This is so good, but one thing--space between paragraphs. Otherwise, it's very very interesting! Report Review
I love this story. I really don't have anything else to say about it except it's hilarious and extremely well-written. Report Review
I really think this is well-written (= Keep it up! Report Review
Interesting, but you do need to work on your spelling and grammar. Keep it up, though (= Report Review
Hahaha, this was funny and clever! Keep up the good work! Report Review
I agree with the previous comments. Your story has a lot of potential, but in order for it to improve, you need to work on your spelling and grammar. Report Review
Very nice. (: And I love JoJo. Very fitting choice. Report Review
You are a very talented writer! (: Can't wait to read more! Report Review
You really have Sirius's character down. It's very sexy. (I WILL TELL YOU HOW MUCH OF A SWEETHEART/DOLL/BRILLO WRITER YOU ARE OVER IM.)Author's Response: Anne, this made me beam. Thank you so much (for this review and for what you said over IM). Sirius is one of those characters who intimidate everyone - the writer included.
I'm glad my representation seemed real and that it was sexy - oh, wait. I think that was redundant.
Thanks for the review! Report Review
You + Wolfstar = sucks, because I - Wolfstar = happy, but when you = wolfstar then I = love it, even though Wolfstar is less than or equal to the appeal of H/HR. Except for when you write it.
If none of that made sense, know this much : I love it. I hate loving it, because I am supposed to hate Wolfstar. But I can't hate Wolfstar anymore because you write it brilliantly. Report Review
I love you, um, will you marry me?Author's Response: *laughs* Anne, I love you too.
But I think my heart belongs to Sirius. Report Review
YOU CAN'T JUST... LEAVE IT THERE.
I HATE YOU BUT I LOVE YOU. Author's Response: Anne, I love you too.
And yes, I can just leave it there. Report Review
I love you for it even though I hate you for it. Report Review
My friend (fly-underground) is right on everything. You keep Sirius in character consistently, and, what's more, you do the same with James (most people have an awful time with that :P).
Love it. :)Author's Response: aww thank you so much! i really wasn't sure how to play off james cause i was scared i'd end up writing him like sirius. thanks so much for the review. :) Report Review
You captured both Remus and Tonks's characters perfectly and you made me actually enjoy fluff (which generally is a very hard thing to do). It's a shame they didn't get their kiss, but I loved it even more because of how realistic it was. Great job. Report Review
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