I love this one-shot. Bittersweet is how I like to think of it.
And that's a great line:
"It was lust. Not love. Not like you and James."
"What makes you think that?"
"You chose James."
AGH. That sent shivers down my spine when I read that. I could just feel the emotion dripping off those words.
Very very good job.
This is going on my favorites.
QSAuthor's Response: Ohhh! Thank you! I loved those lines too! You have no idea how much I'm smiling right now :) Report Review
*Sob* loved it! 10/10!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
i love it! its different. Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
Awww, that was so depressing, but I really think Sirius/Lily is interesting, it's totally starting to grow on me (ha I LOVE that expression ^^) :]Author's Response: Thank you! I think it's really interesting too. Thanks :) Report Review
That was great. Great plot, great spin on things, and even good grammar and spelling, which is hard to find in fanfiction today. Good job.Author's Response: Thank you! Oh my spelling and grammer! Thanks, normally it's horrible! Thank you :) Report Review
Amazing! Amazing! Amazing!Author's Response: thank you so much! Report Review
I really liked this. It was extremely well-written. Both Sirius and Lily were human and believable. It made me feel a little bit badly for James, but I liked the Sirius/Lily aspect of it. I liked how there were flashbacks, and I think the way that Lily talked to Sirius in between the flashbacks was really good.
I think the one thing you could work on was just minor. There were a few spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes but nothing too distracting.
So all in all, this was really, really well done! It's going on my favorites list! 10/10Author's Response: Squee! Thanks your so nice! :D I'll fix them eventually. Thank you so much for reviewing it :D Report Review
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