Interesting premise. I don't think I've seen Regulus portrayed this way - not that I read many from his pov as opposed to Sirius.
I'm curious about some of the changes you've made and I'm wondering how they effect the story (like Sirius and Regulus being twins).
Great cliffy ending. I do wonder what is going on with Rhianna. Actually, I'm curious about what's going on with Lynn, too, that her uncles would treat her as they do.
I enjoyed the description at the beginning of the chapter. It was well done and it gave me a sense that you could really see the common room in your head as you described it. Nicely done.Author's Response: Thank you! You'll find out most of the stuff in chapter 4. I thought that Regulus and Sirius would be good as twins, because it gives me more of a relationship to play with.
Once I've finished writing this one, and have posted all of it, there are about another three parts, though there may be more by the time I get there. I've already started writing the next one.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it and I'm sorry if I've bored you now by waffling on at you! Thank you! Report Review
Well, I've just sat down and read all four chapters (sorry for not leaving a review for each chapter). I think you're doing a great job so far. I found it interesting that James and Sirius would know each other before school started. I thought it was very Slytherin of Sirius to blame James (way back in first chapter), but then, who could blame the boy; that was all he knew, right? So I thought it was good for the character.
I can't wait to find out about this mysterious long-haired girl, and, of course, for Remus to finally complete the four-some.
Keep it up, you're doing a great job.Author's Response: Woot! Lovely review! Thank you so much! :)
Yes, I thought it would be quite logical that they had known each other before school. Because they were both pure-bloods after all. ;)
Yes, poor Sirius. He didn't know any better. His beliefs were all screwed up.
Well, I'll be happy to tell you then, that the next chapter will be entirely in Remus's POV. ^^
Anyway, thanks again, I really appreciate this! *hugs* Report Review
Aww. That was cute. I like how you got them together. And nice comment by Harry, by the way. Ha ha.Author's Response: Thanks :) Report Review
EEEK You left the chapter there?
Well done. I like the interactions with the friends and that, no matter how hard they (Sirius and Amelie) try to hide, their friends do get in.
I love the side story with James and Lily (kind of even reflects on a much lighter level what's going on with Sirius and Amelie).
Well, I'm looking forward to the next chapter... and the confrontation. Love to see where you're going to take this.
Thanks for writing.Author's Response: Mwwhhahahaa. Yes, the chapter is staying there for the next, er, two or three weeks...
*rubs hands together sinisterly and feels incredibly evil and powerful* DiEEEEEEEEEE.
No, don't die... I love you really, really I do... and your fantabulous reviews. Ils sont awesome! ;D
merci beaucoup! Report Review
That was cute. Thanks for writing and sharing.
Oh... and thanks for remembering that the boys were still the boys even in animal form. :) Report Review
Ha ha ha ha.
Awesome! hee hee.
Well done.Author's Response: LOL on your randomness.
Thanks for the review! Report Review
Hee hee hee. I like it. I like how you opened. I like the humor. I'm looking forward to more. (and... on a side note about length... I don't think I've ever read a story I really enjoyed and thought, well that chapter was just too long. So all good stories have to-short chapters. :) )
Loved it. Thanks for writing and sharing. I'm looking forward to more.Author's Response: Oh. Thank you. I love when people like what I write...lolz... I'm glad you like humor. there is quite a bit of humor [if i do say so myself] if you stick around for chapter two... and three... and four... anyway.
Thank you so much from reviewing. i always worry about length... so assurances/criticism is always very much appreciated. =D Report Review
Aww. That was good. I haven't read a whole lot of fanfics, especially from Lily's perspective, but I like the take on the situation - the uncertainty.
Thanks for writing and sharing with the rest of us.Author's Response: The perspectives change a lot...so it's mostly from Sirius, but there is some from everyone. Thanks for the review! Report Review
Nicely done. I enjoyed the story. You did a great job with Sirius' pov.Author's Response: thanks Report Review
Hee hee. Nicely done.Author's Response: Yay! Report Review
Aww. That was cute.
Thanks for writing and sharing with us. :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading! Report Review
I enjoy reading different perspectives of the boys and Lily. It's nice to get another one. You've definitely intrigued me. I'm curious to know about Charlie, because it definitely seems not is all as it... um... well, seems.
Keep it going. Thanks for writing and sharing.
ASmilingGrimAuthor's Response: Well I'm glad I've intrigued you. That's always a good thing to get from your readers. :) Yea, Charlie plays an important role later on in the story, so keep a close eye on him. *hint, hint.* Thanks so much for the review and Chapter three should be ready by the time my chapter for another story is validated. Thanks again! Report Review
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