Everything's out, what a relief. I'm so glad that everything worked out for the better. I really do like Matt and Lily together and they deserve to be happy. Also, I really just wanted to reach through the computer and give Matt a hug when Lily first confronted him about his lycanthropy because of how anxious he got. Poor guy, he's been through too much bad for one person. But I really liked how Lily handled it and kept herself together; she really is maturing more now that she's been dating Matt. Matt is definitely the best thing to happen to Lily, and vice versa. Great chapter! (:Author's Response: Yep! It took a while, but they finally talked it through. The two of them work so well together. Lily definitely did not make a good choice as to when to confront Matt, but she's still Lily (and therefore impulsive) even though she has changed.
Matt really has been through so much, so it's great that he found Lily. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Poor James :( He's the single man out. I just want to give him a hug. And Lily is doing the right thing letting the lycanthropy discovery air out until the next full moon to be more sure for now. I'm not looking forward to what's coming as I'm sure it won't be pretty... can we just skip over that to the happy part where there are no secrets are holding them back? But great buildup leading up to it as I can sense the tension rising for Lily in this chapter over the whole dilemma. Great chapter (:Author's Response: He is. :( But he'll get there eventually. Lily is definitely doing the right thing. She wants to be sure, and it can't hurt to have a few weeks to think on it. Aww, nope, can't skip over the next part! But it might not be as bad as you're expecting. ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Ooh, she's really hit the nail on the head there with that sneaky detective work she's done. And here I thought she wouldn't figure it out on her own before Matt told her, though technically she hasn't figured it out yet. She's just discovered similarities with the gold flecked eyes in both Sophie and Matt. But man she's observant for catching that.
Also I loved seeing the twins rough housing and Amy with Lucy. Got me right in the feels with those scenes. I did pick up on what I think might have been a typo when Dillan had taken Lucy from Amy before handing her back (you said he handed her back to Victoire, but the way the context is worded it seems like you meant Amy). (Dillan handed Lucy back to Victoire) But that was the only typo I really noticed since I wasn't really looking. Anyway, great chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more! (:Author's Response: She definitely did! She isn't absolutely positive yet, but now that she has the idea in her head, she'll be able to figure it out with a little more detective work.
I loved writing that scene with the twins! They're just so sweet and it's nice to write those fluffy bits every once in a while. I'll have to go back and fix that typo. That's what I get for doing the editing while editing one of my sister's essays... Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
It's full moon time. Lily really doesn't pick up on things like Rose does so I doubt she'll figure it out on her own. But who knows. I did enjoy the sibling bantering in this episode between Al and Lily, and I always enjoy seeing some James. I hope there's more of James in the later chapters.
Marriage talk with a new boyfriend in the same room equals awkward. Especially when said boyfriend will be the man you marry because let's face it, Lily and Matt are going to stay together for the long haul despite any bumps they come to. But I liked how natural you wrote Lily during this scene as I could imagine her dislike of being a bridesmaid in yet another wedding before she herself has been married. Great chapter, looking forward to reading the next! (:Author's Response: It is indeed! Lily picks up more than others give her credit for, so you'll just have to wait and see. I'm glad you liked the sibling bantering; it's one of my favorite things to write. James will appear again, although he won't play a big role.
The marriage talk was so awkward! But awkward is fun to write. Aww, can't say whether they'll stay together forever, but you can probably guess. I'm glad you liked Lily's not wanting to be a bridesmaid again. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Awww, I hate that there's still this gaping secret that's separating Lily from getting any closer to Matt, especially since there's so perfect for each other. But Rose really is quite the reasoner and knows exactly how to put Lily at ease. I just can't wait until we get that one-shot on Matt's perspective, though I know that won't come until later. But gah, I just want to see how it all is handled. But lovely chapter, as usual!Author's Response: They are perfect for each other, but they can't be with each other forever until they confront the big problem. Rose is really, really good at what she does, so she's the perfect person for Lily to talk to. The Matt perspective one-sot won't come for a while, since it half takes place at a later point in this fic. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
I can just sense the argument looming on the forefront for these two, and I'm dreading it. I don't want to see either of them upset, but I know that in order to get past this milestone they both need to throw out words at each other. They've both been through bad relationships, Lily more so than Matt, but the difference between what they have with each other that they didn't with the other people they had dated before is that they can eventually get through this. Even I am dreading it, I'm looking forward to plowing through it to get to the other side with these two happy lovebirds together forever.
I really hope Rose talks some sense into Matt after Lily talks to her. Rose is good about slapping logic on the table in a sensible way. I also really want to see a interaction between Matt and Amy because I think Amy should be the one to talk Matt through his uncertainty over telling Lily the truth. They're such close siblings that Amy needs to be there to help Matt now. I hope they have an interaction in the Matt one-shot you wrote to post with their argument chapter. Anyway, great chapter and I'll just be sitting on the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter over here. (:Author's Response: Yep, it's starting to build up to it. It has to happen eventually. They're both going to be upset, but it might not ruin the entire relationship.
It might not be Rose who talks sense into Matt, but someone will. ;) Funny you mention an Amy and Matt interaction, though. ;) Keep that in mind. And I will eventually post the one-shot. It's all written, but I can't post it for another few chapters. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
This chapter was just so much fun! I love how you're balancing Lily's curiosity over what Matt won't tell her and her obvious avoiding starting the confrontation of bringing up things, like say his scars, with him. Her curiosity is there, yet it isn't yet coming before their relationship as she falls harder for him. I just love these two (fangirl squeal).
Also, I really loved Amy's poking fun at Matt. It was such a sibling thing to do and you really wrote it well. Plus I just love your sister/brother interactions between these two so it was nice to see after only getting a glimpse of Amy in a previous chapter. And Lucy, omg, cuteness. Little kids are just adorable.
I also liked the side story that Lily told Matt about James breaking the statue and her chasing a pidgoen and Albus getting a concussion later that same day. It really showed what a handful she and her brothers were for Ginny to keep up with. I wouldn't expect anything less of the offspring of Harry Potter (plus they also have Weasley blood in them so that means double the trouble). Anyway, great chapter and I'm looking forward to the next chapter tomorrow. (:Author's Response: Lily is very curious but she's afraid of what asking will do to their relationship. She doesn't want to lose him since she's so in love. But eventually things will come out.
I love writing the brother/sister interactions and really, any type of sibling interaction, probably because I have so many siblings. :P Lucy is so sweet to write!
Ginny had quite the time keeping up with the kids when they were little. They were definitely a handful! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Ooh, Lily's in luuurrrve. :P This chapter was a bit of a filler, but it was a necessary filler since it allowed us to see how Matt's still keeping his furry secret from Lily (yet he and Albus still glance pointedly at each other). I think you're setting it up nicely for Lily to end up working together eventually to question him more in-depth about it later on. That said, I really hope Matt doesn't wait too long to tell her. I get that he'll want to make sure it's going to last between them before spilling his innermost secret, while at the same time he's still not being completely honest with her and Lily has had issues with her past boyfriends lying to her. I just really don't want anything to drastically screw the trust they so far have built in their, still fresh, relationship. Anyway, great chapter and I'm off to read the next now. (:Author's Response: Indeed she is! Yep, Matt is still keeping the secret with the help of his friends. He's far too afraid to tell Lily about it at this point. They both have issues and it's going to start some problems later on. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
I finally have time to catch up and review! I really do like Lily with Matt, they fit so well together. They're different, yet at the same time their differences balance each other out evenly. But I know that there's a fight coming and I can't help by dread it... I just want to skip over the fight and go straight to the marriage. I just know when you post the fight chapter I'm going to experience all the feels so I'm trying to brace myself for it.
I like Ashtyn, she seems like a good friend for Lily. Very reasonable and understanding. It's great that Lily has a friend like Ashtyn to calm her down and help her rationalize her thoughts. Anyway, I'm off to read the next chapter. (: Great job on this one!Author's Response: Yay! It was a little weird writing this because I had to flesh out Lily's personality in a way that she would fit nicely with Matt, because I've always imagined them together but hadn't ever written Lily much. I'm glad you think they fit!
Aww, yeah, there is a fight coming. But it might not be the type you're imagining.
Ashtyn is a lot of fun to write because she's so much the opposite of Lily. Lily definitely needs her. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Hi Teh! living.free / Leslie here for the review exchange. I really enjoyed this and thought you captured the true extent of what it feels like being on the outside looking in while snapping pictures of what's happening before your eyes. A photographer really is the watcher, watching all these participants doing these things without actually participating in what they're doing himself.
Also, despite how little we know of Dennis, I though you provided just enough characterisation for us to really see what his character is like and how he felt about his brother. We already knew that Colin and Dennis were close based on the fact that they always seemed to spend their free time while at Hogwarts together so the fact that you wrote their relationship really shows that closeness that they had for one another. I also liked how you showed Dennis feeling isolated from everyone after Colin's death and you really did a great job showing his isolation with his recalling how he had felt taking that photo of the fireworks with his brother just barely in the shot, as if he was disconnected from everything and everyone else around him.
The only critique I have is from a sentence that was awkwardly worded: '...whenever anyone entered the room she was in she would throw up her arms...'. You don't need 'she was in,' so instead it would flow better as '...whenever anyone entered the room she would throw up her arms...'. Aside from that I didn't notice any other awkward sentences so I guess that just slipped by when you were editing. Anyway, excellent chapter, Teh, I really did enjoy it and will have to read more of your stories when I have more free time. (: 10/10Author's Response: Hello there Leslie!
Thanks for your lovely review :) I'm so glad you enjoyed it; I'm quite happy with this little story myself. The Creevey brothers certainly are a sad story; they were such an odd, quirky and not exactly popular pair at Hogwarts. I'd even say that most people found them (especially Colin) pretty annoying :P
So for this fic I felt like giving both of them lives of their own, lives beyond their oddness, their silliness and everything. I don't know a whole lot about photography, but yes, I wanted there to be plenty of snapshots to capture the detail of life, to flesh out their missing lives a little bit more.
Thanks for pointing out that sentence! It certainly is clunky and I'll be fixing that :) Thank you once again for your review!
-teh Report Review
Hi Amanda! So, I don't think there's too much dialogue at all. You have a nice balance and flow between narrative and dialogue, and I'm enjoying reading the dialogue between the characters because you've done a great job putting their characterizations into what each character are saying. I especially liked the bit that you added about Rose having to shorten everything in explanation to why she called Twinkle 'Twinkie' instead. It showed her as the diva she is, while Lily seems a lot more down-to-earth and level-headed. Over all, great chapter!Author's Response: Oh, good! It seems like a lot more dialogue than I usually write, but maybe that's not a bad thing. It's really great that the characterization comes through even with the dialogue, like the example you mentioned with Rose and 'Twinkie'. Rose and Lily are definitely very different, and I think that makes them working as a pair more interesting. Hopefully you feel the same way.
Thanks for this fantastic review :)
-Amanda Report Review
Amanda, this chapter was humorous. I really like how you've characterized Rose and Lily, especially Rose because she's so different than the standard Rose that usually show up in fics. It's refreshing to read a story that has a whole set of different characterizations. That said, I like that you gave James a respectable job because it seems like he's the wanderer of the family in most fics so that was great to read. Respectability, in my opinion, suits James more than slacker does.
And the general overall flow of this chapter definitely made as much of a splash on my imagination as the first did. It's quite original and refreshing from all the cliche fics that are circulating the archives. (: Great chapter!Author's Response: Thanks, Leslie! It's good that the humor came through better in this chapter--I'm guessing thanks to Rose and her high maintenance personality :) I don't read enough next gen to really be up on what the cliches are, but I did try to create interesting and hopefully unusual characterizations here. I'm happy it all worked.
Thanks again for this awesome review!
-Amanda Report Review
Hi Amanda, I really enjoyed this first chapter. I'll have to read the others soon. The main reason I liked it is that we're in a completely different work environment then the usual that is seen in stories; it adds originality that you thought to give Darcy a more unique job working for Witch Weekly. I also like the narrative tone over all as it flows fluidly and I had no trouble imagining the characters voices and seeing the scenes play out in my mind while I read.
As for comedy, there weren't any 'hahahah' funny moments for me in this chapter, but it definitely had that light, airy feel of a comedy. It felt like one of those stories that's great to read when you need to relax from a busy day/week. Anyway, for this being your first next gen and comedy-based story, I'd say you're hitting the atmosphere spot on and the characters, too. I'm definitely intrigued about this plan that Dominique already has for a cover story since I'm sure that will be key to the plot. Over all, great first chapter and I'll definitely be returning to read the other chapters as you've already got me hooked.
(: LeslieAuthor's Response: Leslie, thank you so much. It was really sweet of you to do this for me, and I'll have to stop by when I get some time and return the favor :)
It does seem like most everyone in fanfiction graduates and becomes an Auror, teacher, or Healer, and so I really wanted to try something different. It's great that you liked the flow here and found the plot interesting.
I don't tend to write 'hahaha funny' comedy, sadly. It's something I've never been able to get right. I hope there will be some funny moments as the story progresses, though--I have one particular chapter in mind for that. I am pleased to hear that this is a good story for relaxing and just delving into a new world. Also, I hope you do come back to visit soon!
Thanks again for this wonderful review.
-Amanda Report Review
She met Amy, yay! That's basically the only thing that's standing out in this chapter for me... everything else is falling in its shadow in comparison. It was a very filler-y chapter anyway, but necessary since it can't be all fluff and romance and feels. But ah, I kind of wanted that interaction to be a bit longer than it actually was. Still a great chapter, though.
I also like how similar you've made James and Lily as I've always imagined them being more alike, then Albus being the different, odd one out of the siblings. Middle children often are different, statistically speaking since I wouldn't know since I only have one younger sister. But anyway, the point being that you've given them the same characterizations that I imagined them having. And I am looking forward to more interaction between them because they're snarky and hilarious together; definitely acts like brother and sister.
And I really like your Rose. She's so bold and take charge, yet she knows how to keep a secret because of her job. I also like how you have Lily thinking of her job as just getting paid to listen to people's problems even though it's more than that. It really develops more of Lily's character, while also glimpsing how she views Rose and what Rose does. Over all, great chapter! I'm looking forward to the next chapter! (:Author's Response: Yes, she did! They didn't get to talk for long, but don't worry, Amy will be back. I wanted to show just how busy she still is, because there's still so much for her to research.
I agree about James and Lily being alike and Al being the odd one out. That's how it works in my family, as you probably saw at Leaky, hehe. But I definitely got the feel from the epilogue that Al was a bit different from the other two. I'm really glad you like the way I've characterized them! There will be plenty more James and Lily interaction in the upcoming chapters.
I love writing my Rose! She's very outgoing and bold, but also very caring. She and Lily are very different, but still similar and are really close. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
It was a happy coincidence that this was the chapter that ended up going up on Valentine's day. You successfully squashed my feels with this chapter, too, just so you know. Put a fork in my feels, they're done. Just laying in a puddle on the floor beneath me.
I really liked the natural flow of conversation between Lily and Matt, too. The overall progression of this chapter really did feel like a walk through of a date, especially a first date, and I could relate to Lily's nerves as she waited on Matt. I'm curious when he's going to tell her about his furry secret, though, as it's clear they both really like each other and want to be serious. But in order to get to a serious relationship with each other, I feel like Matt is going to have to open up to Lily and tell her what he turns into on full moon nights. And I liked the few jokes you slipped in there to make it comedic and light. Over all, another great chapter. (: Can't wait to read the next chapter next Thursday.Author's Response: Indeed it was! Didn't even plan it! Hehe, squashed feels in a good way was my goal! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I'm glad the conversation seemed natural! That's what I was aiming for since Matt and Lily, despite not having hung out just the two of them, already know each other. You'll have to wait a while for the furry secret, though. Matt won't be in a hurry to disclose it. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Yay, they're going on a date. My inner fangirl is happy. Though I'm a bit wary of Lily not liking secrets being kept in relationships and Matt really does have a massive one; I just hope she won't be too angry that he didn't tell her his furry secret when he finally does tell her. And I like the friendship you've built around Albus, Rose, and Matt as I can tell that Albus and Rose really care about Matt and don't want him to get hurt anymore than he has in the past. Great friendships speak volumes about a person. Anyway, great chapter and I'm off to the next now. (:Author's Response: Lily's dislike of secrets and Matt's deep secret is going to be the main tension between them as the relationship goes on (as you probably could've guessed). I love the relationship between Al, Matt, and Rose. The three of them are the closest of all Albus's friends (and then John and Kaden are pretty close). Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Dang, I was half hoping that Matt would notice Lily sitting in the Rusty Bludger, too, and come over. But then again, he is really shy. Dang it to shy blokes who don't approach girls that like them because they're afraid of rejection! That's happened to me before in the past (mainly jr. high & high school... seemed to attract the shy guys more than the outgoing ones, which left me forever in the friend zone for the most part because they were too scared to make a move).
I'm happy for James. It's great that he's getting his life together. I wasn't sure what to expect when James showed up at Lily's with a request to be at dinner at their parents' to cushion the awkwardness so he could explain everything to their parents better without them blowing up. Awesome job writing James, by the way, which I mean as a complaint because anymore I find it difficult to find a James in a Next Gen fic that I don't like (which is sad because he used to be my favorite next gen character).
And eee! about the family tree you just posted because I see that Amy and Dillan had a daughter!!! I really want to see them make an appearance in this story, even if it is just a cameo appearance. (: Anyway, great chapter and if I remember correctly Matt and Lily are going have their first date in the next chapter...? :P Looking forward to reading more soon. (:Author's Response: Yeah, it would be out of character for Matt to have approached Lily at the pub. Chances are he noticed her, but was too afraid to approach her. Lily is the outgoing one out of the two, so keep that in mind as you think about how the relationship will begin. ;)
I feel like so many people write James as out of control and not doing anything with his life and I can see why it's easy to go that route. But I didn't want to keep it that way forever because it just didn't sit right. I'm really glad you like the way I've written him!
Ahh, I know, I didn't mean to mention Amy & Dillan's daughter in the family tree because I hadn't mentioned her yet in the story. Oops! Oh, well. They will all be playing a larger role in the story as it progresses. You'll just have to wait and see about their first date! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
I kept thinking Taylor Swift's song 'We Are Never Ever Getting Back Together Again' every time Lily had to reiterate that she wasn't going to get back together with Sean. And I'm not really a fan of that song, either, because it's dubstep. But anyway, I liked this chapter even if nothing happened since we got to see more of other characters that play a role in Lily's life. I like how you've portrayed Bradley, he seems like a character with multiple layers (he works a lot, yet will deny that makes him anything like his workaholic father), his work ethic shows him as caring about finding answers for each of his clients. And Rose is just brilliant, and her character is definitely reminiscent of how you wrote her in BtS which character stability is always good with companion stories. Over all, awesome chapter, Sarah! (:Author's Response: I love that song! I think of Lily every time I hear it and it's definitely been a vague inspiration to me during this story. I never thought of it as dubstep, though, because I don't like dubstep either.
I'm still in the introducing the characters phase. Most are characters I've used before, but a lot has changed. I'm really glad you like Bradley! He played a small role in BtS, so it was nice to bring him back. But Rose is my favorite of all the cousins! I love writing her. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
They kissed, they kissed, they kissed! I totally just had a fangirl moment when she kissed him, not even going to lie. It was cute, awkward, and it had just the right amount of tension build up leading to it. And I have a feeling that the real reason Matt pulled out wasn't just because Lily's his best friend's sister (may be part of it, though) but rather about his furry little problem once a month. But how is Lily to know about that. Bah, so frustrating. But in a good way. If it were easy to get these two together than there wouldn't be a point for a story :P Great chapter, Sarah! (:Author's Response: They did! Aww, I'm totally glad you had a fangirl moment. That makes me really happy! I'm glad you thought it had the right amount of awkward and tension because I always worry when I write kissing scenes. You're right in that there are other reasons Matt stopped the kiss besides Lily being Albus's sister, but Lily has no idea. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
I really love the interactions between Matt and Lily already and it hasn't even changed from platonic to romantic yet. I'll definitely ship them. Matt deserves some love in his life. I hope we get to see Amy some in this story, even if it's further in and only a couple times. You know what would be awesome... if you wrote the occasional chapter from Matt's perspective so we can see what's going on inside his head and how he feels about Lily. Just a thought. Anyway, great chapter and I'm looking forward to reading the next, especially since Lily said she'd make Matt dinner the next night for him watching Sir Thumbs (which sounds like a lovely cat *insert sarcasm*). Anyway, still loving the story. (:Author's Response: I love writing their interactions. They come so easily, which makes me even more sure they belong together, since I've written Matt a lot already. Matt definitely deserves love in his life.
I just wrote some Amy bits! She doesn't come in until much later on in the story, but she's there. You'll get a glimpse at what her life is like now, seven years later. I don't have plans to alternate points of view, but I do have a one-shot idea that will coincide with a certain chapter of this. I'll write it as I'm writing said chapter, so I can put them up at the same time.
I'm so glad you liked the chapter! Sir Thumbs is hilarious to write about, but he's definitely not a pleasant cat. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
I enjoyed this. There were a couple sentences that seemed like you said the same thing twice in one sentence, making it feel redundant, but I can't be bothered to go back and pick them out. I know that one was when you first described Scorpius as clamming up like a clam; the end of that sentence about him being like a clam could be chopped off because it was redundant since you don't need to clarify what you mean by the statement since it speaks for itself. Aside from the minor redundancy, though, I enjoyed this chapter as much as the first. :)Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I need to edit this story - it's remained pretty much untouched since I first posted it, and still needs a bit of work. Glad you liked it, though, and thanks for reviewing! ♥ Report Review
I really enjoyed this first chapter. It's been quite some time since I've read a decently written crack!fic and this one definitely is original in the style and word choices you've used to tell the story in. There isn't really much I can critic about it since I was just reading for enjoyment without keeping my eyes peeled for mistakes/errors. But I think that's what makes a story great, the fact that it's entertaining and easy to follow makes it well written; the general flow of the story was well paced and there weren't any hiccups in the flow that made me pause while reading. I'm looking forward to reading more of this, great job! (:Author's Response: Heee, I'm glad someone noticed that this /might/ just be erring on the side of crack!fic. It gets darker later, but mostly as a means of holding up the mirror to the crack. idk if that made sense~
thank you very much for reviewing! I'm actually about to edit this from the start (I just finished it, haha) so if you spot anything I could improve upon along the way please let me know :3 ♥ Report Review
Sarah! I really enjoyed this first chapter, it's so different from your other stories - a good different! It shows how much your writing has improved in the years since you've been writing fanfic and I love the voice you've given to Lily in this. It's different from Amy's voice, which is great because it shows that even if this is a companion to Beyond the Shadow you're still branching off from it for a completely new story. Great job so far and I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter when you post it... that's soon, right? You're going to do weekly updates with this one like you usually do with your other stories, right? Please say yes (: Anyway, guess I'll stop my fangirl rambling. Great story so far!Author's Response: I'm glad you like the difference! I'd been wanting to write something different for a while, which is why I wrote Between Here and Somewhere, but that was still angsty like my other stuff. So I figured I'd try something fluffy and romantic.
I love writing Lily! I didn't have her complete personality fleshed out when I started this, but now it's there. She's very different from Amy! That'll become even more apparent as the story goes on.
I'm so glad you're liking it so far. I am going to do weekly updates (on Thursdays, although if I have a busy Thursday they could be a day late) since I have a bunch of pre-written chapters. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
I really enjoyed this, especially how well you intertwined both Harry and Ginny together like you did by focusing on the way they moved in the moonlight (as though they were together even though they were miles apart). That said, I really think the second person perspective worked well for this piece. I'm not a huge fan of second person, only because of how hard it is to pull off, but I do like it when it fits and is written well. And I think you pulled the second person voice off quite well and it only emphasized how far away these two were, yet it offered a feeling of connection between them.
I also applaud you stepping out of your comfort zone to write a romance because I've, so far, only read your action stories. You're great at action, but you did just as great at romance here in this piece. I really felt the longing that both Harry and Ginny were feeling the more I read, and the ending was so perfect. It fit so well to have that last sentence being thought by both of them. It really sharpened the love they had for each other, as well as showing how connected they felt to each other on that night of all nights with the moon shining down, creating a path toward each other. 10/10
Excellent job, Rachel! (: -hugs-Author's Response: I'm so pleased that you enjoyed this! This story was written entirely so I could snag this gorg banner, but I like the way it turned out in spite of all that. :P The style, I think, was the most fun part about it, because I'd done the same thing in an earlier Ron/Hermione one-shot, and it worked so well that I knew it could work here, too, even though Harry/Ginny really isn't really a pairing I'm fond of. Second person is actually one of my favorite points of view to write, and I'm glad you think it was pulled off well here!
It's actually funny you mention that, because I'm way more comfortable with writing romance than writing action. :P Romance is the center of most of my stories, and even before I started posting here... I wrote EVERYTHING for romance! I always think I'm a little shoddy at action/adventure, so actually to hear that you like it is one of the best things in the world. ♥ That made my day!
Thank you so much for the review, Leslie! And I'm sorry I'm a little slow in responding; I'm trying to correct that now. :D I hope to see you back very soon!! Report Review
Hi Ren! Finally back to review the second chapter of this. I quite like it and it definitely has a very Austen-esque feel to the prose, while at the same time you've managed to mold in the wizarding world with the muggle. I'm looking forward to seeing Remus make his first appearance.
Oh, and I caught a grammar error: 'Now that they was bosom companions,...' It would flow better if 'was' was changed to 'were', aside from that it flowed and read well. Great chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more when I can. :)Author's Response: Hey Leslie! Thanks so much for coming back to review! I had so much fun trying to mesh the Austen-period with the obviously modern, though slightly anachronistic, wizard world. It's been like doing a big puzzle, and I find it really interesting.
Thanks also for catching that error. I don't have a beta for this story, and obviously I can't always catch every single typo. I'll make sure to change that next time I update. I type really fast and sometimes my fingers get ahead of where my mind is :)
Thank you again, and I hope you like the Remus stuff when you get to it! He's not a character I normally write (though I'm actually now using him in my other story, partly because I liked writing him in this one, so that's all thanks to you and your assignment). I'm having fun exploring his slightly wacky, Henry Tilney-based interpretation. Thanks again! ~Renny Report Review
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