Ahhh It's a new chapter! :D
I love Ryan! I wonder what her back story is...
Annie is super nice but... I don't know. I ship Fryan. But I don't want him to break her heart!
Update as soon as you can!!!Author's Response: Ryan is great. She has a LOT of background. Now that the foundation has come out for the story, it's time to start discovering that backstory a little more.
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Another great chapter! I loved the twist with WWW having business problems. I didn't see it coming.Author's Response: Glad you're liking it! I wanted to throw in a nice plot twist that gave Fred something else to take on. But in a great way.
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"James kept missing his mouth with the fork." - He seems so adorable even when he tries not to be!!
Fryan!!! YAY even is she was mean again but hey ho there was still action! :) ♥ ♥
Amazing as always!!! ♥ ♥
P.s Who is the girl used on this chapter image??Author's Response: I love James in this story. He just has his head in the clouds.
FRYAN YUSS. Expect more soon.
I believe I used Dakota Fanning.
Can't wait for the next chapter.. Amazing as alwaysAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate the review. Report Review
Did Annie not agree to let you touch her (12+)?
You canít just ask, Freddo.
Girls get weird about that kind of thing.
Shit! What if she was reading my thoughts?
Spicy mushroom wrap.
Was I hungry?
"LIGHT IT. I AM SO COOL NOW."
I think I laughed way too hard.
I felt so bad for Ryan and her quitting the Quidditch team... and then her jaded view on James being in love (can't people just be happy?!)... god, I know she's jealous that Fred has "an option", as she puts it, but seriously - he's trying!
I still want to pinch Freddie's cheeks.
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HELLO. Here to read as I review, or review as I read. Which is it. I'm not sure. Huh.
Chopper? Oh my god, best name ever. I'm thinking of a helicopter? Or a car? I dunno. Something deadly, as you said. With big teeth. *shudder*
Mox? Like box? Or Mop? I'm not sure which one I like better. ;D
Ooh, Andrew dating Ollie? Awk-ward. :P
ANNIE? OH MY GOD NO. SHE'S OFF LIMITS, ANDREW. GET YOUR FACE OUT OF THERE BEFORE I KICK IT.
I mean, he got Ryan pregnant, so I'm not sure how legit that is. BUT YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAAAN.
"It's late," James said. Thanks, Mum.
^ hahahaha. I laughed. So not the James I'm used to :')
Oh, they're the Head Boy and Girl? I think I missed that. Either way, I think the crowd just went *GASP*.
Also, Rune? Like Ancient Runes? Hehe, I love your names.
I love that Rose is captain, btw. GIRL POWER.
Aw, poor Freddie. Alessandra sounds like a non 12+ word (#rejected). I will club her with that beater's bat. ALL IN THE NAME OF FREDDIE. *squishy hugs for him*
But seriously, I think he really likes Annie. I hope she's not going to be shoved to the side (even though I think she will be) in all this. Annie's sweet. I hope she doesn't get hurt. ♥
"At least my breasts are to scale," Gemma replied nonchalantly.
Okay, I am very close to slapping Ryan in the face. Why can't she just talk to him? Freddie's such a sweet kid. He actually WANTS to be involved. Come on, girl!!
I guess I just want her to be vulnerable. But it's too soon for that, especially in front of someone she doesn't trust.
I really like George's values, here. *impressed*
They're going to keep it.
THEY'RE GONNA KEEP IT!!!
Anyway Janice, lovely chapter. Really enjoyed it. Can't wait for the next one! :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and the re-post of the original review as you changed pennames! It means a lot to me! Report Review
Fred's home life makes me so sad. I want to go hug him and squeeze him forever and ever and ever. ♥ Oh, George. I know however sad everyone is about losing Fred, it'll never compare to his pain. I'm just happy he mostly doesn't take it out of Fred II. That would be bad.
Haha he really should change the store design, though...:P
Annie is sweet. I didn't think I'd like her, because of Ryan, but she's cute. And Fred's cuter. They actually kinda fit. Sorta. That line when he admitted to thinking about kissing her made me want to hug him again. That was ADORABLE.
And speaking of adorable - wow, James! I'm so used to him being snarky, so this James just keeps catching me off guard. He kept all his love notes. Double dating. Aww, he's Sensative James.
Ryan just needs to get that stick out of her bum. *nods* but I like her, too. She still helped Fred, even if she hated him. At least she's sort of professional :P Library Clerk, huh? Needs the money?
And... Alessandra. I will break that girl for breaking Fred's heart.
Loved it, as always :) ♥Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and the re-post of the original review as you changed pennames! It means a lot to me! Report Review
I know you love when I review and read at the same time, so here it goes! ;D
Herbology reminds me of gardening. I bet it's not THAT bad... but maybe it's the teacher. Ugh, they can make the best subject the worst.
If James is hot, he'll have fangirls. Screw historians. ;D
Ah, I love Ryan. That little... witch... *cough*
AHHH. Fred and Roxy. Reminds me a bit of my brother and I growing up. We're still pretty close. Gah, I miss my brother... love that little guy who's taller than me and has facial hair BUT HE'S STILL MY BABY BROTHER, FOR THE RECORD.
... aww. Did she really take the Ravenclaw thing to heart? My heart just broke. :(
Scorpius and Roxy? Sibling friendship or more? I guess we'll see.
Poor Fred. Gah. So sad now.
Aw, Annie's so nice. :)
Ooh, boy talk. I LOVE BOY TALK. Mostly because I never hear /real/ boy talk, since they're all GIRL ALERT.
FREDDIE, KEEP BLUSHING. I LOVE WHEN BOYS BLUSH.
Lovelovelovelove it, as always. Can't wait for chapter three ♥Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and the re-post of the original review as you changed pennames! It means a lot to me! Report Review
Finally! waited months ! :P loved the chapter! cant wait for the ryan/fred romance to develop further.
ďWhere? Into the water? Sure.Ē
And Ryan had a baby in her. So she needed an elevator. At the very least escalator. Those Muggles were onto something.Author's Response: So glad you're liking it! These chapters have been great to write. I love the Fred/Ryan scenes. They have so much tension.
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OH MY GODRIC.
(ALL CAPS FOR THE WIN)
Fryan is such a funny name, don't you think? It's like... Frying Ryan. Or Bryan. Not so good, omenwise. Burning your girlfriend (or boyfriend, fine, Bryan can have a chance too) in a frying pan just doesn't seem like a relationship builder.
I loved the Fred/Ryan (I tried typing Fryan and just looked at it funny) stuff today. The lingerie part was hilarious. The snuggling and the crying at the lion king was the best. It was pretty much the most adorable thing ever. And he touched her hair! So cute!
However, M'darling, I'm getting incredibly worried about our dear Annie over there. I don't want Fred to break her heart, but I do feel like she's not as good for him as Ryan (though she is lovely, and I think they're good together - to a point). But I feel the angst coming, and I'm slightly worried about it.
The abstinence rally thing made me laugh, and so did a bunch of other stuff I can't find, but they did! Promise!
Sorry for the relatively short/lack of freaking out review, but yeah. Loved it!Author's Response: Look at those caps!
Frying Ryan. Oh my gosh. That's brill.
I like how they're moving through getting to know each other.
Yeah, annie definitely complicates things, which makes me nervous. But don't worry. Too much.
Glad I got you to laugh. It is a goal, you know.
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This was a great chapter. I really love your take on Fred II. Most people depict him as a manwhore who doesn't take anything seriously, and I don't think that's exactly realistic. I'm sorry to hear you've been under the weather! I've found Little Yellow Spider by Devendra Banhart to cheer me up :)Author's Response: I'm glad you like my Fred. For some reason he has resonated with me a lot. I don't like the idea of manwhore characters. I just don't think it's realistic ... or creative. So I'm glad you like him.
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Oh Roxy, what went wrong with you and Freddie - I'm dying to find out.
For some reason when Freddie went back in the draw I had this vision of him trying the corset on and then Ryan walking in.
So glad there was more Fryan action, in fact lots and lots of Fryan action ♥ ♥. I thought then end of this chapter was so sweet, and I'm staring to think that maybe just maybe Freddie's falling for Ryan ♥
Sorry to here you've been un-well, hope your better now xxx
Really can't wait for the next chaper :D
Soph xxxAuthor's Response: I feel for Freddie about Rox. It's a sad situation to be in.
HAHA. can you imagine? Though the Fred in BTQC probably would have. Let's be real.
As the story moves on, there will be more Fryan action as that plot becomes central.
Thank you so much, Soph! I hope you enjoy the rest. Though it's more somber than my other stories, I promise I have a lot planned! Report Review
aww!! tht was so cute!! god i love Freddie!! I rele want to know more about him and then Ryan too :P I mean I like Annie and all but for some reason Im not too excited about the whole dating thing :P
Great update though!Author's Response: I love Freddie too :) He's adorable and both him and Ryan have a very storied past. More of that will keep unfolding as it goes along. Thank you for the review! Report Review
to be honest- which i try to be- i love friends, and especially that episode.
and whilst i also love this story, i don't think it was that great, mixing the two together. we don't know enough about any of the characters, apart from freddie, james, molly and potentially andrew parish to find the humour in it; even annie and ollie don't have enough character build up to make this as funny as it should be.
apart from that, great chapter!Author's Response: Glad you liked the chapter and thank you for the input! I needed a filler there to do some introducing and it was mostly for the sake of Fred and James, moreso than really everyone else. I'll keep that in mind as I go forward -- I really hope you enjoy the rest of the story! Report Review
I thought I already reviewed this chapter. Apparently not. Hereís a review! It may be a bit dramatic as Iím listening to the Les Miserables soundtrack as I do this. Deal.
I did have three other roommates, though.
Way to forget about everyone else Fred.
Chopper. What a name. The quiet ones really are the ones you have to watch out for. Because you never know. You just never know.
How can you be afraid of flobberworms? They literally do nothing.
Get over it Andrew. Bugger off.
I forgot Freddie is a prefect in this story. Oops. Iím a terrible reader. Donít fire me.
AHAAHAHAHAHA OH MY GOOGLY EYES I FORGOT ABOUT MOLLY AND RUNE HAHAHAHA
I feel like George would just congratulate Fred for making fun of Molly.
Gee waited ten minutes, stole my bat, and clubbed me over the head with it.
I like her.
She really didnít have to tell you Freddie. Jeez.
ďItís probably because they hug too damn much.Ē
Can you blame us Freddie? We love hugging.
I just love that George calls him Freddo.
So youíre blackmailing her.
ďMaking sure youíre okay.Ē
Heís such a good guy. Aw Freddie. I wanna hug him.
Well thereís one milestone. Freddieís going to be a dad.
I was kidding myself to believe Iíd ever be just fine again.
As always 34358684/10
This was a more somber chapter, but I know you and you canít stay away from the humor for too long.
AliCatAuthor's Response: Pssh. Look at you. Skipping chapters. RUDE.
LesMis review. Legit.
Well, they are forgettable roommates. Ish.
I love Chopper's name. Got that from a friend of mine's step dad. They call him Chopper. And no one knows if it's his real name.
Maybe Mox is aftraid of nothingness. MAYBE HE IS DEEP.
You're on probation. HE IS A PREFECT. And perfect.
George has a soft spot for the girls in the Weasley family. Fred hates this.
Gee is fabulous. Wish I could put more of her in, but there is already a lot of plot.
We really do love hugging. Sometimes.
Freddo is my faves. Very fatherly thing.
I love George. and his letters. And everything about him. Hence why I had to write "Heroes"
It definitely was a somber chapter. Though this is more of a somber story. But once things pick up and the introductions of the plots are done, there will be more humor.
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i haven't signed in because im a total idiot.
I WAS SO CONFUSED! because once you said that you were confused, because you updated this last month, then i became so confused because i distinctly remembered seeing a '11 on the year, which is last year and i was sad because i love this story.
so then i went back and checked, and then i realized (yes, im an idiot, i know) that the date was actually 2012.11.11
which means 11th of november, and not something something 2011, which is what i thought so ...
this is awkward..
a n y w a y I THINK YOUR STORY IS AMAZING, AND SORRY FOR THE MISTAKE PLEASE DONT THINK IM WEIRD.
update after the queue closes! (:Author's Response: Author's Response: Haha, don't worry about it. I was so lost. I was like... have I even been writing this story for a year? Don't worry. I have the next chapter written - it just needs a chapter image before it gets into the queue. But it's ready to go and I have part of the chapter after that written too. So don't you worry. It'll be updated :)
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i cannot believe this chapter only has 8 reviews. because it deserves so much more. great as always. this is my favorite story that you have wrote. and ps- the picture of annie is not my favorite, her lips are way fat, and in my opinion is not very cute or attractive, but hey. i like ryan totes better, so i guess that works. please update soon. and thank you for your amazingness.Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm sorry you don't like the way Annie looks. I guess to each his own, as Freddo finds that attractive in a girl. Glad you're enjoying the story! Thanks for the review! Report Review
YOU HAVE TO UPDATE THIS!!
WHY HAVEN'T YOU UPDATED IN OVER A YEAR?!! WHY?!! :(
THIS IS SUCH AN AMAZING STORY!
PLEASE DONT LOSE IT!
MERRY CHRISTMAS! (:Author's Response: What on earth are you talking about?! I updated LAST MONTH! I update this story regularly and I'm so confused. The queue is closed and after it's open I'll have another chapter up. Hope you enjoy! Thanks for the review! Report Review
I have but one wish, and it is for the girls rooms to be disgusting.
Like, worse than the boys.
Please?Author's Response: It won't be THAT, but it won't be what the boys were hoping for, that's for sure.
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This is awesome.
I loved reading it, I can't wait for the next chapter.
You've written it very well, and I love the funny parts haha.
Magic xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I hope you like the rest. This story is quickly becoming something I really, really love to write. Thanks! Report Review
heh heh heh go grffindor boys!
this was great i cant wait to read the next one!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope you like the rest! Report Review
"Did you get Ollie pregnant?" - I love how James asks if Fred knocked up Ollie, especially since he says it so casually. :D
Yay! James knows!, I think the end of their conversation was pretty sweet in a way. I LOVE FRAMES!! ♥ ♥ THEY'RE THE BEST BROMANCE IN THE HISTORY OF BROMANCE'S! They're so awesome and adorably cute/sweet at times ♥
I LOVE FRIENDS!!! and the trivia game! :D
It would have been awesome if James had to propose to Ollie. It should be interesting to see the girls room but will the boys be allowed up because of the charm?? Maybe the girls will get their own way after all.
Can't wait for the next chapter espacially if there's some Fryan action ♥ ♥
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: I love James. He is just completely hilarious. And ridiculous. I'm really glad James knows. Freddie needed someone there who knew. For support. And comic relief.
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Hahaha the trivia idea was fun! Should be interesting to see what the girls room is like and how the girls will fare in the boys room.
Im glad James knows about Davies. Keen to see where this story goes next :)Author's Response: I'm really glad Freddie told James. He needed someone at Hogwarts that knew ... other than the girl duo from crazytown. And not the same Crazytown that sang "Butterfly." Thanks! Report Review
Nice! Would've liked more plot, but happy to see Fred sharing the news with James. Also would've enjoyed James proposing to Ollie, but that's ok! Update soon :)Author's Response: Sorry it was a bit of the filler to catch onto some more character development. Hopefully you enjoy the rest of the story! Thanks for the review! Report Review
I am so familiar with "Friends" it's almost embarrassing. And, that was just about all I could think about while reading their trivia/bet/contest. "Monica categorizes her towels. How many categories are there?"
It was so funny, and I loved reading it. Such a great set up and has so much potential for character reveals, embarrassment, secrets, and more. My favorite part was the flashback and Fred telling James about what's going. I always find myself struggling when writing dialogue and interactions between two male characters, especially when it involves emotions and other things they'd rather pretend they don't have. You've got this crazy, awesome ability to have such REAL moments with your characters that I admire so much. They never break character or change simply to fuel the plot of the story; the story breathes around them. That may not have come out right, but it's late, so I'm giving myself a free pass there.
You know your characters so well, and it shows in every chapter.
Okay, seriously, need some sleep now. Said I was going to forty minutes ago.
Well worth it.Author's Response: WHAT IS CHANDLER'S JOB?
Thank you so much for the stellar review. I have no idea how I have the abilities you say I do, but I'm way flattered. Some characters just come naturally to me. I love dialogue. But plot is something that is really, really hard for me. THERE. I HAVE GIVEN YOU MY WEAKNESS, KIRA. DO WITH IT WHAT YOU WILL.
Wow, yeah, I need to go to sleep.
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