oh, i'm so jumping (again) with excitement!! I want more! So sad that Jack was tossed out of his home for something on which he had no control:( So rude of his mom:(
I think Jack was born in a muggle house, right? I mean which of the magical families watch Tv?
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wow!! Well, I wanna read more about adam and Vigil so I hope more's present in the sequel:) Report Review
i'm sorry, I'll not write much 'cos I'm gonna jump over to the next chapter!!! (and yeah, I jump a lot) Report Review
'Aurora looked at him in some surprise. What was his real name then? She didn't know why he would want to conceal it anyway. Mark asked him in a voice of forced calm. She knew that the twin was bioling inside with rage."Ooh, good question!"' how did Vigil know what aurora was thinking about his real name?
a good chapter anyways:) nothing can be perfect:P Report Review
wow perfect chapter!!! I'm not writing much 'cos I'm just virtually jumping up and down to read the next chap:P Report Review
'what might happen when (or if)' the brackets don't look wuite good, I suggest 'when, or if,' Commas are always preferred in books:)
woot! another mystery! I'm so much in love with this story! Report Review
'That was almost the end of the first day of exams.' Were all the exams mentioned before this line held on the first day itself?? (transfiguration, charms, potions, astronomy etc) So many of them in one day itself sounds weird.
'A giant squid floated lazily along' er, a giant squid in a lake? I'm sorry I dunno much about such creatures.But I don't think we find them in lakes.
the prophecy was so(o's till the end of the world) original!! I love your story! Report Review
oh, I know I'm to fussy, but I had to tell ya this, your banner's not working! You need a new one, or making one yourself?? I mean can i have the pleasure of making ya one? (sorry for brawling in a review)
"Aurora had demonstrated control of another fire" something about the sentence doesn't seem right...'another fire'?
your description of the quidditch match was GOOD! But well, it could do with some lengthening? I mean, Slytherin scoring a bit But gryffindors still ahead and sorts, *shrugs* just suggesting.
don't take me in the wrong sense, I knly want this already good story to become perfect! I saw a bit of your responses to other reviews and I really like your confidence in your story:D Report Review
a good chapter. makes the reader read more. You could have done with explaining horcrux making with a bit more detail, but the idea of rolling the object in the victim's blood, in itself was creative:)
8/10 for this one! Report Review
'Aurora opted to stay behind, wondering what Hogwarts would be like.' she didn't nedda wonder right? her parents told her about hogwarts. Try this instead 'Aurora's curiosity got the better side of her, so she opted to stay behind, wanting to see the magnificent decorations, her parents had described to her so many times, herself' I'm just suggesting *shrugs*
'Aurora just stopped herself giving a yell of' instead, try this "Aurora, just in time, stopped herself from yelling with excitement'
again, the OC being perfect in everything, including lessons, chess and practises.
ok, there's nothing wrong with you know, copying the books a bit, But I say you avoid it in future, 'cos it puts off readers, at least most of them. The best thing in a story is being unpredictable:)
But it was a good chapter nevertheless, some typos, but nothing unusual. so I give it a 7.5/10 Report Review
o! It's mysterious!! makes me read more! but I guess I will continue tomorrow, 'cos I have to go now! Report Review
well, it's not bad, but people you know, get a bit put off if the OC is perfect. I mean aurora mastering everything would seem really like a made up fantasy.
a good chapter otherwise:) Report Review
Good chapter:) well, this one makes me all the more excited to read more! Report Review
'Now you, Aurora, can go to the Grea Hall' great hall? sorry for being fussy:)
the rap thingy is interesting:P Report Review
"The bed was so comfortable, and warm and-" it's better if you don't end a sentence like that, it's a bit on the abrupt side...
I think you could do with leaving a line between paras or when people talk, you know, like how I left a space between the last para and this one. it looks clustered and strains eyes.
put thoughts into italics. means, put 'you are so busted' in italics. Report Review
this was a good one, but except adam being sorted into slytherin, there wasn't much in this chapter. Report Review
it's a good one:) no flaws:) Report Review
another good one:0 but I don't understand why aurora wouldn't tell her parents about her abilities??
oh, well, are you gonna explain what was so special witht the wand, or well I have to figure it out? Report Review
o!! I'm dead excited to read the next chapter!! wow! I haven't read such a perfect story in ages! it's so realistic! this has to go in my faves!
9/10 Report Review
whoa!! your random stories are wonderful!! I mean i guess though it was random, it just wasn't confusing:P (if I'm explaining my point)
this was was better and more random that chavs:)
and Galbatorix SHOULD die:) Report Review
oh, well, that was weird??
I think a bit confusing too, but then who said that the fan fics all have to be totally following the books??
it was nice overall, but i think you needa put a bit of detail like you know, why voldemort did whatever he did and thing:)
7/10 Report Review
wow! i feel like i just woke up from amother world!! the descriptions are perfect!!
i give it 100/10 [and there's no mistake!]Author's Response: Thanks so much! It's nice to know the work is appreciated! Report Review
WOW WOW WOW!! I can't wait!! I've strong doubts that the man with the wide smile is Dumbledore!! it's cool!! Just update, please!! Author's Response: lol you'll have to wait to find out :) sorry it's taking me longer than usual, my computer crashed so i have to upload everything from a different computer again *_* grrr, but o well i hope you like it.
and thanks for the review :D Report Review
Cool chapter!! Not my fave but i enjoyed it!!
UPDATE!! Can't think anything about the letter, so now I'll have to wait
ggrr..Author's Response: haha. Thanks babe! Yes, you will just have to wait... Report Review
wow it's so like Sirius to leave the 'noble and ancient house of Black' !!
I loved this chapter!! Going off to the next chapter, lol!! I want to know more about everything! Sorry i read this so late, but exams were having their toll on me:( But as i had said before, I'm following!!Author's Response: Thanks a million sweetie! I really enjoyed writing this chapter in particular! I hope exams aren't too bad now! Report Review
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