I'm crying right now. This was a very good story, one of the best i have read. But with a tragical ending. I love reading about the marauders. But why did they all have to die?
My favourite character is, and will always be Remus Lupin.
Another fanfiction i love is "moonlight" by adoranymph.Author's Response: I know, the Marauders are awesome and it stinks they all died (well, except for Peter). Lupin's my favorite character too. I've never read that. I may have to check it out one day. Thanks for reading! Report Review
Great!! No way to describe how amazing! Reflects personalities of characters really well while using jk rowlings ideas! I mean that in a good way! Needs a bit more of James/Lily conflict, maybe how James tells his friends how he feels about her. Other than that superb!Author's Response: I know what you mean. And you're only on the sixth chapter ha, James/Lily conflict will come up eventually. Thanks for reading! Report Review
Stupid stupid peter. Of course I already knew what had to come but I couldn't help the large amount of hate to peter for what he had done. I loved this story, on how you set it out, the way the characters talked, like they would in real (eg. A movie of it, it describes their character) I was hoping they would make Sirius their keeper but I knew they were going to die sooner or later. I must admit, you had me crying like a baby in some parts. All in all I thoroughly enjoyed this story and would love to see more. Bye and keep up the good work :) Author's Response: It's not hard to hate Peter :-p I'm glad you liked how I made the characters talk because they're dialogue was something I really wanted to get right. Thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
Hi, I've already reviewed this before (and by the way, the story's still amazing) but I was just looking at your other reviews and you mentioned twice that you were inspired by another finished marauder fic. So now I'm really curious as to what it is. I look for marauder fics a lot but it's so hard to find good ones, so could you please tell me the name and author of the story that inspired you, and which site it's on? Thanks. :)Author's Response: I knew I recognized your name. Yeah it's called Forever Alive by Mordred and it's on ff . net. I write on there as well, so that's how I found it. Report Review
Alright, well I just finished reviewing your epilogue, and I admit the review was far to short, but I was still in shock and in a loss for words because of your story. Your characters are brilliant. A lot of the time, people go overboard on Sirius and Peter's personality, making them to extreme. You nailed them right to a tee. I love the way you portrayed Peter, who is often a very difficult character to write, and people tend to write him out completely, or write him as the bad guy from the beginning. You nailed his transformation to the dark side perfectly. I love Remus and Sirius. They were perfect. Made me smile, made me cry, made me fall in love with them (although for a bit there I thought you were going to pull out the Remus/Sirius slash, glad you didn't in this story). You didn't miss a trick in this story. Every minor character, every sub plot got written in, like Regulus, or the kid who nearly had his eye poked out or the spiders in the forest - every little detail was so thought out, there was no place I could of thought "hey this couldn't of happened because of this". It wasn't until Harry was named though, that I accepted the parents' names. I thoguht that the parents names were wrong for the people (Harry being Remus's father, not James and I believe John was Peters when I thought it would of been Remus's) but when you tied it in later, it made much more sense. I also loved how you had an explaination for everything. You didn't just take for granted Lily hated James, and just had it assumed, you wrote in a whole evolution of Lily beginning to hate James. Most importantly though, this story stands up on it's own, very unlike most fanfiction. If you took away the HP books (good lord, please dont though) this novel would stand by itself as a sucessful, brilliant book. Very, very well done!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked how I wrote Sirius and Peter (especially Peter because, towards the end, I wasn't sure if I was getting him. His turn to the Death Eaters was something difficult to write, though it was also a lot of fun). Remus and Sirius are, obviously from this, my favorite characters, but no definitely not slash in this (I can see why you might've thought it could end up like that at some point though). I think Sirius even acknowledges this somewhere in the fic that he feels like he has to protect Remus like an older brother would protect his younger brother, so that's a lot of the basis of their friendship. Harry Lupin's name was decided way before I even wrote this for the very reason in the story. I do see why you would think that John should've been Mr. Lupin's name (but in my lack of creativity, Remus's grandfather's name is John, but he's only in one or two chapters). I wrote this before DH came out so Lily did have a different reason for disliking James at first, so I'm glad you liked how it came about. Oh God, no one should ever take the HP books away but that's really nice that you think that :) Thanks for reading! Report Review
This is perfect. This is the book of the marauder's that JK never wrote. I think I've finally found the fix to my craving. Absolutely perfect.Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I actually was inspired to write this from a fic I read that did the same thing for me 'fixed my craving' for the Marauders book that JKR probably will never write. Thanks for reading! Report Review
This story is amazing!
I have been looking for some thing like this for a while, but all of them quit after 2nd or 3rd year. I'm glad this is finished, I'm impatient and each end of the chapter made me want to keep reading.
I do think Remus said he was bit when he was 6 though, but ' may be wrong ^^;
Though I wouldn't have made Peter like that, every referance in the books made it seem like he liked being in the other three's shadow, and he went to Voldemort on his own for protection when he thought they'd lose, (which he kinda did , but only towards the end) but that's just me so, not saying anything against it :)
Its also good to see Sirius again. Even if its not the actually book. One of the main reasons I was looking for a fanfic like this one is because of him. He was always my favorite character, from the time I read the 3rd book (even before the told the truth about him... idk, I just like him) after he died in the 5th book that was the only time I ever wanted to put down a Harry Potter book, probably from the pure shock that J.K would kill him off. Especially after only 3 books and he was barely in them, really.
And the last few chapters made me want to cry more than the books did (well maybe at some points) Especially Lupin, in chapter 90, just so emotional.
Anyway, sorry for the long review, but great fanfic! :DAuthor's Response: I don't think it ever said when Remus was bit, just that he was young when it happened. (It'd be nice if we got a real history on the Marauders, but since we don't, it's just guessing). I see where you're coming from with Peter, but then I also feel like he had to have some amount of 'bravery' (because it's really stupidity on his part) to have joined Voldemort. I love Sirius too, he's my second favorite, after Lupin. It really was horrible when he died. It really was shocking that she killed him. The scene with Lupin in chapter 90 was actually one of the first scenes I thought of when I started writing this so I'm glad you liked it :) Thanks for reading! Report Review
Remus's head jerked up and he saw that Sirius was watching him. "Yeah," he said quietly. "I'm fine. So, who do you reckon the fifth bed is for?"
At the precise moment that these words came out of Remus's mouth the dormitory door burst open and a fifth boy came in. He had a mass of lank black hair on his head and a longish sort of nose. He glanced at his new roommates briefly and immediately located his four-poster bed.
He sat down on it and turned his attention to the four boys. "Hi," he said shortly. "I'm Severus Snape."
LOL!!! Can you imagine?!! But putting Frank in there made him seem a bit of a chimer. I almost actually expected it to be Snape until I read about the glasses. The story is epic, and i've only read a bit.
Good Luck!Author's Response: Haha, that would be horrifying. Really? I thought the description had made him look like James, but I guess maybe it could've seemed like Snape :) Thanks for reading! Report Review
Thank you for writing this amazing story! It has made me laugh and cry! Harry Potter Forever Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it! And of course - Harry Potter Forever :) Report Review
Your story is absolutly amazing so far. love it!Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you like it so far! Report Review
AMAZING I LOVED READING THIS. I read it every night before bed and before my mum came and yelled at me to get of the computer. I love it, you should consider seeing a publisher, amazing work!!!Author's Response: Wow, thanks :) I'm glad you liked it that much! Report Review
The end to a great year. :)
The prank was extraordinarily well planned, especially for first years, and it was definitely a creative idea on your part. :)
Great chapter!Author's Response: The prank was so much fun to write, so I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading! Report Review
The platform situation was a very effective way to get the families acquainted with each other. :)
Great chapter!Author's Response: Yeah that was one of the reasons I put it in, and to introduce Mrs. Black as what she really is. Thanks for reading! Report Review
The way you're developing Remus's lycanthropy is really brilliant. It's subtle, but still kind of suspicious. :)
Also, Crane's character is amazing. The person you designed is so interesting and mysterious, though horrible.
Awesome chapter!Author's Response: You know I actually had planned on not revealing that he was a werewolf until the others found out, but that didn't really happen. But I'm glad you like how I'm writing it. Ooh Crane was soo much fun to write. Thanks for reading! Report Review
I absolutely loved the Sorting. I thought Peter's bit was interesting because, well, of the "strong sense of loyalty."
We'll see where that goes. ;)
Excellent chapter!Author's Response: Ha, yeah I forgot about that (and we all know he has no sense of loyalty after a certain point). Thanks for reading! Report Review
I love where this is going.
I've never actually read a story that goes from the first time the Marauders met and how they met. I love it! It's fantastic how you had your narration following each character and their different circumstances upon boarding. :)Author's Response: I've read a few where they started from the beginning, but then only one or two actually finished. I read a really amazing one that goes all the way from the beginning that inspired me to write this. Thanks for reading! Glad you like it so far :) Report Review
The invisibility cloak is a deathly hallow and therefore there is only one belonging to James Potter and this means Moody could not of had one on his meeting with Sirius!Author's Response: Actually the particular cloak that James had was a Deathly Hallow, yes. But there are other Invisibility Cloaks in existence. In Deathly Hallows, they even say that other invisibility cloaks usually lose their power after some point, but Harry's didn't. So yes, Moody could have had one. Report Review
I loved this story x! It was amazing x :) made me cry so much at the end x :'(Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it! Report Review
I started crying; quite literally. Great story (:Author's Response: Aww, glad you like it! Report Review
i always wait till the end of the story to review...nd i thought it was really really great(: i take pride in thinking of myself as a diehard HP fan, and there were some facts in here i didn't even know/remember. thank you for your story!Author's Response: Were there? I could've just made them up :-p But hearing that coming from a fellow diehard HP fan is awesome! Thanks for reading! Glad you liked it! Report Review
So far love this story! I love the way you portray your characters and it sounds really realistic. You have some wonderful description and word choice in this and I can't wait for more!Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you're liking it so far :) Report Review
I love this story!!! It's super amazing!!! :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! Glad you like it!
Ohmygod. Wow. What can else can I say to this? For the past three days, this book has been life. I have barely eaten, barely slept, and put off studying for finals because I have been so engulfed in the lives of the Marauders. This was so perfect, I can't even put this to words. These characters feel so real to me! I cried with them, I laughed with them, I lived with them through their lives...at the least that is what it felt like. Props to you, for making something so real. This is the best, and I am so happy I had the wonderful privilege to read this novel. It was almost life changing in how I see the Harry Potter world. Thank you so much.
Ever your servant,
TheMissQwertyAuthor's Response: Ooh don't put off studying for your finals. I'm glad you liked it though! (And for calling it a novel). That's pretty cool that it made you feel all that. Thanks so much for reading! Report Review
Wait, why would Aberforth address Dumbledore as 'Dumbledore' when his own last name is Dumbledore?Author's Response: ... Good question. I don't exactly have an answer for that. Makes sense for him not to do that though. I guess I was just so used to people addressing him as Dumbledore that I didn't even think about that. Report Review
I just finished the story and have decided it's definitely one of the best I've ever read. It's amazing. The epilogue was wonderful, I'm so glad you mentioned how Sirius and Remus had been united as friends before their lives ended. And the last sentence about Teddy Lupin stepping on to the Hogwarts Express seemed like just the perfect ending.
Thank you so much for writing this amazing story!!!Author's Response: I figured it was necessary to mention that Remus and Sirius did become friends again, since that's what the whole story's about - the friendship of the Marauders. The epilogue was actually supposed to be different, but then Lupin was killed in Deathly Hallows, so Teddy became the epilogue. I'm really glad you liked it! Thanks for reading! Report Review
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