hey, so i really like the idea for this story. the nineteen years between the end of the war and the epilogue are always my favorite stories to read. my only constructive criticism is the lack of editing in relation to punctuation, spelling, and incorrect word usage in general. you should consider having someone read over it before submitting chapters because this story has a lot of potential!Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying as hard as I can but I'm not that good of a speller. Report Review
Love this! And I love that Christmas song lol Report Review
If they've already kissed that intensely twice, I dunno why James is being so stupid lol, update soon!Author's Response: because he's... james :)
i will! thank you! Report Review
Millas a tad crazy, methinksAuthor's Response: aren't we all? haha
thanks! Report Review
I think shes being a little unfair to him, but then again best friends aren't *that* touchy feely, sleeping together and whatnot... Esp if one has a gf.. No no no lol. Good chapterAuthor's Response: thanks! i'll update soon! Report Review
gahhh i dont like this girl. i hope you give milla some action soon lol Report Review
ew i dont like her already. nice chapter! Report Review
i bet that frown is cuz he secretely loves her, right? right? lol Report Review
what didnt she want him to tell her friends? did i miss that or is sposed to be a secret. nice chapter anyway, really enjoyed it :-)Author's Response: it was supposed to be a secret! Report Review
interesting!! draco sounds so evil! lol
it makes me wonder how you're gonna follow up with this. like.. did james and dumbledore really try to do her in? i find that hard to believe, but who knows? hopefully she retains her sense of dignity and just fakes being evil or something. ahhh update soon :-)Author's Response: thankyou i am so glad you're reviewing! XD yes i like him evil :D and you'll just have to find out!
i have a lot of chapters on the way and you'll find her doing more evil doings ... :D
thanks again! Report Review
Heyyy so I'm completely addicted to this story, just like I was with delicate. Update soon! :-) Report Review
i liked this chapter. you're such a skilled writer, i honestly and truly believe you should do this for a living with your own characters, because you certainly have the talent to be successful. Report Review
lol its 4:50am, i need to go to bed, but i cant stop reading. Report Review
interesting story, i'm excited to read more, but i think the quality would improve a lot if you read over it for grammar and just wrong word placement in general.
but i can tell youre a great writer, and i'm looking forward to more!Author's Response: arr thankyou so much! yes i posted it and then i was like ... i'll wait till it validates and then i'll go back over it :D arr and thankyou so much i'm glad you like it i am hoping to get a banner soon to spice it up :D
thanks again you're awesome Report Review
i really liked the quidditch match, haha, it was well written and entertaining. i'm not familiar enough with the next-gen names though, so i was a bit confused, but i think i caught on. great job, honestly. superb! update soon please!!!Author's Response: Thank you for your review! And I know how you feel. It took me SO long to figure out who everyone was, but I got there eventually! If you are interested, there's a pedigree chart online somewhere. You can Google it and find it. That's how I finally got it all figured out. Thanks again! Report Review
yay i love this story. it's great to find a story thats got a great plot, but also someone who knows how to spell, use grammar correctly, etc. next chapter. Report Review
This is great! I really really enjoyed this. *favorited*Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
hello! firstly, i think the idea for your story is great. a series of one shots during the nineteen years is a cool idea. i do agree with the other reviewers, however, that say that you need to fix your grammar and spelling a bit before this story could reach its potential success. you should definitely look into getting a beta reader (someone to check over and correct your grammar, etc), as that would improve the quality of your story significantly.
keep updating, though! Report Review
update soon! it was so good and i can't wait to read moreAuthor's Response: Thanks, am updating right now...finally. Report Review
hey! i love your story and i've read it before, and i'm catching up with your updates now!! it's really emotional and great, but i think it'd be so much more moving if it were edited, like for grammar and just typing errors in general. i'd be more than happy to edit it for you, that way you can edit each chapter (it updates faster than adding one and doesn't take away reviews, etc)... so send me a message on here if you'd like that. if not, keep up the great storytelling!!!Author's Response: Thanks, if you want to that would be great, my eyes and my grammer/spell check only catches so much :) Report Review
thats not good (the news, not the story, the story is good) lolAuthor's Response: no it's not haha thanks Report Review
aw, cuteness. yayyAuthor's Response: lol Report Review
oh goodness, this is so intense (and creative).. on to the next chapter.Author's Response: thanks Report Review
oh this one was my favorite so far!!! very interesting. although i am most def not a luna harry shipper, you make it believable and even pleasant!!! (which is saying something with me).. EXCELLENT job! i love love love looovvvee it, update soonAuthor's Response: This was my fav chapter so far but I mush prefer chapter 6 which will be coming soon.
Do you not like Luna/Harry? I think they're sweet! But I'm glad you decided to stick with the story even though you don't particularly like the pairing.
Thank you so much for the lovely comments. I'm thrilled you like it! Report Review
lol nice. sinfully delicious story, i must say. bravo, hahaAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! :-D Report Review
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