I am slightly confused. If this is Sirius' first year, isn't he 10? Which would make Regulas (whom you said is a year behind him, correct?) 9. A nine year old drunk? Hmm...and i know Sirius is mature for his age...but I dunno...seems strange to me...Author's Response: Thanks for so much for taking the time to read and review! Report Review
Thank you. Well written and nicely wrapped up. It's nice to think of Fred having fun up there since it was such as tunner to see him go at the end.Author's Response: Thanks for reading! We were just left hanging with Fred's untimely departure. I'm glad I could wrap it up.
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Bravo. I'll be paying attention for your updates.Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad!
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I wanted to pause halfway through reading your story to leave you a review. You are a phenominal writer. You have highly tuned skills, and write wonderfully -- your sotry is full of detail and emotion. You are able to coax the reader into your mind, placing them into your story like a visual movie playing before their eyes. You're talent is rare, and you should be proud.
That being said, I have but one qualm. I have this pet peeve, if you will, when someone uses one particular word too much in writing. In your writing it's "Merlin". It's a tad over used. ;-) But that can be excused, I'd suppose, as your talent for writing greatly over shadows it.
In any case, keep up the great work. I'm entralled. Author's Response: Awww, thanks so much!!
You're so nice and flattering =]
Sorry about the over-usage. I have noticed it myself and try not to do it so much, if that makes you feel better. You're not the only one =] Report Review
Decently written, interesting plot. Could use more cohesion to make the story flow better. Seemed to be hastily written, haltingly portrayed. Over all though, good piece of work.Author's Response: thanks, and you're right Report Review
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