I too, am very proud of what you directed Ron to do. Actually he has never been one to shirk his admission of wrongs. This is one instance that should have been kept private. Yet, it proved to be a turning point for Ron. Hermiones' timing was perfect. . You have given us much to think about the underpolitics of the Ministry. This shows just how Riddle was able to rise to power. Not that Harry, Hermione or Ron would want to be part of the Geezergamot. Perhaps that is just what it needs to go forward.
Now for Ginny's party. You didn't go into detail, yet you made it understood it was magnificent. I am surprised though at the last. Not that Harry would want to turn Ginny away. It's just that being at the Burrow would be the last place I think that Harry would want to begin the next phase of their relationship.
Thanks again for your recent reviews. I'm proud of Ron too. Ron has always had the sort of courage that enabled hin to march into a nest of Acromantulas for Hermione's sake, but he and Hermione had both lacked the emotional courage needed to even share their feelings with each other. They are both making latge strides.
As for Harry amd Ginny, the Burrow is their home. That this would eventually happen was understood by Ginny's parents when they acepted the sleeping arrangements with Harry's room just beside Ginny's. (See end ch9 and ch10). Doesn't mean they are neccessarily happy about it. It sort of a 'don't ask, don't tell' policy, though I'm not sure Molly will comply with the first part.
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i loved it hope u keep updating this fast. cant wait for the next ch.Author's Response:
Thanks for ongoing encouragement. I apprecaite it. The next chapter might be a week away. Hope you can wait!
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Here I thought things were working out, and now Ron gets outed. I know just who did it. Well there are actually two. Ron seems to have hit on something Hermione hasn't. He wasn't wrong in what he saw, Grantham wants Hermione, both personally and politically. And the short dumpy witch? Maybe she is just a stodgy traditionalist. But it seems she has another agenda, So without knowing the facts poor Ron is being painted with a murky brush. Please don't dally with the next post.
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I loved this chapter i cant wait for the next one. hope its soon. Report Review
I am surprised at how fast Ron turned into a jealous fool. Yes he was jealous when Hermione went to the Ball with Krum, but that's not the same as this. He's going to have to grovel if he has any chance of getting her back. Meanwhile I hope she doesn't trust any of the members of the Muggleborn commitee! More please!
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i really enjoyed reading what u have written so far. this is one of my favorite fan fics i hope u continue with this story. 23 chapters in and Ginny hasn't even gone back to school yet. u r really good at writing and giving the reader a lot of info. please continue this story.Author's Response:
I am glad you are enjoying this fic. Unfortunatley it only has a few more chapters to go. I am planning to end it the day Ginny and Hermione return to Hogwarts.
I do hope to wirte some additional stories as a continuation though, just not sure when. Report Review
Well that went as it should. Harry is going to have to step up. Sure he lead during the battle, and some expect him to. Yet he is a natural leader, I don't see that Savage would take his opinion any more than the others. But he should. It looks like he won't be trusted to lead any time soon.
PS I loved the banter between Harry and Ginny. How long has it been that Harry has been relaxed enough to do that?Author's Response: For fear of giving away any elements of the plot I have to say - no comment! Report Review
"All the same he found himself wondering, not for the first time, whether he himself could ever have found the courage to be Harry Potter’s best friend." That truly has to be the most difficult job description of all time. xD Great first chapter! ;)Author's Response: I certainly wouldn't have the courage to take it on. Report Review
I am readingeverychapter you post! Thanks and keep it up!Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement. Report Review
I think what makes your story so unique and good is the politics. I would have never dreamed about writing it but after seeing what you have done I realize that I need to include it. I hope you don't mind and I will not, I repeat, will not steal any of you parties, names, and way they go about it. They wouldn't be parties exactly like yours and no High Warrenters unless I find out that is canon. In fact if I do work on including it (politics that is) then the only similarity between yours and mine would be that politics are included in the story. Thank you for writing this because it is excellent and it is fantastic writing! Keep it up.Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you like the politics. Not everyone does.
JKR has said nothing on how members of the Wizengamot are appointed nor has she given much detail about the politics or how it all works. All I have written in this regard is my own invention though hopefully still consistent with the canon. This includes the High Warranters who are loosely based on the original Censors, a committee of the ancient Roman Senate. Their job wasn't to ban things but to decide who was qualified to be a member of the Senate.
What is clear from JKR's books is that the Wizengamot is largely a part time assembly. Just about every member we know about also has another full time job (eg Dumbledore, Umbridge)
I look forward to reading your story when it is done. Report Review
I liked it! The way you set up the Auror training made sense, just as the level of ability was as I thought it should be. The DA did defeat the Riddle regime, but they had help. Harry had several powers that helped. Now the playing field is open and varied. The DA members are strong and talented, but as Williamson said they can be improved. They can also be taught new techniques and tactical aspects. All of which I expect they will excel. I do hope you are writing the next!
The Ron/Hermione portion was really good, too. Imagine Ron finding a book he wanted to read that didn't include Quidditch, or winnung Hermiones heart? Excellent!
I have already submitted the next chapter and it is now waiting for validation. I suspect it will be available on this site around December 4. I am sorry for the long delay in getting this last chapter up. My real job got in the way.
I'm glad you liked the scene with Ron and Hermione. I love writing playful interaction between those two.
This chapter was good but I prefer some of your other chapters. PLease don't be offended but I thought it could have done with having a bit more emotion in it but that's just me. Your writing is brilliant, keep writing! :)Author's Response:
Ah well, not every chapter can be your favourite. Thanks for the review.
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I do not often read stories that are unfinished, for fear they will never reach a conclusion. I know first hand that life sometimes gets in the way of writing. Regardless, I'm reading yours and enjoying it. I find it a fairly realistic representation of what could have happened with the trio after DH, though there are some things on which I find I must suspend my disbelief. Harry's sudden foray into the extremely well-spoken, for example. Unfortunately I fear the poor boy would never be able to articulate his thoughts so well as you portray, though it is refreshing to read. The political world you weave, however, is amazing. I could never be so creative as to find a way to describe a system that is so believable. This is especially true given that, so far at least, you are showing that though parties have differing views, the people in an opposing party are not necessarily evil. In fact, their ideas probably have merit, even if they aren't exactly equal to your own. A particularly well-made point, and one which I find extends to the real world as well. Too bad most people don't subscribe to it. Regardless, brilliant job so far, I do hope you finish it, and congratulations on being the first story in five years I've felt compelled to review. High praise, but for my own unimportance ;) Keep writing. Best, HollyAuthor's Response:
Thanks for the review. You have me feeling all flattered!
I take your point about Harry. One get's the impression that neither he or Ron are particularly articulate. However when I read the books for specific pointers on how to write these characters I find that they are both often very articulate with an excellent vocabulary. The thing is they are not like that most of the time and I have probably got the balance way wrong. I console myself with the assumption that it is Hermione who writes most of Harry's set pieces in public.
Thanks for your comments on the idea that good people can (and do) have very different beliefs from one another. Public (and private) discourse would be more productive if there was more respect and less moralising contempt of those who disagre with your world view.
Oliver and his cohorts are more dangerous than I thought. I do believe that Hermione might think so too. That is unless she is enamored with the thoughts he put in her head about education. No matter they will tip their hand. It is good to see Harry is rising out of his funk. I think what he went through it would be surprising if he didn't have a period of fear and doubt. It's the thing you push back when you are in the midst of doing what needs to be done. It's only after that you reflect and react. Good chapter. I am looking forward to see what your direction he'll go as an Auror.
FoMAuthor's Response: Everyone has their blind spots, even Hermione. Then again, maybe she is seeing things more clearly than the others? Report Review
Really good job, I loved it!!Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad your enjoyed it. Report Review
I like the chapter but I wouldn't want the story to get tooo political-ish i hope that doesnt happen cuz i like this fan-fiction better than the others i read
*waiting for next chapter :DAuthor's Response: Hi,
Sometimes I get the impression I'm the only one interested in the political part of this story. I am glad you are enjoying the other aspects of the story.
I'd be interested to know what parts make you enjoy the story and what doesn't.
Thanks for the review,
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It was a good and necessary chapter. I don't know if the timing is on purpose or not. I will continue to read your story, but for now I have had my fill of politics.
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi FoM
No, the timing had nothing to do with the US elections. We got enough coverage here so I can imagine in the US it must have been wall to wall.
I'm afraid there is more poliitcs coming up but it won't dominate the story.
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This was sooo good! Your storyline follows a very logical course that is very canon. I don't think anyone could go through what Harry did, and not have mental trauma. Afterall having Riddle inside his head was trouble enough. When you add the responsibility of being the only one to be able to stop him, it adds up. I think he will be stronger in the future. I must go to the next.
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi Friend of Molly,
Harry will be stronger in the future, but of course the path to the future may not be a straight line.
Thanks again for your ongoing reviews.
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I've read many stories and yours is by far one of the best that I've read.You've added to the story but you haven't changed it too much.Keep up the good work!Author's Response: Thanks,
I really apprecaite your generous comments. I will try and keep up the good work! Report Review
And your plot thickens. I applaud you as the changing of the British Wizarding mindset won't be easy, but it's necessary. Well at least Grantham is upfront, telling Hermione he would like it if her Politcal party wasn't as strong as ot would be with her. I am worried as to what Harry will tell the press. It wouldn't do for them to know the truth. An excellent chapter. I can't wait till the next.
FoMAuthor's Response: Again thanks,
I've read several after the Battle fix, and many chapters where the trio recount their adventure...but the way you did was INCREDIBLE! You were so meticulous about your word choice and detail! It was beautiful, dramatic tragic and comedic! I loved the part when Harry say he had to see his Chaser again!Author's Response: Hi Corleone,
Thanks, It was a hard section to write - I was worried I was going over the top with the section you mention with harry and Ginny - I'm glad you enjoyed it and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story also. Report Review
Wow, 5 new chapters, nice one! :D
I particularly like the focus on harry and especially chapter 19 and harry's recovering- some great ideas and writing!
Keep writing! :)Author's Response: This site normally takes quite a few days before it posts a chapter and you can only submit one a a time so I had a few waiting. They got reaaly fast a few days ago so now everything I have finished is posted.
I am glad you like the section on Harry and there is more to come.
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Completely enjoying your story! I like that, unlike many other writers, you have not changed the characters into your own, but have let them evolve more naturally.
If you need a beta, let me know.Author's Response: Hi Propita,
Thanks for the review. I;m glad you feel I am keeping the characters 'in character'. I an certainly trying to do that but also refelct the growth they must have undergone as part of their war experiences (and just growing up)
I am not sure what a beta actually does, but if a beta feels they can improve this story I would like to hear. Report Review
I NEED TO READ THE NEXT CHAPTER!!
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