Oh my, this is incredible. Congratulations on a great collection of short stories!
My favourites were probably this one and Professor Flitwick's. The raw emotion was just amazing.
It's strange that in all of the Lily Potter II fanfics I've read, she's never been likened to her namestake. And why shouldn't she be? I think perhaps assuming that she inherited red hair from the Weasley side probably takes precedence over anything else. I found your comparison, and Petunia's actions, really moving and beautiful.
Thanks for sharing these lovely stories!Author's Response: Hello!! :)
I really loved writing this collection, and I'm so happy that you enjoyed it! Honestly, I got really emotional writing both Flitwick and Petunia, and it's amazing to hear that it came across in the writing.
I'm really glad to hear that you enjoyed Petunia's reactions to Lily! I think that while Petunia wouldn't have felt a bond with James II or Albus because of their resemblance to Harry, who she resented, the fact that Lily was a girl and reminded her of her sister would open her up to her memories. I wondered when writing this how Snape would have reacted to a second Lily Potter who looked like her namesake!
Thank you so much for this lovely and thoughtful review, it really means a lot to me that you enjoyed these stories! :)
Ooh please update this story, it 's brilliant!
I love that they're in a different era, and that Fleur seems to forget her propriety around Bill.
You're a very talented writer!Author's Response: Heh, I don't quite mean to write it as if it's in a different era but I can't help it so you're going to have to forgive any continuity errors :P
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It was kind of unexpected to me, that he went to her rooms. Like, he's usually so focussed on staying proper and gentlemanly that it was a surprise he changed his mind.
But great chapter! Thanks for sharing! Report Review
Your writing is just brilliant. It's not often that I take note of a story and come back at a later date to check for updates, but I'll definitely be doing that with this one.
I love that your portrayal of a Lily/James ship is done in such a different way. An alternate universe/life swap is just a perfect idea, really original and interesting.
In saying that, I do feel the need to critique just one tiny thing that has been bugging me - why didn't Lily go to a professor, ie Dumbledore? Surely a teacher would be able to set things on the right course. Even just an "I went to McGonagall but she thought I was crazy" would suffice ;)
Love it, want more, please update etc etc etc! Report Review
I really love this story! Lily seems like a strong person, but a bit oppressed by Tad. I really hope she finds the strength to go on the training program.
Great writing, keep it up! Report Review
Great chapter. I'd love to know what Snape said at the ball. Octavius seems jealous of Sirius, which actually surprised me.
Did she seriously just faint? Report Review
Ooh a kiss. Poor Jane, she must have been terrified!
Why would Sirius' parents have disowned him on that day? Like, was there a breaking point kinda thing? Report Review
Ooh Jane has special powers!
Just a heads up, during the scene when they're walking to the quiddich pitch, there's a bit of botched repeated conversation. Like the text has been copied and pasted too many times.
Why did the slytherin do that?? Report Review
Oh my, Jane is just hopeless isn't she.
So much of this chapter made me laugh out loud - the suit of armour, James with his 'sir' and 'you're welcome', Fifi tripping over. One of my favourite chapters so far! Report Review
Lynn's point of view was unexpected but good. I thought that Jane revealing Remus as a werewolf was a bit abrupt (like, why wasnt her knowledge of it revealed earlier in the story) but it worked out okay. Lily's reaction was really nice.
What stopped Jane from getting hit by the spells? Methinks she might make a good Order member if its a special skill of hers. Report Review
The contrast between Jane's internal character and what she actually says out loud is so well done. I often forget that she's super quiet until she actually talks to someone.
Another brilliant chapter! You're very talented Report Review
I really like that I'm still guessing about who she'll end up with. Remus.. Sirius.. Octavius.. (So many 'us's!) or no one at all?! Report Review
She passed out?!
Also, how is Octavius suddenly good friends with the Marauders? The impression that I got in the first few chapters was that Jane and him were kind of on their own. Not criticizing, just curious! Report Review
Ahh I love the friendship between Jane and Octavius.
Brilliant prank by the way. Fits in nicely with Snape needing a bath!
Still brilliant so far. Report Review
I really loved this first chapter. You're a great writer, and I love the voice you've given Jane. Maybe I'm biased - one of my closest friends is called Jane, and she's anything but plain!
I love that all of your grammar and spelling is perfect. There isn't anything more frustrating than poor spelling etc
Off to read more! Report Review
Just beautiful. I love the voice you've given to Angelina, and i love the way you discuss the pain of losing Fred amid swims and drinks. So well written. Report Review
So good so far. Shame you haven't got more reviews.
I'd like to hear more from Erin about her kidnapping. Something so serious would surely impact her more.
All of your characterization is great! Sirius and Remus are really likeable. Haven't heard anything about Peter?
Looking forward to the next update!Author's Response: I know, I wish more people would take the time :(
Erin's kidnapping will come out more much later in the story. I think she's trying to block it out of her mind so she can try to have a normal life at the moment, and isn't able to tackle it properly yet.
Thank you! I'm glad you like them. As for Peter, I find it hard to write about him because obviously he turns out to be evil XD he will be dropping in now and then. I think mainly he's going to be a plot device more than anything though. I would've cut him out completely like so many people do actually, except it never feels right to ignore the fourth Marauder when he's so important canonically. Hmm, I don't know, but I agree I'm not doing him justice :(
Thank you though, more soon :) x Report Review
Hey! I really liked this (especially The Smiths reference!).
I think Erin is a great character so far. The only thing niggling at me is Alice and her announcement - shouldn't she have waited for Frank to come back first?
Anyway, great first chapter. Off to read more!Author's Response: Aw, thank you for reviewing, enjoying this, and for recognising The Smiths!
I think Alice is more the mouthpiece of their relationship, and she wanted to tell her friends first. Report Review
Wow another update! Good on you :) I'm constantly impressed by the way you keep all of your plot and characterisation perfect after months of no updates. When I stop writing for a bit, it always takes me a few updates to get back into the swing of things.
At last, I think it's finally happening.. James is trying to show his feelings to Gwen?? Please be true haha it would be amazing.
Thanks so much for updating so soon! You're a fantastic writer and I can't wait to read more Report Review
Wow you're such a brilliant author! Reading this story was the best decision I've made all week.
Your characterisation of the twins is just spot on. The things they do in your interpretation is exactly the way I'd imagine JK Rowling herself to do. But in saying that, you add your own little twists that I just love (ie George and Brienne! Love them so much).
I love Angelina and her friendship with Brienne and the boys. Because we never really got to see into Angelina and her character, as well as the twins beyond a few pranks etc in the books, the foursome (five with Lee) are a completely credible story line.
Anyway. Wow. Love this so much. Can't wait to read more!Author's Response: Hi!
Wow, that's so kind of you! Thank you very much! I love writing Angelina, she's just the right balance with the twins xD Who wouldn't want to be their friend?
And the thing about the characterisation...it made my day.
Thank you again! Report Review
Love her for both of us.. Quick, better break off Ignotus' engagement! (I wish)
I find it interesting that Iggy still hasn't told Dom that he's promised to someone else. That's going to cause a bit of a disagreement, methinks.
How awful that Callum died. You wrote that really well, though. Poor Dom, she's going to be so confused now. Report Review
So many amazing updates lately!
It was really good to hear from Dominique's family, I was wondering if anyone from her time would come back into the story. She's clearly more missed than she anticipated.
The ambush was unexpected, in a good way. I kind of hope Dom uses advanced magic to save everyone/Callum, to let them know she's not one of them and that women aren't helpless.
Oh and excuse me, Callum?! Engaged?! Didnt leave a review last chapter about it, so here you go! Their engagement was a brilliant twist, but I don't know if I'm happy about it. She's meant to be with Ignotus! If Dom isn't worried about being married, she clearly isn't planning on going back to her time any time soon..
So wow, great updates. Thanks so much! Can't wait to read more. Do you have many more chapters planned?Author's Response: Thank you SO MUCH for the review!! I'm glad you found it as a nice twist! I was hoping it would be taken that way. There had been a LOT of romance so we needed some action! :)
And I know how you feel! About Dominique and Ignotus. So trust me. :) The story is a huge Dominique/Ignotus ship. Patience. All good things in time. ;)
As for the chapters planned out, I do actually have QUITE A BIT planned out! I think, with the way this story's headed, I think I'm looking at roughly 40 chapters. :O I still surprise myself with that number. :D
Thanks for the review! Hope to see you back for the next chapter! Report Review
Wow this is amazing! I have to say though, when I first started reading, Charlie as a character didnt do much for me. I'm glad I persevered though, because both your writing and your characterization has improved so much.
I like how the two story lines run parallel to each other, in terms of the time of year etc.
For some reason, I don't think she's dead.. Is she dead?!?Author's Response: Thanks so much - it's great to hear you think I've improved, I've been writing a lot lately!
Courtney:) Report Review
Wow such a fantastic first chapter! I love the way you've written Charlotte's oddities as if they're the most normal thing, not stopping to explain straight away.
Al's last sentence at the end was super effective. Ahh I love this already!Author's Response: Hey :)
Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving a review! I'm happy to hear that you've enjoyed the first chapter and I really hope you continue to enjoy the rest of the story. I think "oddities" is a great way to describe what Charlotte has going on. Yes, the last sentence was really dramatic wasn't it? You'll see more from his perspective in the future chapters if you keep reading.
I'd love to hear what you think about the other chapters and thanks again!
-Avis12 Report Review
I just love this so much! It's so real, and actually really funny.
Thanks so much for sharing :)Author's Response: I love Ron and Hermione, and I think that relationship was one of the most realistic and well developed of the series. I enjoy imagining them as a married couple with children and work and lives that get in the way. Thank you so much for the review!~GW Report Review
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