I adored this story. In my post, you said it was one of your less popular stories, but honestly I don't know why. It's written fantastically and while the pairing is slightly odd, it's very interesting. I think you captured Luna's personality perfectly. I really liked this line:
"Like Harry has, she had thought with a twitch of her lip, because smiles were things of the past."
You should be really proud of this story! :] I enjoyed reading it! It's very sad that Remus had to die though. :(
Emma Author's Response: yeah, i couldn't bring myself to give it a happy ending, haha. :) but remus is one of my many "favorite characters," (which basically includes everyone in the books), and i was pretty upset to see him go, even though i was the one to do it! :P i'm very glad you liked it, thanks so much for taking the time to review!! Report Review
The pairing of Luna and Lupin is one that I've never seen before, but I really enjoyed reading this. You wrote Luna, well... so Luna!
She's always been kinda quirky and a bit weird but that's what makes her interesting. I like how she named the house Bartleby. It would be very like her to personify such a thing. You really captured her innocence as well.
Your description is also great in this. 'his mouth was cold and tasted like a coin.' Very interesting line, but it makes sense. I liked it.
Though I have to wonder, what happened to poor Remus Lupin?!
bee-stung lips, a poisoned blade!
That poor man!
I'm astounded that it doesn't have more reviews. This in an excellent one-shot. Great job!Author's Response: hey, thanks! i'm so glad you like it, i was beginning to think it sucked, haha. :) and i didn't literally mean bee-stung, i'm not quite sure if you thought i did. i just thought of david thewlis and how his lips are kind of sticky-outy. :D i've completely forgotten what was in this fic now, though, and what the poisoned blade is about--i'm off to read it myself, haha. thanks again, so much! Report Review
Oh wow! This is crazy, and I love it. Remus Lupin--Luna Lovegood? This is going on my favorites, for sure! I just really like the way that you portrayed Luna. . . so innocent, of course, as she is. . . which is great about it all, as its so CANON. . . I LOVE canon. I really like the bittersweet ending. I REALLY liked this! I cannot believe this only has 4 reviews! This is shorter than some that I've seen, and yet, you've seemed to have fit about every angsty emotion into there seemlessly, effortlessly! I have to tell you, I am no fan to angst, but this was a perfect example of how it should be done. Number 2 on my favorites list right now. . . You should be very proud. . . Author's Response: Woo! Yes, I am proud, haha, I think you're a great honor and I'm glad I made it to your favorites list. :) Thanks so much! Report Review
just...wow.Author's Response: Thanks so much. <3 arienette. Report Review
oh my god.... AAAH THIS IS SOOOOOO SAD! wonderful story, you made me cry.... this is a wonderful example for a short story.... it just kinds starts and doens't take up more than a few moments in a really big thing.... this was wonderful, very emotional and i am stunned that my challenge made you write something like this!! *faints* wow!Author's Response: Thanks so much for the kind words! I'm really glad you issued the challenge. Thanks for the review! <3 arienette. Report Review
This was awesome. I think you did very well on this and how you described Luna was wonderful. Very nice, keep up the great work.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Luna is an amazing character. <3 arienette. Report Review
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