this story is so unlike many other's i've read, BUT I LOVE IT! seriously, i love pippa's character and I've been too into reading that i forgot to review! seriously, you're a great author and I can't wait to watch Pippa and Albus develop. well done :)Author's Response: Hello :) Welcome! It's nice to meet you! And yeah, the story is kinda weird at times and I'm glad you find it different from the others. And wow! You like the story! That's even better! Thank you :D Haha, there are lots of development, little steps, I admit, but it's there :) thanks so much for the review, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! And I hope you have an amazing day! Xxx Report Review
I've just started reading this and it's brilliant! I have OCD myself and usually I hate it when people only talk about the typical 'I hate everything dirty, I always have to wash' but Pippa's mindset is very realistic and relatable! You're doing a fantastic job of this and I can't wait to read on!Author's Response: Hello :) It's nice to meet you! I'm glad you find her realistic and relatable, as i don't have OCD myself and am one of the most messy person I know :) so it's nice to know it's not ott and I'm sorta getting it right :) thanks so much for your review, it's made my day! I hope you like the rest of the story! I hope you have a great day. Xx Report Review
So my brain's not functioning well right now (remember that conversation we had about 4 am last time? It's kind of happening to me right now). I didn't want to not leave a review, though, so here I am.
"We can't all be made of glass, itíd be a bloody catastrophe." Brilliant line. I'd forgotten just how much I liked Albus. What's wrong with him, by the way? I think I'd assumed he had a bitter personality, you know, he hated the world as a whole just because, but know I suspect there's something more.
I get excited every time we get information about the elusive Him. This particular bit surprised me a lot; for some reason I'd thought he had betrayed Pippa, not that it was her doing the rejecting. Or was it both? I distinctly recall Pippa saying something about being betrayed by him. I might be switching up stories, though. Or just in a sleep-induced delusional state.
Also, what's this about Cassie not wanting to know about Albus and Pippa? I do remember that moment, but I'm starting to think I didn't read enough into it. Or am I reading to much into Pippa's comment at the end of this chapter? She was being quite a bit melodramatic, come to think of it.
I don't know. I'm just confused about everything, if you hadn't noticed. I'll head to bed now before I keep writing inconsistencies. Report Review
I read this chapter a while ago. Then I forgot to review it. Now I am back because I felt guilty for not reviewing the story I adore so much.
Anyway, I can't really explain how much I love Pippa. Everything about her pain is so real that I feel like I can touch Pippa for real if i close my eyes. When she gets hurt, it hurts. I know it seems like i am exaggerating. But I am not. Your writing is beautiful.
Albus is another character that always blows me away. I love the way Albus and Pippa is connecting. I hope they can help each other out and hopefully one day feel something resembling to happiness. Report Review
Oh wow! I'm in love with this amazing story. It flows really well and is such a humorous delight.
~LoVe_SiriusAuthor's Response: Hello:) Thanks for choosing to read my story, I hope you like the rest of it! Tell me what you think if you have time:) Thank you for your kind words! They make me happy. Thanks for the review and I hope you have a great day! Xx Report Review
Aww I loved this chapter! I was quite sad to discover the dynamics of Pippa and Damien's relationship though - Pippa could've done without her brother abandoning her I have to say. Poor girl.
Cassie's description of Harper was just brilliant. "She's a hufflepuff and she has hair." Oh, wow. The thing that make this such a great story is the mixture of humour and angst - it's so fab. And, of course, Pippa's character.
Scorpius is indeed Awesome.
-LWGAuthor's Response: Hello! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far! Yes! But Damien will never see it like that, he just saw it as growing up, and you know how older siblings can be, having their youngest siblings around them can seem uncool. Haha, yes, description is a skill that Cassie doesn't really have. Thank you, I do try to mix it up a little :) and I'm glad you like her character :) and I love Scorpius, how could you not :P thanks so much for the review, I hope you like the rest of the story and I hope you have an amazing day! Xx Report Review
Oh my gosh! This seems HILARIOUS! I would read more, but I'm currently deciding which character to vote for the Dobby's, but I'm definitely going to be adding this to favourites and I will be reading more! :D
I love Pippa, she seems so funny! :D
10/10! :)Author's Response: Hello :) I'm glad you decided to check out my story, it makes me really happy! And thank you! I hope that if you read it, you like it! And Pippa has a lot of layers to her :) We learn something new about her in each chapter really as she develops :) Thanks so much for the review, it's made my day and I hope you have a wonderful day! Xx Report Review
Woo-hoo! Pippa is back! And she's as tormented and bitter and sarcastic as ever! You have no idea how happy I was to find this lurking in my Favorites. I want to dig right in, but first, congratulations on your Dobby nomination. You deserve it so richly! Also, for a chapter that hasn't been beta read, this was really good. I could hardly find any typos, and it all read very smoothly. Well, maybe "smoothly" isn't the right word for Pippa's wandering, disjointed inner monologue, but it was definitely a very enjoyable read.
I really like the peek into how her relationship with the mysterious him fell apart. It was a very telling look into her character, as well. The poor girl has some really deep-seated problems that she is nowhere close to getting over. "I was unhappy because I just was." Such a heart-breaking line when it's applied to somebody so young. It seems to be no mystery as to why he left. She pushed him away. No doubt about it. And she hated herself every moment that she was doing it, yet she couldn't stop. I want to give her a hug so badly except, you know, she would hate that. And I probably have germs.
And then the unrelenting battle of wills with Albus resumes. Something about the idea of her punching him in the ribs to pull him out of his nightmares made me giggle. It's so much like her. My god, how these two need each other. Or maybe they would ultimately kill one another. I have no doubt that it's worth the risk.
As always, he knows just how to cut through her defenses and wound her effortlessly. He has gotten past her walls and now he is inside her head, seemingly to stay. But then she manages to strike back at him and the way she goes about it is so telling. I absolutely love the way that she dangles a moment of connection in front of him. I love the way that neither one can can quite conceal the base, physical attraction that exists between these two kindred spirits. Hopefully, this is foreshadowing. And as soon as he's ready to buy, she yanks it all away. "I was made of awesome." Yes, my dear, you were!
Ugh. She was so close to fooling Damien, until her clothes betray her. Wait a minute, do I want her to be able to fool her brother or not? So hard to actually figure out who's on her side and who isn't sometimes. I tend to think that her brother has her best interests at least somewhat at heart, albeit colored by his own apparent need to restore the hero-worship he once enjoyed from her. Fred seems genuinely interested in her well-being. But it matters not, she slams the emotional door on both of them. The lies pile up so fast in this chapter!
I'm still working to figure out exactly what the deal is with Cassie. Part of me feels like there's another big betrayal lurking somewhere in Pippa's future. The girl just seems to have a really pronounced amoral streak running through her. I'm going to put on my prognosticating hat and take a wild guess that it will either involve the mysterious him or Fred. Either way, I see this driving Pippa closer to Albus, so I can't be 100% unhappy about it. Or maybe you're just messing with me. So very hard to tell...
Thank you for another terrific chapter! I sincerely enjoyed reading it and I hope you're able to find your rhythm with monthly updates. Sometimes it feels like it's been far too long! Report Review
oh nice! Just finished reading all these in one go, couldn't stop! aghh if pippa and albus don't get together soon i'm actually going to explode :p Really good thanks for uploading!
xAuthor's Response: Wow, all in one go? Must have been quite the angst fest! Haha. I'm glad you liked it enough to do that and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Haha, lots of things are coming up for Albus and Pippa;) Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a great day. Xx Report Review
Despite the fact that she keeps pushing everyone away, I really do like Pippa. She's different from other character I've read about. She's really interesting to read.
I kinda got a thrill when she told off her brother. I'm not sure why. Maybe it was the way she stood up against his betrayal or something.
*sigh* Pippa and Albus got into yet another fight. They're so alike that they can't get along for very long. Their reactions to the other is amazing to read.
You have written yet another excellent chapter.Author's Response: Hello :) Thanks so much, I'm so glad you liked it. I'm glad you like Pippa, even though she's a bit thick and makes things worse for herself. Thank you:) I'm glad you find her different, I didn't plan for her to be this way, she kind of just developed all on her own in a way. And yes, she never really done that before, even before, she's never really not done what Damien wanted, so it was a big surprise and Damien usually gets what he wants, so he didn't like that either :) Exactly :) pretty alike, yet Pippa hatea that :) And I'm glad you like the way I write them together! It's just so much fun! Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a great day! XxX Report Review
Yay!I love Pippa/Albus moments! Can't wait to see the next chapter up! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks:) I'm glad you like those moments, they're so much fun to write! Thanks! I'm hoping it'll be out soon! Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a great day. Xx Report Review
Hiya :) I'm so glad to see a new chapter up!
*Groan* oh Pips, she's so self-destructive, it's painful to watch! I absolutely loved the moment between Pal in the tower, it was as intense and emotional as usual :) I'm guessing Damien knew because of the Marauder's Map maybe?
It's sad to see how Pips just pushes everything and everyone that's good for her away, I really really hope things can start looking up for her again, and of course, I'm especially looking forward to more juicy encounters between Pal in the coming chapters!
~Maddie xAuthor's Response: Hey Maddie! How are you? I hope you're okay! And yes! It is painful to watch at times, she never really realizes the damage she causes herself. And yes, Damien knows where she is because of the Marauders Map but obviously Pippa has yet to discover that this even exists :) And haha! Pal! I love it! And Pippa has to realize a few things before she can move on, she needs to accept it's over. Basically she needs to confront him, in her head, like actually say his name, when she does, it'll be a huge step :) And next chapter focuses on Lily and see's a friendship forming between the two, even more :) Thanks for the review! It means a lot to me! I hope you have a great day! Xx Report Review
Love this story. Update soon. I just wanted to ask, has Pippa got OCD (obsessive compulsive disorder) because all the neat freakness and fear of germs are part of the symptoms.Author's Response: Hi :) I'm so glad you like the story, this always makes me happy! And I don't particularly write it that way, like it's not set in my head, but if she was to attend a doctors appointment, yes, she would be diagnosed with ocd, along with depression probably. If that makes any sense :) Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a great day. Xx Report Review
I think it's time for another update. =)
You can't leave us with Pippa and Albus falling asleep together. It's just not nice.Author's Response: It is indeed :) And I'm working on it. Haha, the question is, how does it pick up when Pippa wakes up? Will Albus still be even there? Haha. Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a great day. Xx Report Review
Hi, this will be a quick review, cuz it's late and i'm tired, but I just wanted to say welcome back!
I'm so happy that writing bug crawled back to you, because I've missed your stories :D
This was a great chapter.
I love the line : The guilt was too heavy for me to carry but I had no one to turn to. I only had myself and she was (w)itch.
It makes me chortle :D
Anyways, wonderful comeback, don't take as long for the update this time, pwetty please!
~GillAuthor's Response: Hullo Gill! I hope you're okay. And aw, it's sweet of to to review anyway. Thank you so much, i'm glad you're liking my stories, it means a lot to me. Thanks! I'm so glad you liked that line :) Thank you and I won't :) Thanks for a great review and I hope you have a great day. xxx Report Review
YES FINALLY AN UPDATE =D I've been waiting for one of my favorites to be updated! Great chapter, seeing some progress in Pippa, The Quidditch scene was fine, though it could probably have used some more details, but overall, wonderful chapter.Author's Response: Hello :) I hope you're okay. Aw! I'm so glad you liked this chapter. Haha, yeah, I know that, but it would have been 500 words describing what certain characters would be doing and I thought would be needless. It was explained enough i thought. Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a great day. xx Report Review
I feel like it has been an eternity. But I am so happy that you posted again and that it was heavy with Albus/ Pippa and that it seems pippa is going in the right direction with this breakdownAuthor's Response: Hey :) Sorry, it took so long and yes, it was a heavy Pippa/Albus character but I thought you guys deserved it and yes, it's the start of something for sure :) Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a great day. xxx Report Review
You have managed to suck me into another one of your stories.. not that I had any doubt you wouldn't. Finally got some free time and I'm really looking fwd to reading this story all the way through!
Great characterization as usual. You really have a way a with words! Keep up the great writing.
-ffleurAuthor's Response: Heya :) I remember you from Nellie! I hope you like this story too, it's a lot different in some ways but there is some familiar things in there too :) Thanks a lot! I adore writing characters so I'm glad you thought it was good characterization. Thanks so much for being my 700th reviewer as well! I'm very thankful! I hope you have a great day! xxx Report Review
please update soon, i love this story so much and i cannot wait to read what happens next 10/10Author's Response: Thanks so much, i'm working on the next chapter and I'm hoping it shall be out soon :) Thanks so much, I'm so glad you're liking the story! Thanks for the review and I hope you have a great day! xx Report Review
OMG! REALLY??? The one chapter i get the feels and it turns out there isn't anymore chapters?? :( almost cried in this one *best* chapterAuthor's Response: Aw! I'm sorry. I'm working on the rest of the story and I hope you like it. Haha, yes, it did have a lot of feels in this chapter didn't it? I'm so glad you liked this chapter though, I had so much fun writing it! Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a wonderful day! Report Review
I'm really enjoying this story so far, Pippa is a hilarious character , I can't wait for possibly her and Albus...or I will be a sad panda. Anyway, your characters are really good and seem well thought out (Scorpius is adorable). One thing I do wish for in the future is more of Pippa's evil plots.I like her when she's evil :)Author's Response: Hello! I'm so happy you like the story and you think Pippa is funny. I cannot let you be a sad panda...or can i? ;) We'll see how it works out between them two! Thanks! I enjoy writing this characters so much, they're such a good mix. And Scorpius is adorable! Haha, yes, there are lots of plots coming up :) Thanks! Evilish Pippa is so much fun to write :) Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a wonderful day! xxx Report Review
It is because unlike oranges, you can get two colours of grapes, duh.
^ Wow. I've never thought about that before.
It's been awhile. I get losing the mojo to write. I don't write anymore. Not because I don't have ideas or stories but because I don't want too. I suppose i need a break or a new hobby. Something that'll make me feel happy again because writing doesn't any more. Not right now anyway.
I just wanted to read this story. Even though I'm not really reading fanfiction that much anymore. I just want Pippa to be okay in the end. I guess, I guess she's really cracking right now and she's probably on the verge of another breakdown and I just want to see her get through it and come out okay.
I feel like at times I can relate to her but sometimes she's a little too extreme for even me. Hey, don't forget about Nellie and Chandler either, okay? I enjoy reading their stories too. :DAuthor's Response: Hey :) Haha, yeah, red grapes and green grapes. I'm a fan of green grapes more :) I know what you mean, my mojo goes through phases, but sometimes I think it's more me being lazy. But not wanting to write is different, but as long as it doesn't make you too unhappy, it's fine with not writing. I hope you can find another hobby that makes you happy, because I adored your writing and you were so good, but if you never want to write again, that's fine, just don't go too far though!
Thanks so much, that means a lot to me. Yes, I understand, I want her to be okay too, it's basically the point of the story, start broken and hopefully be somewhat whole at the end.
I can understand that. And don't worry! I won't. Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a wonderful day! Report Review
4 am seems to be when you get most of your writing done, doesn't it? Haha, it doesn't show, though; this chapter didn't feel all that rough to me.
I missed Pippa so much. Hopefully your writing bug will stay; I don't want you to decide you don't like writing anymore!
Onto the important stuff - I wasn't expecting the quidditch match (probably because neither was Pippa), but I'm ecstatic it finally happened; that subplot had been dragging on for too long. Now I'm wondering whether she's going to retire or what, or if her breakdown really made her see she had to change her ways and she's going to try to be a (gasp!) nice person for once. Doesn't seem likely, though.
And Pippa/Albus, yay! I do believe this is the closest they've been as of yet, and also the most human and honest we've seen both of them act. For a moment there I almost thought they were going to kiss...
"Those words comforted me because that meant that nothing was changing." It really is ridiculous how Pippa insists to remain in denial about something or another. You just bared your soul to your worst enemy, after consciously wanting to catch the snitch, which would have ruined all your best laid plans Pippa, of course everything's changing.Author's Response: That is quite true, I end up start writing at like 11, get addicted and keep writing till 4am. Truthfully, I'm answering this review at 4am. I guess I'm just a night owl or something :)
I'm glad you missed Pippa, that means a lot to me :) And don't worry, I do adore writing, it just sometimes, it dulls a little, but I promised myself I'd finish this story. I can't leave until you've read the ending, or at least learned about albus demons, or maybe who the hell is him is aye?
Haha, yeah, It was finally time for it, I just hadn't managed to fit it in. Who knows? And Pippa a nice person? Hm ;)
And yep, this chapter was pretty heavy for them :) Yes! They took a little step in this chapter, but who knows whether this will last. And yes, instead of attacking Pippa, Albus was rather calm, even when he lost it a bit with her, it wasn't malicious as it normally was. And a lot of people thought that, haha.
Yes :) She hates change, thus she is in constant denial. She doesn't care about Scorpius, could easily live without Cassie etc And yes, it is, but Pippa will never realize that :) Because she wants everything to stay the same and will constantly cling to that.
Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a great day. xxx Report Review
Best line... i could do fake better than i could do real.
Off to read the next chapter now :)Author's Response: Hey :) Thanks, I'm glad you like that line, I had a lot of fun writing it! I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a wonderful day! Report Review
Hi SexyDoorFrames, I am so glad to see you updating again. you can take all the time you need to update. Trust, your readers will love this story no mater what. About this chapter. I don't where to start. Seeing Pippa break down like that hurt. No one deserves that. I am glad that Albus was there when she most needed him. I really loved their beautiful moment together. You're an amazing writer, did i tell you that?Author's Response: Hey :) aw! That's very kind of you to say! My readers are quite amazing. I know, it was quite a breakdown and Albus saw that. And yep, stalker galore Albus was, haha. I'm glad you liked their moment, so much fun to write it. And thank you so much, you're too kind to me :) Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a wonderful day! Report Review
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