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Review #26, by Secret Santa The Quidditch Final

3rd January 2013:
I'm not an expert on Quidditch mathematics, but if Gryffindor is already leading in points before the final, I would assume that they'd basically only need to make sure that the Gryffie Seeker catches the Snitch, since it gives 150 points on its own. Unless, of course, Slytherin Chasers are mindblowingly good that year and score constantly. Just a little glitch there, food for thought and so forth... :)

I really liked that you didn't put all the Marauders in the team, but used your imagination and OCs instead. Quidditch match itself was fun to read about. It would be very much like James to care more about the welfare of his Seeker and the result of the game than his own health.

The hospital wing scene was quite cute. Lily admonishing James about being a stupid Quidditch enthusiast, and James secretly enjoying that he finally gets her attention. I liked that you made James frank about his feelings and putting it out there, even though he might get shot down again. I'm pretty sure they had quite lovely time at the party.

The pace was excellent and dialogue was quite natural to the characters. All in all, it was a nice fluffy one-shot about James and Lily.

Happy New Year!

Super Secret Santa :P

Author's Response: Hello Santa!

Hmm - yes. While I was writing this I didn't think I'd got the mathematics of it all quite right but it started to make my head hurt trying to figure it out. I hoped I'd either got it right by some miracle or people would overlook it. I will go back over it and try and sort it... thanks for pointing it out :)

Yeah I couldn't put the other Marauders in the team. Sirius maybe but I just don't see the other two being in the team so I just stuck with James. I had fun making up the other characters :)

Oh - the hospital scene was my favourite bit to write by far :) James is great fun to write and I loved it. I'm so glad you liked it too!!

Thank you for the lovely review Santa :)

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Review #27, by Izzy The Quidditch Final

2nd January 2013:
THIS IS AWESOME! if you're feeling up to it/want to... please write more of this story! its really genuine and sweet. you're a very good writer. keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Oh thank you so much for leaving a review! I appreciate it :) I'm really glad you liked it :) Someone else mentioned the possibility of doing it in Lily's POV and so there may be an update yet! Watch this space!

Thanks again!


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Review #28, by Siriusly89 The Quidditch Final

1st January 2013:
Hi :) Siriusly89 here with your requested review :D

Beofre I begin, just going to let you know that I review AS I read so it's going to get a bit disjointed :P

Yaay! Gryffindor won :D And James was so brave :P Heehee! He's like 'the ideal man' ! Can you package him and send him to me? Because I could do with a Romeo in my life :P

'Its probably done wonders to encourage your little fan club, but. . .' = PURE GENIUS! :D I loove it! And I am more inclined to guess the Marauders were thrown out for making too much noise :P

I wonder why Lily was really in the Hospital Wing *cue suggestive eyebrow wiggling* And I love that Hannah has a little girly crush on James :P

Okay, please please please(with a cherry on top) PLEASE either write this one-shot from Lily's POV or write a sequel that takes place at the 'thing' :P Please? Because I would love you forever if you did :P


Author's Response: hello :)

Oh, I'm so so happy you enjoyed his story too!! I hadn't thought about writing any more or doing it from Lily's POV but now that you've brought it up you've gt me thinking... I'll make no promises but watch this space!

Yes - James is just lovely and perfect and I want to wrap him up and keep him! I really love the man!! I'm glad you liked what I wrote for Lily - she was so much fun to write in this!!

I can tell you that the Marauders did infact get thrown out for too much noise :) They were trying to bring the party to James (mostly lead by Sirius) and when that failed they took it back to GT and James joined them later :)

Lily was genuinely there for Mary to start with but she made up some pretty poor excuses to stay behind for James that Mary didn't believe what so ever ;)

Gah - you make my day with your reviews - I'm SO happy you like what I'm writing!! Thank you so so much :)


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Review #29, by Gabriella Hunter The Quidditch Final

31st December 2012:

Hey! Its me, Gabbie with your requested review and even though its not Georgelina, I had to read it anyway since I love your work. Hear that? Confessions of love in the air...(Though I'm in love with various other authors at the moment, I could squeeze you in next to my friend Cassie Potter. Hehehe.)
Anyhoo, so Quidditch! Ugh, I get so nervous whenever I try to write it and I have to give you credit for opening with it. Me, being the coward that I am, would have just sleazed my way around it without any detail.
But I loved the way you handled this. James walking out onto the pitch with his team, encouraging his mates and having that confidence was wonderful. Also, I just LOVED how you added in that bit about Lily being the crowd, something about the way you wrote that made me sigh. Girlish imaginings of course.
I wasn't sure by how you wrote this if they were together, if they WERE going to get together and I liked that. You focused first hand on the game, which I could see was a tad hard for you on some parts but smoothed out very well. James actually getting hurt was a good twist too because usually they'd have just won the game amid cliched cheers and confetti. He's honestly human and I'm glad that you showed that.
Anyhoo, Lily! Haha, I thought it was funny that she was fussing at him while he was knocked out and a little sweet too that she came to see him. The fact that she was worried really brought her feelings into perspective. I was able to gather that she didn't hate him as much as either of them would have thought and it was subtle, but wonderful.
James's conversation with her was funny, mature and flirtatious all at once. It was great to see that he wasn't trying to play up the "wounded victim" bit and manipulate her. And I think that came across for Lily, which was probably why she didn't know how to react to him, it showed a different side to his character that she had probably never noticed. ;)
The hopeful ending is great too. We all know of course what happens in the future but at that moment, you do wonder. How will the party go? What will Lily say? Will they become friends and perhaps something more by the time the year is out? :D
I liked that you didn't answer those questions but left us to wonder and want more. ;)
So, I loved this and I'm glad that you wanted me to read it. Keep up the good work!
Much love,

Author's Response: Hello lovely :)

Gah - yes I know! I found Quidditch ridiculously hard to write but I had to have the match in there to go with my plot! I ended up making it shorted than I orginally intended and I still don't think it's quite right but hopefully the latter parts make up for that.

I did enjoy writing James talking to his team mates though. As I was writing I couldn't help but have Oliver in the back of my mind...

Haha, I'm glad you enjoyed the James getting injured part. I just thought it was very him - he's selfless like Harry.

In my head when I was writing the conversation, this is the start of their beautiful relationship. James is finally mature and Lily can no longer resist his good looks :)

I'm really glad you loved it! I really appreciate the lovely review :) It made my day to read it!!

Thank you :)

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Review #30, by sour_grapes_snape The Quidditch Final

31st December 2012:
Hello! sour_grapes_snape here with your review! Thank you so much for entering my challenge.

I thought you wrote the Quidditch match very well. James seemed very in-character and the scene was well-executed. The only complaint I have is that it could have been a bit longer.

I loved the conversation James had with Lily. It showed that she was starting to care for him and provided a bit of a background for their relationship. I also liked the way James told Lily that he was still interested in her, it was very sweet.

Overall, I thought this was short and cute, with good attention to detail. Winners will be announced soon! Thank you again for entering


Author's Response: Hello :)

Thanks for leaving the review :) I enjoyed taking part in the challenge!!

Gah - I found the Quidditch really hard to write. I know I picked it but that was because I had the plot in my head but the match itself was really hard to write so I may have chickened out slightly and made it shorter than I orginally intended!!

I'm really glad you liked the conversation between the two of them though! I loved writing this part and it kind of made me want to write more about it!!

Thanks again for reviewing :) It was a great challenge!!


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Review #31, by jamesandlily_forever The Quidditch Final

31st December 2012:
That was an interesting, and having James hit by both bludgers and shrugging it off was a good touch. I think that you did a great job with James pretending to be asleep, because that sounds like something he would do. I can't wait to read more

Author's Response: Thank you so so much for leaving a review! I'm glad you thought I did a good job of James :) I always worry!!

Thanks again :D

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