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Review #26, by angel_speaks The Unexpected Guest

15th December 2012:
Hiya! angel_speaks here to fulfill a review request from the forums ^_^

Characterization: I think that did pretty well on this. Based on my observations on the Weasley twins from the movies and within the book series, I think that The twins in this story was definitely similar to their canons. Adding that whole element of George 'speaking' with Fred was pretty creative and added a lot of dramatic effects to the story on top of your vivid descriptions.

Flow: You used a lot of your transitions really well which made it really flow smoothly. I don't think this part is an issue at all for this story thus far.

Grammar/spelling: First off, I loved how consistent you were in remaining with the same POV throughout the story. Good job! There were a few words that were spelled with extra letters and such but it not that big of a deal. If you'd like to reduce the chances, you can work with a beta as you write. They can really help you out.

Overall, you did a pretty good job! I could really feel George's pain and the ending...!!! Goodness, the ending made me tear... :(

Thanks for requesting!
A

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for my review!

I'm glad you thought I did ok on the characterisation... I'd hate to not get Fred and George right... They're my fav characters!

I will go back through when the queue reopens and hopefully spot and sort out any of mistakes I've made - thanks for letting me know!

Sorry for the tears! I didn't mean to cause tears but anything Fred related usually makes me cry too!

Thanks again!
Lauren


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Review #27, by FriendofMolly The Unexpected Guest

15th December 2012:
FredWeasleyismyKing,
I was just checking the newest posts and yours stood out. I am always glad when an author lets Freddie slip in. I think that through the rest of Georgies life he gets a bit of time with his twin during the important moments, times he would miss Fred the most. Just think about it as Twin Magic. That being said, you did a beautiful job of the first encounter after death. I liked the humour, as well as the admonishing Fred had to do. This was just perfect.
Thank you,
FoM

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much for a lovely review!! You've put such a huge smile on my face! I'd hate for George to have been without his twin for the rest of his life so I'd like to think something like this was possible for them! I love the idea of it being twin magic!

Thank you so much again!

Lauren


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Review #28, by Siriusly89 The Unexpected Guest

13th December 2012:
This was so well done! It was so heartfelt, but it still had humor and I loved the line about Muriel :P I like the description of the funeral, that it was colourful, because I have a feeling that that would have been what George wanted! All in all a brilliant piece! I loved it :D I'm so glad I could help you :)

Author's Response: Yay, so glad you liked it! Yes, the funeral had to be colourful... black just isn't Fred and George at all.

Thank you again for your help =) I'm so happy I managed to write this!

Lauren


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