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Review #26, by Faith100z Dear Mary.

28th September 2013:
*picks jaw off floor*

Wow, this was amazing, I loved it! I haven't read too many Regulus stories but I love minor characters and he really intrigues me, so I thought I'd check this out. I'm so glad I did, you're a brilliant writer.

The whole thing is so honest and matter of fact it breaks my heart. It's so perfectly worded I feel like I'm in Regulus' head, you've described his feelings so well. The end paragraph is stunning. You gave a really good sense of who they both were in a short piece.

You're really talented, this was fantastic! I hope I get to read more of your work soon!

- Faith

Author's Response: Oh gosh, thank you so much! I'm addicted to minor characters, but I haven't read much Regulus either, so this characterisation was kind of unprompted and I'm everyone seems to like it!

"honest and matter of fact" is honestly one of the biggest complements you could have given me for this fic, so thank you so much. I really tried to get across his heartbreak without making it too sappy, and emphasise the fact that really, he's so young, he's just a teenager with an emotionally stunted family, the girl he loves has died and he can't even talk to anyone about it, there's a war brewing and he knows he's on the wrong side of it - he's just a kid and he doesn't know how to deal with any of this, and I don't think he'd be waxing on in huge lyrical poems to Mary, I think he'd be talking just like he would to her when she was alive - like a blunt teenager.

Wow, this response is turning into an essay you probably don't care about, so I'll cut it off here! Thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm about to put another story in the queue right now, this time about the life story of Madam Pince, so keep an eye out if you like my writing here! Thank you so much!

~Maia < 3

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Review #27, by randomwriter Dear Mary.

28th September 2013:
Hello! Here from review tag!

This is so incredibly mind-numbingly beautiful. I haven't read something in Regulus' voice before, so it was really interesting. I love the tone you used throughout this piece. It was very fitting.

I really liked the characterization of both Mary and Regulus. You made Mary so striking that I felt like a lot of people would be drawn or attracted to her. But you justified her personality. She might have been attention seeking, but she was a beautiful person who deserved it. As for Regulus or Reg, I have no words. As the story progressed, I felt myself sympathizing with him so much that I felt like I could experience his pain. It is so difficult to deal with loss and I guess I really connected with his character because I too turn to writing to deal with loss, more specifically, I too write letters.

I loved how you interspersed his words and thoughts with Mary words and thoughts. It was a wonderful addition and really added value to this.

If I were to give you some CC, it would be that there a few typos, grammatical errors and tense issues, but it's nothing that a quick read through can't fix. Some sentences need to be re-worded too. But I don't think it takes away much from the beauty of this story. Just edit it sometime, but don't worry about it much.

To conclude, I must applaud you on your selection of words when it came to description and tell you that I really liked this. The ending broke me and made me smile because it really was perfect. I loved how you referenced several serious themes and issues over here and gave them a slightly more humorous side. We don't see that too much. And that ending... I can't seem to stop going on about it :P I wish you luck in this challenge. Hope you liked the review! :)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for this lovely review! I honestly don't understand how these characters managed to come across so vividly in such a short fic, but I'm glad that they did, and I'm glad you connected to them. I'm very lucky and have never lost anyone close to me, so I'm glad you felt his process of dealing was realistic as I was writing from a purely empathetic point of view rather than experience, and I was worried that it might seem strange that he was writing a letter to her to try and deal with his grief.

Gosh, I'm usually so good at spotting spelling and grammar mistakes, so I don't know how those slipped through! The English student in me is highly embarrassed :P Thanks so much for pointing that out, I really hate having mistakes like that in my fic no matter how small, so I will actually go and nitpick through it today and correct any I can find. Thanks so much for bringing that to my attention!

I'm glad you liked the ending - it was going to be a lot longer originally but I got to that point and honestly just felt so naturally that I had to end it there, so I was worried it might come across as weirdly cut off, but thanks for saying it worked! As far as the humorous elements go, I really felt like I wanted to emphasise how young they both were (in a way to make it more tragic *evil laugh*) so I thought having those little moments of teenage humour, especially from Mary, would make it more realistic in a way. I'm glad you liked that!

Thank you for the lovely review hon < 3


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Review #28, by Pixileanin Dear Mary.

27th September 2013:
Hi! I'm here from Review Tag on the forums!

You know, I think the best thing about this for me was that he uses the letter as his way of going through the grieving process, even though he doesn't think he ever will get over it. I like how he goes back and forth with himself over whether to accept that she's gone, or to keep pretending that she's still there.

You managed to pack a lot of emotion in to this without going over the top or getting sappy, and I have to commend you on that. A lot of times, when I see something like this, the author can't help but get a bit too tied up in the emo of it all. But I think you did great, especially with the character you chose. I can see Regulus reacting this way to something like this, something that touches him deeper than he wants to admit. I can feel him fighting his way through it and trying to stay sane.

I love how he keeps referring to them as "move-eys". It's such a little thing, but it brings into focus how removed the wizarding world was to the things that muggles take for granted. I loved that little touch.

I like how he brings it into focus, how he uses the pensieve like that, because he "can't not do it". Perfectly heartbreaking right there, I tell you.

The last line was perfect too. I think you hit home with it. Good luck with the challenge!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! I've never done review tag before and this was a lovely first review to get from it :P

I'm glad you think it wasn't too sappy, because I kind of hate sappiness and one of my main worries was that this would come off too whiny and sappy and, like you said, 'emo', so I'm glad you think it works! Regulus is definitely struggling just trying to stay sane through it all and not break down, and yeah, alternating between whether he wants to keep living in denial or try and force himself to move on. I'm glad you noticed that :)

It probably shouldn't make me so happy that you described it as heartbreaking, but, well I'm evil *Mr Burns laugh*

Thanks so much for the lovely review < 3


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Review #29, by MissesWeasley123 Dear Mary.

27th September 2013:

I have absolutely no words for you. This one shot is fabulous. Breathtakingly beautiful. I love it.

Your words are just so mesmerizing.

The passion and love in Regulus is so heartbreaking, I think I just died a little inside. The way you use words to make such a powerful impact is mind blowing.

I love this ship. The relationship you show is flawless. Absolutely brilliant. Just keep on writing like this.

Your banner is absolutely beautiful also. I.. just wow. A perfect story and welcome back to writing. I hope you win this challenge because this piece is worthy of a win. Absolutely fantastic and just outright wonderful.

I look forward to reading your work in the near future! Keep this up!


Author's Response: Wow, thank you SO much, this is such an incredible review < 3 I wasn't sure anyone was gonna like or even read this fic at all when I posted it, so every single review just makes me so happy! I honestly don't know where this came from, all I had to go on was that the fic should be about Regulus, and then I sat down to type and I swear this fic just appeared in front of me. I found myself totally falling in love with Mary and Regulus apart as well as their relationship, so it means so much to me that people are getting feeling their connection as much as I was, even though it's only 2000 words and we find out basically nothing about either of them in the fic itself.

The banner is the gorgeous work of bathtub. @ TDA, and I love it. She got it done less than an hour after taking the request, which was so awesome! I think it really complements the story, I'm glad you think so too :)

Gosh, I'm sure there will be plenty of amazing entries to the challenge, so we'll wait and see about winning! But thank you so much for the support < 3

I will definitely be writing more along these lines, maybe even a sequel to this and probably a slightly different style fic about Regulus' whole life, but that links into this, so keep an eye out for them if you want :) Thanks so much for the review :)


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Review #30, by patronus_charm Dear Mary.

27th September 2013:
Ah, I saw you post a status on the forums and I came running over as I love Regulus! I'm so glad that I did as this piece was fantastic. ♥

Your characterisation in the one-shot was really great because I got such a vivid sense of both Regulus and Mary's characters. They seemed both so odd and different from one another that it almost made sense that they dated. With Mary's madness and Regulus' inner reflection it was the perfect balance. I just wish I could have seen them alive together because the memories were great.

Another thing I loved was how you used abbreviations in the letter. It made it more realistic because as a fellow teenager I use them all the time too.

Regulus' emotion in regards to Mary was lovely. I didn't pick up on her being dead straight away but I liked it as it showed how he was in denial and was trying to block it from his mind. I could just tell from his memories how much he loved her and it was so beautiful. I was close to tears myself as I didn't want her to be dead!

They were just so young and I picked it up so well in this piece and it made it even more tragic. I mean, Regulus was just a boy and he was dealing with the death of his sort of girlfriend and becoming a Death Eater. Man, I will never complain about having too much work to do as I would rather that than have all his issues! It made me really wonder whether she had lived whether she would have stopped Regulus being a Death Eater or not.

An amazing piece! ♥


Author's Response: Oh my gosh, this review really made my day < 3

I am so glad you liked it! I have a real thing for obscure characters so when I got assigned Regulus in this challenge on the forums I kind of jumped at the chance, and then for some reason when I sat down to write this story just kind of came out! I'm glad you liked the characterisation - I think that often opposites-attract kind of relationships can come off really unrealistic if they're not written well, so it's a huge complement that you thought it worked here. "Mary's madness and Regulus' inner reflection" is a great way to describe it! I think if Mary had been alive she definitely could have stopped Regulus becoming a death eater, or at least tried. It would have been so interesting to see how she did it - with her willpower she could probably have faced down Voldemort himself if he threatened Reg! I actually managed to upset myself by the end of writing this, and I started trying to figure out ways I could make Mary really be alive because I'd kind of fallen in love with her, but since Regulus dies in canon just a few years later, I couldn't quite get them their happy ending :( I'm considering writing a sequel where Reg writes her another letter the night before he goes to find the horcrux and knows he's gonna die, just so I can get some closure on these two!

Thanks so much for the gorgeous review, I'm glad you liked it < 3


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Review #31, by bathtub. (Vee) Dear Mary.

27th September 2013:
So making your banner really piqued my curiosity and so I here I am, dropping a review to tell you how heartbreakingly lovely this story is. I'll admit that this was my first Regulus story and even though I have no other Regulus to compare him to, I know that your characterisation will stay with me. I love your writing style and the entire structure of this chapter. I'm really glad I checked out your story, and that my banner is at the forefront of it all. :)

Author's Response: Oh my gosh, thank you so much. This was such a lovely review! I haven't actually read a ton of Regulus fic myself but I think my characterisation of him is pretty unique, and it's such a complement that it's stuck with you. I love experimenting with weird formats for stories and with different kinds of writing styles, so I'm so glad you thought it all worked well in this fic. I adore your banner by the way, it's perfect for this story and thank you so much for making it, and for leaving such a nice review as well!

~Maia x

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Review #32, by andra philippa bester (13 going 14) Dear Mary.

27th September 2013:
omw ...
I have no words...

net te oulik.
(just too cute-Afrikaans- ever heard of 1 of the main languages of south Africa?


like I said
net te oulik

Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I'm so glad you liked it :)

(Two of my best friends are from South Africa so I have indeed heard Afrikaans! Though I can't say I've ever been any good when they've tried to teach me any :P)

Thanks for the sweet review :)

~Maia x

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Review #33, by Rumpelstiltskin Dear Mary.

27th September 2013:
First off, I LOVED the way that you used Regulus' point of view to introduce Mary's personality: freaking fantastic! The secondary characterization was beautifully written.

Secondly, you've made me cry. Legitimate tears..well at least a few of them were.

Third of all, it's nice to see Regulus depicted at such an emotional level. He's always been one of my favorite characters, even though Rowling never went much in detail in the books with him. The fact that he was the younger brother of Sirius Black and seemingly required to live up to his parents expectations in the shadow of his "blood-traitor" brother must have been emotionally tolling on him. And then dying a wayward hero to boot.

I'm sorry, I'm getting off topic. The point being is that I love the way you've depicted Regulus Black in this story.

Lastly, I think this story is very well written in general. I love the setup, I love the structure, and I love the characters.



Author's Response: Oh my god, thank you! I have to admit, Regulus is a fave of mine to write - I love minor characters to start with but exploring the Black family dynamic from someone other than Sirius' point of view is just endlessly interesting to me *U* And I'm really attached to this story in particular because I've been writing and rewriting it for ages, so I'm so glad you liked it! Thanks for the lovely review :D

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