So there is a prequel, but no sequel? Come on! I think you should do another story and watch defeat Voldemort!! Report Review
this is awsome!! I'm usually not a supporter of Draco/Ginny but you did it really well
a big 2 thumbs up for youAuthor's Response: EEE, thanks. =0) Report Review
Why does this story keep on reappearing as update when it is already done. Will you be starting a sequel soon??? Please do because the story is great. Report Review
WOW! Amaxzing story (and chapter) I liked the part where Voldemort was werring an aprion. It was lmao funny! Great story please write a sequal. :)Author's Response: There will be!! That's why it may seem a little cut off. There will also be a prequal! Report Review
HA HA HA lol. Halreaous. (srry probobly misspelled that) Report Review
Sorry I havent stoped to reweiv I just kept reading. Anyway, great chapter! Good job! Report Review
Okay... Not bad but might want 2 include more jokes k? Report Review
I absolutely love that last line! Report Review
I like the story but All the teams seem pretty good except Slytherin... I thought Season was a good player . Wouldn't she know to pay attention to the game? And it seems like Azura's made out to be all high and mighty. I wish we could at least see like a typical class with Season not just, "you're getting a new fish."Author's Response: Slytherin is a good team, and just because they didn't have a victory doesn't mean they don't have the ability. Plus the story didn't have room for any victories; Ravenclaw needed the win (they tied here!) to show why they practised the way they did. Gryffindor (also a tie) needed the win for Harry's sake and they needed to lose against Hufflepuff in order for her to admit her feelings for Ethan. See. I have my reasons. ;0)
I didn't mean for Azura to sound all high and mighty; remember, she stuck up for our trio a couple of times and gets vulnerable around Oliver- he's her week spot.
And as far as Season's classes, she's obviously not a very good teacher since she's not a Seer, so the rest of the classes would have been like the first one: lots of guessing and making up. The only reason why I gave Azura more scenes is because Defense Against the Dark Arts has always been an important class for Harry.
Everything written here has been thought out. Report Review
Ok. So the final battle really wasn't the final one after all. Are you planning a sequel? Over all, a very good read. There were parts that felt a bit too rushed, maybe a little more description was needed to fill it out, but the dialogue was excellent. I have a feeling that my next cake-decorating class will bring me visions of Voldemort in my apron happily baking away! Report Review
I normally only comment on completed works, & after I've read the full story, but as I'm going through this a few things have bugged me. You keep saying 'defiantely' instead of 'definitely'. There is a big difference in these 2 words. You also, in this chapter, use the phrase 'blow a casket', but the correct phrase is 'blow a gasket'. You have also not spelled Legilimency correctly, which I can't understand, unless you don't have a copy of any of the HP books, or know how to look it up real fast. One last thing, I've noticed people saying 'as-a-matter-of-factly' which looks ridiculous, but I believe if you're going to try to use this, you need to take off the 'as-a'.
Other than those little nit-pick things, I think the story is very good so far. I will... definitely... let you know what I think when I'm done!Author's Response: Others have corrected me on the "defiantely" mistake, and, like I have mentioned to him/her, it's an automatic Word spellcheck mess up and I am currently re-reading the entire story to fix all the spelling errors. Thank you so much for correcting me on the word "gasket". My slang must be off. Yes, I do have copies of the HP books, otherwise I would not be a meber of this site. When you're writing in the wee hours of the morning, sometimes, things are over looked, and I thank you for your arrogant finger pointing at an obvious word, that, you are right, should be spelled correctly.
And as for "as-a-matter-of-factly", if you read other books, this phrase is used frequently.
I did state constructive critisism would be welcome, but not with attitute.
I will now continue to finish the corrections to better satisfy your reading experience. Report Review
loved it. was amazing. and the slang was funny, plus the way u put in sexual scenes was good. not to graphic, but still there. it was amauzing as well as passionate and captivating, if thats the right word. good jobAuthor's Response: LoL, thanks. =0) Report Review
ummm... i love the story so far but you should know that griffindor is a lion not a griffin- just some constructive criticismAuthor's Response: Thanks, someone else caught that and I keep forgetting to change it. ;0) Report Review
Oh wow! This was good. Your plot twists, descriptive talents and wonderful sense of humor just flattens me. ^_^
So. . . will there be a sequel??
Please, stop by my page to check out my stories and let me know what you think--I'm asking everyone I admire on HPFF to do this! ^_^ RNAuthor's Response: I have an interesting sense of humor anyway, so I love to have fun with my stories. Report Review
Aww, I liked that paragraph! :P RN Report Review
What the??? Dobby??? Thats just wrong! Shame! Shame I say! haha Report Review
Voldemort and Shortcake? Brillian! LOL!!!Author's Response: Ha! I thought so. =0) Report Review
I love it! is there going to be a sequel?Author's Response: Yes, and a prequel! Report Review
Your story is shaping quite nicely, but maybe you could pace it just a little bit faster.
Please - the word is 'definitely' not 'defiantly' - and it's 'of course' - not 'of coarse'!Author's Response: my spell check on word wouldn't let me use "course", but thanks...don't know why it didn't catch the other mistake... Report Review
dang. cant you at least kill voldie while youre at it?Author's Response: And give Harry an easy 7th year? That would have been too easy....;0) Report Review
Good, but Gryffindors mascot is actually a lion, not a Gryffin.Author's Response: Yeah, I feel kinda stupid that I didn't know that...and now that you mention it, I remember Luna's hat... Report Review
Well, that ws a bit spooky. I was listening to the Phantom of the Opera soundtrack when I read that. How odd. Lol. You forgot to mention that she falls in love with someone else, and he kidnaps them, then lets them go and runs away. Lol.
Ah well, on with the story.
Author's Response: LoL, ooops. Honestly, I've never actually seen the show, so I just put in what I remembered. =0) Report Review
well that was fun. i kinda loved it. i would go into further detail about how wonderful it is, but it's midnight so gnite and keep on writing! ;D Report Review
I like the story but it doesn't read well in some places. A once over by you might be able to fix that. There are several places where the sentences have to be figured out by the reader. For example, in the 28th paragraph after the split you say, "He said it in a whisper loud enough to where the Dursley's could hear..." While the meaning of the sentence is clear, it interferes with the pacing of the story by requiring the reader to go back and read it twice.
Like the story so far, have read a couple of chapters and am picking it up again where I left off. Author's Response: OOOPS. Thanks for checking that for me.
I've read this thing umpteen times over and sometimes the sentences all run together and I don't catch mistakes. Report Review
I'm impressed :D
i love the characters you created to play alognside the original HP characters, the twins have such a vibrancy to their character and ethan is a good laugh for his egotistical nature.
brilliant job my friend.Author's Response: Aw, now I'm blushing Report Review
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