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Review #26, by Shadowkat Chapter III

5th April 2015:
One thing, didn't it say in the books that you had to know where to go and what the destination looks like before apperation?

Author's Response: Yes, you're right, I think it did. They were able to get there the first time because Laurence knew where the place was, and for students arriving later (with their parents) the location would be described well enough for Apparition to work, at least how I imagined it. Hope that clears it up for you! Thanks for your review :)

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Review #27, by Shadowkat Chapter II

5th April 2015:
Interesting chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you!

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Review #28, by Shadowkat Chapter I

5th April 2015:
Hey, I was looking back over the reviews I've had and saw yours. I decided to check out your profile, and am very glad I did. I love the Founders, but it's so hard to find good stories for them. I actually just started writing one myself, so maybe this will give me some ideas about the time period. (No copying, promise.)

One thing that's always bugged me, however, is that in stories like this they always have muggles knowing them. Honestly, I'd think they'd do there best to hide, try and pass themselves off as muggle to keep safe. Maybe that's just me though.

The writing is really good, though another thing that I've always wondered is how any of them were childhood friends. Didn't the books say they came from four separate countries? I'd think it would have to be some pretty big, possibly dark, spontaneous strings of events to bring them all together. Again, really like it. :)

Author's Response: Hello! I'm very glad you decided to check out this story too :) The Founders era is such an interesting time period, it's kind of a shame there aren't more fics set then, so it's great that you're writing one too!

I see what you mean about Muggles, though everyone has their own interpretations of the time period and this is mine. Personally, I thought it made sense that they knew Muggles, since this takes place 600 or 700 years before the Statute of Secrecy, and even about 300 years before witch burnings, so I thought that over time magical folk withdrew from Muggles, and didn't necessarily start out already segregated. There was nothing they had to really keep safe from yet (except foreign colonizers - the same issues faced by muggles.) But as I said, I'm sure there are many various ways to interpret Founders era society! :)

I'm so glad you like the writing - thank you! As for the four different areas they came from, I guess I took a few liberties with that in terms of how long they lived in those places, but I did try to keep to that idea (and relied on the hp lexicon for the really picky facts) - so:, Gryffindor from wild moor (West Country, i.e. where Godric's Hollow is), Slytherin from fen (also England, but in the east) Ravenclaw from glen (Scotland) and Hufflepuff from 'valley broad' (Wales) though in my interpretation, Helga moved from Wales to Scotland before the start of the narration, and Salazar no longer lives in his childhood home either. So Godric and Salazar, both born in England, became friends early on, and Helga and Rowena became friends when Helga moved to Scotland from Wales (probably as a teenager).

Wow, INFODUMP of all the inner workings of my brain for this story. Sorry that was waaay more than you asked for :p Anyway, there you have it. :p

Thanks so much for giving this story a read and for your lovely review! I appreciate it so much!

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Review #29, by LadyL8 Chapter III

26th March 2015:
Hello again. Iím back with my third review out of 4.

Firstly, I did not find this chapter dull at all. It was actually very interesting. We all know they built the castle, but we donít really know how it came to be. And Iíve always wondered about how they did it, because the school is enormous. And how did they come up with everything Ė like the changing staircases? And you gave an answer to that.

I love Helga! And itís not just because sheís the founder of our house, but because of the way sheís portrayed in your story. I like that sheís the warm, friendly and social one, whoís responsible for getting people to help build the school as well as getting students to attend. And it fits so perfectly with what sheíd later want from the student in her house Ė to be welcoming, including and friendly.

And I like that she loves cooking and basically taking care of everyone around here. I just imagine sheíd be like a Ďmumí for her student Ė doing her best to make everyoneís having a good time and yeahÖ taking care of them. In a way, she kind of reminds me of Molly Weasley, because theyíre both hardworking women, and theyíre both have a warmth and welcoming heart.

Oh, and I forgot to mention that I loved the story of how they came up with the name of the school. Iíve always wondered why itís named Hogwarts, cause that seems like a kind of random name. So I liked that they discussed it, and had a reason for naming it Hogwarts.

I also liked the sorting Ė that it just started with them having the students that already knew them, and Helga therefore got the most because sheís more known in the community. So she does Ďtake the lotí, but not in the way youíd initially think.

The friendship between Salazar and Helga was also nice to see, but I definitely want to see more Rowena/Salazar. Iím sorry but Maeve just got to go, because Iím shipping those two and sheís kind of in the way of their happy ending.

What Iíve found very interesting so far in the story is actually the portrayal of Salazar. He does not seem like the Ďbad guyí that historyís made him out to be. And heís interested in a muggle, and we all know heíll later come to hate muggles and muggle-borns. So Iím really interested to see what will make him change his mind. I wonder if Rowena had something to do with itÖ or maybe itís Maeve.

Anyway, as you can probably tell I liked the chapter. I think Ė like you say Ė itís very necessary to include, because building Hogwarts is what theyíll later be known for. And you answer a lot of questions we readers may have had from reading the books Ė like how they came up with the moving stairs or the name of the school. So yeah, I still very much like the story

- Lotte

Author's Response: Looking back, I think this was one of my favourite chapters to write, coming up with how Hogwarts got all its quirkiness in its construction/name/everything.

So glad you like Helga :D We do have such an awesome house founder! But given what the Sorting Hat said about her, it just seemed like she would be that sort of person. I think I had the most leeway with her character, as the Sorting Hat talks about her the least :P Oh, I love your comparison of her to Molly Weasley! I hadn't considered that, but I totally agree now that you mentioned it.

I felt that the name was something that needed to be included. I mean, it's a weird name. There had to have been a lot of discussion involved :p I'm glad you liked that!

As Hogwarts had just begun, and the news of the school was just spread by word of mouth through their little communities, I didn't think it likely that there would be many people there at all - just people they knew from their villages.

I'm glad you like the friendship between Salazar and Helga! Haha aw, I'm sure Rowena would agree with you that Maeve has got to go! :P More about Maeve and the Rowenazar ship in the next chapter...

Honestly, that was my intention with Salazar. He gets a bad reputation by the time Harry is in school, but I don't think the other three founders would be such close friends with someone who's 'evil'. He does have some demons in his past, and I figured there could be an interesting story with how he became the person history knows him as. I like your theories but my lips are sealed! Muahaha. Well, until next chapter.

I'm thrilled that you liked this chapter and are enjoying the story! I really appreciate your reviews, you are the best! Thank you ♥

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Review #30, by LadyL8 Chapter II

26th March 2015:
Hi again, Kristin.

Wow. I wanted more Godric and I certainly got it. This was amazing. Your talent blows me away.

I love Godric, and heís also very much like I imagine he would be. Heís just this caring, fair guy that wants to whatís right. I donít know if itís because I love GoT, but Godric always reminds me so much of Ned Stark. I imagine theyíd look the same, and theyíre both men of honor. And I love both of them, so yeah...

Anyway, I think Godric/Laudine is very interesting. I love that they have different views on things. Godric wants to fight fair and do whatís honorable, but Laudine just wants to save people and not die doing it. And I think sheís believes that is the honorable thing to do Ė to save as many lives as you can, no matter how you do it. So it all comes down to different views on whatís honorable and right. And I think these differences are what make them such a good couple. They even each other out.

And I love that they defend the muggles, because thatís what they (well, Godric anyway) will be known for later. And I kind of love that you start the story at a time when muggles and wizards co-exist, but then things go awry because of the Vikings (donít they just ruin everything?). And thatís when they end up making a school, so the young wizards and witches can learn magic without being scared of muggles hurting them for it.

Rowenaís intelligence really shines through in this chapter, even more so than in the last. And that is kind of strange, since this chapter is more from Godrics POV. But yeah, I liked seeing how smart she is. And you can already tell why she would end up having the intelligent kids in in her house.

And I love the Rowena/Godric friendship. They too are very different. Godric doesnít really want to give up fighting for muggles and wizards co-existing, even though itís clear theyíre heading in that direction either way. While Rowena sees the bigger picture Ė she sees that at some point wizards and muggles are not going to be able to co-exist with both knowing of the other. And then they kind of even each other out, because neither one of them is completely right or wrong. And itís the combination of their ways of thinking that results in the idea of Hogwarts. And I really like them co-working, it was great to see.

Anyway, I can tell youíve done lots of research for this story. Iím kind of a history geek, and Vikings are really my specialty because of where they originate. And so far I havenít noticed anything off, so youíve clearly done a good job in researching the tenth century England.

And I still love the story by the way. Now that they have gotten the idea of Hogwarts, I wonder what will happen next. And I canít wait to see more Salazar and Helga.

Good job. 10/10

Oh, and please ignore my terrible English. Iím sleepy right now.

Author's Response: Awww ♥ ♥ you are too kind! thank you!!

I'm glad to hear that Godric sounds a lot like how you imagined him. Ooh, and this is great because I finally started watching GoT recently, so now I totally get what you mean comparing Godric to Ned Stark - I can see why you'd think that. :D

That is EXACTLY what I was hoping to convey with Godric/Laudine. I really wanted to show their different philosophies on what is the "right" thing to do and how they both have valid points - and they compromise and listen to each other. I really liked writing the two of them together :)

I really wanted to explore a lot of wizarding history in this story and how/why things ended up the way they were - since it is set over a thousand years ago, I figured that very little would be the same. It was kind of neat to start in such a different frame of mind for wizards - I'm really glad you liked that aspect of wizards and Muggles co-existing and how everything led up to the creation of Hogwarts.

It's great to hear that Rowena's intelligence shines through more in this chapter. I figured Godric would recognize Rowena for her intelligence, and so maybe that's why it comes through, as his perception of her. I'm glad you like their friendship too, and how they each bring different points to the table that combine to create the idea of Hogwarts.

I did do a lot of research - I love history too :D And it's great to hear from a history appreciator who knows a lot about Vikings that nothing seemed off about the time period, thanks!

Helga is next (as you know) and chapter 4 is Salazar! I'm really glad you're excited to keep reading!

Thanks sooo much for yet another incredible review ♥

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Review #31, by LadyL8 Chapter I

26th March 2015:
Hello Kristin. I wasnít around when you guys had the review hot seat. And Iím close to my 4-year anniversary on HPFF, so Iíve decided to leave 4 reviews for each person that participated in the hot seat to show how grateful I am for you guys being around. And now itís your turn to get reviews.

I want to start by saying that this is the first founders story that Iíve read in a long time. And Iíve seen a lot of people praise your founders stories on the forums, so I figured Iíd give it a shot. And Iím really looking forward to reading it.

I like Rowena. I think sheís very much like I imagined she would be, but Iím really interested to see more of her intelligence. You can kind of see it when sheís talking about the Redwalds invisible castle/defense strategy, but I think it will be more visible as the story progresses.

And Iím really interested in seeing more Salazar/Rowena. It is not the first match Iíd think of, but I donít hate it. I definitely think thereís something there. And whatís interesting is that ambition and knowledge are really connected as well, cause you canít really reach your goals without knowledge (in most cases at least). And thatís also why a lot of Claws could just as easily be Slytherins and the other way around. And the fact that those qualities are so close-knitted, could also explain why Rowena and Salazar would fall in love with each other. So yeah, I think I like this pairing.

And I like Helga as well. Sheís also like I imagine she would be Ė a warm, outgoing and friendly woman. And I loved how Rowena explained her friendship with Helga. Because yes, they are polar opposites, but thatís why they are so good friends.

I didnít really see much of Godric in this chapter, so Iím looking forward to learning more about him. But I loved that he and Salazar are best friends, and that he has muggle friends. Thatís very believable considering what heíll later be and believe in.

Anyway, I think you did a good job in bringing out their different personalities, and you can already kind of see how Hogwarts came to be. So Iím really interested to see where this story will be going, and whether Rowena will submit to the pressure of marrying or not (I donít think she will)

And lastly I just have to sayÖ VIKINGS!!! I have to admit the Norwegian in me is very happy to see them in a story, even if I probably shouldnít be too proud of them being from my country (well, Denmark really, but close enough. Norway also had its own vikings, but theyíre not in your story). But seriously, I think it was great that you mentioned them, because I donít think wizards would be oblivious to what was going in the muggle world. And Vikings were really a problem for the British people in tenth century, so Iím glad you mentioned them.

Good job. I loved the story, and I canít wait to read more of it.

- Lotte

Author's Response: Lotte ♥ I'm so sorry it's taken me ages to respond to this - but these reviews you left really made my day!!

First things first, happy 4 years, we are lucky to have you here on HPFF! :D

wow, I didn't know this story was popular on the forums! regardless, I'm so glad that you found it and that you're enjoying it so far!

I'm glad to hear you like Rowena so far! I think in this chapter, her intelligence mainly shines through in her wit and her opinions on Redwald's castle, but you're right, I think it shows more in later chapters.

There are a lot of really compatible characteristics between Ravenclaw and Slytherin (just look at the number of Slytherclaws on the forums! :P ) For some reason I just really liked the dynamic of this pairing, and I'm glad you do too! It's wonderful to hear that you like my portrayal of Helga as well. As for Godric - as you figured out, he is the focus of the next chapter - but I'm glad you liked the short introduction he had here.

It really is wonderful to hear that you liked the way all their different personalities showed - that is what I was hoping to get across here, turning the characteristics that the Sorting Hat focuses on, into real people who encompass those traits. I'm very happy you're interested to keep reading, too!

Yes, Vikings!! All my research pointed towards Danish invaders being the main struggle for the Brits of the time. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed their inclusion in here (despite them not being Norwegian :P ) And yes exactly - before the Statute of Secrecy, when (I imagine) wizard and Muggle people mixed in society, wizards probably had a fairly good idea what was happening in the Muggle world, because they were a lot closer to it back then.

This was a truly wonderful review. Thank you so much! ♡

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Review #32, by Felpata Lupin Chapter VIII

22nd January 2015:
Oh my darling Kristin!
Thanks to you for this lovely story!!!
This ending was just so sad... But it's the way things were supposed to go, so...
I loved your including of Peeves in here :)
And I also think the choice of Helga's POV was perfect for the closing. Her empathy and her friendship give just the right perspective to the loss of Salazar first and Rowena next.
It's consoling to know that Hogwarts will, indeed, overlive them.
Thank you so much once again and all my love!

Author's Response: Hi Chiara! Thank you so much for your kind comments, I'm so glad you enjoyed the story! Gah, I know the end was sad, but that was what I had to work with from canon! Besides the fact that I can't seem to write a fic without killing off at least half of the characters :p

So glad you liked Peeves :D I thought this chapter needed something light and amusing to balance out the bleakness of all the other events that happened here.

Thank you, it means a lot that you liked the choice of POVs and that Helga's perspective worked well for a closing.

That's exactly what I was hoping for with that last line, that in spite of how sadly their story ends, their dream does come true as Hogwarts lasts at least a thousand years past them! :)

Thank you so much for all your support on this story! You are such an incredible reviewer. ♥

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Review #33, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter VIII

21st January 2015:
Dyaaa! Tears! That is so sad. After all this time Godtic and Helga are the only founders to show for it! The historical notes proves what kind of author you are; one that does research before throwing things down on paper. and the time it took to finish shows the mastery and dedication to this short story. So glad I found it. Touching, realistic, and interesting.

By the way, all these reviews are thanks for not missing a day of our Hot Seat Reviews.

Author's Response: Seriously, five reviews on this from you today was like the best present ever! ♥ Thank you!

Gah, I'm sorry about the sad. I'm kind of incapable of writing happy endings. I am so glad you were touched by this story and found it realistic and interesting, those are such wonderful compliments. And I'm glad you found this story too! It's been a pleasure reading your reviews. Thank you so much ♡

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Review #34, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter VII

21st January 2015:
That last line: brilliant! Oh perhaps it took you a year and a half to write but from my perspective it was worth it! I love the way you're developing these characters as the years go along and Hogwarts itself is evolving into something more like was we know today (you know, "know")

Beautiful work that speaks for itself.

Author's Response: Ooh, thank you, I'm glad you liked the last line, I was quite proud of that one ;) The year and a half was because I suddenly took a hiatus in the middle of writing the story and then it was difficult to get back into it after so long :-/ but I'm glad it didn't seem like a clunky transition or anything. Thank you so much, I'm thrilled that you like the way the characters and Hogwarts are evolving.

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Review #35, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter VI

21st January 2015:
I realize this is mostly filler, but although it wasn't exciting, it was interesting. I kind of like how you have Helena, though she does seem to be revealing personal facts about herself quickly. I guess if she was really frustrated she might be more inclined to say things.

I love how much thought you put into this.

Author's Response: You're spoiling me with all these reviews today! Thank you so much! ♥

It was kind of fillery, but I thought it was important to show Hogwarts running smoothly, after years of struggles and before everything all goes downhill.

As for Helena, there was a 17-year gap between the previous chapter and this one, so I was hoping to show that she's close with Godric (and the other founders) so it's not like she's revealing a hugely surprising thing, just putting a voice to things Godric has noticed for a while as her teacher. But you're absolutely right - her frustration would contribute a lot to her sharing those things.

Thank you so much - there really was a lot of planning, and especially research, and so your last comment means a lot to me. :)

Thanks for your wonderful reviews!

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Review #36, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter V

21st January 2015:
Whoa, I cannot believe you put Laudine in Slytherin! Not that I don't understand why you did it, but it was still unexpected. Also, I kind of like the way you made the hat, to me it seemed just a tad more matter-of-fact than sassy, though there was definitely some sass in there. It's hard not to think of a hat like that as having at least a little bit of sass. I feel horrible for Rowena, she doesn't seem quite enamored by her fiancť.

Love this chapter.

Author's Response: :D Hehe. Laudine was totes a Slytherin type. I like the idea of how 'typical' Gryffindor and Slytherin traits balance each other out, which is very much how Godric and Laudine interact, and she puts more practical things ahead of being noble. Ooh, I'm glad you liked the hat! That scene was a lot of fun to write, as everything was just getting so serious and I need to write silly things apparently. Rowena... yeah, she puts logic ahead of her own feelings, so the only one she's tricking is herself. At least he is somewhat of an intellectual match for her, which to her is probably more important anyway! ;)

Thank you so much for your review! I'm thrilled you are enjoying the story ♥

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Review #37, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter IV

21st January 2015:
Again, love this chapter. It's so cool to hear how the school-making process worked after one year. I also like hearing about the medieval views of muggles and wizards about each other. Then Salazar's heartbreak! That was so horrible, but had to happen to harden his heart to make him run out later.

Another lovely read!

Author's Response: Georgina! Hi and thanks so much for stopping by this story again! I'm so glad you liked the process of figuring out how to run the school, as well as the muggle and wizard dynamic. Poor Salazar. He does go through a lot in this story :(

Thanks so much for your review :)

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Review #38, by Hogwarts27 Chapter VIII

20th January 2015:
Hi, I came running to read this when I saw your post in the finished stories thread. This is a wonderful last chapter, superbly written, and a real joy to read.

I enjoyed the arrival of Peeves, which made a nice bridge for the reader, reminding us that some things from the early days of Hogwarts continue absolutely unchanged into the present day Hogwarts we know. I also enjoyed the short sentimental moment between Helga and Godric when they notice each other's gray hair and remark that they've become old, or perhaps prematurely old, through all the chaos of running the school.

And I felt a real sense of loss when Salazar left, because of your earlier backstory, and the touching way you dealt with it in this chapter. And what a dramatic and fitting way to end this story with the ghosts, so that everything tied in with canon.

Thanks for writing - and finishing - this lovely story. And congratulations! A finished story is always an accomplishment. I've enjoyed every bit of the journey it took me on. Your writing style just grabbed me so that I could lose myself in the story-telling with every single chapter. Thank you very much for the reading adventure.

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for coming to read this - it means so much to me that you pounced on it just as soon as it was posted! I'm so, so glad you liked it!

Haha, you know what, Peeves was not even originally intended to be in the story at all, until the idea popped into my head as I was partway through writing this chapter. In the end I'm glad I did, because the rest of the chapter is pretty heavy with stuff like death and betrayal and more death. And yes it does kind of link Founders-era Hogwarts with present day, as a few things never changed! That's a lovely way to think of it! I'm glad you liked that moment with Helga and Godric as well - despite all the huge changes on a grand scale that happened here, I felt like the little scenes of mundane things are a nice balance. :)

I'm glad that resonated with you, when Salazar left - that's definitely what I was going for, to not really have either side be entirely to blame. As angry as they were with him at the time, I felt that having Salazar leave would be devastating to them after so long of working together. So glad you liked the bit about the ghosts as well, and that you thought it fit into canon! That is so great to hear :)

Thank YOU so much for reading this, and for the congratulations! It truly is a great feeling to have it completed, and having support from wonderful reviewers like you made it just that much more enjoyable to write. I am thrilled that you enjoyed the story so much, and thank you for your amazing support. ♥

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Review #39, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter III

2nd January 2015:
I really like how you have them trying to learn the ropes of Hogwarts; the ideas for the layout, the secret passageways (love their history!), the house-elves, the common rooms, all the details make it a great read despite the lack of excitement. Eustace with a dragon, is that a nod to CS Lewis' Voyage of the Dawn Treader? If not, that is an unusual coincidence, this kid's personality even seems a bit like that Eustace.

Anyway, love the story. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Hey again Georgina! Thank you, I'm really glad you're enjoying the process of how Hogwarts was constructed and all the things that needed work in the beginning - I think this was actually my favourite chapter to write!
Eustace, yeah it was a bit of a coincidence as I had a list of old-fashioned names that I was going to whenever I needed a new character, and that name happened to be next on the list at that point - but I saw the connection immediately and it was too good not to keep it that way! XD Haha, I'm glad you caught that :p

Thanks so much for your review!

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Review #40, by magnolia_magic Chapter II

2nd January 2015:
Hi Kristin! Here for your hot seat day, and can I just say that it does my heart good to be catching up with Divided after all this time :) I love your take on this era and these characters!

This chapter had so much going on, and I love your exploration of the dynamic between wizards and Muggles. I've never really seen anyone portray it this way, from the very beginning of the fallout, so this was super interesting for me to read. I LOVED the battle sequence, everything about it, especially Godric's insistence on fighting fair with the Muggles and doing things the honorable way. And the way you've handled the decline in relations between wizards and Muggles is just so great. Neither group is vilified; instead, it happens as a series of emotional decisions that lead to misunderstandings. Of course, we know that things will eventually fester to the point that wizards go into hiding. I love seeing the beginning of that process, the very first hints of fear starting to creep in. Great job handling a very complex situation!

I can tell how much thought you've put into the political climate of the time, and that you've done some research about which groups of Muggles would be fighting each other. That is something I just completely avoid when I write Founders, mainly out of laziness, so I really admire the fact that you've taken the historical background of things into account. Those Vikings. They kind of caused trouble for everyone, I guess *shakes head*. At least Godric and Laudine were there to lend a hand and help drive them out for the time being.

You've done a seriously wonderful job with Godric in this chapter. His voice is just so true to what I imagine Godric to be like, and it was a joy to read. He is clearly a caring soul who wants to do the right things, and I can just feel how important his honor is to him. Laudine seems like a great partner for him because of the way her mind works in contrast to his; she seems more practical and realistic, while Godric sometimes overlooks important details. The scene with Laudine convincing him to use protective spells was a prime example. They are such a power couple, I love it!

Rowena continues to be feisty and great, and I can't wait to see how Hogwarts eventually gets off the ground. And I'm excited for Helga and Salazar to appear again! Great chapter, Kristin, and I hope to make time to read on very soon :)


Author's Response: Hi Maggie! This was such a lovely review and I'm sorry for taking so long to respond to it! Gah, thank you, it means so much that you like my interpretation of the Founders, because you're one of the best Founders writers on the site so that means a lot to me!

I really like writing about political/society issues so it was really interesting to incorporate the relations between wizards and Muggles in this as given the time period they would likely keep the same company sometimes. I figured Godric would be the one to try and be as noble as possible in a fight, even if it was stupid to do so :p Thanks, I am so glad you like the way the decline between wizards and Muggles occurs - exactly, it's no one's fault, just a series of unfortunate circumstances. I'm thrilled that you like the way I handled it!

You're right, there was a lot of history research involved haha. I actually loved doing the research for this, I just find the era really interesting! I'm so glad you appreciate the political climate in this.

Ah, thank you so much, I'm thrilled that my portrayal of Godric is like what you imagined for him. I'm glad you like Laudine as well - she is definitely a lot more practical, kind of prevents Godric from having too much of a noble/hero complex haha

Hogwarts gets off the ground in the next chapter, which was my favourite to write and I hope you like it! Thank you so much for reading and for your wonderful review!!

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Review #41, by Lululuna Chapter VII

1st January 2015:
Hi Kristin!! :D So excited to see this was updated!

I think you did a really great job here showing Salazar's descent into hatred and bitterness. It felt very authentic how he went from sort of an emotional resentment which, when triggered by his grief, turned into all-out manic hatred. At the same time, after the deaths he still preserves his image by hiding his hate and biding his time, and I think that trait is really emblematic of the ways that Slytherins can be sneaky in tucking away different parts of their lives and really succeeding through secrecy. As the founder of a whole house of people who exhibit and are even socialized to have certain traits, I think you've done an amazing job in creating a character who is both archetypal and yet absolutely unique and three-dimensional.

I feel like Salazar here is honestly become mad, or is so possessed by grief that he is mad in his single-mindedness. It's a little terrifying to read about actually because in a way, even though I know better, I could relate to his anger in wanting revenge because he's so heartbroken. I think it's a very human emotion we all border on sometimes, but he's enabled by his power and authority as well as his skills in secrecy.

It was interesting reading about his logic in deciding on the Basilisk, and I did giggle a moment at the image of Salazar crouching down and encouraging a toad to sit on a chicken egg and getting all excited when a little snake comes out. It's an amusing image for some reason.

As usual, the attention to historical detail here is so impressive. Including the stocks was so brilliant while also showing the general ignorance of people of the time. I felt really sad for Elaine and Morgan, they were innocent and reasonable people and deserved better, poor things. It was interesting to think to that even though people died young in those days all the time, the grief of the loss is still as poignant as ever. :(

Amazing chapter, Kristin! I'm excited for the next one! ♥

Author's Response: Eeep! It was so exciting to see this lovely review from you!! ♥

Gah, thank you so much! I'm so thrilled that you liked the portrayal of Salazar here and his descent into hatred/bitterness/madness, and that it felt authentic. It means so much to me that you see him as unique and three-dimensional here, and that you appreciate his tucking away his feelings in secret to present an image to the others.

I think there is an element of madness in him, yeah. And yes I'm so glad you said that about relating to him - that is exactly what I was hoping for - to explain his descent, not making excuses for him, but just to put people in his shoes for a bit as his grief and anger are very real, even if his coping mechanisms are flawed. So I'm really glad you could understand him in this, even though he was becoming fixated on his hatred.

Ahaha, that is a hilarious image to think of and I'm glad you shared it with me :D

Thank you! Your compliment about historical detail is so wonderful especially because I know you are particular about this sort of thing as well, what with all of your historical details in Play the Devil! :) I did feel bad killing off those two, but considering the era, as you mentioned, people dying young was pretty common. Not that that would have made it any easier. :(

I'm so glad you're excited for the last chapter! I can tell you already that it will definitely be up on or before the 20th of January, because that marks exactly two years from when I began writing this fic, and I have a weird obsession with numbers lining up perfectly like that :p

Thanks so much for your review, Jenna! ♥

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Review #42, by mymischiefmanaged Chapter II

27th December 2014:
Hiya, here for our swap :)

I've been looking forward to coming back to this story, and this chapter definitely didn't disappoint.

I don't always think changes in point of view work, but it's definitely effective here. The four founders give you a nice structure to your shifts in POV, and I was definitely keen to hear more from Gryffindor after chapter one. You've very effectively managed to give Gryffindor's point of view a different tone to Ravenclaw's, which shows that the POV shift is a good idea.

The idea of nobility is very interesting in this chapter. I like how Gryffindor's views on what is noble in battle differ to the views of his wife, and I like even more that he ends up listening to her. He's showing that trait we see so often in the members of his house - trying too hard to be brave so that it reaches the point of foolish - and she keeps him grounded. I like their relationship a lot.

It's interesting how you have the witches going into battle with the wizards. Are muggle women fighting alongside the muggle men? I would assume not, given the era, so it might be interesting to see how the muggles respond to having magical women fighting with them? Just a thought.

The idea of Rowena's parents letting Godric in immediately because they assumed he was a suitor made me laugh. You've kept them very in character with what we saw in the first chapter, and I like that Godric just goes along with it because it's convenient.

Rowena's intelligence and wisdom really comes through in this chapter, more than in the first I think, which is interesting given that we're seeing her through somebody else's eyes. She clearly has a different perspective to Godric. He's thinking about the short term and about what he can do to help individuals. She sees the big picture and wants to work out a long term solution. It's obvious that their different mindsets will help them work well together, and I like that you've shown how both their skills combine to lead to the idea of Hogwarts.

I like how Gryffindor's teaching the children inspires the idea of setting up a school, but I think it potentially happened a little bit quickly here. It might be nice to extend that conversation a little, or to have an initial conversation in which they plan to start teaching, followed by a later decision to officially start a school? It's not something you have to change. It definitely works well how you have it, and it's very convincing that Ravenclaw would come up with the idea in these circumstances, but it does feel like it moves a little fast.

Overall, this was a really fantastic chapter. You've raised some interesting ideas (different house qualities shown in the individuals, muggle/wizard relations before the statute of secrecy, different dynamics in marriage), and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this story.

Thanks for the swap and for the excuse to read more of your wonderful work!

Emma xx

Author's Response: You know, I often feel the same way about POV changes :p This story was my first attempt at switching perspectives (and actually my first try at third person, as well). With the Founders it seemed to make sense, as they are all so vastly different but had the same goal, so I ended up really enjoying the switches. I'm glad you felt a different tone in Godric's narration than in Rowena's, as well!

That is exactly what I was trying to point out about Godric, the way he sometimes tries to be too noble and it borders on foolhardy, so I'm glad you liked that and the dynamics of his relationship with his wife.

You know, I was surprised by what I found in my research about early medieval warfare. Both Vikings and Anglo-Saxons had female warriors, and although women were uncommon compared to men in battle, they were not unheard of. (of course, this changed by a few hundred years later.) But yeah - totally didn't know that either until I did the research for this story so that was really cool!

Haha, I'm glad that scene with Rowena's parents was amusing! :)

It's wonderful to hear that Rowena's intelligence shines through in this chapter. I think because Godric sees this as something that stands out about her, it's more evident in his narration, whereas for Rowena it's just always been part of who she is. (if that makes sense? haha)

You're right, it does move a little fast there. I'm sure I'll go back to edit at some point and I'll keep your ideas in mind! :)

I am so glad that you are enjoying the story so far and that you're pointing out all these themes. Thank you for the swap and such a wonderful review! ♥

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Review #43, by Hogwarts27 Chapter VII

24th December 2014:
Hi, I've been away from this website site since midsummer, but I was so glad to see another chapter of this story when I came back. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Your writing and story-telling continues to be interesting and engaging, and I really appreciated all the descriptive details you included. They really help to bring the settings and scenes to life. You've woven the Salazar back-story to make perfect sense with Canon. I can actually sympathize with Slytherin in this story. This was a great read. Thank you so much for continuing, and I will look forward to more.

Author's Response: Hi! I'm so excited to see that you came back for this chapter, as I know it took me forever to update :p Thank you so much, it is really wonderful to hear that the writing is engaging and brings the story to life - ah, that's such a kind compliment! ♥ I am so glad you like the writing and the details. Poor Salazar - I really put him through the worst in this chapter, but it had to be something big to get him to go so far off the deep end as we know he did eventually. :-/ But it means a lot to me that you felt his story makes sense and that you could sympathise with him!

There is one more chapter to go, which I hope to finish before the end of the year :)

You are the best! Thanks so much for your review!

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Review #44, by Felpata Lupin Chapter VII

20th December 2014:
Hey, Kristin!
I'm so excited that you've resumed the writing of this! :)
This was so sad...
I obviously can't agree with Slytherin's ideas and decisions, but after everything that has occurred to him... Who could possibly really blame him?
Poor Elaine and Morgan... When they didn't come back I immediatly feared the worst... And I was right, even if not in the way I imagined... Their long agony was maybe worse that having them die straight away...
Can't wait for what's next! Update soon!
Lots of love, as always!

Author's Response: Hi! Ahh, thank you so much for reviewing - this is the first feedback I've had on this chapter - and as it's the first chapter I've written on this story in SO long, I wasn't sure how it would be received or if people were still reading haha. So this is really good to hear. :)

I know, I really felt horrible for Salazar in this chapter as I made all these terrible things happen to him, but as he started out so normal in the beginning of the story, it had to be a succession of serious things for him to turn into the person who left a homicidal reptile in the school. And yes, what happened to his family was awful, but probably not too uncommon back then. Besides.. you've read enough of my work by now to know that I don't write happy endings :p

There is only one more chapter, which I'm hoping to have up by the end of the year! So with any luck it shouldn't be too long a wait. :) Thanks so much for your review and your continued support of this story, it means so much to me. ♥

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Review #45, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter II

17th December 2014:
I meant to review earlier when I reviewed the first time, but ran out of time. I'm just going to say one thing: Laudine. She is totally Godric's wife. There are few ladies who would just be like 'okay, let's go kick Vikings' buttocks' and put on their helmet. She does. Awesome.


Author's Response: :D Hi again Georgina! Ahaha, I'm so glad to see you back here, and that you like Laudine. I couldn't see Godric's wife being any other way, besides I couldn't resist writing a refined yet Viking-butt-kicking lady even in the tenth century. XD Thanks so much for your review! ♥

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Review #46, by mymischiefmanaged Chapter I

15th December 2014:
Hello! Here for our review swap :)

I don't usually read founders so this has been refreshing. Having not read other stories set in this era I don't know how similar yours is, but it seems to take an original perspective on what the founders were like, and I like that you've started with them young rather than the older, wiser figures we tend to think of in the books.

Rowena's already set up to be an interesting character, and I like the arranged marriage plot. I wonder if you might be able to fit in her intelligence a little earlier on? Maybe by showing her internally critiquing Redwald's defence strategies? Something to make it clear how she becomes the founder of Ravenclaw House.

Redwald is well developed and provides some humour. The idea of muggles trying to attack wizards without realising they have magic is an interesting one that fits in well to the time, and your reference to who's king places us firmly in the 10th century which is a useful reminder.

Salazar is intriguing, and you've set up a lot of room for his character to develop into one we'll recognise. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens with him, and to knowing how the love story pans out.

Helga's also well developed as a character, and I think seems closer to how we'd imagine her to be than the others do (that's not a criticism - it's only chapter one so there's lots of time to learn more about them). I'm a little unsure by her being married though. Is Hufflepuff now her husband's surname? Or has she not changed her name? Not changing her name with marriage would be strange for the time period, but Hufflepuff house needs to be named after her rather than somebody else. It's only a little thing but it might be worth thinking about if you haven't already.

I would have liked to see more of Gryffindor but what you've done with him so far is great. His friendship with Slytherin is well set up and fits in with canon. And that reference to Slytherin's muggle love interest is definitely interesting...

Overall, really good first chapter. I didn't spot any typing/grammar mistakes and it flows well. Maybe I'll start reading some founders stories :)

Thanks for the swap!

Emma xx

Author's Response: Hi there! I love Founders era, and I'm so glad you decided to check out this story especially as you haven't read much Founders before.

I am glad you like the introduction of Rowena. You're right in that her intelligence doesn't seem to be in full show here, as you pointed out earlier she is young (I think still 19 in this chapter), and although she shows her logical side in pointing out the issue with Redwald's invisibility trick, most of her cleverness is focused on getting out of the party. At least that's what I was hoping to show :-/ I'll go back and have a look at it though.

It's great to hear that you enjoyed reading about Redwald, and that you appreciated the historical references and thought the story suited the time period, thanks!

I'm glad you like Helga and that she seems to be how you imagined her. As for the surname. That's a tricky question because as far as I can tell, historically no one even had surnames until about two centuries after this story takes place. But since the Founders all have surnames it was interesting to work in. I'm going to say that her husband doesn't have a surname, or that he took Helga's surname, though really I left it vague so that people can come to whatever conclusion they want :p

The story is told from a rotating POV and the second chapter is told from Godric's perspective, so there is definitely more about him! I'm glad you find Slytherin's story interesting and think it fits in with canon overall, that's great to hear.

Thanks so much for your review and for the swap!

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Review #47, by Freda_and_Georgina Chapter I

13th December 2014:
I love this story! Your characters are very much the way I would imagine them to be. I love the mention of mead and was slightly surprised that Helga liked broomstick spells.

I plan to return to this story when I'm not falling asleep as I type.

Author's Response: Hi Georgina! I'm so glad that the characters are the way you imagined - I tried to stick with the little of them we know from canon and from the Sorting Hat and made up the rest, so this is really great to hear! Yeah, yeah I imagine Helga had a good sense of fun! :P

Haha aww, get some sleep! Thanks for your review! :)

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Review #48, by Chazzie Chapter VI

10th November 2014:
Hi there!
This is pretty amazing so far. I love the way you have characterised everyone, and made them seem perfectly cannon. Rowena was rather regal in her mannerisms, and I like the idea of her being the one to suggest the moving staircases. Her daughter knowing that Rowena isn't truly happy and not wanting to grow up like her was a perfect touch of foreshadowing. Godric is loud and funny, noble and righteous. He always seems to strive to do what he feels has the best possible outcome, or is the right thing to do. Helga was sweet as pie, I loved the way she mothers everyone. I know she must feel horrible whenever someone is upset and she feels she could have prevented it. She really is the peacemaker here. Salazar, oh poor Salazar. You gave a brilliant reason for his mistrust of muggles and muggle borns, and I'm so sad he had to go through that. Yet at the same time he is still strong and brilliant, although it would be nice to see him with a little more ambition.
Your word choice was lovely, and brought a older feel to the story. Very excellent. I like your authors note to, as I happen to live in Scotland so it made me grin upon realising that people wouldn't know that. Alba is the Gaelic word for Scotland, and so is used even nowadays, although mostly in the Highlands and Islands :)
Great story, can't wait to read the rest!

Author's Response: Hi Lottie! Thank you so much - I am really glad to hear that the portrayal of the founders matches canon! I wanted to have the values of their house match the most visible components of their personalities - the strengths as well as faults. Poor Salazar indeed. I think his ambition shows up a lot more in the next chapter as we are about to delve into his POV again.
Thanks for your comments on the word choice as well, I am thrilled that it gave the story an older feel. Glad you appreciated that authors note ;)
I am so happy to hear that you are enjoying the story! Thanks so much for your wonderful review!!

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Review #49, by Felpata Lupin Chapter VI

7th September 2014:
Hi Kristin!
Me again!
This is the first time I read a Founders' story (don't really know why...)
I think you're doing a great work in describing their different characters and backgrounds.
I really love the alternations of POVs (I think my favourite might be Rowena, but the other three are great too).
I also loved the details about the building of the school (the part about Slytherin's headquarter missing the door made me laugh...) and the creation of the Sorting Hat!
Interesting how Slytherin developed his dislike towards Muggle and Muggleborns. I suspected his romance with Maeve might end bad and that might lead him to those beliefs, but I didn't imagine the cause would be him being a Parselmouth...
I loved how we get to know the Founders' children in this chapter. You did a great work with them all, especially Helena.
It was fun to see the kid version of the Bloody Baron too!
Brilliant job, as usual! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Hi again Chiara! Wow, it's like you live on my author page. Not that I mind, of course! :p I'm really flattered that you keep coming back to read my stories! I hadn't thought about this particular fic for a long time, but your review is reminding me how much I want to finish up writing it!

I am so thrilled that you like the alternating POV's! This story was my first try at a rotating viewpoint - and with third person narration in general - so I am really glad that it works and that you like that feature of the story. I really love writing Rowena, because I think she notices a lot but kind of lives in her head, and she has this kind of tragic unrequited love going on which for some reason was one of my favourite things to write :p

The details of how the school came to be built was pretty fun to write too. There's so much quirkiness in Rowling's world and I just expanded on it for the building of the castle and how rooms got to be the way they were - glad you liked the Slytherin common room's lack of a door!

I'm glad you liked the development of Salazar's prejudices. There is more to come about that, the next chapter is from his POV (as soon as I get around to writing the rest of it!) And thanks, it's wonderful to hear that you liked Helena and the young Baron :) There's not a huge amount of canon info to work with for this time period, so I'm adding in whatever I can that fits!

Thanks so much for your review and for being amazing!

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Review #50, by The_Crookshanks_Saga Chapter I

26th July 2014:
Yes yes yes. One of the best Founders eras I've read in a long time. Great. I love Rowena's personaliy: she isn't a perfect ice lady, and she can't always get everything she wants by exporting her massive intellect (hem hem Salazar). I'm definitely going to keep reading.


Author's Response: Meena! ♥ Thank you so much! Ah, that is such a wonderful compliment! I am thrilled that you've enjoyed it thus far and that you like Rowena's personality. It means a lot to me :)

And wow, I haven't worked on this story in ages. This was a good reminder for me to do so... :P

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