Wow. Great story. Normally, I like to offer constructive criticism to authors, but I don't think I can here. I loved your use of the candle and darkness.
I'm usually not a Dramione person at all (preferring Ronmione), but your story seems a bit more realistic than others. Everybody likes to go either the "Draco turns good" or the scornful relationship route, but in your story, I really like that they kept everything secret. I have doubts that Hermione would accept that Draco is a Death Eater, but I can see Hermione eventually accepting him for the reasons he gave.
Overall, beautiful story. Did you say this was your first one?Author's Response: Thank you!!! I appreciate your compliments so much!! I too am more partial to the more realistic storylines, so I tried to write my story in that manner. And yes, this is my first story. Lately I've been working on multiple storylines, so hopefully this won't be my only story for too long.
~Rae Report Review
MUAHAHA I'm back heh heh =) Just to make the page longer so people get annoyed at how long they'll have to scroll down. ^_^Author's Response: Hi!!!!!!!!! You are so funny!!! Even though it's just silly, thanks for leaving a "review!" I love you, sis'!! Report Review
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dat was so sad.
why does voldemort hav 2 exsist? i mean, it wouldve been such a nice, peaceful place hogwarts. every single problem, or adventure, has been cos of HIM. well, if u dnt include poa (book 3).
now, r u planning 2 do a sequel? 8D
whoooooooo!!!!!!!!!!! 8PAuthor's Response: Thanks for reviewing! The story was supposed to have a sad element, after all, am a hopless romantic!!! But if Voldemort didn't exist, then Harry would not have become the famous wizad that he is, and the JKR would have no plot to write the HP series, and then, we wouldn't be here writing fan fics!! :] Now for a sequel? I haven't thought about it....maybe sometime in the future! ~Rae Report Review
Excellent! Good writing!Author's Response: Thankies!!! Glad you enjoyed it!! Check back for more stories!! ~Rae Report Review
The very best review for the very best sister! You know I love ALL your stories, but this one is amazingly unbelieveable! For the vocabulary you use regularly, this story has a very advaced range or words lol! Keep writing and I love you!!Author's Response: Heeheehee! That's my sis'! I told her to read my story...and review!! I love ya! ~Rae Report Review
i love the way you write!!! and a good chapter!!! i cant wait for more !!Author's Response: Thanks!! And I'm sorry, but you must have reviewed before I put up the "completed" status! The story was meant as a one-shot, but I'm writing another story and hope to have it finished soon! ~Rae Report Review
it's good so far. i like the concept so far. keep writing and post more soon.Author's Response: Yay; thanks!! I actually got the concept from a song, and it was originally supposed to be a song fic, but I like the way it turned out, too! Report Review
very nice story, very realistic (in the HP sense!).
I like that you didnt make Draco mushy, but real... and the imagery was great. well done!Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I know I'm starting to respond to reviews so late, so I'm sorry if you were looking for a response earlier! Anyways, I do love to write really imagery-detailed stories! Thankies for reviewing!! ~Rae Report Review
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