I am in LOVE with this chapter. I don't know what it is about father/son relationships that strike such a chord with me, but I must have read this chapter at least a dozen times. The conversations that you write between your characters are so natural and just their dialogue alone is enough to fully bring them to life. You have a crazy gift and I feel lucky that we all just get to experience it. I loved Freddie and George together; each and every word out of their mouths was perfect. When Fred started crying and George hugged him, I got a little choked up. Your stories just have this magical effect on me, and it's honestly something I haven't experienced before. This story is going to go in some amazing directions, but it's biggest positive (I feel) is the huge heart at the center of it. I care about these characters and I'm anxious for more! Next time I'll just have to get some tissues before I start reading!Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much. Your reviews always make me blush!! Father/Son relationships really interest me... which I'm sure you can tell. Oliver/Atticus, Freddie/George, James/Harry, Scorpius/Draco. There is a major plot in all of them. For some reason I am drawn to that conflict.
I am really glad you mentioned that, about the big heart. Because that is what this story is about, in a nut shell. Heart. And how people from such different worlds can be much more similar than they realized.
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Love the fact George comes out with "You accidentally hooked up with Scorpius Malfoy" - Pure Brilliance, George is the best!!
I would love to have George as a dad he like super mega totally awesome!!
I'm really glad Freddie finally told his dad and hoping there's more Fryan coming soon.
Sophxx :DAuthor's Response: George is such a riot. I love writing him. Makes up for me missing writing him and Fred in Keep Away. I have to get my Weasley twin fix somewhere, right? Thank you so much! Report Review
YES I did. (Enjoy it, I mean.)
George reacted better than he could've hoped for, right? And while the asking Annie about being his girlfriend was SUPERCUTE, it wasn't exactly smart in my opinion, with Ryan and all.
Oh George... That babybook... I SO want to see how everyone else will react to the news of the pregnancy.
What will Roxy do? She can't simply ignore that she's going to be an auntie, can she?
Lots o' love, Javery fannnAuthor's Response: Not smart at all. But Fred hasn't exactly excelled in street smarts when it comes to women, has he?
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This is definitely one of my favorite chapters! First of all, I am rather jealous of Annie because I want a boy to rent out a chocolate shop for me! But then again, Annie is dating someone who got another girl pregnant, so maybe I'm not so jealous. Also, the scene between Fred and George was one of the best so far. Fred crying was written very well. I am glad that Fred was finally able to let it all out. I think I have mentioned this in previous reviews, but the way you put in little details that help readers to understand the characters are fantastic and really stood out in this chapter! Keep up the great work!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words! This chapter was heart-breaking to write because Fred bases so much of his life on his father's opinion, whether he knows it or not. And George bases so much of his life on Fred. It's a complicated father-son dynamic, but they are two peas in a joke shop.
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Welp. This was awesome, let me just say that. Also, George is amazing and if my dad weren't so amazing, I'd want him was my surrogate dad. You know, in most fanfics with teen pregnancy - which happens rather a lot, though you're doing an excellent and pretty unique job of it - the male in the situation is never seen breaking down and crying into someone's shirt. Which is what I really like about Freddy. In my opinion, it takes a brave man to let himself cry. Also, I think Freddy's going to make a great dad. Not so sure about Ryan, she's... the other kind of witchy. But we shall see. Annie is really sweet, I like her. But jeez - what a date. "So, I know you're my girlfriend and all and I swear I've never cheated on you but, well, Ryan Davies is pregnant with my baby. Wanna go out next week, same time?" Yep. That'll go over well. Right. So, I can't wait for the next chapter, please update soon! (By the way, China is annoying and wad up with Roxy and her just blowing Freddy off?)Author's Response: I agree with you about Freddie. He's really a different sort of boy. He has been through a lot, which you can see has started to really chip away at him. He is very vulnerable, which he tries his best to hide but he really can't. He struggles, which I like about him. I am sick of pregnancy fics where oh no someone's pregnant let's fall in love and angst and yelling and kissing. Blah. Merp.
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i really really ejoyed this chapterAuthor's Response: I'm so glad you did; thank you so much for the review! Report Review
Hello! Here with review numero tres. Man, time flies when you’re having fun.
I was a bit surprised the way you opened the chapter. Albus? I have gotten so used to Freddie but I suppose it's a good to shake everything up once in awhile.
Did Annie not agree to let you touch her boobs?
You can't just ask, Freddo.
^ Haha. Men. No, boys. Honestly.
She doesn't know I shave my toes
Lord, reminds me of my sister.
I expected everyone to find out in this chapter actually so I was a bit surprised but I wasn't let down because I feel like them keeping it a secret is just going to create even more drama in the future. I wonder if Freddie and Annie will actually get together and how that will affect his relationship with her once she finds out that he's going to be a father. I wonder how everyone will react actually.
You write the perfect James. I love him in your stories because he's always got that cocky attitude. I love him drunk. You should add it even more awful. A short story collection of his drunken escapades because I'm sure you have loads of scenarios to write about with him. Is he your favorite next generation character?Author's Response: Freddie and George are just so... them. No other way to put it, haha.
HAHA. A short story collection of drunk James. DO NOT TEMPT ME.
Yes, he is absolutely my favorite next gen. He is the one that comes most naturally to me, even in different universes (BTQC vs Hormones). For some reason I just click with him. Maybe because a lot of his personality comes directly from me, but to a few extremes. So YES he is definitely my favorite.
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Haha! I'm glad I inspired you to write that one-shot. Thanks so much for joining my challenge. I'm back again for your second review! Can't wait to see what Freddie says this time around.
In fifth year, James asked if she was a mail order bride. Chopper never responded, but James said his toothbrush tasted weird the next day. He promptly replaced it.
^ I love the way you have Freddie speak to us. Or is it think? Well, whatever it is I love it. Everything he says, even if it's slightly sad about his family can make me chuckle. You write teenage boys so well. Are you trying to tell us something Mistress? Are you really a man?
No. I'm joking. Don't take offense to that! I'm just being silly.
Ah well, just finished the chapter and that Ryan is something else. I know you have wanted to write a pregnancy story for quite some time and you really have the drama in there. I appreciate the humor but also the real life thoughts and discussions. When I was their age I think I would have had a worse reaction if something like that happened to me. Even now, I'm not that much older than them, but I think I wouldn't know what to do or what I would want to do. It's a tough subject and you're handling it nicely. I kind of hope that it's a really hard road for them because a lot of stories I've read the couple falls in love, which is great, but they're never really stressed or all their friends are happy about it and the family barely bats an eyelash sometimes. I know you're going to do something different. I think it would be sad if she didn't have the baby to full term (an accident or something) but it would be believable because it does happen. I'm just putting it out there.Author's Response: The one-shot was so much fun to write. Just a random extra thing.
So glad you like Freddie's voice. I gave him more of a present-tense voice sort of just rambling. He's figuring himself out through prose. And I AM ACTUALLY A BOY. SURPRISE. Ah, yeah, no.
I completely agree with you about the stress-element. And I noticed the actual pregnancy and the baby is usually in the background of hpff pregnancy stories. There are entire chapters where it seems like it just disappears for the sake of a snog. And that's not really life. So even if this story isn't nearly as popular as those, I wanted to throw a lot more reality in there. You'll see as the story progresses that both Freddie and Ryan have tragic pasts they're both running from and running into.
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Damn, Al is a total bad ass. I like this new take one him as well as all the other characters. It is so interesting seeing the contrast between the cast of Hormones and BTQCAuthor's Response: That's exactly what I wanted :) An alternate universe where I could spin them in different ways based on the changes in their situations. Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
"Have fun," i said. "We'll chat later. It's not serious."
pfft... yeah just found out im gonna have a child... oops... um but dont worry cuz its no big deal or anything!
great chapter! (oh and sorry for not reviewing earlier... brother used up all the internet cuz he was downloading and playing games on Steam... *cue depressed sigh*)
anyways i'm gonna go read next chapter now!Author's Response: No big deal. None. Just a sidenote, really.
No worries :) Thank you so much for the review! You're the bestest. Report Review
ryan's keeping the baby! dergh. although i suppose if she didn't, there wouldn't really be the story. still, she doesn't seem like the character who would get all soft about babies and potential and pro-life. i expected her to go 'the baby was an accident, not fair on the baby to grow up knowing it was unwanted, it will mess up my life, getting an abortion' or something.
this is honestly one of my favourite stories here. you have such a knack for writing first person- fred seems like a real character, james is hilarious, the plotline is subtle and suggesting without making you want to tear your hair out at how dumb the characters are being, and the characters are all the perfect balance between the 'good guy' and the 'bad guy'.
bea xoAuthor's Response: See, I get where you're coming from. Completely. But all you know of Ryan so far is what Fred has seen of her. She has a lot to her, including her family life, and hopefully as the story unfolds and you learn more about her, you'll be able to see her motivation behind keeping hte baby. It wasn't a "she's soft" decision at all.
I'm really glad you're enjoying it so far! Thank you so much for the review and I hope you like the rest! Report Review
I really really enjoyed this chapter! Not only was drunk James and Fred hilarious, but I am really starting to like Ryan. The scene between Fred and Ryan was great and I loved when Fred talked about his guilt. As always, I loved Fred's comments on his relationship with his father, especially when Fred mentioned feeling guilty when his dad looked at him like he was his brother. I love that you have made these characters, especially Fred, so realistic. Keep up the great work and I will be looking forward to the next chapter!Author's Response: Drunk Fred and James are always hilarious. They crack me up.
I'm so glad you're enjoying it. And starting to like Ryan. She is very rough around the edges, but she has a solid heart. She's just very protective of herself. She doesn't want to get hurt any more than she has.
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Holy cow, that was a funny chapter. I want to marry Freddie. I think thats about it.
Shindig :DAuthor's Response: I wouldn't psas up that opportunity, that's for sure! Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
This was quite an excellent chapter. For me, I think this chapter pulled me into this story more than the first chapter. I think it has to do with the fact that more of the character's personalities were explored in this. I also really like the dynamic you have set up between both Freddie and Ryan and Freddie and Roxanne. I think the brother-sister relationship you have depicted between Freddie and Roxanne is not only realistic, but well thought out.
Overall I am enjoying this story and I rarely read next gen stories. So keep up the good work!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind thoughts.
It's complicated to try and get everything introduced and still go on with the story. I do think there are some things I may change down the road, but overall this is such a rewarding story to write. I realy do love it and I'm happy to know so many people are on board. Thank you so much! Report Review
This was a very interesting start to this story and one that pulls the readers in quite quickly. What I think I liked the most is that parts of the main characters personalities (mainly Ryan and Freddie) are established almost immediately with your opening prose. I think this is a clever way to introduce your main characters in a short amount of time.
This chapter is full of character introductions and family dynamics. I particularly liked how you gave the reader a glimpse into the different relationships Freddie has with each of his family members and how they differ with each person. I like the fact that they fight as a normal family would. I don't read a lot of Next gen fics, so keeping who was a Weasley and who was a Potter was a bit harder for me, but not enough to distract from the story.
One thing I did see refreshing to see in a next gen fic is that Albus and Scorpius were Ravenclaws and not the typical Slytherins. I also think you wrote Freddie as a realistic teenage boy doing all the good and bad things a teenage boy does.
As for teenage pregnancy issue, I found it unique that you decided to write it from the male's perspective. I'm curious to see how you handle such a topic that can be sensitive from the male's perspective.
Good work!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm so glad you decided to give it a shot even though you don't read a lot of next gen. I completely understand that. For ages I didn't touch it until one day I got a spark of an idea. I appreciate your feedback and I really hope you enjoy the rest of the story! I have a lot of twists and turns planned. thank you so much! Report Review
poor freddie.poor ryan, i just want to hug them both. they i met get hexed from the latter of the twoAuthor's Response: I really want to hug them too. Lots of snuggles. I feel for them. Thank you! Report Review
Okay so I've wanted to leave a review for a little bit now.
First off, I'd like to say thanks. I got my wisdom teeth out a week ago, and your stories have kind of kept me going. BTQC was the first I read (can't wait for the next chapter) followed directly by Keep Away and Hide & Seek. So incredible. And now you've given me this one to follow.
Also, you have totally inspired me to keep writing. I got a little disheartened, but now I want to keep going. So I thank you for that.
FREDDIE. ALRIGHT I DON'T CARE IF YOU GOT A GIRL PREGNANT, YOU ARE SO GREAT. ASDFGHJKL.
Alright that's out of my system.
This story is really great so far. It's such a new take on a pregnant at Hogwarts story, which I usually don't like excluding Delicate.
Your characterization, plot, and humor is F-L-A-W-L-E-S-S. I envy you.
I hope you update soon.
~CaitlinAuthor's Response: Love your penname!
Ah, it's my absolute pleasure to help you through your dreadful wisdom-tooth time. I really need to get mine out, but I'm not looking forward to it.
Please keep writing. It's such a wonderful thing to do and it really helps hone your ability as well as escape from reality. At least that's what it does for me.
I'm with you on the pregnancy stories. That's actually why I wrote this one. I was sick of a lot of them, even the most popular ones. So I wanted to do something different. And something different from what I usually do.
Thank you so much, Caitlin! I really hope you like the rest. Report Review
Oh hey Andrew. You are quite attractive.
“Because Davies isn’t playing this season,” Albus all but shouted, his voice breaking. He looked like he was about to have a nervous breakdown.
Rox didn’t meet my eyes when we passed on the marble staircase. I wouldn’t have known what to do if she did.
But I just want them to be friends ;_;
And I felt guilty for all of it.
I want to give Freddie a huge hug.
Especially Ryan. I felt protective over her.
Ryan shot me a cocky wink, which I wasn’t expecting.
Mental Note: WWW Guilt Potion?
I thought that said WWE and got really confused for a second because I thought you were talking about RAW. Oops.
“So when that time comes … what if I decide not to keep you a secret?”
I feel like Dirty Little Secret would be theme song for this if it was a TV show.
What if she was reading my thoughts?
Spicy mushroom wrap.
Was I hungry?
FREDDIE OHHH MY GOD.
I seriously love George’s letters to Fred.
To clarify, I’m not talking about baby Hufflepuffs
That would be super awk.
“She doesn’t know I shave my toes,”
”What goes together better than hedgehogs and horses?”
What was drunk? Abstract reality of composition?
What does that even mean.
“You two do realize once you take a step out of line, I’ll have that Beater position, right?”
James also forgot it was not okay to ask fourth years for a piggy-back ride to the castle and then scream at them that he is a Potter and they have to listen to him or he’ll sick his girlfriend on them.
James omg you can’t just do that.
Was Andrew real or not real?
HE’S NOT PEETA SO IT DON’T MATTER.
I don’t really think their bromance is much of a secret though.
Davies is not happy. At all.
“LIGHT IT. I AM SO COOL NOW.”
Omg James. And how in the world did he not realize that Ryan and Freddie were talking about something in particular.
Basically super fab. Love me some drunk Fred and James. Love it.Author's Response: Author's Response: ANDREW IS NOT ATTRACTIVE HE IS A BULLY.
But also kinda cute whatever.
The Rox and Freddie relationship hurts my heart.
WWE: Freddie versus Andrew.
I love how James uses Ollie for things like that he is a wimp.
James was way too drunk to know. Which makes it all the more hilarious.
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"She doesn't know I shave my toes," replied James - I bloody love James. The stuff he comes out with never fails to make me laugh. :D Hedgehogs and horses - James is a legend!
Love the fact that there's more Fryan action even if she is annoyed and angry at him. Also the letter from Fred, he is as awesome as James!
Daddy? As is Fred or Ryan's daddy...?
-Potterfan310Author's Response: James is indeed a legend. And a total weirdo. Kudos to Ollie for putting up with him.
I do enjoy Fryan time. One of my favorites.
Oooh, Fryan interaction!! Love it! Pity Ryan is so angry at him right now. Before that they were - dramatic pause - FLIRTING!
I wish Fred would tell his daddy...
And shouldn't he quit on Annie right now? It ins't fair to be dating her to both Annie and Ryan.
You said next chapter China, Roxy, Annie and daddy! Squeal!! But can he make up with Ryan too? I don't like it when mummy and daddy are fighting...Author's Response: Javery fannn! Hi there!
FLIRTING. Now that is just positively absurd.
Well, technically Ryan should have nothing to do with his relationships, especially since she knows, but it's definitely not fair to Annie.
Thank you so much for the review! I hope you enjoy the rest. Report Review
Ah, Frames are the best bromance since...
the first bros in the history of bros?
I don't know but ahh idskubsgkjsfkj
I love this story!
and I love the way you've written Rose, she's so snarky and bitchy :p
Anywho, love this story, love this chapter
please update soon! :DAuthor's Response: I love Frames. They absolutely crack me up. And they own it too.
So glad you're enjoying Rose as well. I needed a good balance for the rest of the Weasley's and she is it. And Molly.
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Another AMAZING chapter!!
George's letters never fail to make me laugh. Classic.
I'm not feeling in the mood to write a long review, but I promise I will next chapter.
I'm quite liking Ryan, she's a good match for Freddie.
AbhiAuthor's Response: Those are one of my favorite parts about the story. George's letters. I do love George. Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
This story is great! I find it really interesting to see the different takes you have on the same characters, such as James and Fred. The characters are great, and in this case James II reminds me a bit more of James I, although I like it more when he is the quidditch star, but i really see fred as a beater.
Great job again this is an amazing story,
James2009Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I thought I'd take a break from the Quidditch-centered stories with this one since there is already so much happening in it. I'm glad you're enjoying the characters. Freddie was a character very, very important to me. He's just a different man in this story because he is going through different turmoils, you know? Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
O MISTRESS INTOXICATION CHAPTER! Love those. and ryan tells everyone. agh. so exciting. Really enjoyed the chapter.
Shindig :DAuthor's Response: I do love my intoxication chapters. So guilty. Thanks so much! Report Review
Welp. this is quite the story as of yet. it's different from other fanfic i've read in the aspect that it's more along the lines of OLD Hoggiewarts. as in, the Hogwarts you can find in J.K. Rowling's books. if that makes any sense. but i really like it. and i am partial to stories told from the guy's POV, which doesn't happen all too often, so i enjoy it immensely. and he doesn't spend every minute thinking about sex, Quidditch, or food! he thinks about feelings and stuff! he genuinely cares about his little sister and it hurts to see her replace him! i really like him. he's pretty awesome. yep. good story, i really like it.Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far :) I hope you continue to follow because I have some fun things planned for Freddie & Co.
Though in teenage guy's defense... most of them actually do think about majority sports, sex, and food. So thats really not all that far off. The way Freddie was raised forced the feelings out of him :)
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