Another wonderful chapter!
I love the conversation Mariya had with herself. It made me giggle.
About the Author's Note, how'd they help you? Ideas?Author's Response: thanks! and yeah, they came up with many ideas. this chapter didn't even exist until i knew i'd messed something up. i posted an urgent thread in help needed and bang! help was one the way! Report Review
Oooo. . . this was fun! I loved the little tussle between your pair. She's a feisty one, ain't she? The head butt to the nose was brilliant -- kinda woke him up then.
Your introspection of Draco is wonderful as usual. Don't feel the need to rush; I just adore development like this; gives us a good ground to know what's in his head first, before the action starts. And it's just as nice NOT knowing what's going on in Mariya's head; keep her nice and mysterious. Very, very nice -- keep 'em coming!Author's Response: ahh, you have made me so happy! i'm glad you like the character developement. with my last story, i think I went a little too fast. I'm trying to slow things up with this one. =) Report Review
Another great chapter! You've handled Moaning Myrtle very well in this one, and the inner conflict at the end makes Draco seem more human. I love the interaction with Mariya, it's very bizarre (the broken nose leading to laughter) but it makes perfect sense somehow, you know? And her reasoning about the Dark Lord seemed perfectly Slytherin. Do you think Narcissa would write such a blatent letter since Filch is going through the mail this year? Maybe instead of Dark Lord she would write "Him" or something. I dunno, just a thought. Also, there were a couple of formatting errors which you may or may not already know about- some text was repeated in the beginning, and I think there was an unclosed italics tag at the end. Anyway, fantastic chapter! I'm still loving Mariya and Draco here. ~NepheleAuthor's Response: dang! I forgot Filch was reading the mail! I wonder if I can change it before anyone notices, lol. Anyway, I'm so glad you liked it, and I'm SO glad you're still reading! thank you! Report Review
I basically love Mariya's sarcasm. And "Draco wondered briefly if it was possible to kill one's own inner voice." is brilliant. Nice work!Author's Response: I'm glad you like her. I certainly hope you like number 5! Report Review
awesome! looking forward to more..Author's Response: thanks! I hope you like the rest! Report Review
Another wonderful chapter.
Good luck with number five!Author's Response: thanks! I think I'm gonna need it, lol! Report Review
I saw your update in the forums and had to come read! Very interesting chapter, I love the interactions between Draco and Mariya. I would be careful with the placement of the italics though, it can be a little distracting. I'm excited to read the next chapter!Author's Response: I'll try ot get it done soon, and I"ll watch what you said about the italics. I reread HBP today and saw a part with Harry talking to himself and I think I know how to change to distracting quality of it.
Please, please, please hurry up with the next chapter. I really like this, I think it's fantastic. I'll have to add it to my favourties. The conflicting emotions are really very good, capturing the whole character of Draco perfectly. I love it when people write him as he truly is. I mean, he's not compeltely heartless, as some people portray him. He's just heavily influenced by his family's traditions and beliefs. Author's Response: lol, i'll update as soon as i can. i'm so glad you like it! Report Review
oh, this is so good, it's like behind the scenes of what really happened. I love your O/C, she's a really good creation, and yolur description is fabulous. Well, I'm incredulous . . .Author's Response: i'm so glad you like her! i've worked really hard on this character, so i'm glad she's being appreciated! Report Review
i like it xxAuthor's Response: good! i'm so glad you like it! =) Report Review
Funny, after I reviewed your last chapter I saw some of the other reviews said similar things, hehe. It's always good to have a unanimous vote, eh?OK, another awesome chapter! I like this nightmare even more- the way we think it's Dumbledore he's following but it is really his mother hints at some of Draco's deep-rooted fears in a very sharp way. Also brilliant is Blaise- how sad to hear Draco's thoughts on friendship the only motivation behind being someone’s ‘friend’ was how you could benefit from what they could provide, but how canon! The comment about Mrs. Weasley is hilarious! You really got into the head of a teenage boy in that one- perfectly Draco! To tell the truth I'm surprised I'm enjoying this so much, as I've never really read a Draco-centric fic before.Mariya is so wonderful- I love the way she gets to him. It's really fun to read! And even Crabbe and Goyle have been made into characters (well, as much as possible- they arestill Crabbe and Goyle...) And the ending- brilliant! I knew she was using Legilimency. Great move having her pull him close like that- I like that he could smell her. Knowing Draco, he'll be angry that she saw all of that. Excellent, excellent, excellent! I'll be back when there's more to read. ~NepheleAuthor's Response: oh, I love your reviews! they're so detailed and encouraging! chapter four is awaiting validation, so I hope you'll come back soon! Report Review
This is really brilliant! I think you've got a wonderful grasp on Draco's canon character, and your OC is equally strong. I love the game of cat and mouse you have them playing in this chapter, and I love that she is such a stark contrast to the simpering Pansy. I'm curious- is she supposed to be in sixth year as well? During the first chapter I assumed she was younger, as Draco had never met her in his first five years, but in this chapter she is in all the same lessons. A few things I particularly enjoyed were listening to Crabbe and Goyle snore (in tandem, as usual) and From the smell of Galleons and fear, the latter of which is an excellent observation on Mariya's behalf. It takes a smart kid to smell the fear in a bully. Interesting parallel to Harry's dreams in OotP- I'm curious what you were trying to do with that one. I love that it seems Mariya might have had something to do with it. She's very intriguing- I feel as curious as Draco about her. And of course, brilliant work with the chocolate frog card- she is very sly, and understated, and I like that. You haven't been wasting words, which makes for clean prose. Good chapter! ~NepheleAuthor's Response: whoo! I love it when writers that I enjoy like my fics! yes, she's his year, but I figured that the canon Draco would be too full of himself to notice. Anyhow, I should have made that clearer, but thanks for reading! Report Review
Again, very, VERY good. I can't wait to read the rest! I loved the dream sequence. You're casting Dumbledore in a very interesting light, and I can't wait to see how that continues to play out and how it affects Draco. I liked how you addressed his Slytherin "friends". Mariya being a Legilimens was definitely not something I'd considered last chapter, so that was a nice twist. I also liked Draco noticing the magnolia scent and dark blue in her eyes, great forshadowing of their later relationship, I'm guessing. Fabulous story!!Author's Response: you are making me blush! I'm so totally stoked right now! chapter four is awaiting validation, so I hope you'll come back for more! Report Review
You certainly know how to keep a reader intrigued! First off, I LOVE the title. I'm a musical theater junkie myself, so Sound of Music references make me really happy. Also, I'm a sucker for Draco-angst stories. I love the way you explore his uncertainties about his task, and the dream with Dumbledore. A bit OOC, but a nice touch. I LOVE how Mariya mocks him, like a taste of his own medicine that no one has ever had to gall to give to him. I thought her ripping the chocolate frog card had a nice effect as well. As for quotes, I loved "listening to Crabbe and Goyle snore (in tandem, as usual)." and "the smell of galleons and fear." Again, really awesome!Author's Response: you give the best detailed reviews! I'm so glad you liked my quotes ("the smell of Galleons and fear" was one of my favorites too!) Report Review
Wow...I love this already. Of course, I just think "insufferably" is a great word, so you had me sold there already. I think your OC is great, she seems very un-Mary Sue like. The relationship between her and Draco should be interesting, seeing how they're SO much alike! My favorite thing from this chapter was "Crabbe and Goyle's monosyllabic grunts." That was just fabulous. :) Anyways, on to chapter two! Author's Response: thank you SO much for saying she's not a Mary Sue!! I was so scared of that, lol! I'm so grateful for your review, thank you so much! hope you keep reading! Report Review
Hey! After reading your lovely reviews all day I decided to click the link! I didn't notice at first you were the same person asking about blackcurrants. Anyway, I don't usually read Draco fics, but your banner was nice and I appreciated that you were checking your facts before writing. Since that's usually a good indication of someone who cares about with they're writing, I decided to pop on over and check it out. Very nice! I found myself drawn in immediately. The train encounter is perfectly canon, even with the OC, and I liked how you showed Draco's thoughts about Pansy. His worries about the upcoming year were very interesting- I can't wait to see HBP unfurl from the perspective of Draco Malfoy! Your OC seems interesting, if evil ;) and I like the chemistry. I have to run, but I will review the rest of the chapters when I have a chance! ~NepheleAuthor's Response: whoo! thank you so much! i love detailed reviews and i'm so glad that you liked it! I especially love getting good reviews from people whose work I love (ie: you, Bibbs, PropMaster), so I'm so incredibly flattered right now. thank you SO much! Report Review
Awsome. =) Seems they're getting closer? I love it. Perhaps he'll show her where it is instead. *smirk* Can't wait for the next chapter, update soon! =DAuthor's Response: lol, so glad you like it! awaiting validation for chapter four as we speak, so don't touch that dial! Report Review
Ooh! Very enticing chapter! I likey very much... *smirk* I really like Mariya, she's a really interesting character, and even if I hadn't read the title of the next chapter, I would have guessed she might be able to read minds. This is very cool! I've never seen a story like this before, and I adore it. You write beautifully, keep up the awsomeness! =DAuthor's Response: woo-hoo! I'm so glad you think it's original! i tried pretty hard to think of something that hasn't been done yet. thnks for the review!!! Report Review
Wow! An alternate approach to year six... I like it! I love the new character, Mariya, she's got sass. ;) This is really good! I love your plot flow and the way you present the characters- very believable. Lovely job! =D Keep it up! Author's Response: oh, thank you so much! I'm so glad you like Mariya...I hope I continue to keep your interest! Report Review
This story is such an interesting twist. I love knowing what was going on with other characters during the books...if that sentence even made sense. I think that Mariya is fascinating and you write Draco very well. Wondefully done, I can't wait to read the next chapter!Author's Response: oooh, I'm so glad you liked it! chapter four is awaiting validation, so let's pray to the fanfic gods that it's up soon! Report Review
Hooray! I like you- and this story. You've captured Draco's character so beautifully, I wanted to start crying from relief.I love your portrayal of Mariya. She and Draco's personalities...they're both so nasty to each other, it's great. Each of your titles make me happy inside.What I love about this story the most is the fact that I can actually imagine this being Draco's thoughts during the sixth book. - Yes well, getting to the point, you've got a faithful reader here. Please don't abruptly stop writing when you're nearing the end. I'll have to kill you. : [ I'm sure that won't go well with some people.Author's Response: lol, don't worry! you won't have to kill me! ( i hope! *shiver shiver*). hehe, but thank you so much for the review! I'm so glad you liked it! chapter four is waiting for validation as we speak! Report Review
I'm very, very intrigued. I love the character you've created for Mariya and the way you portray Draco. I love the story so far and can't wait for an update!Author's Response: huzzah! i'm so glad you like it! thanks for the review! Report Review
Damn, Dandy -- this just keeps getting better and better! I'll say it again, I love how you portray Draco. So very different from every other fic I've read, so realistic, so canon. Everything you've written makes perfect sense. I'm sad I'm at the end of current chapters -- I hope you will update soon!!Author's Response: I am blushing so much right now! =) I'm SO glad you think I've kept Draco canon, because I've really been trying for that. thank you so much for the review! Report Review
I just adore your OC!! Mariya is so wonderfully baaad!! I'll bet she is a ton-of-fun to write. You write her dialogue very succinctly, where every one of her words has meaning, sometimes two meanings. Very nice! And I like how you have a slow state of panic setting in for Draco. We are feeling his trepidation here, which is great, keeps the reader very much engaged. Well done again!!Author's Response: AAAAAHHHHHHH!!! I CAN DIE NOW!!! I'M SO HAPPY!!!! Report Review
Here I am -- ready to be a fan-girl! And boy, I'm glad I stopped by! This looks to be a FASCINATING story!! These two characters are so deliciously NASTY!! I LOVE it! I especially like all of your subtext with Draco. I've always wondered how such a seemingly intelligent, high-born kid could even STAND to hang around Pansy, Crabbe & Goyle. Blech! I would only be able to take the sucking up for just so long. You've captured him beautifully!
I will be reading more, but I generally read just 1 chapter a day (I'm not the speedy reviewer you are ;-). So you will see me around for a number of days!Author's Response: WHEEE! That's the second time somone who's story I've adored liked my fic! I shall dance now!!!! Report Review
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