Aw poor Remus. Hah, I love how she made a midnight visit to Snape. She sure is spunky. Christmas was cute. I hope he stays sane for a while but I feel another attack of conscience coming on soon, lol.
*claps at the greatness of the story*
Author's Response: ^_^ Ok, the midnight visit to snape was a bit of me living through my characters :P I'm glad you liked it :D Report Review
Well that didn’t take long. Remus is such a prat. Ah, angst, beautiful angst. The Sirius/Remus arguing scene was quite enjoyable.
Haha, I love that her dad is telling her to threaten Remus with Sirius. That’s priceless that is.
Aw, Remus needs some sense knocked into him in a bad way.
This is beautiful so far!
Author's Response: It was so hard to write the back and forthness, but I had to make it fit w/ different milestones in the books/my vindictive tendencies.
I like Ted Tonks ^_^ He's hilarious to me.
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Yay! Remus Tonks date!!! Wow, he’s awful friendly for a friend date…or something. Romantic would probably be a better word there. With all the complimenting and touching.
And Dawlish enters the scene yet again…ha! I love that she punched him in the face. (Can you tell I’m typing my review as I read? Lol.)
I like how Sirius was looking out for Remus by asking her if he was A or B. I like how you characterize him as able to be funny and quite serious when the mood arises.
Aw, I loved the whole candle lit room thing. It was so romantic.
The Tonks and Molly learning to knit scene was quite nice!
Hm…I’m now wondering how long it’s going to take before Remus gets cold feet again…
Author's Response: Yes, well, Remus has a hard time with the "D" word. lol.
^_^ I'm so thrilled you like my Sirius. He's one of my favorite people to write.
*cough* not long.
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Fandoogling! I don’t know what it means but it’s a great word!
Aw, poor Sirius. I hate when he’s all depressed. I find it sort of odd but nice that he’s giving her relationship advice.
I still find it quite disturbing that she’s sleeping with Mad-Eye… Yay! She broke it off! It was definitely a unique pairing.
Heh, I like the Full Moon Monologues as I like to call them. Aw, the scene after when they are laying in his bed was quite sweet.
Sexergy! Again with the great words, lol. I so need to make a list of your coined words… They are all great.
Yay!! Remus/Tonks date!
This really is a great and wonderful story. The characterization is wonderful and I love all the little details and humor bits and extra unusual words you throw in.
Author's Response: I don't know what fandoogling means either. Vaguely, but I couldn't fully define it for someone.
I know it's not how Sirius is all the time, but I think he'd have some sage advice somewhere n that head of his.
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Sirius was so funny when they were figuring out “us” stuff. He’s always a good bit of comic relief.
“He looked at me; I felt like I could have fallen into his eyes.” Aww what a sweet line!
Hm…I can’t decide if the Hall of Knowledge clerk is hilarious or obnoxious…I think both!
“We settled on some good jinxes and if all else failed, I’d stay with Remus. That made me secretly hope someone broke in at least twice a week.” Haha! You do humor quite nicely.
Hm…I thought Andromeda was supposed to be nice and fun, you don’t make her seem very nice or fun. Oh well.
“I disapparated home to Elton John. At least he loved me.” LOL! Aw, poor Tonks, reduced to having to get love from a pillow.
AH! Not Moody! AH! * gags* * throws something smelly at you * Why’d you have to have her get busy with Moody? I know Remus is about 14 years older…but Moody is like…ancient or something. Ew!
Ok…I”ll shut up now. Hopefully Moody goes poof soon…. Chapter 7!! *runs to it*
Author's Response: I love Sirius, he's so... versatile to write. Hall of Knowledge was a very last minute name. Maybe I should have made it latin :/
Thanks for the humor compliments. :D It makes me happy when people get my humor.
*cough* I liked writing moody/tonks. That's all they have in the movie too.
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This was another good chapter. I've liked all of them even if I didn't come straight out and say it, lol. So is Snape making the Wolfsbane potion for Remus every month? On to chapter 6...Author's Response: Yeah, I should expalin that perhaps. It does come out later :D
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Hornivore...hahahahaha. I love it!
Moody...she's thinking about Moody in a romantic way? He's retired! Isn't he a bit old for her? *shudders*
“Well, in that case, you’ll want to spend some more time sleeping over there and not busy with—” he coughed slightly “other things.” I promised that I would and left to go die at my desk.” – I laughed out loud at this line. So great!
““Why don’t you stay with me? I hate sleeping alone.” I said groggily. Remus seemed frozen to the spot.” Yea that was about a 9.5 on the awkward scale, lol.
Hm…there was a big thing in canon about Remus being unable to get a job because he was a werewolf. So why would he be able to work at the ministry? Or is it more of a volunteer thing? For like rights and such?
Yuck, Dawlish is so creepy. I hope she hexes him good! Off to chapter 5…
Author's Response: I'm so glad i made you laugh. And I strive for awkward. It's my middle name :D
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I didn't think it drug. I did like the flirting. Near the end there you put Sirius when I think you meant Remus. Also...how does she know he's a werewolf before he tells her? Author's Response: Word of mouth. I'm sure everyone in the order knows. And she's working with Kingsley hunting down Sirius, so I'm sure she would have seen a file on him before.
I think i did that too, I've been meaning to fix it. ^_^
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This is a good story so far. I've been meaning to read more of it for quite some time now! I read through all the chapter summaries and now I'm all anxious to read the rest of it.
I like your characterization of Tonks and her views of Lupin. Sirius kicking him under the table was quite amusing. She was quite brave to kiss him like that. Well...off to chapter 3!Author's Response: ^_^ thanks so much :D I see her being quite spontaneous like that. Report Review
I laughed so hard when Tonks ran into her own Imperturbable Charm. Aaw! I just read the rest of it. How sweet and romantic! Sirius was also rather adorable in this chapter. You really do an amazing job keeping everyone in character. I know I've said that before, but it's true. As is the other thing I say all the time, watch for reoccuring phrases. ;-) Author's Response: Oh gosh that part made me laugh when I thought of it.
I'm a dork like that, I write things in that make *me* laugh hoping other people find it funny. :D Thanks for the review MHBH! Report Review
Hey, you lost the reoccuring phrases this time around. There were just missing words. ;-) *grins at the thought of Dumbledore cursing the snot out of Dawlish later* I'm very curious as to what will happen on the "International Day of Shagging." lol I think I'll go find out!Author's Response: Thanks so much for still reviewing :D
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Amazing foreshadowing in that last sentence. Have I ever mentioned before how much I love your story? If it weren't for the typos and reoccuring phrases, it would be one of the best I've read. I completely spaced out for FOUR songs on my favorite CD because I was absorbed in your story. The Knight Bus was great. Whatever the situation, you keep Remus and Tonks in character. That's incredible. I really want to keep reading, but I have to get off now. I did finally stop being lazy and logged on long enough to add this to my favorites. Until later. -MHBHAuthor's Response: Thanks, so much. I really enjoy your reviews. I erally think my style improves as teh story picks up. :/ or the other people got tired of telling me to learn how to read, lol. I'm glad my story makes you space out :D Report Review
This was a lovely fic. I've never cried over a breakup in a fic in six or so years of reading fanfic but I cried over Tonks and Remus's big split in this. And the ending, urgh... so sad.
Beautiful story. Some awkward writing throughout but even Rowling doesn't have the greatest technical skills. You're a very good storyteller and that's really what matters.Author's Response: Aww, thanks. I know i have some kinks to work out w/ my writing but I'm really touched that you like it.
I HOPE there is some "I love you"ing in the next chapter. lol However, I am neglecting the rest of my review thread by obsessing over your story, so I'll have to come back later. And I will be coming back! Btw, I don't remember any reoccuring phrases this chapter (which is becoming a reoccuring phrase), but there were a few typos. Absoltely amazing story none-the-less.Author's Response: Yeah, I think a lot of the typos have to do with my inability to read.
really. I desperately need to bribe someone to beta.
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Hm... I'll have to use the meteor shower thing to my advantage. Unfortunately, neither my house or my crush's are in the country enough for that. I'll try though! ;-) Truly smashing. If only there weren't the typos in every chapter. Anyway, I'm off for number ten!Author's Response: well, drive to an abandoned field and do it :P Just make sure they dno't run away once it's over. ^_^ Report Review
Molly was very well written in this chapter. It seems strange though that you're letting them have this conversation, but we know from HBP that Molly thinks Tonks likes Sirius. That would be a bit contridicting. I'll wait it out and see what you do though. ;-) Still a few reoccuring phrases and typos, but I absolutely love this story.Author's Response: Hmm, I thought Harry was the noe who thought there was a tonks/sirius deal not molly. I'll have to go check now. I know Molly said she had a hard time getting over what happened in the ministry...
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Hehehe. Things are rather looking up for Tonks now. Watch for reoccuring phrases though. Nooo! I suddenly remembered the story's summary. Now I'm depressed. Sorry my reviews are getting shorter. It's a compliment really. I'm so anxious to see what happens next.Author's Response: I was hoping you'd forget hte summary :P Anyways, it is a long way till then. ^_^
Thanks so much. I'm really glad you like it despite the errors. Report Review
*gags, coughs, vomits slightly* ... ... *shivers* I don't even want to *gag* review this until I've *dry heave* gotten myself under control. I'm just gonna say there were a few grammatical errors, but it's still amazing (except that last part *gag*). And I'm sooo finished with this chapter. ;-)Author's Response: lol, I was going for that reaction :P More or less. I don't know, I liked them together, for a brief while. Report Review
I loved the dream, and I love how you characterize Moody! Gotta love him. I think Lupin's announcement was a little rushed, and I wish some of these big things would happen in later chapters. You know, so they're built up a little more. Lupin and Tonks' talks don't seem to be long enough.
I also have to warn you about plagerizing. While taking out things from the books, I think it is in the Terms of Service that you can only take out three lines from the books. Aside from this, you have to credit what book it is from. You need to say the book (i.e. Order of the Phoenix), version (UK, US, etc.), chapter and page number. I just say this because I don't want you to get in trouble and I noticed that a lot of the dialogue was directly from the books. Just be careful when it comes to direct quotes! :)Author's Response: :o I knew I spaced on something. I put in a quick note and I'll go through and put one in where I quote the book. Thanks for pointing out. Report Review
I am really enjoying this, though some paragraphs are a little dull and not capturing my attention (though that may be because it's the morning and I'm not a morning person). You also have some spelling/grammar mistakes and though I did like how spontaneous the kiss was, I wish it would have happened a few chapters later (would've kept me on the edge of my seat more). Still, I am definitely into the story, and I like how you've characterized Tonks, what with her being clumsy and not quite as serious as she should. The Dursley/phone conversation was also very funny! Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm planning on working out the grammar/spacing errors sooner or later.
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"Faux beau," that's a good line. I have a question about when you said Scrimgeor knew her dad. Did you mean he knew him personally or just the fact that he's a Muggle? I wouldn't think Scrimgeor would associate himself with that kind of person. He just doesn't really seem the type. I liked that, even though Tonks's mother was rebellious enough to marry a Muggle, she still had a bit of Black mentality. Her father had a good bit of character too. Good job with that. There's still a large amount of technical problems going on. It just gets really difficult to understand exactly how the sentence is supposed to flow. Wonderful work none-the-less.Author's Response: I meant it in the same way that Cedric would say he knew Harry. Not pals or anything, just aquantances, probably worked in a mutual setting. Report Review
I didn't think it was very draggy. You went inside Tonks's head, even during the book parts, so it was a new insight. There was a lot of technical problems in this chapter. Commas were the main source. What's being said is wonderful, but it sometimes gets hard to read with the poor comma usage. I think I have time for one more chapter. *skips off happily*Author's Response: oooh i was ready to murder this chapter when I wrote it. I couldn't get teh spacing right and well, i gave up :/ I'll fix it, i promise! Report Review
I think you "mapped it out" very well. ;-) Again, there were reoccuring phrases and a typo or two. But to the story! How very impulsive of Tonks, especially since she didn't have any "at first sight" kind of feelings for him. Tripping over Crookshanks was hilarious. Poor kitty. I liked how you had her flustered thoughts intervene with her Disapparation. It seemed very realistic. And hugging her pillow at the end gave Tonks a bit more depth, in my opinion. Still fantastic and I'm confident it will stay that way.Author's Response: I was going for impulsive :D I'm so glad you like it (minus the typos).
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So, why did I put this off again? This isn't the first time I've been proven wrong by a great story. There were a few comma errors and whatnot, but nothing major. On of my pet peeves is reoccuring phrases, and there were quite a few in there. As for actual context though, it's absolutely incredible. Tonks is very in character, so this seems like a "fill in the blanks" sort of story so far. That's my favorite kind. I'll definately get to the other chapter in less time that the decade I promised. ;-)Author's Response: I'm going to go through this and weed that stuff out. I wrote all of this un under a month wtihout revising too much. I'm so glad you like her character :D she's fun to write. Report Review
Ah! Again, Rose...Well, all I said was that I liked this chapter and Dumbledore is the coolest thing ever.since me Report Review
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