Helllo there dear! I'm back to review chapter nine :)
I think I need to get my act together in terms of reading this story, because it's becoming difficult to keep track of where I am with reading all these little bits and pieces. So, for one I'm interest at how Hermione's going to find our anymore about our favourite bit of dark magic without access to any of the other books, and there was a little Draco in this chapter so that was nice.
I liked Harry in this chapter too. He seemed nice and in character... as did Hermione's irritation at not getting the hang of apparation very quickly. I'd be irritated too as it's clearly the most exciting bit of magic they ever learn ahhaa.
Well, this was another lovely chapter and it was good to be back here :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Helen! I just love getting your reviews! I'm currently working on chapter 12, I would say that I'm about halfway done with it at the moment so I know I wont get it out before the break but i'm hoping to have it finished and to my beta soon so that i can have it up when we can post again! The fact that you think both Harry and Hermione are in character just makes my heart so happy! I'm trying so hard to keep everyone in character while still making it a dramione.. so we'll see! Thank you so much for coming back to read and review! I do hope you come back again!
~Slytherinchica08~ Report Review
Ack, okay I love this.
I mean, she is pure evil and it's delightful. Not even in the way that people sometimes write evil characters, either, but she's just... wow. There was just something so excellent about her somewhat violent (and slightly beyond) tenancies and her just existing in Hogwarts and accckk, LWG, I realllyyy like it and I'm going to add it to my favourites. I love stuff like this that's a little bit messed up and leaves you a tad unsettled, and I don't think I've ever read such a smooth piece of writing with such a... unique main character.
The last bit, ack ack akc, that last line was just so great that I can't get my head around it. I loved the bit about the sword. Wonderful. Is she a gryffindor? How is this going to turn into a longer story? I can't wait to reaadd morreee. Love it.
Happy writing :)
-ACAuthor's Response: FEELING SO FLATTERED RIGHT NOW.
I must admit, I feel delightfully evil when I'm writing this story actually. There's something so satisfying about writing characters such as Lila - well, to me anyway. And I often have to ask myself whether I'm overdoing it a bit; I mean, it's not entirely realistic is it. :P But yes, I wanted Lila to be unique, so I just kept pushing the ToS boundaries- and will continue to do so. ;D
No she's not Gryffindor, she's in Slytherin, but I can see why you might think she's gryffindor!
-LWG :) Report Review
Okay, so this was just so lovely! I started my own Minerva story before we got the extra information from Pottermore, and I'm not entirely sure I can forgive myself for the canon now being wrong especially when I look at how beautifully this turned out!
McGonagall is such an underrated character! Because you can quite clearly gleam from the pages that she absolutely loves all of her students to death, as well as being strict and just, really, the perfect teacher to everyone. This was so great and emotional - I really really liked it.
There was just this one mistake I saw here She mved to Hogwarts and the castle became home for the woman. So, if you just go back and put that O in I'm pretty sure I'll be without complaint, and that was just a typo anyway.
Thanks for writing!
-ACAuthor's Response: Hello! First of all, let me just say that I'm so thrilled you read my story since I am such a big fan of yours! Now that that's out of the way...
The idea for this actually came when I was reading about Minerva online and I saw all the lovely canon info provided after the books. I just had to do it.
As for the mistakes, I keep editing and looking over but sometimes things just slip. I'll get to it.
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Oh hellloo there!
So, first off you said in your last review and in your authors note that you find first person difficult, but really that doesn't come across here at all! I've never read anything from Charlie's point of view before, and he's such an interesting character.
Mostly, we just see him through Harry's sort of perspective, when he's much older, so we never really get to see him truly excited about his work with dragons. And, reading this, it sort strikes me how hard it must have been for him to leave them during the war to fight for the cause, and how long he'd have stayed afterwards. also, how weird it must have been for Tonks to end up in a relationship with Remus (I mean, Charlie/Tonks is near my head cannon - it had to happen at some point, right?) but I guess that's a thought process for another time.
I could feel his passion surrounding the dragons, though, and the little details you added about the keeping of dragons and such were really interesting... so yeah, this was a really good chapter! I think I preferred the first one, but mostly because there wasn't enough Tonks/Charlie moment in it.
Anyway can't wait for an update!
Happy December the 7th :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Hi Helen!! I actually never thought about these two until my friend Dan commented on how much he liked them as a pairing. Then the more I started writing the more they just worked! In my head everything ends canon, so that does make for a bit of issues in regard to Charlie's feelings about Remus and Tonks. Althouhg I think bu that point he realized all he's done is hurt her, and that they really aren't healthy for one another.
And I'm so happy you can't tell I was struggling with first person! Honesty, almost every other paragraph I accidentally start switching back into third. Haha
I'm so happy you liked this chapter! I really wanted to show just how much the reservation and the dragons mean to Charlie, because his career of course goes a long way to ripping at his relationship. Ugh, these two just never had a chance from the moment I decided to title this Hazardous, haha.
Thank you so much for this awesome review. And I'm patiently (except not) waiting for the last tree chapters of NJAB ;)
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So, firstly I have a bone to pick with you. Because you never mentioned that you were this good. I mean, seriously, we've been having all these conversation and you never thought to mention that you were writing these beautiful things full of emotional depth (and maturity, by the way) and originality and just pure loveliness.
I loved the way you started, with the colours because the descriptions were just so preeettyyy and I'm a sucker for a pretty description (really I am, can't resist pretty language). And then the structure with the italics and the time changes was just spot on and perfect and worked so well that you were just slaying me with how wonderful this was.
And then, in terms of originality, I've seen the idea of self preservation been done before, but never in the same way as this with a Healer and her mixed feelings about healing and being the cause of death and healing for the wrong side was just lovely.
There was just the one line that I found a tad confusing; People who came in on the brink of death had been seen taking their leave a ghost of a smile on the curve of their lips. but other than that the whole thing was all smoothy smooth and perfect.
Ack. Adding this to my favourites, you talented little lady.
-Helen Report Review
So Hanzi, my bestest forum buddy to whom I've been mst terrible to, the thing is that I've already read this and did you the injustice of not leaving you a review! I am surely the most horribleist person that ever did exist, and I am now here to rectify such a miscalculation of justice (although, it is prompted by the holiday review swap, which just goes to show what a horrible creature I am).
SO what I love about this story is that... well, for one I have no idea where you're going to go with this. Your stories are always like that though, even though I've attempted to help you out with your fair share of plots and stuff i'm never sure what's actually going to happen... and this, this... with Peter who is such a creepy figure and your repetition of 'subtle and fleeting' still stays with me. And probably will do forever.
I really like the fact that at first you didn't let on that Peter was real, instead letting home only seen by her... but then threw in that her mother saw him too and it's like WAIT WHAT and yeah. I just really like this and I cannae wait to read onwards my dearest loveliest Hanzi dear :)
-AC Report Review
Hey there Laura (I just had this moment when I was debating whether myself about whether it was Laura or not, I was almost entirely sure but I couldn't remember where I knew this from, but I checked so it's all fineee)!
It's funny, because today at uni we were doing the sceptical argument from dreaming and the basic idea is that we never know when we're dreaming until we're awake, and this just really reminded me of that when I started reading again. You write this so beautiful, but the premise is so sinister and I'd almost forgotten about that until this chapter when Molly has like... a slip and loses track of who she is a little bit with the business about the Slytherin table...
it's terrifying. Do you know that? The idea that a book could absorb you like that, and you package it all up in this beautifully written second person and I'm genuinely in awe. I mean, I've never read a story where second person worked for longer than a chapter or two... but your decision to have half of it in 2nd person and half in 3rd person is definitely genius and just... ack, I love everything about your characterisation of Molly and just this .
This has still got to be one of my favourite WIPs on the archives.
Anyway, lovely to be back! And I hope to return again soon. Happy writing!
-Helen Report Review
Hello there Beeezie!
It's been a really long time since I've read any of your work (or indeed, hp fanfiction in general) but I'm really glad to be back and reviewing! So, I haven't read that many ScoRoses, in actually fact, and I don't think I've read one that I've really liked for well over a year... but this is just lovely.
I love the idea of Rose holding onto her family in such a way, cause whilst I imagine it must be hard being a member of such a huge family it would also be nice to feel like you belonged to something so big and solid.
I still really like your writing style as it's smooth and lovely and a real pleasure to read. This has got to be one of my favourite quotes that I've come across for a really long time. "Given how little concern James had ever showed for his safety, Rose was still a bit worried about what "a lot less nervous" meant." - with just the right amount of snark and wit in it to really make me smile.
And Scorp, ack, I like this Scorp. My head canon Scorpius is more than a little pathetic, but this version of Scorpius is really lovely too. I liked his pressing of the issue and Rose's avoidance and, well, it seems like a sensible qualm for Rose to have which I'd never thought about all that much.
So yes, this was a lovely first chapter and I'm really glad I got a chance to read this. Roll on Christmas and even more time for reading!
Happy writing :)
-ACAuthor's Response: I'm really sorry it's taken me awhile to respond to this very lovely review - I keep meaning to sit down and give you a proper response, and then time keeps on getting away from me. This may not be as proper response as I would like, but it's all getting a bit ridiculous at this point and I hate seeing the unanswered review sitting here like I don't appreciate it, because I really do.
I'm glad you liked this version of Scorpius. I'd actually read quite a lot of ScoRoses before I started writing Curiosity Is Not a Sin (the prequel to this), and it definitely informed how I constructed his character. Ditto James and Rose, haha.
Thank you so much for this wonderful review. ♥ Report Review
So, I was glancing through the reviews threads and I was like WAIT A MINUTE THERE'S BEEN AN UPDATE OF OBLIVIOUS so now I'm not up to date with reading and reviewing! And although my christmas holidays haven't quite starting, winding down isn't so much the word as being just slightly off completely stationary in terms of things I have to do. Oh, to have time!
So, this chapter. Well, it just made me feel really christmassy and lovely which was nice, because I haven't even got an advent calendar so Christmas doesn't feel all that close from my end. I really enjoyed the argument between Hailey and her sister, as it definitely seems like the sort of thing siblings argue about aaal the time, and the re-arrival of Tait.
One of the things that I really like about this story is the fact that, at the beginning, I was sure that this was going to be a full blown standard Oliver/OC (and I'm still waiting for that to creep in), but you've developed this lovely and unprecedented relationship between Hailey/George that I'm really behind. So I honestly have no idea where you're going to go with the rest of this story :P
One thing, I always think that writing seems smoother when numbers are written out in word form rather than numerical form. Like two instead of 2, I've always thought that it reads better and seems less... like jarring when a number is written as a word. But that's a really small thing.
Happy writing! Can't wait for the next update :)
-AC Report Review
I'm here! I'm here at last! I guess all it took was a festive mass review swap for me to come back.
But, seriously, first I want to offer apologies for taking such a long time to get to this chapter. It's just after the events of the last chapter aligning all too clearly with events of the real life variety, I didn't feel like I could face this next chapter for the longest time. And then when I did come to read it I'd written out half a review before I accidentally clicked off the page and lost everything I'd written, and I took that to mean now wasn't the right time and decided to come back to it later again. And thus, here I am.
I do feel bad though, because I'm a biggg fan of Just Rose and it was one of the only stories which I reviewed continually from start to (almost) finish, but here I am and I'm wasting your time rambling on about this.
So with you wielding the mass shovel of death around and the feels associated with that I can't get really really get excited about Matthew without some degree of guilt, but still YAY AND ROSE LIKE HAS A PROPER PROPER JOB AND EVERYTHING and life is sort of like that, right, with bad things leading to good things and things just sort of happening and spanning out and I really liked this chapter.
Especially Scorpius, he was great in this chapter. An Dom's saying sorry and everythings getting SO intense and, yup, it's good to be back. If only for...two more chapters.
-AC Report Review
Hullo there! :)
So, I've seen this story floating around for a really long time and have actually been meaning to read it, because the whole thing seemed so intriguing! But for the past year I seem to have hardly read any fanfiction at all and so it just keeps slipping past my radar. But, I'm really glad that I'm here now, especially as this is a radar and one rarely finds a really good radar!
So, I really love the premise of it all. This is a very introductory chapter but as introductory chapters go it's a really interesting and well written one. For one I'm really thrilled that Ron is the one who hasn't properly moved on, as there's so much Ron bashing in fanfiction so it's nice that Hermione is well.. not portrayed badly, or anything, but that she's the one who's taken steps.
In terms of characterisation, I really liked how Hermione had obviously thought about and questioned her lack of memories a lot more than Ron had, as I can imagine something like that would have irked Hermione continually until she had some form of answers... and I really want to know more about that. I sort of want to hear more about Harry, because I find the idea of him giving up on them really really sad, but I guess... three years is a long time.
But yeah, this is a really interesting story and I'm glad to finally get a chance to read it!
Happy writing :)
-AC Report Review
So lovely to be here!
First, you had me at "Lord Gurdyroot?" Honestly. Wonderful start that had been grinning from the first word :D
"We use the Hufflepuff method: group hugs and talking about your feelings."
Dying. Genuinely. This is hillarious. Please write more spoof stories about Lord Gud - sorry, Voldie.
Well, I could genuinely sit here and quote my favourite lines at your for a significant amount of time, but I've got to say I really think you have a talent for this sort of parody writing. It takes quite the person to stop something like this becoming ridiculous and actually being funny, and bits and pieces about winning the last battle with glitter cannons were really quite something.
I really loved it, especially with Voldemort breaking down in a way that actually made me want to give him a hug, and the bits about the unicorn and... ack, basically I really really enjoyed it and I'm so glad I got a chance to come here and read.
I know this is a one shot, but for one I would absolutely love to read the continued rehabilitation of the other addicts (I have least hope for Bella... and poor Lucius, lol), or any other oddball parody death eater stories you write :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Wow, thank you for your kind words. =) I'm really glad you stopped by and decided to review this particular story.
I had a big, goofy smile on my face when I read your review. I had hopes that you might like it, but I didn't certainly expect such high praises. =)
It's so nice to read about your favorite lines. The opening line just popped up in my mind and then I just jotted all this silliness down.
I love to write comedies, darker the better actually. I have plans and some writing done for prequel which will be about Lucius's dark ploys and sequel with Voldy. So more of this silliness will definitely see light some day.
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Hello there! Wishing you holiday feels and here with a review.
First off, I really really loved the first part of the story. It was really nice and refreshing for it to be admitted at the start of a story that love isn't exactly always enough to guarantee a relationship working... and you know, for about half the chapter I really did believe that they were going to break up and this was going to start like that and like back track or something, but I think that was partially because that's how I did my NaNo project, ahha. But Tonk's anxiousness about it all happening really came through and you had some reaaall pretty descriptions that just made me melt a little bit (sucked for a bit of descriptive language, me).
I became exceedingly aware of the density in his voice
Ack! I just loved it. It was so right and poetic, and I've never thought about associating the idea of density with someone's voice before, but I love love love love it.
I also really like the Tonks/Charlie pairing and, after a failed attempt at writing it myself have been looking for one. So I'm really excited to come back and read the next chapter at some point soon, and then hopefully the ones that come after it ;)
-ACAuthor's Response: Hi darling!! I'm so happy you chose to review this. I need to get working on this story a bit more, but it's kind of my 'take feels out on these characters' story. With my Marauders, everything fits together. James and Lily both have weakness that the other strengthens, Sirius and James have a friendship that depends on one another, the four Marauders together work in such a specific and perfect way so that group would need every friend to function how it does... anyway, it just gets exhausting. I love it, and that's how it needs to be for them, but sometimes I just want to write something destructive. And that's where Tonks and Charlie come in.. haha!
I wasn't sure if that line made much sense... you know how when someone wants to 'talk' and they get sort of quiet, and there's something so huge waiting on the other side of the 'talk'.. that's basically what I was trying to get at, so knowing that you really liked that line has made my day!
This review has seriously given me all kinds of warm fuzzies ♥ thank you so much for stopping by! And if you make it to the next chapter, I hope you enjoy that one as well! It's a bit more Charlie centered... well... completely charlie centered to be honest :P Report Review
Hey! I'm not entirely sure whether this the first of your stuff that I've read or not, but can I just say that I really loved this?
I wouldn't exactly call myself a Ginny fan for the most part and I think this mostly sums up exactly why - the whole Dean Harry thing? Like, I understand that Ginny was in love with him for evverer and I suppose Harry is all right and she had to date someone, i guess, but still... Dean? His dormate?
If she hadn't really given up, as she said she hadn't, then why Dean . Plus, we never got much reaction from him in the books and I always thought that must make for some awkward dorm sits (although Harry quite obviously doesn't care, and I guess he does have quite a few problems to deal with), but still.
This happens to be one of my favourite quotes ever.
"I suppose her magic isn't the only think Ginny Weasley canít control."
I literally just laughed. It's just so... angry post break up person just thinking and saying anything because they're in that 'I hate her' zone before they you know... start to get over it.
So, yes, I loved this and I'm very glad I got a chance to read it :)Author's Response: Awww! I believe this might be the first time you've reviewed something of mine, but I don't mind. Most of my stuff I'd just like to shove in a corner and pretend never existed.
Thanks so much for the awesome review! I strangely had a lot of fun writing angsty post-break-up Dean simply because it lends itself to so much humor and general angry tirades. Great for when you're having a bad day. Plus I just wanted to give Dean a voice because Ginny really was a jerk when she just rebounded onto Harry. She's supposed to be smart! Why would she pick Harry's dormate?! *sigh*
Thanks for the awesome review!
~cb ") Report Review
Hullo there Amanda!
So, a very long time ago I read the first chapter of this story and fell in love with your pretty descriptions and added it as a favourite, and then very promptly because very busy and never read any further. Which I'm currently really regretting because this chapter was full of really really lovely descriptions as well, and it was a real pleasure to read this.
First off, you definitely manipulated my feels A LOT in regards to talking about how much Lily liked Halloween. That was really, really rather cruel and you should be ashamed of yourself for making me feel so. But all the little bits about Autumn were lovely too, and in the idea that Lily would think about being a witch before she knew was was lovely... I'm just imagining her little snippets of magic and this little kid just thinking she was deluding herself and such.
And then we have the Marauders, whom I'm a little bit in lover with, and I really liked the characterisation of all of them and how smoothly you introduced these characters. Particularly after seeing Sirius in the last chapter (which I reread before getting back to this) and how he comes across here, ack. I just loved that it was really lovely.
So basically, this was a lovely chapter that I enjoyed very much. And I should think I'll be back quite soon :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Hi AC! I'm glad to see you back here for the swap, and I hope you continue past this point :)
Haha, I liked the opening to this chapter. It was cute to imagine Lily as a little girl dressing up like a witch and 'pretending' to do magic. Think she had any accidents back then? If so, she probably just thought her eyes were playing tricks on her. Very cute.
I'm glad you like how I've characterized the boys! I stressed a lot about it because I know they've been cliched to death and I didn't want to mess it up. Hopefully, if you do read on, you'll enjoy watching them grow together.
Thanks again for this very sweet review :)
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Hey there! So I'm really sorry I took hours with the review stop, I got caught up doing absolutely nothing and really enjoying it and I didn't notice the time slip past.
So, this was a really cool first chapter. I like how Rose isn't nice (because I really do hate nice characters, they're honestly sickening) and the bit about Beethoven was wonderful and really made me smile. I wish I'd gotten a bit more information about the characters though, or a little more clue to the plot, as having read this I still have no idea what this story is going to be about (although I'm definitely intrigued).
And I always like stuff about the wizarding wireless and other bits and pieces that really fill in the gaps of wizarding culture, which I care about more than I probably should given the whole fictional thing. But radio shows are always fun, so I really liked that aspect of things (poor Ernest though :O)
Really enjoyed it either way and it was a pleasure swapping with you! :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Haha it's fine! I am quite literally the most distractible person in this planet! Thank you so much for the wonderful review! I'm glad you like Rose, she's very fun to write.
Hmm, the exposition is difficult! I have left a few clues in there as to the plot, but perhaps they are a little subtle...
I do like those too- I suppose that's mainly why I like writing this so much!
Thank you again for the review.
So that was really really cute and really put a smile on my face. I completely agree that it's rubbish that the boy always has to ask first, and this was a nice acknowledgement of that. I don't think I've ever seen it in fanfiction, actually... at least, no occasions really stick out. So yeah, power to women and the like.
Also, out of the three pieces of yours that I've read I definitely think this came across as the smoothest and the easiest to read, so that as lovely to see too. Really enjoyed it and glad I read it :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Thank so much for this lovely review. I wasn't really thinking about writing about a girl asking a boy out, instead of what is usually the norm. I was just really trying to write a cute fluffy piece. But as I read through it again it seems to me that I wrote about that quite subconsciously I guess.
It was really nice to read that out of all my stories this was the smoothest and easiest pieces to read, as I was rather worried that it was a bit clunky and not very well written. So that cheered me up a lot.
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Hullo there! Ac here from the BVB review battle.
First, my favourite part of this little one shot was definitely the deliberation over the letters. I thought that showed a lot of the personality and indecision shining through, and it was really nice little piece of her thoughts that I don't think came through as well through the rest of the piece. I think I wanted to know a bit more about what was going in Penelope's head and just generally wanted more of everything, you know?
More background about the bookshop and their relationship crumbling and everything. What you had here was good and really interesting, but it didn't leave me satisfied. I just wanted there to be so much more meat to it so I didn't finish reading it and experiencing it so quickly :)
It was really nice though and exactly how I imagined the Percy/penelope relationship falling flat :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Thanks a lot for this review. I wasn't too sure whether I should included the letters, so you definitely reassured me on that. Thanks for the suggestions about more background on the bookshop and relationship. I'm thinking about expanding this one-shot into a short story so I can expand a lot more onto Percy and Penelope's relationship.
Thanks again for your lovely review.
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Hullo there! Sorry to take a bit longer than I thought it would do to get to this review, but the essay caught up with me quite dramatically. But this... this was really interesting. Sirius is one of my favourite stories and will continue to be so for ever, probably, and these Halloween snippets brought with them plenty of my feels related to poor Sirius (and of course Remus, who I think I feel slightly sorrier for... but maybe only just... it's something I honestly debate quite a lot). I kind of which I'd gotten the chance to see Remus in this, actually, but that wouldn't have fit in with canon nearly so well.
The idea of Sirius visiting Godrics hollow after he escaped never really struck me before. Now, of course, I can't imagine any reason why he wouldn't go there... but the idea of him sniffing around their old home and remembering being young is just heartbreaking and ackkk..
Anyways, I really enjoyed this and I thought your descriptions were lovely and I just wanted to read more of it really. Poor Sirius. I will now go tend to my feels.
Thanks for writing :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Hi! No worries, school must come first after all. =)
Poor Sirius and Remus. Sigh. I can't decide either, who to sorry most. I was originally trying to write Halloween fic for Marauders era, but Sirius decided that writing something else was more suitable. I dunno what it says about me, that I just let characters take over and dictate my writing. =P
It was quite heartbreaking to write as well. So in a twisted way I'm happy that you felt that way too, and that I managed to convey those feelings to paper.
Thank you so much for your review! =) Report Review
Ack, so this was so darn cute that I genuinely feel like I've melted. I mean, really, so darn sweet and I want to give the pair of them a hug. I loved the banter between Ron/George/Ginny/Percy and Percy's internal thought stream was just absolutely.
A wide, proud smirk was plastered across his face in response to his own, self-diagnosed cleverness. The bit about self-diagnosed cleverness. ack, I just loved that so much it was unreal. Then again I know you have all these wonderfully pretty ways of describing things that make me melt inside. Really, you say you don't do humour but this was so cute and lovely that I have to say I DEFINITELY do think you do little one shots like this which are just sooo cute.
And it was definitely a date. I'd have called the same as Ginny, then again I don't think it would have been such a cute story if it had just been pie and Percy had been so taken with her that he'd decided to ask her on an actual date... but the line about magic. ACK. Loved it. Yup, so, enjoyed it all and very glad I got a chance to read this snippet of loveliness :)
-AC Report Review
hullloo, sorry about the slight time lapse in getting your review! This is a really interesting moment of the Potterverse that I've never really considered before - obviously well aware of the Spinner's End debacle and the conversation in it, but it's never crossed my mind what exactly the two sister must have been saying to each other before this whole thing happened... and I've spent a lot of time thinking about HP so it was nice to come across something fresh and original.
My only comment would be that in my view Pureblood women - more so Narcissa than Bellatrix - would be far more reserved. Obviously its a very tense point in time that you've caputred, and Bella certainly isn't... but I don't imagine Narcissa telling Bella that much of her opinion and instead Bella working it out and yelling at her a bit. But it was a great read and a lovely essay break.
-ACAuthor's Response: Hey there, sorry about the wait!
I'm glad you think it's an original idea, i've just often found myslef wondering what happened then so I decided to write about it.
I never considered that before, but I can see where you're coming from and I'm going to go back over the scene and change it a bit so thanks for telling me. :)
Thanks for the review and sorry again it was late! Report Review
Ack this is getting so good and I'm still woefully ashamed that I'm behind on reading and reviewing when this is one of my favourite stories I've read in a really really long time! So this was a really interesting chapter and Molly's getting paranoid and ahhh I'm not sure whether I can hold in my excitement about this to levels which are appropriate for the amount of work I have to do (this is a revision break, damnit) but I LOVE the way you slowly have Malea beginning to take a bigger hold over Molly and the second person/third person stuff you have is just so clever and original and exciting.
Yup, this remains as one of my favourite stories and I can't wait to be reading on again soon (maybe after my essays completely finished I'll catch up properly!) Thaaanks for wriitng such entertaining and gripping brilliance :DAuthor's Response: Hey there! Thanks for stopping by and sorry for taking so ridiculously long to reply :)
Thank you so much! Yeah, she's getting paranoid - and I can tell you without spoiling anything that that's not going to ease up any time soon ;) Haha, I know what revision breaks are like - almost more stressful than doing actual revision, lol. Thank you - I never know if things are too subtle or too not, you know, so I'm so glad you mentioned that!
Thank you so much for the lovely, lovely review! :)
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Everything as just wonderful.
Her story tells the tale of Eleanor Isabelle Canterbury (but god forbid you call her by her full name) and her totally wacky adventures in Amberline Academy as she goes through the trials of being sixteen and ó gasp ó awkward.
No, but, I died. I'm just sat in bed grinning and laughing a bit, aha. AND THE MANUSCRIPT. Oh Merlin, that was the best thing ever.
A whole year of life studies partnered with Chase Matthews, bane of my life? And the worst part? I was horribly, inexplicably, head-over-heels in love with him.
This! This Gina! Every little bit of the manuscript was killing me, and then Chase's point of view and Clemence went off on a little rant, and Albus and Pickets reviews etc. AND THEN SCORPIUS! Ahhh! I'm really hoping that she doesn't put that in the paper. Really, that would be not cool and I don't think Albus would forgive her for a bit. And everyone's shipping Clemence/Albus to the death.
I live a lot. I'll live a lot longer without catching hypothermia. This is like... when anyone says 'YOLO' I'm like, EXACTLY. Exactly exactly! So don't do the incredibly stupid thing you're about to do.
But then ack the other stuff and this is mad and an exciting chapter and now I'm all caught up again which means you have to update tomorrow or it will be legit classified as some sort of abuse. Okay, maybe not, and as such a rubbish reader I don't really have a claim to ask for updates but... but... but... well, I hope you find the time either way :)
Thanks for writing!
-ACAuthor's Response: IT'S FUNNY BECAUSE IT'S TRUE AMIRITE. See, I would have less beef with these characters if they were actually legitimately quirky, and not just creepily socially awkward (because there's cute socially awkward and psychopathic socially awkward), and then her friends encourage said psychopathic behavior. A LITTLE LOGIC PLZ. THAT IS ALL I AM ASKING.
Scorpius, ohohoho, poor boy's coming into the spotlight these days.
/RIGHT./ There was a line that I took out from this chapter after it became redundant, that basically went along the lines of 'I don't get why people are proud of being stupid.'
♥ I am growing octopus arms so I can write while I cook and do homework and pour tea. Report Review
So, I've slept, so I'm really hoping to be able to leave you a slightly better reviews that I was leaving yesterday (although I managed to get to 40 hours without sleep, which was not intentional and entirely insomnia but still quite the story) and I've got to say that I loved this chapter. I actually love Clemence to pieces (always have, then I like mean characters)...and I can't remember whether I knew before that she didn't have a mum, but that really took me by surprise.
Also, poor her. I'm sure she really doesn't want my sympathy here, but you know how it is. But what I really love about this story is those little bits and pieces about the 'quirky' girls because, I've got to say, I know SO many of those girls. I mean, they're not only taking over fanfiction with their quirkiness but there also like... well, a large proportion of my old friends (the ones placed in the 'don't try and keep in contact too much...' list) were like...quirky and boys weren't ever people to them and I just couldn't handle it.
But, ah, I cannot wait to read the next chapter so I guess I'll be cutting this short again. But this is such a great social commentary and I love it to pieces. Lend me over some of your skills, please, Gina :(
-ACAuthor's Response: PLZ SAY THAT YOU'VE GOTTEN SLEEP SINCE THEN. And that you slept for like 20 hours ok.
I mentioned it on my tumblr once! But that was pretty much it. She died of illness, alas, and thus continues my trend of characters who live with only one parent/guardian.
I share Clemence's stuck up view of quirky girls; I never had the patience for people with problems that I can't relate to, boys and ~things she said~ etc. Can't help but eyeroll, because it's usually 1) making a big deal out of nothing 2) lack of communication/common sense 3) self-entitlement 4) failing to realize they're the problem. I suppose it always seems easy from the other side, but boy can it get annoying.
♥ wah, you already have too many skills helen! Report Review
SHE'S THE ALTERNATIVE. I HADN'T EXPECTED THAT AHHA AHAHA THATS SO GREAT I LOVE IT GINA YOU'RE A GENIUS.
No but seriously I have no like real words to say on this front so I'm going to leave you a real short review whilst my food is cooking. But more words wouldn't probably help with the cause, because I just legit started baby talking to the oven.
BUT YES. I LOVES IT. Indeed.Author's Response: Baaahaha ♥ And remember, if your oven talks back, that means you've got a gas leak. Report Review
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