Ha, i bet Lily was jellous seeing James with his head in another girls lap. (ok... maybe that was worded wrong lol).
i bet a 5 hour game would take its toll on the players.
i also get the feeling that Gillette was a tad hurt when Sirius replied to her "well, I have not found my Evans, have I?". i always get the feeling in this story that they have a thing for each other as more than just good friends and classmates.
great story, love it keep postingAuthor's Response: Glad to hear you enjoyed seeing a bit of jealousy.
Yeah. I can't imagine a 5 hour game. I thought it was funny to hear Rowling describe how long some of the games went in the professional arena. Don't know that it's ever really mentioned how long the games went that Harry played in.
You've picked up on things pretty well. ;)
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ah the perrils of career advise. i remeber a few years back from my interview at school.
im glad that she didnt hold sirius's name against him, and in fact she even expressed that it was good to have him on thier side not voldemorts.
exams are tough and when you have to get certain grades for stuff it makes it even thougher. i myself am doing my last year of high school this year so i need stuff for uni and that.
good story love itAuthor's Response: I like to think McGonagall is pretty realistic and holds her students in high regard. She's had five years to get to know Sirius. I think she knows where his loyalties are, despite his family.
Hey, congrats an making it your senior year (is that an American term?). Stay focused. I know here (in America), a lot of times students have already been accepted for uni by about 1/2 way through their senior year. That's why 'senoritas' settles in and they get lazy. Keep it up, though.
And thank you. :) Report Review
Il post this review in two parts.
Awesome to see they decided to get out of the shack, i like that idea of having a clock on a chain. The part with the centurs didnt make 100% sence but from wat i gathered they could tell that James, Sirius and Peter were animagi?
I bed they would have been tired the nextday. Remus gets the day off but they wouldnt have..
That hospital scene remids me of a time one of my mates was in hospital and me and a few other people when to visit a bit drunk. we were falling over things and stuff, laughing, eventurally got kicked out lol.
I like the excuses about the nicknames aswell.
i like how the story is going allong. im almost upto date with it lol. i have got to find the pieces of paper i wrote the reviews for chapters 10 to 17 on. Il post them up soon.
great story thanksAuthor's Response: I'm glad to hear you liked the clock idea. Sorry the part about the Centaurs was a bit confusing.
In answer to your question (how did the centaurs know the boys were animagi) - they are a bit mystical and I think they would be able to divine such things. Also, a werewolf is distinguishable from a regular wolf, so they would recognize Remus for what he was immediately. The group of three animals hanging around with a werewolf would likely be an unusual group. How often in the wild do you see a stag "hanging out" with a dog or a rat. The same could be said of the others. So it's also possible that the Centaurs deduced that the boys were animagi because of the unnaturalness of the grouping.
Remus is lucky that he doesn't have to go to class.
I'm glad to hear the hospital scene was realistic enough to remind you of your own life.
Lol. Wow! I'm flattered that you actually wrote down reviews for past chapters. That's awesome to know even if you never find them. Thank you.
Thanks for the wonderful comments. Report Review
I feel so sorry for Lily, losing her parents.
The bit at the breakfast would have been really hard for her, she clearly likes James but wont admit it cos she is annoyed by allot of the suff he does and his friends do. Now having lost her parents its even harder for her to control herself around him, seeing him laughing like that.
On a more happyer note, Sirius and Gellete are getting on well together.
also its funny how love is so much easyer in a story than real life lol.
lastly water fun is always good :D
Keep up the good workAuthor's Response: I'm glad to hear that my version of Lily is coming across well. I'm also thrilled that you... don't seem to mind Gillette.
We do tend to complicate love, don't we?
"water fun" - Lol. Thank you.
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How nice of James'es mother to let Remus stay there over the break.
I feel sorry for Sirius just as i always do, and having to meet voldemort.
That last bit with the Evans's didnt make much sence but im sure the next chapter will clear that up :D
Keep posting please. love this storyAuthor's Response: Just remember - The Potters don't yet know that Remus is a werewolf, so to them, it's just like James inviting any other friend over for the holiday.
Glad the scene with Voldemort came across well. I wasn't too sure if it would or not.
I hope the part about Lily cleared up in the next chapter. Sorry for the confusion. Report Review
Hey, i wonder if Daly really did tell the school cos she was hurt about Sirius turning her down?
I like it how they are nice to Remus about the state of his shack and then still keeping their promises about becoming animagi to give him company.
Once again im sorry for the delay in me reading. Im catching up but also trying not to read it too fast.
Keep posting awesome story.Author's Response: Thanks again for taking the time to comment as you go. I know it would be much easier to wait until you catch up, so I appreciate the comments.
Thank you. Report Review
Firstly i want to apologise for just dissapearing. i got cought up with exams at school then had a PC problem and only got it working again on xmas day.
Anyway, awesome a party, wizzard style lol. I bet the fireworks beat and digital lighting system like in night clubs lol.
I wonder how long before Remus opens up about himself to Aden. If you have ever have been in a situation like that u no thats its really hard. i know first hand.
Well time for me to keep reading, got a bit of catching up to do lol.Author's Response: Dude!! Welcome back. Good to see you. :D
No need to apologize. And glad you got your computer working again. Can't imagine what would happen if mine crashed.
Ha ha. Glad you enjoyed the party. Thanks for commenting. Report Review
mud fight awesome, i remember in yr 7 i had a bit of a mud fight in horticulture. O_o someone else is trying to frame the maurders.
keep writing 10/10 :DAuthor's Response: Lol. I find it funny that you've actually had a mud fight. That's awesome!
Thanks again for taking the time to review. Thank you. Report Review
Hey, awesome chapter. i like how ur going on with the cursed position of the DATDA teacher.
With the map i dont really think it matters how u display it, whatever works for you. im sure it probably changed over time a bit as well. also i use the kinda PC programs ur talking bout everyday lol
keep posting 10/10Author's Response: Hey,
Thank you so very much. And I'm glad you like the DADA thing. :)
I've not had the opportunity to work on that type of computer or program, but they look very cool - very Minority Report. And thank you, too. I'm glad you didn't mind about the appearance of the map being altered a bit.
Thanks again for the review. Report Review
Ah i hate dating, BF/GF its all annoying lol. so much trouble.
i didnt really get the cheating part lol care to explain it a tad more?
also funny that they got busted by the prefect
10/10 keep posting.
oh and thanks for the shout out (think thats wat its called)Author's Response: Hey Dude,
Lol. Dating does get complicated.
As for the part on cheating - Sirius tends to make off-colored jokes, in general. None of the guys are dating each other. I don't write slash. Sirius was just responding to James' wording when he suggested to Peter they go up to the dorms for the night. But other than friendship, and close friendship at that, there's nothing hinky going on between the boys. Sorry for the confusion there.
No problem with the shout out. I appreciate the reviews I get - and the reviewers.
Thank again. Report Review
Oh poor Remus, this chapter kind of made me cry a bit, feel so sorry for remus loosing his parents, and its so sweet that Madam Pompfrey is taking him in.
Sirius is starting an even bigger war with his parents ol
Keep up the good work, cant wait for the next chpter. 10/10
(PS sorry for all the missed letters, my keyboard batteries are going flat)Author's Response: I am oddly smiling that you cried a bit - not that you cried, but that I was able to convey the emotion well enough to get you to empathize. Thanks for that.
Yeah... Sirius has turned things up a notch. mwahahaha.
Thanks again for the review (and no worries. I understand the battery thing. My keyboard does that too. Makes it very hard to type.) Report Review
Hey, finished reading this now, awesome story i love it !
Gillette really stuck it up Sirius's mum love it! It seems to me from reading this that James's parents are going to kind of adopt Sirius like the Weaslys did with harry.
also i love wat they did to the slitherins :D ( i no tht was bak a chapter or 2 but il add it in here)
keep posting, now to print off the start of book 3 :DAuthor's Response: Thank you very much.
I'm glad you enjoyed Gillette's part. I wasn't too sure how that would go over, so thank you.
Yeah. James' parents are a lot like the Weasleys. Good catch on that comparison. :)
Hee hee. Glad you liked the prank on the Slytherins, too.
Thanks again for taking the time to review. Report Review
Hey, im upto here in the story atm, awesome story im always taken back by how awesome fan fiction is.
the DATDA teacher reminds me of a teacher at my school who everyone started picking on and now they just have no control lol.
Sirius is one of favorite characters some of the stuff he comes up with is great and its good to see a different side to him, breaking up with his brother to protect him, remids me of a TV show called 'smallville'
i will keep up with the story now as you post it. hope to read more soon!
ThanksAuthor's Response: Hey Dude. Welcome aboard. :)
I agree. There is some awesome fanfiction out there and I'm flattered that you lump my story in with that. Thank you.
Ha ha. Yeah, I had a teacher at school that had no control either.
Sirius is my favorite, too. I'm glad that you like my take on him and it doesn't run too contrary to the image you have of him.
Thanks again. Report Review
i havnt started reading yet but just wanted to ask something quickly...
now that DH is out will this story change the way its going or are you going to keep going as if DH wasnt out?
thanks. will look forward to reading itAuthor's Response: Hey, auzzie dude. I'll be keeping it going as if DH had not happened. I already have everything planned out and nothing would make sense if I changed it now. Thanks and I hope you enjoy! Report Review
i just finished reading it, (still crying while i wright this)
I have to say there was a point at the start where i was thinking of stoping reading cos it was so hard to understand but im glad i kept going and to anyone else who is finding it hard to read just keep to it... you will work it out!
its funny, i havnt really cryed since i was about 10 (17now) and this story just broke me down to tears so meany times.. you really are a good wrighter and please keep going, i would love to read another story by you!
In 'How She Changed for the Worst' i cryed so meany times (thats the chapter i mean in my other review)
I would love a chance to email chat with you (firstname.lastname@example.org) i just have a few questions and things...
also i hope you dont mind but i have printed a copy of the story to read at a later date!
Best of luck, Colin Report Review
(i hope this is the chapter about her being really depressed st the hollow sorry if it isnt but thats the one i ment :D )
OMG this chapter made me cry, i still havnt finished reading the whole story yet (upto chapter 27)
good luck and keep wrighting!
Please note, this review counts for whole story not just this chapter.
Man, this made me cry 3 or 4 times! i loved it and Sirius came back!
i dont really no wat else to say lol, just no that i loved it! any story thats written well enough to make me cry is good.. and this one on more than one occation!
thanks for the read
i think im going to wright my own fan fic now after reading so meany im inspired!
Author's Response: Wow! That really means a lot that you were in touch with the story that much :)
That's fantastic! Good luck! :) Report Review
(im only gonna wright one review on this so consider this one for the whole story)
OMG mate, i loved the first story but this is just getting better and better... i kinda dont no wat to say lol i loved it all.
I love it how lily and James kept managing to sleep in each others beds, allong with the fact that they would nag eachother about 'the dormitory is full'
With Elle it so reminds me of a friend i know and how her life changed when she got a BF.
when Brigid died i cryed and lets face it, im 17 and a boy.. its funny how i story if written wright can be so touching.
i have read the last instalment of this sorry (those that remain) but i wont give it away here.. check the review on there im gonna leave one now
thanks for a really good read mate!Author's Response: Thank you so much. It was really nice to hear all that. :) Report Review
Hey, really good story mate, this is the first story i came across when i googled 'harry potter fan fiction' and i have to so this is exelent!
i really like the way if a younger person read it they wouldnt have picked up on some of the sexual content.
with the last chapter i read it twice, first without the song then with the song repeating and it made a big diference.
thanks for this story and keep righting.Author's Response: Wow I'm flattered, espically if you haven't read Fanfics before. I'm glad your first look didn't leave a sour taste in your mouth. Keep searching this site there are tons of good stories. I tired to keep the 'relations' as PG-13 as I could but still appeal to the older ones who can fill in the rest with their own imaginations. ;)
~Kristy Report Review
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