished mine today (thank God!) so I know what it's like trying to squeeze fan-fiction writing into a timetable of studying *groan* ao GOOD LUCK!Author's Response: Thanks soo much!! :) x Report Review
Well done! Big cliffhanger :PAuthor's Response: Oh yes, thought I'd leave with that one!
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Loved it! Beautifully scoped and written! Absolutley wonderully amazing!
10/10Author's Response: Scoped...Hmm. I think I'll use that word sometime.
Thank you for being my first reviewer for this story! And thanks extra for the great compliments! Report Review
Amazing story! Update soon! Report Review
Great, as always! :D
10/10Author's Response: thanks so much! Report Review
That nearly brought a tear to my eye! Beautifully written! It was quite confusing with the characters and the continual change of POV so maybe you should add something in to make it clearer, and I was unsure who the characters actually were. Just to clarify, was it Hermione and Draco? With Ron as the Husband? I think so but it did take a while to figure out and some of the scenes were confusing because I couldn't quite tell which character it was at times. Maybe I should read it again because I am quite tired so it could just be my befuddled mind failing me again.
Anyway, I loved your writing style. I've never personally written in second person and haven't really read much of it, fanfiction or othewise, but yours was incredible. Your way with words is just astounding and this story was simply wonderful. I think that the characterisation was a little off, but, then again, what fanifciton keeps the characters 100% in character?
A very nice piece and I look forward to reading more or your writing! Many thanks, Becky xAuthor's Response: thank you hun. im pleased you liked it ^_^
yes it was Ron as Husband and draco and hermione. lol read it again when you have a clear head - everything is deliberate and there are little things in each scene that alert you to who is speaking.
thank you once again Becky!! *hugs* Report Review
Hahah! I am actually physically laughing (which is a rare occasion, whilt reading anyway) I adored the lines:
"4. His mind was quite unaware of this, but certain portions of his body were rather visibly not cooperating."
"(what would one call Lucy? His girlfriend? His current girl? His current toy?)"
"And here he stood, desperately fighting to keep his mind, eyes, hands, tongue, and other unmentionable body parts off of the delightfully disheveled state of her"
"And Merlin above, WHY was Katie bending over in that way? It was...nice."
And my absolute favourite :p :
Okay, I'm going to stop quoting now! PLEASE update soon! I have exams ALL next week and need something to ease the pain (accompanined by copious amounts of chocolate, of course!) Many thanks, Becky xAuthor's Response: You know, exam-time is one of those times that should be omitted from the calendar. I sympathize. I'll do my best with the next chapter, but I'm not sure I'll get it up that quickly. Report Review
Good! Very funny, especially the book! Haha!Author's Response: Thanks! (I'm already half-in-lust with my imaginary Rafael...) Report Review
Hahaha! Loved it! It was extremely fluffy but also extremely amusing! Very well written and nice characterisation! Many thanks, Becky x
P.S. I think I'd prefer Cedric or Oliver. :pAuthor's Response: One Cedric-Oliver sundae coming right up! Report Review
Short but sweet. I like how your depictions of Hermione and Draco are so realistic and unwavering because SO many stories are about Hermione getting a makeover and then they instantly fall in love... blah!
So I like how they've remained very much in character and how the dynamics in their relationship have remained firmly of hatred, for now. I'm interested to see how you'll incorporate some dramione action in this angsty story!
Please update soon! Many thanks, Becky xAuthor's Response: I try to be realistic, so thanks for the compliment! I think (maybe) that some actual Dramione will be coming up, so stay tuned. Thank you for reviewing! ^_^ Report Review
Nice! I'd like a little more Draco/Luna action, but I liked your depiction of Ron. I feel sorry for him; he's always portrayed as either an utter idiot or a poor boy being cheated on. I do adore Ron. Anywho, it was very well written and the plot was brilliant! A few small spelling/punctual errors, but overall very good!
Please update soon! Many thanks, Becky xAuthor's Response: Draco & Luna are back in the next chapter. Yay!! lol.
I feel sorry for Ron too. I didn't like doing it to him, but I thought it might be something Draco would do.
I love Ron, he is one of my faves!!
I'm glad u enjoyed it! Thanks for reading & reviewing Report Review
Very good. Again, a few small errors, but overall well-written and very intriguing! Many thanks, Becky xAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for the review,
I now that errors come up in my writing.
Sorry. But now I have a BETA, aka you.
All will be better now Report Review
Nice beginning! Very promising! I liked your depiction of Draco, it was refreshing and very interesting. Just watch out for a few spelling/grammatical/typing errors. Many thanks, Becky xAuthor's Response: Thanks Becky,
I think that Draco is an easy character to write about so I have fun with him,
and again with your help, no more errors.Thanks for the review and hope you enjoy the rest Report Review
Wow! *grins like a fool* That was amazingly outstanding! I love the Draco/Pansy ship, but most make Pansy out to be a shallow slut, which I understand J.K.R might of intended, but it's refreshing to see a softer, more passionate side to her that we never really got to see in the books. And your depiction of Draco was simply wonderful, almost as though you have seamlessly carved a window into his mind were we can observe everything and feel with him and grow as he grows as a character. Your writing style is fresh and interesting *cheeks flush green with envy* so let me know when your work gets published! You should DEFINATLEY give up the day job! Congratulations on such a masterpiece! Many thanks, Becky x Report Review
Very good. A litte short and a few small errors, but was a very enjoyable and interesting read. I love your writing style, meaningful yet simplistic, as if you've seamlessly carved a window into Pansy's mind. Just watch out for your tenses (hate/hated etc.)
Well done! Many thanks, Becky x
9/10Author's Response: Yes, I've always had a little problem with tenses and those typos always slip my eyesight. But I'm happy that you liked this piece; I loved writing it. ^_^ Report Review
Wow! I'm a little stunned. *grins like a fool* That was incredibly well written, physically and mentally (if that makes sense?) your grammar, punctuation and, especially, tenses were impeccable and the actual content was amazing. It was quite heart-wrenching to read all those passionate, vivid and conflicting emotions. The denial, the acceptance and then the yearning. I adore your writing style *raises a jealous brow*, it's so orignal and fresh. You have a nice mixture of action and the transisitions between the twenty-odd years are seamless and absolutley faultless. Well done and keep going!!
I'm trying to think of some constructive critism to make this review worthwhile, but I'm kinda struggling.
-ten minutes later-
Okay, I've found something! : make it longer? Or write more? Along those lines!
Anywho, well done and keep writing! - DEFINATLEY give up the day job! Many thanks, Becky x Report Review
Haha! My favourite insults were:
"Zabini shagger," she said in a dangerously low tone.
Stupid, gelled, fake perfection," she glared in reply.
"Potter loving whore," he muttered
Yeah, I'm gunna stop quoting now because I'd probably go on for ever. I loved the whole insulting scene, it was just hilarious! Very well written, well done! Many thanks, Becky xAuthor's Response: Apologies to all, but this site is too frustrating with the waiting and restrictions for chapter posting so the rest of the story will be solely updated on fanfiction (dot) net. The author's name to look for is still Snape's bikini. No underscores. Thanks for the love and support! Report Review
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