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Review #26, by gigi ten

31st August 2014:
So what happened to Ron and Hermione? After 10 chapters that included a family wedding and their son's game, they're blatantly MIA. They're not goners are they? Nice story though.

Author's Response: I'll be the first to hold my hands up and say I'm not very good at juggling a large cast. In the beginning I was making a concerted effort to include all the Weasleys, but that soon fell by the wayside as other plot developments took over. They don't just vanish though, they will crop up again! Thanks for reviewing. :)

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Review #27, by madness epilogue

16th August 2014:
This. Was. Amazing.


Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Hope to see you at the sequel :) Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #28, by Bijn epilogue

7th August 2014:
I really, really loved this story (although it deprived me of a lot of sleep, hehe). The thing I really liked was the fact you made the characters very credible; their relationship towards others, their personalities, it all fits. I enjoyed reading from James’ POV because his reactions and thoughts were in line with the personality you gave him.
I also liked the Quidditch-part of the story. It is evident you have put a lot of effort in it and it pays off. Although all the names, positions and so on were a bit confusing in the beginning (well, for me) I really liked the individual roles they had to play. It is nice to read a story in which you come to learn more and more about the people in it whilst reading it; a lot of things became clear in stages, a thing I love about stories. For instance, Lily being a squib was quite a revelation but once I knew, a lot of things fell into place.
I am looking forward to reading the sequel and keep up the good work, because your writing style certainly makes the lack of sleep worth it!

Author's Response: I take no responsibility for sleep deprivation, ha. :) I'm glad you liked the characters, I do try to put a lot of effort into developing them all as people. James' POV was very interesting to write; I'd never written in first person before and it's definitely very different to third person narrative. But James' head was a fun one to get into, I do miss writing him.

I ended up developing the Quidditch side of things much more than I imagined I would, but it was enjoyable and I'm pleased with how it turned out, although I can't bring myself to write any more Quidditch now. I'm done with it!

The squib revelation was fun to write, but very tricky not to give away before time. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #29, by Evans5 epilogue

29th July 2014:
So good! I couldnt put it down! Can totally see this as a movie! :D

Author's Response: Wow, that really IS a compliment! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, thanks for reviewing!

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Review #30, by Tris  epilogue

10th July 2014:
Read your whole story. I have found myself more wrapped up in your quidditch than any sport ever in my life. The details were amazing and carefully thought out! I love the bits of history thrown in and the unique plot line! I CANNOT Walt to read Derailed (but unfortunately I cannot start or I will never sleep again...) also I am not supriwed at all but the ending the foreshadowing was so much from the moment McGonagall asked if he know of anybody-- but anyways amazing story, reccomended it to all of my friends!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading! It's lovely to know you enjoyed the Quidditch aspect as I put a lot of thought into it, although I now never want to write another match again! Hope you go on to read Derailed! Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #31, by slytherinchica08 epilogue

17th June 2014:
Well I have made it to the end. And while I am sad that I am out of chapters to read on this story, I am also very excited to begin the next! I am sorry that I have not reviewed every chapter. It had been my intention to review every single chapter but I found that my reviews left something to be desired because I really didn't have much to say. Each chapter that I have read has been absolutely fantastic and just wonderful and so amazing to read and I sort of ran out of ways to say that. But alas I have at least finished this story and very much enjoyed it! I can say that James leaving Quidditch to become the professor isn't a huge shock for me. I was actually kind of expecting it so I was really glad when he did announce that. I thought this chapter was really well done and makes me want to continue reading onto the next story with these amazing characters that you have created! I loved all of the different pairings that were thrown into this story that all added their own arcs to them. It was such a wonderful read! Great Job!


Author's Response: Firstly thank you so much for reading! No need to apologise for not reviewing every chapter, I often have that feeling when trying to leave a review and struggling to write it! Also all the reviews you left were so lovely to read, especially as the reveal about Lily occurred. :)

I didn't expect James' retirement to be a shock, as I had foreshadowed it a LOT. I expected people would think "but surely he wouldn't actually retire" but given all the signposting, it was hardly a left-field development. And most of all it's reassuring that people believe it as a realistic move. :)

Thanks again for all your reviews! I'm really glad you've enjoyed the fic, and I hope you continue reading Derailed!

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Review #32, by slytherinchica08 twenty-eight

14th June 2014:
Oh poor James, things keep getting worse and worse for him! I hope that he can turn things around soon because this has to be really hard on him (and of course everyone else since he keeps yelling at them and taking out all of his stress and anger on them). I look forward to the next chapter!


Author's Response: James definitely needs to cool his anger at this point! The more cross he gets, the more people he turns against him... Poor boy. Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #33, by slytherinchica08 twenty-seven

14th June 2014:
Oh no this chapter is just so very sad! From James finally telling her about his dad and his involvement with everything and how he thinks he is this huge let down and then the fight with her! Gah this has to be a horrible day probably one of the worst! But it was a really good chapter. You really made me feel his emotions and how raging he was and everything. This story is so enjoyable. I look forward to reading more!


Author's Response: Yeah, this was a sad chapter to write. Poor James. :( But at the same time it was a fun one to write because it was the catalyst for pretty much EVERYTHING. Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #34, by slytherinchica08 twenty-six

14th June 2014:
YAY he made the team! I'm so excited for James! But seriously, those questions he was asked were crazy. I would hate to have someone assume that I surpassed my mom and that I would be proud of that. I think I would have done the same as him and just walked out the door without a care for any of the other interviews. And then to get home and be asked about who the boy who lived is, yeah this is definitely a stressful day! Anyways great job on another chapter, I enjoyed it!


Author's Response: I think it would be very difficult for any Quidditch player with a parent who played professionally to deal with the comparisons. Likewise, I can't imagine it was easy for any of the Potter kids, purely due to being Harry's kids. So for James to be in both positions at the same time, the press attention is pretty horrendous. This was definitely a stressful chapter for James! Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #35, by slytherinchica08 twenty-five

14th June 2014:
Wow I felt so bad for James at how poorly he had been doing at the beginning of his match. But the fact that he had been able to pull it off and switch around his luck is pretty amazing! I hope that things go well for him tomorrow with the call! Anyways another great chapter and I can't wait to read more!


Author's Response: Yup, James is a much better player than he gives himself credit for, to be able to turn that match around. Poor boy lets nerves cripple him at the worst of times. Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #36, by slytherinchica08 twenty-four

14th June 2014:
I love the brother sister dynamo you have going on between james and lily. They are just so sweet together. I'm excited to see how this whole prom thing goes down I think it will be interesting, very interesting. I also love how protective kit seems to be of lily, I think it adds a little something more to this end of the story as well. Great job I look forward to reading more.


Author's Response: The James/Lily dynamic was one of my favourite ones to write in this whole fic. It's so lovely to have such a strong sibling relationship for him to fall back on. :) And the prom scene was one of my favourite ones to write. I'm so glad you like Kit because he's one of my favourites, and I think Maddie gets most of the love, haha. Thanks for reviewing! :)

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Review #37, by slytherinchica08 twenty-three

14th June 2014:
Oh no poor James. He seems just down right devastated that she forgot about his game. It's kinda cute really, that his playing was affected by her not showing up. At least they still won though. Gah I just want to read more. I need more! This story is seriously so good and addictive, I just can't help but want to come back and read this all the time. I feel bad about how long its been since I last read and reviewed a chapter. Hopefully I can fix that. Anyways, this was another wonderful chapter and I shall continue onto the next. Great Job!


Author's Response: Poor James, he's in way over his head by this point. Bless him. ;) Thanks for the review!

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Review #38, by nott theodore epilogue

3rd June 2014:

Okay. Coherent thought time. (Attempt at coherent thought time, anyway).


I'm actually really, really glad that I waited until now to read this (not that I had a choice, stupid exams) because I want to know what happens next and this epilogue was both an epilogue and a teaser for what's coming next in the sequel, and at least now I can read the first chapter and find out what's happening!

Hmm, so you thought you'd fool me with that wedding switch, didn't you? Because you're a mean author who likes to trick people *nods* But I know your writing too well to believe in something at first sight now, and I knew it was Brigid and Freddie's wedding all along! (There may have been a moment when Carlotta walked up the aisle when I questioned my belief, but that was soon resolved). Still, even if you didn't trick me I loved the way you wrote it, with the vagueness of the scene and not necessarily being able to tell who's doing what... I love the circular-ness (that's now a word, and if it's not, I'm blaming the temporary shut down of my brain now I have nothing to do...) of the story, since it starts and ends with a wedding! It reminded me that so much has changed and happened in that time.

James is still terrified of the commitment that would mean a wedding though :P It's nice to see he's not changed that much, and he and Carlotta suit each other for that. It could never have been James getting married only a year later, with us not able to see how it came about! But I love the fact that he's so happy for his friends, which makes Carlotta happy, and both of them being happy (as well as Brigid and Freddie) makes me happy. So happy people all round! (This is definitely not coherent but ah I'm sorry, this story is finished and I can't believe it!)

Poor Cordelia. I'm sad to hear that she didn't survive, but again, it's not that surprising - proof that James hasn't changed beyond all recognition now that another year has passed. And he took the Hogwarts job! It was so strange to hear him being called Professor, and to think of him with that responsibility - I'm also really intrigued to find out what he needs to talk to Carlotta about concerning Hogwarts!

I could ramble on a lot more, but I'll try to limit it, because I really want to go and read the first chapter of Derailed. (Which I am REALLY excited for now!) This story is probably my favourite on the whole archives right now, and I love the fact that I found it ages ago, back when all I was looking for was next generation fluff, and this story has been one of those which has really changed my mind about reading, because now I want much more and this story has it all.

The characters are brilliant. James especially, the way that he seemed so shallow right at the beginning and then we discovered that there was something a lot deeper and more mature to him, and we've continued to see his development all the way through. I think the story has grown with the characters (I could mention all the other characters I love, but it would be more than half the cast, so...) and it's really just fantastic. I'm so glad I decided to click on the title all that time ago, and stick with the story, because it's brilliant. And now I'm off to read the first chapter of Derailed before I get any more incoherent!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Yep, this was definitely planned as a chapter which wrapped up those last two loose ends - Brigid/Freddie, and What James Does Next - but also served as a little tease for Derailed! Which was why I put the first chapter of Derailed up fairly quickly in the end. I'm nice like that. ;)

I was intrigued as to who would fall for the ambiguous narration at the beginning. Obviously I know the exact workings of James/Carlotta at this point, and they're both very commitment-phobic, even if they are living together, so it was never going to be their wedding. And yes, as you've pointed out, I would have cheated you all out of a lot of development between them had I married them off here! But I know there are a lot of people who are waiting for it ... if it ever happens ... ;)

And I absolutely HAD to both start and finish this story with weddings. I think James' change in circumstances from one to the other says eons about his progress in the time in between.

Ha, yep, Cordelia dies as a sad-but-a-little-bit-comical reminder that James isn't quite matured yet. Still not ready for marriage! Don't worry, he'll have a new pygmy puff. :)

Thank you so SO much for all your wonderful reviews! It's so lovely to know I have readers who will always leave an interesting, detailed review on a chapter. :) And it's awesome to think Rails has helped to change your perspective on fics you read! I always aimed to dress this up as a fluffy Next-Gen and then uncover the angst underneath (without wanting to sound pretentious, although I probably am) and it's oddly satisfying to know I've lured readers in on that basis and they've stayed!

James' development amazes even me. I never imagined his growth would be as extensive as it turned out to be. It's as though the James of the start is a totally different person!

Thank you, again, for all the reviews! (And don't worry, this wasn't an incoherent review, and besides incoherency is always fun.) Now for Derailed!

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Review #39, by nott theodore sixty-three

3rd June 2014:

I've just finished my exams and now I finally have time to come and leave a review for this chapter! (And having taken a sneak peek at the other reviews, I've just realised I'm a month late... wow. Stupid exams.) I'm just going to say - how could you put that in your chapter summary? Seriously, I was so worried and nervous when I saw it because I was sensing bad things going to happen with James and Carlotta, even though I couldn't see them actually breaking up... but that was mean, and I do not approve of you trying to give me a heart attack with the chapter summary! :P

Mmm, all that food is making me hungry. I love how Carlotta loves baking - it's like a guarantee she'll fit in with the Weasleys.

So I'd already started suspecting a few chapters ago, and especially at the end of the last chapter, that this was coming. And I didn't want it to happen really but I had time to reconcile myself to it, so that when I realised James was going to see Sinead and Brie, I didn't feel that bad at all about him quitting.

Ah, Sinead's so sweet about it all. I think her explanation of the parts not really fitting together to make a professional Quidditch player really made sense, and they helped me to think that it was the right thing to do even more, since his own coach can see that for him. And it feels like the right time - although I normally hate sports players retiring at their best, he's only 21 and he's just won the world cup - there's nothing that's going to match that feeling in professional Quidditch for him in the future, and a lot of potential for disappointment if the teams he played for didn't do as well as they had in the past. So I can understand it, and it'll be good for him to get out of the limelight as well, because that really didn't suit him. And a new and different challenge will do him good, I think.

I love Brigid, really. She's alawys been such a good friend for James and he hasn't always realised the extent of what she's done for him, but that makes me like her even more; she doesn't feel the need to demand James's attention and do it so that he likes her better, she just does what is right for her friend. Their little talk was so cute and I was just smiling all the way through - you write the friendships in this story so well, and I love the fact that while it's a James/OC story, the romance is just an element of the rest of the plot. They've definitely helped each other out! And aw, Freddie and Brigid! ♥ It's nice to see that he finally got his act together and did something...

Teehee. I couldn't help laughing when I read about all of James's aunts and uncles suffering from a hangover, and James just manages to get through it all with no problems, lucky guy. And it's lovely to see Carlotta spending more time with his family and fitting in - she clearly feels a lot more comfortable around them now, especially if she's been hearing Harry's stories when James isn't even with them!

Ah, and the bombshell. Their reactions are pretty realistic - if it was someone in my family that was excelling at a sport like that, and then decided to give it up, I'd be pretty incredulous. But I think they'll come to understand eventually, and the fact that James is able to be happy for the opportunity this gives Roxanne is great, really in character. So is all of the Weasleys piling on her when they realise she's now the first choice Chaser! Harry and James scenes are some of my favourites now that they get on with each other, and seeing just that brief moment of acceptance and understaning from Harry was brilliant. He understands what it's like to be forced into the limelight for something you'd rather not be known for, and Ginny, like James said, will understand as well. He's got great parents and a great family, and it's brilliant that he now realises that and is starting to accept it, too.

The mysterious job, I'm assuming, is the Hogwarts Quidditch teacher? I've wondered for a while if he'd do that, and while I didn't want him to, your wonderful writing has, as ever, made me come round to the idea.

Ah, of course Carlotta realised. They're getting so close to each other but I like the fact that you haven't laboured that point; their relationship is developing naturally alongside everything else. N'aww, James was so cute rambling and getting nervous when he asked her to move in! Of course she said yes - I can't wait to see what they'll be like living together in Derailed, although I suspect that it'll still be a while before either of them say the L word...

The ending was really sweet, too. It just seemed to fit really well and it's clear how important Carlotta is to James, that he'd share something like his grandparents' with her. Although *twitches* I can't believe he burnt the broom! I understand the sentiment behind it, and new beginnings and everything, but... it's like burning a book or something!

Eep, I'm off to read the Epilogue now and then cheer myself up with the fact that the sequel has already started so I don't have to be sad about this ending for long!

Sian :)

Author's Response: SIAN! Well I'm the worst person ever at answering reviews ... whoops :p

Haha, I put that line in the chapter with the plan of making it the summary ... yep, I'm evil! But come on, was I really going to break them up? ;)

All in all, I don't think James' retirement was unexpected, given all the clues I dropped, but I imagine it was something that people still didn't think would happen. I'm the same as you when it comes to sports players retiring before their time, but it really was the right thing for James to do. And it also gives me the option to do something truly awesome with Derailed - which you already know, of course. :) But I'm glad it all seemed to make sense in the end.

Brigid IS an absolute gem, and I have to say I really enjoy writing a strong friendship. I think that sort of dynamic can be overlooked sometimes, so I like making those relationships just as important as romantic or familial ones. The Brigid/Carlotta dynamic in Derailed will be so adorable to write. :)

Thanks for your lovely review! Onto the next one... :)

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Review #40, by Tuesday epilogue

30th May 2014:
Tuesday xx

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

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Review #41, by DracosGirl012 epilogue

29th May 2014:
I just wanted to say that I have loved every minute of this story. It is seriously, literally, the best Next Generation fanfiction that I have ever, ever read. I kind of had a gut feeling that James would end up taking Madam Hooch's place, ;) And I love the twists in this story. You have done things that no one has! (For example, Lily being a squib is something I've never seen done).
I loved Brigid and Freddie. They were completely amazing. And I really, really loved Carlotta! Her relationship with James was so perfect and so real that I went "Aww" several times and actually smiled reading this.
I've not read a fic this good in a while, and this was absolutely amazing. Thank you so much for sharing this story with us readers, and I cannot wait for the sequel. I really, really love this story.

Author's Response: Ahhh, thank you so much for the lovely review!

I'm glad you liked what I did with Lily. I've always wanted to throw a Squib into a fic to explore that dynamic, and it seemed like the perfect opportunity here. It's also lovely to know you like James/Carlotta because their dynamic is one of the driving forces not just of this fic, but the sequel too. I think Carlotta is probably my favourite character.

Thanks again for the lovely review, I'm really glad you've enjoyed this fic and I hope to see you at the sequel. :)

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Review #42, by marauderfan two

21st May 2014:
I'm back and omg I love your Audrey. I love that you made her a kind of gossipy, sarcastic, and funny person. Totally opposite of Percy but hey they say opposites attract. Percy totally needs someone like her anyway who would make him lighten up a little. And kudos to her for putting up with all his "I have a meeting with the Minister" all the time.

Also this family cracks me up - there is no such thing as privacy with them as they're all up in each other's personal business! Hahaha.

Freddie likes Brigid too! I wonder how long it's going to take them to get together. Prediction: forever. Brigid is an avoider and Freddie is oblivious and someone will have to lock them in a room together or something. My bet is on James doing this because he'll get annoyed at the both of them eventually. Anyway that's probably ages away.

Loved the scene with James, Maddie, and Lily! Maddie is cool. I hope she continues to appear a lot in the story because her interactions with James are hilarious, as are Lily's reactions :D

Great chapter! I'll be back (read that in a non-Terminator voice.)

Author's Response: One of my biggest pet peeves in Next Gen is people writing an annoying Audrey because they don't like Percy. I actually think he mellowed after DH, and he would be better suited to someone who would balance out his flaws and lighten him up. Likewise, I like to think he could keep her grounded. I'm often tempted to write a Percy/Audrey one shot, actually...

Oh, the Freddie/Brigid saga. You're correct; they do take a while to come round. I'll say no more on that matter. :)

Maddie appears a fair bit more, don't worry - and she absolutely steals every scene she's in. Thanks for the reviews! :)

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Review #43, by marauderfan one

21st May 2014:
Hello! I keep seeing this story popping up recently so I decided it was time I see what it's all about.

James II as an arrogant, womanizing Quidditch player is something I have seen a lot in next gen. BUT (before that starts to sound mean, bear with me because here comes a lot of compliments/gushing) There is something about your James that puts a fresh spin on the cliché and honestly I really like him! His faults are pretty obvious so far, but you can tell that under his carelessness about romance he is actually a caring person. I love the way you've juxtaposed his flippant disregard of relationships with women, yet he has a great relationship with the important women in his life. Already I love the way you've written his respectful friendship with Brigid, and his relationship with Lily. She's a super awesome sister. I love how she and Brigid both put James in his place when he gets too arrogant haha.

Also I must commend you on the number of characters introduced in the first chapter. You mentioned a lot, but it didn't seem like too many. Especially with next gens, sometimes I get overwhelmed when 800 Weasleys are introduced and I'm just like ahhh who are all these people. So thank you for not doing that :p You've got the perfect number of characters for a first chapter, because with only three that you really focused on, I get to know them a lot better. Only one chapter in and I feel like I already know James, Lily, and Brigid pretty well.

It looks like Quidditch will feature pretty heavily in this story which is exciting because I don't know if I've read any story where Quidditch isn't just a subplot - but this is James's life and career, so I'm eager to see where you go from here.

Great start! I am really excited to read on :D so expect to see more of me later. Ciao!

Author's Response: Aah, thank you so much for popping along! These reviews have made my day. :)

I could sit here and say that I always intended to write a womanising Quidditch player AND YET put a spin on it to be original and clever ... but the truth is, I didn't realise this was a Next Gen cliche when I first started work on this fic. But James is certainly a lot more than just that, as I think is already apparent from the way he treats Lily and Brigid - he has reasons for perhaps disregarding other women.

And yes, Lily and Brigid definitely have the measure over James. :)

I always used to see people bemoaning the number of Weasleys and wonder what was so hard, because I could keep track of all of them easily. But it's one thing to know who's who, and another thing completely to throw them into a fic at the right time without completely blowing people's minds. So it's good to know I didn't go too far with this one. :)

...yeah, there's a lot of Quidditch in this fic. So much that I've pretty much put myself off writing it ever again. I now know why JK avoided writing the matches whenever she could! I hope you'll enjoy that plot, because it's a pretty important part of James' life. :) Thanks for dropping by and reviewing!

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Review #44, by ohmymerlin epilogue

20th May 2014:

I thought James and Carlotta were getting married and the way you wrote it was SO CLEVER!

But then when it was Brigid and Freddie's wedding and that probably made me happier, haha!




This story has been absolutely phenomenal. I think you've done such a wonderful job of it and you should SERIOUSLY think of writing as a professional career! You're absolutely brilliant at it and I think this is definitely my favourite fic on this site and every other site. The way you write is just so glorious and every word manages to blow me away.

I'm guessing James will ask Carlotta to move to Hogsmeade maybe? Will she run The Three Broomsticks or change Hogshead? and she can finally open her restaurant and it'd be magical so there'd be all sorts of cool things and [flails to fall thinking of all the possibilities]

Anyway, I've really enjoyed reading this story. It's been such an amazing experience and you have such a talent for writing and I absolutely cannot wait to read more of James and Carlotta.

So thank you for writing this and thank you for being such an amazing author! You're the absolute best! ♥

- Kayla :)

Author's Response: Yeah, that wedding switch was probably a bit cruel, wasn't it? But it gave me some sort of sadistic enjoyment, so there we go. And Brigid and Freddie have finally gotten married, yay!

Yup, it's a year on, and many things have changed, but James still can't look after pygmy puffs. Poor Cordelia. :(

Thank you so, so much for all your lovely reviews throughout this fic, it's been so lovely to receive them and I really appreciate it. :) And it means so much to know you love this fic so much! James is getting a little big-headed, I imagine. :) I'm hoping to start posting the sequel in the next month or so, and I hope to see you there - I think there's something in the first chapter which you'll like a lot. ;)

Thanks again for reviewing! :)

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Review #45, by misswow234 epilogue

20th May 2014:
You can't possibly imagine just how much I have enjoyed reading this. I honestly expected it to just be the easy-fluffy romanc-y story that I was so used to, but it was just so much more!! I loved that you didn't just focus on how Carla changed James, but on his whole `Coming of Age` (sort of) story. It was such a wonderful experience reading this chapter and I was immensely impressed with how talented you are at writing. I loved the family dynamics and the characters were so extremely likable and I found it really great that you managed to write not just about James but also about the stories of the people around him. And that's no easy task as often times it can get overwhelming for the reader to follow more than one story.
All in all, just simply wonderful, and I'm so looking forward for the sequel!

Author's Response: Ah, thank you so much for reading this! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :) I don't think I realised, when I was planning this, just how strong James was going to turn out - he HAS come of age in this fic, and he's mostly done it himself, which has pleasantly surprised me. Occasionally I've worried about the balance between James' own story and his friends and family, so it's good to know that worked out well in the end. :) Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, and I hope to see you at the sequel! :)

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Review #46, by QkStephen epilogue

19th May 2014:
I absolutely loved your story and it has been a part of a fanfiction resurgence for me. I read the whole thing yesterday and today and it was worth every moment. Thank you for the experience

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for reading! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #47, by LavenderBlue eleven

18th May 2014:
Poor Carlotta. D: It's so sad that her automatic reaction to James is fear, but then, if I were in her shoes and discovered a bunch of nutzo stuff in the flat, followed by James Apparating out of thin air and brandishing a wand, I'd probably be scared to death, too.

This is hurting my heart, all this talk of Obliviating. Looking back, it seems almost inevitable that it would come to this. After all, James isn't very careful and Carlotta is quite clever. All the same, I don't think Brigid is exactly right when she claims that wiping James from Carla's memory won't have any adverse affect on him.

At least, for all his propensity toward arrogance, James isn't big-headed enough to think he can fix the situation alone. I think it speaks volumes that he's willing to go to Brigid and Rose for advice. Even though he doesn't TAKE that advice... That seems to be an emerging theme with James: he starts out with the best of intentions but somehow manages to fumble them into something else. And it's a flaw, but it's a very intriguing flaw that doesn't in any way diminish my empathy for him as a character.

And omg, right when I'm in the middle of all this sad concern, there is a SCOROSE MOMENT. Yess. I love that little glimpse of adorbz even in the midst of all the madness. I only hope that James can track Carlotta down and that drama doesn't ensue. But maybe a secret part of me is hoping that it WILL. >:]

Wonderful, wonderful read!

Author's Response: I really had to put myself into Carlotta's shoes to write this, because it's actually hard to imagine just how much this sort of situation would completely FREAK someone out. And it was horrible, to be honest. As much as we all sit there and go "I'd love to be able to live in the wizarding world", if this were to actually happen to me in real life ... yeah, I'd be scared as hell.

I hope it's becoming clear that underneath, James really isn't cocky at all. He knows his abilities but he also knows his limits - I don't think Harry and Ginny would let their kids become big-headed, for a start! This situation is so BIG that he obviously needs help to fix it, he can't manage it himself. It's just, he doesn't want the only help available to him, because, y'know, memory charms. Nasty business. That's what happens when you break the Statute!

Scorose indeed. :) Will there be drama? I couldn't possibly say... thanks for reviewing! :)

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Review #48, by LavenderBlue ten

18th May 2014:
Brigid & James' friendship is such a beautiful thing. Brigid is the best, period, even though she forgoes James' advice and greets Carlotta with a severely snarky remark. I was holding my breath during their meeting. I really wanted the two to like each other, and now I've got my wish granted. :)

It's so fascinating reading the comments from James' fam & friends, over and over again, about the dangers of dating a Muggle and the Statute of Secrecy, blah, blah, especially when I'm in the midst of KYD, with purebloods warning each other off from Muggleborns and halfbloods in much the same way. It's funny how that door swings both ways, isn't it? Because as much as I'm sure most of James' acquaintances don't mean to be xenophobic, they really are. Then again, we're all a little xenophobic, aren't we?

Wow, Ryan. What a class act. Lol. I love how Rose really does take after her mother, though. Clearly SOMEONE at a table of drunken magicfolk in a Muggle setting ought to be a little worried, and Rosie is just the person for the job.

Awe. Team Carlotta and James to the rescue, thwarting Brigid from getting low over what a bleepity bleep Freddie is being, as usual. I really like that they're both well aware of how to look out for her. I also find it highly adorable that the Fam goes to Hugo's games.

This line: "I'm not at all big-headed, I'm just confident in my ability." Hahaha. Love it. It's so James. And it's quite a bit Harry, too, m'thinks. :)

Kreacher cameo! I like how you worked him into the story (as if you didn't already have to seamlessly work in every Potter-Weasley ever!). It's little touches like this that endear the story to me even more and make James' world that much more real. Wuv wuv.

AND OMG. I KNEW IT HAD TO HAPPEN. Everyonnne warning James that he'd break the Statute of Secrecy, and sure enough, he has. EEP. What shall transpire?!?!

Fantastic chapter!

Author's Response: Oh, Brigid. The voice of reason in hers and James' friendship - because he has none whatsoever. She and Carlotta have the capability to get on very well - magic not withstanding that is.

It was actually really uncomfortable to write these conversations with James' family, when they were all trying to stop him seeing Carlotta. Because while I knew they didn't mean to be xenophobic, it really doesn't sound good - "stay away from the Muggle". Yeah, friendly. But they have their reasons, and at least James understands that. Even if he doesn't LISTEN.

One thing Harry and James do share is that ability to value their strengths and weaknesses without getting arrogant about those strengths. Although James isn't always this good at self-assessment, the poor guy...

Oh Kreacher, he's been such a darling to write into this, bless him. He'll pop up again! happened. OF COURSE. Thanks for reviewing! :)

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Review #49, by LavenderBlue nine

18th May 2014:
It has been TOO LONG. I'm so excited to have snagged some free time for a healthy dose of OTR. Yummy. :)

Dawr. It bothers Jamsies that he hasn't seen Carlotta in over a week. It bothers him that he has to turn down plans. Why is that James? Why, oh why? >:] Also, it cracks me up every time Cordelia makes a rando appearance like in this scene. I want me a pygmy puff something fierce.

More father/son tension. :( Makes me saddd. But I'm looking forward to unraveling just why their relationship is so tense over the course of the story. Meanwhile, Lily is being an overachiever. Merp. I think Ginny gives her some good advice, and she really should ease off the gas. I was the most psychotically Type A kid when I was younger, and sometimes I wish someone had told me I didn't need to work QUITE so hard at every subject ever.

Now I'm thinking about all the ways that Muggle Studies could go wrong... o.o

Haha, I love that all three Potter kids have the ultimate trump card when their parents try ragging on them for breaking the rules. "Yeah, well you broke into the Ministry!" Bam. Shut down.

THAT ENDING THOUGH. Here I was, thinking, "Yeahh, James better pick out his own present for Grandma Weasley, because she'll be able to sniff out an insincere one from a mile away..." But no. No, it's not Grandma Weasley at all; it's the grandparents he never knew. D: The hand holding. The burning of the presents. The lilies on Lily's grave. Ugh, my heart. That was such a beautiful vignette. And I'm going to have to keep reading immediately, because now I'm in a very sad place.

Author's Response: Hello again! Lovely to see you back for more. :)

Seriously, if you're ever looking for cheap humour in a post-Wheezes fic? Throw a pygmy puff into it. An ENDLESS source of amusement. And, yes, I'd also love a pygmy puff of my own. If only.

The Harry/James ... yeah, that's a slow burner. Certainly there are reasons for the tenseness. And Lily... well, in some ways yes, she's an overachiever, but again SHE has her reasons for wanting to do so well. The girl has a hard life at times, poor thing.

HA, yeah, I would imagine it would be hard for Harry and Ginny - and Ron and Hermione - to discipline their kids given all the school rules and laws they've broken over time. Although those were mostly in the name of stopping Voldemort, I suppose...

Guh, Lily's birthday. ALL OF THE EMOTIONS. Thanks for reviewing. :)

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Review #50, by Spyci epilogue

18th May 2014:
I'm so happy right now I don't think you understand

Author's Response: Aha, that makes me happy! :) Thanks for reviewing!

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