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Review #51, by luvinpadfoot Waste of Energy

3rd August 2012:
I feel really bad for Char. Dom too, a little, but it's easier to have sympathy for Char who really hasn't done much wrong (except snap at Dom for something minor). They seem like they would be such good friends too and that makes me sad.

I'm glad Rory's making friends. I hope she'll be even happier in the coming chapters. She's so sweet and adorable and James is cute when he worries about her.

The Quidditch try outs were very well done! I was hoping Dom wouldn't get the spot, which I know is mean but Char deserved it more. What James said about why he gave it to her was so perfect, she did want to more. It seems mean to give it to the person who wanted it out of spit.

That prank Dom played was just so cruel! I can't believe she would do that! It didn't hurt only Char, it hurt Sisi as well. No wonder James is angry at her as well. I hope they don't play many more pranks on each other. It just seems so mean of them! Although I couldn't really blame Char if she wanted to get revenge.

And James loves Char! I knew it! It's so cute how Sisi told him before he could admit it to himself! That scene was written so perfectly! And he loves her 'a little bit'. Mhmm, sure it's a only a little bit. ;)

I don't really have any constructive criticism for this chapter. Maybe slow it down a little or some more description? I love James's inner thoughts and the dialogue is brilliant! Freddie's crack about the girls PMSing made me laugh so hard!

I hope we'll have more Rory and James/Char moments in the next few chapters. I'm really looking forward to them! This is such a great chapter and story!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like it, it means a lot to me that you've reviewed all the chapters so thanks a lot for that! Your right, Dom's being kind of mean, and Rory is lovely, she's not a big part but she's one of my favourites. The next few chapters have been written so hopefully they will be up very soon. Thanks again for all the positive-ness!

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Review #52, by guest The Home of House Elves

1st August 2012:
Read it, liked it, will come back for more ;)
Good dynamics, nice descriptions of all their relationships with each other and James is great -you portray him nicely.

Author's Response: Thank you, hopefully the next few chapters will be up soon because they're all written. Thanks for the review!!

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Review #53, by luvinpadfoot The Home of House Elves

24th July 2012:
Hahaha! Freddie makes me laugh so hard! He's got to be one of the greatest supporting characters ever! He's only been with Claire for like a day and he's already on to Sisi! It's hilarious to read.

I like the introduction of the new characters, especially Sisi and her sister. They seem really interesting and like they'll add more to the plot. I wonder if Sisi and Freddie really are meant to be, or if she's just another crush...

Every new detail of Aurora and Char's lives is so fascinating! I can't believe Rory got expelled from Beauxbatons, she's such a sweet kid! It does make a lot of sense, though. I feel so bad for her with all that bullying! I hope Hogwarts does turn out to be better for her.

James and Char's relationship is so adorable! I love how obvious it is, yet it doesn't seem at all cliche. I can't wait to see more! They're going to make the cutest couple, I just know it.

And oh, the Umbridge Reincarnate! That's a great idea! It's so clever I can't wait to see what else you do with her.

The only suggestion I have is to keep an eye on your verb tenses. You slipped from past to present and back again in this chapter.

Another great update! I love this story so much and I'm really looking forward to more! =D

Author's Response: Yup I realised the tenses thing after I posted, so hopefully I will be able to change it very soon! I'm glad you're enjoying the story and your updates have been really encouraging, so thanks for that! Enjoy the next chapter when it comes out!

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Review #54, by luvinpadfoot Hufflepuff of the Bumblebees?

17th July 2012:
The end kind of surprised me there. I guess Charla's a little overprotective too, although not without good reason. I hope she and Dom make up soon. I'd feel so bad for them to be fighting for long!

I think Hufflepuff is a great House for Rory, even if she's not with her older sister. Being so quiet and shy she's sure to make a lot of friends there. I really hope she starts feeling better about herself soon. =(

James's reaction at the beginning was so sweet. I'm glad he thinks of Rory as a little sister. With so many Wotters at Hogwarts, she's got to have plenty of built in family/friends!

There were a few grammatical errors. Nothing major, but you might want to have someone look over them or edit them yourself. (And it's spelled Hufflepuff)

Your characterization is lovely! I absolutely adore all of the characters. James is great- hilarious with a bit of an ego, but he can really be so sweet! And all the supporting characters are great as well!

I really can't wait for more of this story! It's so good!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for all the lovely reviews and support!! It really means a lot for me. I'm glad you like my characters and hope you keep reading!! The next chapter should be up really soon. Also I'll check over my stuff and edit all the grammar and spelling mistakes, sorry about them!

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Review #55, by luvinpadfoot The Hogwarts Express, and Other Minor Details

17th July 2012:
Aw poor Rory! I hope she's better now. Is that why Charlie moved to France? I feel so bad for her that she does that! (trying to keep my review 12+)

James is still as funny as ever, although I hope we'll get to see a more serious side to him soon. The comment about Rory at the end makes me think that we will. (=

I'm also excited to see more of his relationship with Charla. They haven't been close in a year, so them rekindling a friendship/relationship ought to be pretty funny!

Another great chapter! Off to the next one! =D

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Review #56, by luvinpadfoot Those People

17th July 2012:
I love James's character! He's so funny and down to earth. The way he talked about his relationship with Claire made me laugh. And I really couldn't picture him ever babysitting Lolly. That cracked me up.

He's so protective over Lily, not wanting her to go to the part or date the Davies guy. I could totally see where he was coming from. I look forward to more of his relationship with his family!

I love Charlie! What James needs is a girl who can beat him at his own game. =)

Great first chapter! Now I'm off to read the others.

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Review #57, by my love for teddy lupin Those People

4th July 2012:
wait i don't get the ages at all and is albus in this too?

Author's Response: Ok well the Potter/Weasley family are all how the book tells us, Charla is the same age as James (currently 16) and her sister is the same age as Lily (13). Millie is fourteen and her sister is 5. I realised that isn't so clear so as soon as I can edit again I will!! And yes Albus will be in the story, just not that chapter!

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