I think I actually shed a tear. This was so wonderful! It completely pulls in the reader and makes them feel what she is feeling. Bravo! Report Review
I have to say, there are some pretty good moments in the story. It could use a few more details and there are a few grammatical errors, but I liked it otherwise. One phrase that really got my attention was, "...were obviously outside, worshipping the sun." It was a great metaphor.Author's Response: well, thank you. seriously. and, im not exactly sure what a metaphor is, i just had one of thos random good writing days, i guess Report Review
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