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Review #26, by MadiMalfoy Plotting Revenge

17th February 2013:
Ahh so good! I just happened to be scrolling through your page and decided to read this (I really enjoy your Muse challenge story Uprising) and I wasn't disappointed at all! It gave me a good insight into how Tom would have felt at that age and fits his persona perfectly--just like how Ralph Fiennes' nephew portrayed him in the film. :) Fantastic one-shot! xx

Author's Response: Hi!

Feel free to read anything else on the page that takes your fancy, as your reviews always make my day! I'm glad that it didn't disappoint you, and that it was good! I'm glad that it fitted his persona, as he's such a hard character to portray, I wasn't too sure if it seemed like him!

Thanks for your review, it made my day! And the next chapter of Uprising is in the queue, so it should be up in the next couple of days :Dx

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Review #27, by 800 words of heaven Plotting Revenge

16th February 2013:

First of all, writing a story that was as nice and well done as this one, in just five hundred words absolutely blows my mind to the next galaxy and back. Seriously, I am so impressed.

I always felt sorry for young Tom Riddle, once we found out his story in the sixth book. It seemed like sometimes he was born to be evil, but at others, you could picture him as a victim of circumstances. I think you've managed to capture that duality in him really well. Whilst reading this, you're just not sure if it's "nature" or "nurture" (or lack thereof) that has made him what he is.

Really wonderful, as always! I hope you write more stuff like this (as in, just five hundred words) because I think you have a real talent for it!

Author's Response: Hi!

I'm so glad that you blew your mind, in a good way mind!

I always felt a little sorry for Tom as well, and I guess that's what motivated me to write this one-shot, as I wanted to show in a new, more sympathetic light!

Yes I guess we'll never really know whether it was nature or nurture which forced him to become who he is, but I hope it was nurture, as I do like to think that he had a choice.

Writing just 500 words, is rather fun to do, so I'll think about doing more in the future!

Thanks for the great review, it made my day:D

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Review #28, by adluvshp Plotting Revenge

16th February 2013:
Hello! Here for your requested review.

Ah, what a wonderful one-shot. I have come across many poorly written Tom Riddles, so I was a bit wary when I started reading this, but I am so glad I did, because this was quite nicely done. People tend to 'mess up' his character but I was pleased that you captured him fairly well.

I loved the plot concept of him being called the "odd one" and sort of living up to his name, or rather growing into his name. That was a powerful concept.

As for the believability, I think this was definitely believable. You did a fine job in portraying young Tom Riddle and his thoughts, and the way it all played out was quite realistic. He seemed very much like one would imagine him to be - mature in a way for an 11-year-old and yet childish. We could also see the sense of power in his head and that was great.

I also loved the part where Tom says that he took Dennis and Amy to the cave because they were taunting him about being unloved. It showed that he was affected by the fact that he was abandoned by his parents and needed and wanted love, and unfortunately when he didn't get it, he turned "bad" because he wanted to take revenge on the world, and hurt it because he had his 'precious' parents taken from him. It just shows how much impact being in the orphanage and families' refusal to take him had on him.

Of course, this is different, but I think it works well enough, as it had this haunting feel about it and had me hooked while reading.

This flowed really well too, and I think it is very appropriate for 500 words - as more would not have made the impact it did.

I didn't see any technical errors either, except for the final sentence as it sounded weirdly phrased to me ("wait until for the moment..." part) so I'd suggest that you see if that can be re-phrased and still fit in the 500 words.

Apart from that, I don't have any CC to give you as this was a well-written one-shot, was quite believable, very interesting, and nicely thought out. Your pace, flow, grammar, and characterisation was finely done. Good work!



Author's Response: Hi Aditi, thanks for leaving such a detailed review!

I'm glad that you thought that I captured Tom Riddle well, as like you said he's such a complex character, he's really hard to portray! I just sort of imagined that I was him, so I guess getting into his mindset piad off, even if I felt weird being in a serial killers mind!

Yes I thought that the odd one, would be a cool idea to use, as you never imagine him getting bullied, you imagine him the bully, so I thought it would be nice to show, that everyone has a hidden side.

I'm that it was believable as his mind is so warped, you never know what he would be thinking!

I thought that the incident with the cave must have a reason behind it, and I wanted to show why he may have ended up evil, so I combined both in one! I'm glad that you liked it, as I love adding more of a backstory to canon events.

I'm glad that you thought it fitted 500 words well, as I agree I couldn't think of what else to write, so it seemed fitting to do it for this challenge.

I'll look at the last sentence and see what I can do:)

Thanks for the review it was really useful!


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Review #29, by soapman333 Plotting Revenge

16th February 2013:
Awesome, I love me some one-shots (that wasn't supposed to sound lame, but it did. Sorry).

Oh wow, I like this approach to little Tommy. He's "morph[ed]" into what people call him. I got chills reading the way he nonchalantly mentioned those incidents with his fellow orphans. Gah, but I still felt sympathy, even when I know his future.

Way to make me want to adopt an evil wizard :P.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this,

Author's Response: Hi!

Yes I love one-shots to, as it means you explore something you would have never written about before!

I'm glad that you liked this approach to Tom, as I was trying to show that though he was evil at such a young age, he was still a child, and one that deserve some sympathy.

I have to say I did feel sorry for him when writing this, even though I know what he did in the future!

Lol! Perhaps if you adopted him, you could have made him a nicer person, and he wouldn't have turned out to be an evil wizard!

Thanks for the review, it made me laugh! And I'm really glad that you enjoyed this read!

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Review #30, by Siriusly89 Plotting Revenge

15th February 2013:

I've never seen a one-shot from Tom's point of view when he was a child before. This had a sort of haunting feel about it, because he just seems like an innocent, lost little boy in this, but of course we know what a monster he eventually morphs into.

At the same time though, he seems a little. . . .mental in this. Or not mental, but somethings a little off in this. He seems older than his years, like he's seen more than an eleven year old should. . . .and that scares me a little!

Really good job! Well done!

Author's Response: Hi!

I've never read a story from Tom's POV before either, so I really wanted to write this, as I do believe he wasn't always evil, and like you said I wanted to show that he could have been innocent at one point. Yes it is kind of weird knowing what he'll turn out to be, but I guess that's what makes his life so interesting, as he could have gone either way.

I'm glad that you picked up on the differences as that's what I was aiming to do! I always imagined that he would be very immature and mature for his age, if that makes sense? And I think given what he later turned out to be, he would be a little creepy!

Thanks for the great review!

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Review #31, by academica Plotting Revenge

14th February 2013:
Hi! Here from Team Blue for the Review Battle!

It's interesting to read something from Tom's perspective at this time in his life. You can already see the cruelty we've come to expect from Voldemort, like the incident with the rabbit, but there are also faint reminders of the fact that we're dealing with a young boy who has a child's understanding of things at times. For instance, that line about how it's understandable that he has strong powers already because he's the odd one is interesting, because he doesn't see it the way Dumbledore does, with the latter being worried.

I think this was a great choice for this challenge, because it feels like the length is appropriate here. Your writing is nice and smooth, as well. Nice job!


Author's Response: Go Team Blue!

Yes I thought that it would be interesting to explore this part of his life as well, as I don't think there are ever really any mentions about it.

I'm glad that you felt I was coming through with a child's understanding as that was important for me to do, as Voldemort was very mature at this part of his life, but so immature in other respects.

I'm glad that you suited the challenge well, as when I first started to writing it, I thought it would be the ideal length for it.

Thanks for the great review, Kiana :)

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