I love it, but the story is a little all over the place. Its hard to focus on one thing when you're talking about Remus, Oliver, and everything else at once. If you maybe focused on her meeting her dad, then seeing the Woods it would be easier to follow, but truly I am in love with this story and I can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: This is true. I kind of write randomly, it all flows out of me, so I get a good voice and flow. But my plot suffers. Thank you for bringing this even more to my attention and I will try to do better in the future!
Yay! I am truly in love with you as a reviewer and thanks so much!!! Report Review
Its very good. Keep up the good work!
btw I told you I would make you a banner for "Dear Ollie" so here is the link:
http://i24.photobucket.com/albums/c6/LadyMalora/Banners/For%20Other%20People/3.jpgAuthor's Response: Oh goodness!
THANK YOU SOOOO MUCH!
I LUFF YOU!
I really like it. I can't wait for the next part. I'll make you a banner right now if you like.Author's Response: Oh yes, please! I'd love that! Report Review
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