The worst basis for a story I have ever heard of. I realize you're probably about eight years old, but you'd be better off writing a fruity little story about Harry than a fruity little story about Harry and a fruity kid's show character. Drop the IM language, too. Basically, in all the stories I have seen, this one is one of the lamest. Just give up.

Author's Response: well at least you considerd to review I'll give you that

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Cute. Cliched, but cute.

Author's Response: isnt it just and thank you

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Good story, just be careful of the spelling and grammar, MAJOR pet peeve of mine. The characters are a little predictable, but mostly okay. Keep it going.

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Thank you so much for writing an intelligible story with proper punctuation and spelling. I can actually read it! What a change...anyway, you're an excellent writer. I myself am always being scolded for my writing being too "flowery," but your's is also and personally, I like it. I can't wait for you to finish the story. :)

Author's Response: Hahaha :P That actually made me laugh!

Thank you so much for your gracious compliment :) I've just started writing fiction and I get really encouraged by every positive remark I get :)

Thank you so much for the review :D I like novels, so this will most likely be one. But feel free to stay tuned for the coming chapters!

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A little childish, but okay. Write more.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing, the next chapter is written and I'll update soon :)

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