Interesting, nice little James/ Lily with a twist! I'm interested to see where you take this, so please update soon :)Author's Response: While I love a classic James/Lily story myself, I've found that writing those can be tedious. I decided to give this twist a shot. I'm glad I've got you intrigued; I'll update as soon as I can. Thanks so much for reviewing! Report Review
So I've been on a quest to find a good Harry/Ginny post-war fic and thank you for finally delivering! I like that you didn't have them reunited right away. I wasn't sure if I would like the addition of an OC, but I think Emily balances the story a bit, I like her more than Ginny's friends from the beginning of the story. I'm so happy Harry/Ginny are finally together, and can't wait to see how you write them interacting more. Keep up the fabulous work, and I cannot wait for your next update :) Report Review
I'M SO GLAD YOU RESURRECTED!!! When I first started reading fanfiction, this story was my absolute favorite. And I was so so sad when you didn't update. And now, here you are! I'm ecstatic! I love James' character, he's my favorite. And I cannot wait for you to update again, please please make it soon!
-LizzieAuthor's Response: I'll start working on it as soon as I can! Big things happen! And it should be a pretty big chapter as well... I'm so glad that you are continuing to read the story even though i disapeared for so long. Thanks again! Report Review
Hola :) So I'm enjoying your story. I love Lily/ James. I really like your Sirius as well, and I'd like to learn more about Mia's character or witness more of Mia/ Sirius bonding time. I like Remus most of the time, it was weird for me whenever he was talking about liking Lily. Glad we moved past that. I think his character developed more after. Can't wait to see the next installment!Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you like my Sirius, there is a Mia/Sirius scene in the next chapter. Remus and Peter are going home soon but you will see more Snape. Report Review
HI! I was looking for Sirius/Lily's because I'm personally fond of the ship, and James/Lily also though. I like how you have the character of Lily in love with James instead of the typical despising James bit. I did like the first person because it strengthens the character, I think sometimes it was a bit repetitive, but that's just because Lily's thoughts are. I think it was a bit choppy to read. But I say excellent for your first shot! I'm gonna keep track of this :) Can't wait to see what's next!Author's Response: Thanks :) I love James/Lily and thought maybe it was time to change it a bit. So Sirius/Lily it is. I think I might switch back to third person or to Sirius' POV because it might just be easier. I thought personally Lily's thoughts would also be really repetitive because she's constantly thinking that the marauders are evil and gits and I just substituted her mean thoughts for loving thoughts of James. Thanks for the lovely review :) Report Review
Nicely done! I liked how you incorporated the holiday, it flowed nicely in the story. And I also liked how you broke it into two chapters. I'll be reading all the entries again before I make a decision so good work and good luck in the competition!Author's Response: thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it. Report Review
Awe, I like it! Good job deary. Can you just put a thing up saying I made your banner, love? Thank you kindly ;D Can't wait for the next installment.Author's Response: Haha thanks!!! I thought I put that up but I guess I' still have to pick up my brain from my locker :P sorry bout that. Next installment should be up soon! Report Review
Awe, this was really sweet. Well done. I didn't read the prequel just because for the contest I wanted to purely see if this could stand alone by itself and it could. I followed all of it and I like how you integrated the holiday and the flashbacks in your story. I also liked your characterization of all the Marauder's and OC's. I'll be reading all the stories again before I choose a winner for the contest, so good luck and well done!
-Ms. Lizzie/ Lizzie/ xtimexturnerxAuthor's Response: I really glad you liked it and am really happy that you were able to follow it. I tried not to use so much of the first story in it, but just have little lines relating to Yule Tide. It was basically just the format for the first story that was followed. I enjoyed this contest, it was a neat idea! And it was the first one I actually finished. lol Can't wait till you pick a winner! ~WolfAsh Report Review
Well done! I like how you integrated the real facts into the story, that was clever. I would really like to know the websites you used, if you wouldn't mind sending me the links on the forum? That would be fantastic. I liked the Next- Gen and the idea that muggle technology was becoming more prevalent, I could see that happening. I'll read them all one more time before I pick a winner for the contest, so good luck and well done!
-Ms. Lizzie/ Lizzie/ xTimexTurnerxAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'll be sure to send you the website. It has a whole bunch of other holidays too-- about one (and often more) for every day of the year.
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Well done! I really like your banner, as a side note. I use the same person for Scorpius in my story. Anyway, I've never been much into Lily II/ Scorpius, but you wrote them very well so it didn't seem stalkerish. I liked the holiday used as a fluff mechanism :D Very cute. I love fluffy one-shots. I'll be reading all the stories one more time before I decide a winner, so good luck and well done!
-Ms. Lizzie/ Lizzie/ xTimexTurnerxAuthor's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Yeah, I think Alex Pettyfer is the perfect Scorpius ^^ . And he's unbelievably handsome so...lol hehe.
Anyways, I was a fan of ScoRose before it became cliched. Now most of ScoRoses have a similar storyline and are something like next-gen Dramione...So I became a fan of Scorily instead, hehe ^^ .
I'm not usually a fan of fluff but I wanted to at least try and write something that is fairly manageable to read and not gag. So I suppose it's a good thing if it's cute because that's what I was aiming for. :D
THAT'S MY FAVORITE GILMORE GIRL'S EPISODE! Sorry, lol I just got really excited someone else watches that show. I thought this was really cute and fluffy. :D I was feeling like a nice little one shot. Nicely done! Love it.Author's Response: gilmore girls is awesome :D Report Review
I love your style of writing, this story has totally hooked me. I can't wait to go read more.Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope the rest of the story won't disappoint you (: Report Review
I was so excited to see that you updated this story! I'm such a fan of it, I'm glad you chose to put up the next installment in it. And I'm not going to hunt you down, I know what it's like to not feel like writing, but I'm glad you got out of it and came back to the FF universe!!! Can't wait to see what's next. (Preferably more quickly??)
-Lizzie Report Review
Ooooh this chapter was intense. I like the way you portray the Sirius/ James bond, you make it very brotherly, much like I've pictured it to be. I really enjoy your story, please update soon!Author's Response: Working on it... not sure why I always take on a ridiculous workload, but I've done it again. I'll try to update within the week though. Report Review
I think Peter's reaction makes sense with his characterization. Out of all the Marauder's I expected him to be least mad, I think you wrote that very well. :D Nice job, can't wait for the next update! Report Review
Thank you for finally updating!!! I love this story, I think it's so fresh and original. And I quite liked this chapter. So, I feel like randomly predicting:
1. Viola will end up falling in love with Sirius and go to tell him about the mask and he'll get mad for being "betrayed/ lied to" but they'll end up together
2. She'll play the prank, and they won't end up together.
The first one is the hopeless romantic in me :D I love happy endings. Can't wait to see what happens next. Report Review
Okay, I could be incredibly slow this morning, but I am vaguely confused, did Remus actually INJURE Mute? That would make me sad. I love them. I've never loved Remus/ OC like EVER, so this is big for me. You write them together so well. I really like this story and sometimes I wish I knew a little bit more about Camilla and Elise, to answer the review question. And if I could change something, Lily wouldn't have slept with James under those circumstances (but that would make a far less interesting plotline, so I still do like it). Thanks for another great chapter!!! Report Review
MUTE AND REMUS NEED TO STAY TOGETHER OR ELSE I WILL BE INCREDIBLY UPSET. But I love you story!!! Author's Response: Lol, I'll see what I can do. Thanks for reviewing!
I'm glad that you like it!
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AH OMG OMG! NO! I am literally all tensed up and biting on my nails and about to tear out my hair. Remus, come back! You have made me so attached to him and to Mute! And to James and to Lily (btw, I can't believe she went THROUGH with that)! I'm so emotionally distraught! I need to keep going! You're amazing however, please please keep writing.Author's Response: I'm sorry that it's all so stressful for you! haha! Thank you so, so much for reviewing! It means the world to me.
Thanks again, I'll try to update soon!
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OMG SO GOOD! AH! I love this story so much! Can't talk! Next chapter!Author's Response: Haha, I'm really glad that you like it!
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Hmmm I like Camilla. She's different. She seems like she's all detached and calculated, but I feel like she doesn't know exactly what SHE'S getting to either. I think she might end up quite liking Sirius Black. You officially have me hooked. :D Excellent work.Author's Response: That's exactly how she is--she's totally detached or appears to be, but she has so much going on inside her head, that while you may think she's cool and collected, she's actually completely broken. It's just the sort of complicated character I think is truest to humanity. Thank you so much for reviewing!
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Hm, I'm very intrigued by your story. I really love your writing style, it's fantastic. I quite like Mute, I didn't think I was going to. Likewise with Remus, as I usually gravitate towards Sirius and James in fanfic, but you make him really good. Can't wait to see where this goes.Author's Response: I agree, I don't usually like Remus as much as I like the other two, but I wanted to make sure that Mute, who I based quite a bit off of myself, would like him, and therefore I had to. It's complicated, haha. Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm glad that you're liking it!
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ahhh another cliffe!!! please please update quickly, I can't wait to see what happens next! Report Review
YAY! I love this chappie! And the ending. I vote you post epilouge, or maybe not. Cause it's kinda cool how it ends. :P Whatever you think is best. I'm so proud of you for cutting down so much!! Good job! Love your fic and you!!! (In a not creepy way.) :P Great job and can't wait for your next fic.Author's Response: thank you very much thans for all your help and i may or may not post the epilogue still undecided.thanks for the review and hopefull ill have chapter 1 of my next story up soon! Report Review
Oooh this chapter was very intense. I always love action bits and I think you wrote it extremely well and I enjoyed the two points of view. I must say I am quite fond of Fern, she's a great character. Excellent job on your story so far, can't wait to read more. Report Review
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