Hey there!

This is beautiful. I love poetry, and so loved your descriptions. Metaphors and comparisons really get me, it was really soft, I could alost feel the words flowing in my mind and drawing the picture; great imagery! I can't wait to know more about Charlie, read how you link his physical traits and character.

Which leads me to characterization. Well, we don't know lots of Apricot, but I already like her and can imagina getting to know her slowly, just as your nice flow generally ^^ Percy was perfect; all contrarian and perfect haha. Mrs Weasley was her lovable self, who knows how to keep her children in line and be sweet and caring at the same time.

You really hooked me, I loved your style and The Wizard tale. It was somehow hard to follow at times, the descriptions I mean, but then I slowed down my reading and it's better, don't know if that can be fixed any other way though. Grammar/errors were so minimal it was a very peculiar feeling reading your A/N, not a bad one anyways.

I can't wait to read more about this story, where you'll taking it and how did he get from a dragon's place to Serenity Hill.
Incredibly enjoyable read!

Author's Response: Hi!

This is a perfect review, because I was really wondering if the description was understandable heh. I usually don't write things that I mean for a reader to rip through; but I'll look at this and see if I could make it clearer. This is meant to talk about serious things in a light sort of way, so I'd like it not to feel too distracting to try to figure out what I'm saying. That's a continual problem with my writing. I like words a lot and forget it has to make sense :P

Apricot will hopefully become a bit more clear throughout the chapters. It's a short story but I tried to give her background because a story being short is not really an excuse to skimp on characterization. Percy is a lot of fun to write because he's allowed to be a bit daft. Especially as a child. I see Mrs Weasley as this very formidable mother, like, you're loathe to cross her, but also we see how caring she is and lovely.

I'm not /quite/ sure what you mean about the a/n; could be that I'm very casual/slang-ridden when I'm not writing a story and I don't like to use capitals...but I assure you, I could if I gave it a bit of effort.

Thank you for the review! I'll look into the descriptions and try to work on them for the next three chapters.

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This is amazing! I loved reading it. I've never read a fic centered on Charlie before, so I find it really interesting. I love the way you portray him! The scenes with him and Percy as children are adorable :) I loved the little reference to Molly's latest pregnancy as well. Little Fred and George!

Anyways, I really enjoyed this. Your writing is excellent and pulled me in immediately. The intro was beautifully written. You definitely have a way with words. I was enthralled the whole way through, and I must say I can't wait for Chapter Two. I'm adding this to my favorites :)

Bri, xx

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! This is different than the few Charlie fics I've read, so I'm glad that you like his portrayal here :) I feel that because I had a good childhood, I appreciate the impact that it has on a person throughout life, and that it's important to remember that, even in fic. Especially, perhaps. And especially where the war is concerned, I feel that Charlie would remember his childhood as a lot of us do in times of trouble.

I'm so pleased to hear that you enjoyed the writing, too. I really love writing and although this is fun for me as much as it is for anyone, I do try to make it nice stylistically. If only for my own tastes :P

I should be updating in a couple days :) Thanks so much for your review!!

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Amazing. I don't read Charlie stories because I really never see them or if I do I pass over them but your summary and banner was too interesting and your writing is always amazing so I had to check this out. This is such a mystery to me, a story about dragons, Charlie, Apricot and a war. The way you had Mrs. Weasley tell the story intrigued me. I felt like I was a little girl again and my uncle used to read to me and he would give the characters a different voice for each of them and the story would come alive. I kind of felt that here so that was really nice.

I can't wait to see what the other three chapters are all about.

Author's Response: I don't really read Charlie stories, either. I don't like how people characterize him usually. I've always seen him as this easy going, good natured but quiet person, not a playboy. I know that's usually how people think of Quidditch players but it never works for me.

To me this is mostly a story about decisions and relationships. You'll see that as the chapters progress, and Mrs Weasley's story becomes more clear. My parents used to read stories to me, too; my dad read my family the entire "The Hobbit" and I remember it as sort of a capstone of my childhood. I think it's an important part of teaching children and also fostering a whole kind of mindset for the rest of their lives.

I'll be updating this regularly each week, which is a real test for me! I've never finished a story before I posted any of it so this is an exercise in patience for me :) Also this means I should have chapters largely edited before I post which may be nice.

Thank you so much for your reviews, it made my day to see them!! x

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