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Review #1, by ilharrypotterStill Delicate: Awkward.

16th October 2011:
I don't know why but I picture Tom to be this little mousey guy, not the guy for Rose at all - Scorpius isn't either, because he's a jerk, but come on!

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Review #2, by ilharrypotterVital: Chapter 7

1st August 2011:
Hey there! back to re-review some more chapters. I could've sworn I favorited this so I could keep up with the chapters, but perhaps I didn't. Oh, I don't know anymore, I keep getting so darn distracted by everything.

This chapter was amusing - I feel like every story involves a bar and drinking at some point, and it's nice to see it appear in your story and actually fit in the plot.

Elena is so awkward compared to Corinne, as well - so amusing. I love how she's always wishing that Simon was with them. It's a sweet thing, really. She really needs Simon around sometimes, when she gets herself into things like that.

This story is so intense. I love it.


Author's Response: Hi!

Thanks for the review.

I do think that this chapter really shows the differences between Elena and Corinne. And I can see why it might be funny as well. Poor Elena has no idea what she's doing.

I'm really glad you like the story so much!

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Review #3, by ilharrypotterWithout : Argus Filch

1st August 2011:
Hello there! ilharrypotter/polkadot from the forums with your requested review.

I've always wondered about Argus Filch - it's nice to see a one-shot that's trying to expose a bit about his character. Looking forward to reading and reviewing!

You do a great job exposing Argus' pain and sadness when he realized he had no magic. I can only imagine - being part of a magical family, only to never recieve my letter to Hogwarts. It would break my heart. I feel for him in this piece - honestly, I do.

It makes so much sense, and you created Filch so well. I hurt for him - and I even feel bad for disliking him as much as I always did throughout the series.

Great job!



Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review!

I know- Argus Filch is present in the books but his character is hidden. I'm glad you think that I do a good job of characterizing him. And (I know this sounds horrible) I'm glad my Argus Filch affected you.

I'm so glad you think it's believable and thanks so much for the compliment.

Thanks once again for reviewing!

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Review #4, by ilharrypotterSomewhere in Brooklyn: Somewhere in Brooklyn

1st August 2011:
Hello there! ilharrypotter/Polkadot from the forums with your requested review.

Right away, I'm super excited to see a Theodore/Luna story. I absolutely ADORE weird pairings. I'm still trying to write a weird pairing, other than Hermione/Oliver, but reading them is just so much fun. So I'm looking forward to this.

(Your banner is beautiful, also.)

Anyway, time to get down to business.

You asked about the characters. Immediately, Theodore is a humorous character, and he seems realistic as a person. We don't hear too much about Nott, anyway. So you can kind of make him your own. It's nice, and you seem to do it well.

The story seems to flow very nicely - the beginning intro was a little bit long-winded for being so minor to the story, in my opinion, but that's all that I can think to say about the flow. Everything else moves like you want a story to move. Very well done there.

Oh, you did Luna so well! She talks and talks, without Nott even responding - it's hilarious, and so very Luna! She acts so much like herself. You wrote her wonderfully!

I find it hard to tell who's talking at times. You break into another paragraph, but the same person is talking. Luckily, Luna's dialogue is so distinctive that I don't stay confused for too often. In other cases, however, that could pose a problem.

It's a beautiful little piece - and I love that it doesn't have a perfect happy ending, and he doesn't even know who she is. It's lovely. I adored it. Great job. :)



Author's Response: OOh, so happy you think I did Luna well. She's so hard to write, though I had a bit freedom, since she's older in this story than she was at Hogwarts. If she's OOC, I could easily say, 'hey, she older!' :p

Thank you for reviewing, by the way. Almost forget that ;)

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Review #5, by ilharrypotterDancing Queen: A Night's Surprise

31st July 2011:
Very cute! I loved the song that you used, too - even though it was used for another challenge, it really fit well for Dominique and Lorcan. :) I loved it!

Thanks for entering my challenge (right before the deadline, too! Bravo on that) and I'll have the results up within the week.

Author's Response: Thank you! I love the song as well, glad that you thought it fit well with the pairing. Absolute pleasure... yeah the queue timing still throws me off slightly. Thank you for the good challenge ^^

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Review #6, by ilharrypotterJust a raindrop: Just a raindrop

31st July 2011:
Awh, this was adorable. :) There are quite a few grammar/spelling issues and typos, which could be cleared up with an edit or maybe a beta.

Thanks for entering my challenge, and I'm sorry I took so long. I'll be announcing the winners within the week.

Author's Response: I`m glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing and for making this challenge, I had a lot of fun writting it! :D


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Review #7, by ilharrypotterWe tried: Prologue

31st July 2011:
This is a really cute piece, and I enjoyed reading it. :)

Thanks for entering my challenge, and I'm sorry I took so long. I'll be announcing the winners within the week.

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Review #8, by ilharrypotterPerfect Spiral: Perfect Spiral

31st July 2011:
This was horrifyingly good - it was wonderful! I was shuddering with Molly - you can really feel how much she's suffering. Most of the entries for my challenge were sappy, fluffy love pieces, which I usually enjoy more than things like this, but this was really great. Loved it. :)

Thanks for entering my challenge, and I'm sorry I took so long. I'll be announcing the winners within the week.

Author's Response: thank you so much, this is my first next generation fic so i'm so pleasd you enjoyed it!! Your comments are so lovely and i'm glad you liked it even though you don't usually go for styles like this. It's definetly not fluffy by any means. It's just sad, hard life. I'm pleased you enjoyed it! And thank you for issuing this challenge, i probably would never have written anything like this if not for that! Thank you again!!

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Review #9, by ilharrypotterMasterpiece: the excuse

24th July 2011:
God, I'm so glad they're together now - and even more glad that they're not a typical couple right off the bat. I can't see Henri in a cliche, cuddly, PDA relationship - he's too awkward with people for that. :D

This is a wonderful chapter - it made me happy! Like most of your updates do, I will admit.

I also love that he showed her the portrait. And I also love that she requested to be painted doing/wearing/etc. certain things, and he would ignore that and paint her as he wanted to. It's a touch that shows you a lot about both Henri and Apolline.

Loved it. :)

Author's Response: Yay, I'm glad that you're glad! Haha, Henri and PDA in the same sentence?? Definitely not his style. You're right, he's much too awkward, and too much of a snob as well, to really go for that xD

Aww, thank you! That's just the kind of thing that puts a smile on your face, which is exactly what I need after a day of reading Dickens for my english coursework :(

Oh I'm glad you liked that! And Henri always knows best, obviously, so if she wasn't going to agree with him then he'll just have to do it his own way. Thanks so much for another brilliant review, and I'm really glad you enjoyed the chapter - after all your loyal reviewing, I'd hate to disappoint you!

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Review #10, by ilharrypotterPretty Boy: Iím Judging You

17th July 2011:
love. serious love. albus and louis both. they're great!

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Review #11, by ilharrypotterSave the Date: Chapter Six: Mr. and Mrs. Potter

13th July 2011:

I'm so glad to have this back...

"You are the most beautiful person, place, or thing I have ever seen in my entire life."

This was the best line I've ever seen in a wedding-centered chapter. Just sayin'.

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Review #12, by ilharrypotterRain, Rain, Go Away: Rain, Rain, Go Away

13th July 2011:
Hello there! ilharrypotter/polkadot from the forums with your requested review :)

Hugo! Hugo!!! I am so excited to read something about Hugo. /calms self.

Woah. This is written in a different perspective than I'm used to - a difficult one to write in, I know. Wonderful to see - makes it stand out, and it seems to be written very well. Bravo on that choice of perspective.

Oh, one thing I noticed - it's spelled Lily, not Lilly. Just a little pet peeve - and potentially a typo, anyway.

This is a really unique piece - the whole thing. The story, the way it's written. I really love it. It's adorable, to say the least. :) Great, great, great job, really.


Author's Response: The second person style was actually for a challenge ^_^ I'd never written in this style so I thought it'd be fun to try :) But thank you so much for this review XD It made my day! And I could have sworn I'd put Lily... oh well, I'll fix that when I edit it. Thank you so much! And for getting to my request so quickly (: This review made me so happy!

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Review #13, by ilharrypotterChange: Getting to know

13th July 2011:
Hello there! ilharrypotter/Polkadot from the forums with your requested review :)

This is a very well written one-shot! Few errors that I noticed, and the details and setup are perfect for this kind of piece.

I love how you described the beginning of Narcissa and Lucius - no one thinks about how they fell in love, but it's clear that they did. I like that you laid that out for all of your readers, and you did so very well.

I do hate that Narcissa and Lucius fight in this way - but that seems like a logical part of a marriage like this, with two people like this. And I hate that Lucius betrays Narcissa - she doesn't seem like she deserves that. No one deserves that! And the Death Eater thing, as well.

In all, this is a well-written story. I enjoyed reading it, and I love that you brought some light to an often-ignored couple. Very nice job!


Author's Response: Hey Paige! Thanks a lot for the read and review. I am glad you found this a good read.

Thanks once again for your awesome review =)


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Review #14, by ilharrypotterRice Milk Macabre: Now You See It...

13th July 2011:
Hi again!

Because of a new job and a short attention span, I've had to reduce to only doing 3 reviews per request. I apologize for that, but feel free to re-request as many times as you want :)

Once again, there's not much for me to say. This story is so well-written - it has so much substance, without being unforgivably long. It's a really great piece, and you should be proud. I haven't even seen the plot really begin to unfold, but already, I can tell there's so much going on that will keep your readers very interested.

I also love that Johanna's story will be entangling with Harry, Ron, and Hermione. So intriguing!


Author's Response: I'm glad that you like this story so much!! The length vs content was really a worry of mine, so thank you so much for the feedback!! I really appreciate you taking the time to write this review!

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Review #15, by ilharrypotterRice Milk Macabre: Eucalyptus

13th July 2011:
Hello again!

Your story really provokes a lot of thought from me, which is why my last review seemed so lacking, I'm sure. I stop and ponder a lot of what I read - not because it's confusing but because I'm curious as to what all of this could posisbly mean. I'm interested in this, and I guess I forget to give you an in-depth review. Oops.


Lovely chapter, again. You describe everything enough to give the story substance but not enough to be too much. You characterize enough for us to learn about Johanna - but not too much. You seem to be doing everything right - you're making my job so easy.

I also love to see Fred and George suddenly in the story, too! They lighten up every story, no matter what's going on.

I can't wait to hear more about this Ministry thing, as well.

You're doing a great job with this story. There's not much more I can say. Great job!


Author's Response: YAY!

Good, I'm glad the balance makes sense, I know I have a problem sometimes with not enough info in the beginning, so it eases my mind to know that you liked it.

I know I sound like a broken record, but THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU for the lovely review!!!

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Review #16, by ilharrypotterRice Milk Macabre: A Well-Timed Enchantment

13th July 2011:
Hello there! ilharrypotter/polkadot from the forums with your requested reviews. Sorry it's taken me so long, I've been terribly busy - I apologize for the wait!

Right away, the first thing that draws me to your story is your title. It's so... unique. When I was going through the list of stories I needed to review, I would always pause and look at your story title for a little longer - it's just so intriguing!

Seeing it's your first story, I'll try to be attentive - from the first bit I've read, I look forward to not having to say too much, though. :)

'much too high for us to reach, thank you so much Miss Johanna, we appreciate her works so much, Miss!' this made me chuckle. I do love house elves.

I'm really interested in the South African influence that is clearly in this story. This makes it so... interesting. Really incredible at how you're mixing it into the Harry Potter world, actually. I like that a lot.

I can't think of any criticism or improvements - this is a great story so far.


Author's Response: Thank you so much! Sorry it took me so long to reply, I have had a whirlwind month.

I'm glad you liked the mix and the title. The ultimate goal of this story was to be a total detour from the usual fic, so I'm very happy to hear that its purpose has been fulfilled.

Thanks again for the great review!!

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Review #17, by ilharrypotterMasterpiece: the critics

12th July 2011:
I don't even have words.

So beautiful - I'm so happy that Apolline is already back and where she belongs!

Author's Response: Haha I'll take that as a good thing, shall I? I'm very glad/relieved that you liked it! Thanks for being such a loyal reviewer, as well :)

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Review #18, by ilharrypotterBend or Break: A Funeral and a Visitor

12th July 2011:
Hello again!

I like - no, I LOVE - that Draco comes back to see the baby every single day. I don't know why that strikes me so deeply, but it really does - it's such a un-Draco-like thing, but at the same time, after the accident it makes so much sense. It shows that there's more to Draco than what everyone thought, and that's really beautiful. I love it.

The funeral was so... well-written, I suppose. I haven't been to a funeral since I was very young, but I could feel Draco's pain and guilt, and it was striking. It brought a few tears to my eyes, even. Beautifully written.

And this next part... Oh, Draco. I love how much drama and how much STUFF is going on in this story - there's more to it than just one thing and it's a treat. So many moving parts. And I'm just shaking my head at Draco now.

Great chapter!


Author's Response: It is un-Draco-like as we know him but also Draco-like in how he is now. Thank you so much for that!

Thank you for your review!

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Review #19, by ilharrypotterBend or Break: Chapter Five

11th July 2011:
Hello again!

Right away, I'm drawn in - Draco was having an affair with Sybil!? Oh, the drama. I love it. (If I'm right, at least. Which doesn't tend to be the case.) If I am right, though, it's so perfect, and it's a great addition to the rest of the plotlines.

Another thing I found incredible - Draco, wanting to see the baby. It was a really heartfelt moment, and I love that you're writing your story this way. Clearly, this is much more important than Draco and Hermione - this is about the baby, and the accident, and the lives that it affected. I love that you captured this so successfully!


Author's Response: Thank you! Yes! High Drama!! Love it!

I love that you loved that scene with the baby. I thought it was time to introduce the actual main character to the story :) I definitely wanted to write a Dramione that was actually more than a Dramione!


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Review #20, by ilharrypotterBend or Break: Chapter Four

11th July 2011:
Hello there! ilharrypotter/Polkadot from the forums with your requested reviews. Sorry it's taken so long - an extended vacation and serious drama took over my life for a bit there. Oh, summer. :) I'm glad to be back to reading this story though!

I feel like I dwelled on this a lot before, but I love how canon-ly you portray Draco. Even in the beginning of the chapter, he seems exactly like the Draco we know, love, and hate.

Example: "Here he truly learned that life was just a matter of looking out for his own interests, and that anything else hindered his survival." Such a Draco thing. In my opinion.

I also really like how you've mixed the Muggle world with the magical world. A car accident, a drunk driver, mixed with our magical characters - it's really the kind of modern thing we expect, but a lot of the time, writers don't mix the two worlds - not realistically or, more importantly, meaningfully. It's a fresh change of pace for me to read something that does in this sort of way - and it's very well done, as well!

You asked at the end if Harry was believable - oh, he most definitely is. Very canon, very realistic. You shouldn't have to worry about that!


Author's Response: No probs.

I breathe a sigh of relief that Draco is still relatively in character (as much as he can be in a Dramione). Thanks.

I've always been fascinated with how these teenagers grew up with all the advancing technologies and magic and it's been fun to mix it (albeit subtly but still). Maybe I'll pursue this line of thought in a different story.

Thank you for the kind words on my characters. I was a teeny bit worried ;)

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Review #21, by ilharrypotterBreaking the Quidditch Code: Enemies

11th July 2011:
Does it get any better? No. Of course it doesn't.

This story... oh. It makes my day to see it at the top of my recently updated list.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! You make me happy. So happy. Especially when my knees hurt and I'm at work half-dozed watching a preseason football game on the lobby television even though I'm not a football fan. SO THANK YOU.

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Review #22, by ilharrypotterFamily Life and Child Development: 5- The Dilemma

13th June 2011:
Hello again!

This will be my last review - and it's the last chapter you have posted, so I suppose this is fitting.

There's not much I can tell you to improve on that I haven't said before. Your story has potential, but it could use a lot of revision. There are words missing and there are serious flow issues in some places throughout the chapters, but these can be fixed easily. Once they are, I expect you'll recieve a lot more feedback about your story. :)

Your characters are mostly realistic, and your plot has a lot of promise to be unique, which is nice to see with Dramione.

Good luck, and be sure to request more reviews whenever you have more chapters up, if you'd like more of my assistance.


Author's Response: Thank you so much.! I so enjoyed reading your reviews. And I'll be sure to request again, when the other chapters are up.

I took your notes, and I'll talk with my beta soon about these issues. I'm so glad you really give time for it. Thanks.

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Review #23, by ilharrypotterFamily Life and Child Development: The First Lesson Understanding and Trust

13th June 2011:
Hello! I am so sorry I have been gone for so long. It's been a really long, terrible week for me. But I'm back to review again. :)

Again, I notice right away that a lot of words are missing from each sentence. Enough to confuse the reader. An edit for this chapter could definitely be beneficial.

I'm glad that Hermione and Draco are back to acting like themselves - hating each other. For right now, I think that's the most canon way you can have them interact. And canon is good, especially when you're going so against canon. :P It doesn't seem realistic that they'd suddenly be getting along though, even for grades.

Good chapter, though. It does need some revision. :)


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Review #24, by ilharrypotterFamily Life and Child Development: The Star

9th June 2011:
Hello there!

I'm looking forward to seeing Hermione and Draco interact - so far, you've created them as very canon and realistic, and that should make for a lot of fun when they start to spend a lot of time around each other.

I notice that a lot of the time you use the wrong tense of your verbs - mixing past and present tense, I mean. That's a problem, because it confuses the reader - like me! - but it can be easily fixed. :)

Now, all of a sudden, Draco and Hermione are getting along... I feel like you need to work on developing the two of them together - that would be great for the reader.

The story is still going along well, though!


Author's Response: hello. took me so long to respond. sorry. Just had a busy month. Start of school and all.

Thank for reviewing my work. Really, you really made my day. And for Draco and Hermione getting along, they aren't. I just think its necessary for Draco to be a bit silent throughout the chapter, and have Hermione and her bossiness be prominent here.

Secondly, This is the chapter where Cassie is born and so, I have them working well, as both was tired and its for their grades.

thanks again.

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Review #25, by ilharrypotterFamily Life and Child Development: The Partner

9th June 2011:
Hello again, I've returned!

I don't like how you skipped the actual Sorting part! That was something I was excited for - I wanted to read about Hermione's thoughts. I might be the only person who wishes that part wasn't left out, though.

"Do not think for one second I would love to be in this situation, because I loathe it deeply to my bones." - this feels like a very awkwardly worded sentence... and a lot of your sentences are like that, I've noticed. Very awkwardly worded. They don't always flow. And flow is a good thing.

I like that you have Draco and Hermione being very nasty to each other - I don't think they would get on very well right away, even if they wanted to overcome what had happened before. It just doesn't seem likely! Bravo for fighting the cliches. :)

I notice that a lot of the time, you seem to leave out words in your sentences. Not a major deal, but again, it messes with the flow of your story, which is something that can be fixed easily to make things a lot better. :)

"No, I do not. But nobody, and I mean that includes you, mess up with my grades and if that includes having a truce to him and living with him peacefully, I'll do it." - this is an excellent way to end a chapter. It's a very Hermione-ish thing to say, and I applaud you for staying in canon so well.

I'm enjoying this story so far - and honestly, I didn't think I would too much, as it isn't my kind of thing. Wonderful job.


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