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Review #26, by loveinidleness One of Us

4th October 2013:
Such an immersive start to this piece. Your description is divine but what I particularly love is that you donít let it take over the story. We donít have three paragraphs of adjectives before something happens and that creates such an enthralling start to the piece.

Youíve paced the beginning wonderfully. You donít skip over time or rush but take the reader very delicately forward and so I felt very tense and anxious reading it, which is a remarkable thing to be able to do in the first chapter.

I also love the information youíve included about the trails one has to face before being accepted as a Deatheater. Iíd never thought about that and I found original and exciting. Iíd love to read more about that area itís such a clever concept.

Your characterization of Regulus is really well done. Iíve noticed that when writers write about a character weíre less familiar with they tend to overload the first chapter with backstory and you resisted this temptation and it really paid off. I feel connected to Regulus, I love the vulnerability yet determination youíve instilled in him but youíve allowed him to remain a bit of a mystery which really makes me want to read on.

Iím struggling to think of any CC to give you. I think itís an exceptionally strong start and I will read on with interest.

Author's Response: Hello there! Thanks for taking the time to review!

I'm glad you like my description, especially as I'm never sure whether I've gone over or under or everything I've written is completely pointless, haha!

I'm so happy you liked my characterization of Regulus! Like you said, I really didn't want to overload this first chapter with info, as that can be very boring to read.

Thank you for such a lovely review!


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Review #27, by milominderbinder One of Us

1st October 2013:
Hiya! Maia here from review tag :)

So, idk if you remember but we met in review tag the other day, when you reviewed my Regulus oneshot! So I was pretty excited to read this because yay, Regulus! Like I mentioned in my response to your review, I've not really read much that's focused on his character before. That said, I thought you did a great job here.

I really liked your characterisation of Regulus. You showed his more vulnerable side, and his reluctance, and how he's been influenced by his family and his father especially, while still giving him a toughness that would allow him to be a death eater. I really loved the part about letting Rowle do legilimency on him to check his loyalty. Because it showed that actually, Regulus, at this stage, WANTS to be in the death eaters, he doesn't have anything to hide, even if he's scared or doesn't know what he's getting himself into he's still loyal to the idea at this stage. For me that stood out really powerfully and I think it will only make his character more interesting as you continue this, and show as his loyalty begins to falter.

So, my favourite part was:

"I'm not afraid," Regulus had said. But that wasn't true, was it? Because for ten nights he had woken in a cold sweat, remembering how limp the muggle girl had gone after she'd been hit by the Killing Curse. His killing curse. He could still see the light fading from her dead eyes.

I don't quite know why because you have some really lovely writing in this whole piece, but the literary devices in that quote just really stuck out and made it powerful for me. Rhetorical questions! Varied sentence lengths! Other amazing things that make English students like myself drool! Haha, so well done there.

There were a few minor typos, but not nearly enough to ruin the story, and nothing a quick edit couldn't fix! I'm nitpicky about stuff like that :P

Overall, I thought this was a really great look at Regulus, and a strong start to what I'm sure will be an amazing story.

My only little note which has nothing to do with the actual story is that I noticed you haven't credited your banner in your summary. So you should probs do that.

Great job! I think I will keep up with this story and see where the rest of it goes, because you've really hooked my attention < 3


Author's Response: Hey there Maia!

I definitely do remember your one-shot, because it was awesome! And I'm glad you thought I did a good job here:)

I am so, so glad you liked my characterization of Regulus. Because he's certainly not a hero - the original HP books tell us that - but I wanted to find a way to make him likeable here, and I hope I've achieved that!

Thank you for the lovely review!

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Review #28, by Haronione One of Us

30th September 2013:
Hi Courtney :) review tag!

So, I absolutely loved your Regulus House Cup one-shot so I was excited to see you had started a novel based on Regulus. And I was not disappointed! This was fantastic :D

I loved how this seemed to continue on from your one-shot and I am excited to read more, you write Regulus so well!! I love that you have made him still have small niggly doubts about joining the Death Eaters, after all he is still very young and it reminds me of how Draco may have felt in HBP, despite his bravado about joining. I really liked that he is not totally evil, the fact that the initiation involving the muggle girl plays on his mind so much shows this. I thought this little scene was great, it shows us that Regulus isn't really ready to join them (which I think he wasn't because, after all, he does betray Voldemort in the end!)

As you can probably tell, I loved the characterisation of Regulus. I thought the other characters were portrayed really well too; I could imagine Narcissa not really getting involved and Bellatrix being just as evil to Regulus despite him being her cousin and wanting to join the cause.

Your descriptions and little details in here are great! You set the scene well and I was really drawn into the story. You really have a lovely writing style :)

I did notice a couple of typos but nothing that a beta wouldn't pick up, and I saw on the forums that you are looking for one so I won't list them here. I saw no other errors in this though :)

Overall, this was a great first chapter and I really enjoyed it :) I will definitely be checking back for future chapters! Great job!

Haronione ♥

Author's Response: Hi there!

Ooh, you read my Regulus one-shot? This was definitely inspired and partly based on that one-shot, so I'm glad you didn't see to find it too boring! I was considering just turning that one-shot into a novel, but realized there were many things I had to add into this one that would flow into the rest of the story. If that makes any sense at all, haha.

Anyway, I'm really glad you liked this chapter and the portrayal of my characters. Thank you so much!


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